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rotatingheaterwherethematerialsarerotatedandheated.Inthenextstep,thepowderisgroundintocementbythegrinder.Thefinalstepistopackthecementintobags.Intheproductionofconcrete,cementaccountsfor15%ofthewholematerialsandtheproportionofwater,sandandgravelwas10%,25%and50%respectively.ThesematerialsaremixedintoconcretebytheconcreteTosummarize,theprocessionoftheconcreteproductionismucheasierthanthatofthecementproduction.Thetwodiagramsshowhowcementandconcreteareproducedwithdifferentmaterialsandfacilitiesused.Atthefirststage,limestoneandclayarecrushedbythecrusherintopowder.Thepowderisthendeliveredtothemixer,whereitismixed.Themixtureissubsequentlysenttotherotatingheater,after(in)whichitisheatedandrotated.Inthenextstep,therotatedpowderiscedontheconveyorbelt,beforebeinggroundbythegrinderintocement.ThisfinalproductispackedinIntheprocessoftheconcreteproduction,gravelaccountsfor50%ofmaterials,whilecement,waterandsandrepresent15%,10%and25%respectively.Thesematerialsarecedintheconcretemixer,whichrotatesclockwiseuntilconcreteisproduced.Tosummarise,cementproductionconsistsof4stages,startingfromcrushingmaterialsintopowderandendingatbaggingcement.Incontrast,concreteproductionissimple,mixingfour(wordcount:152Thechartcomparesfivecountriesintermsofconsumerexpenditureondifferentitemsin2002.Theproportionofspendingonfood,drinksandtobaccowasnoticeablyhigherinTurkey,at32.14%,andinIreland,at28.91%,whilethefiguresforothercountriesforthiscategoryofexpenditureweresimilar,alllessthan20%.學(xué)習(xí)點(diǎn)1：副詞修飾的用法“noticeablyhigher”or“significantly2：注意文字的信息“weresimilar1：thefigureforIrelandrankedthesecond,whichreached錯(cuò)誤的原因：1不是比賽就不要用ranked，2定語(yǔ)從句先行詞不清晰reached的主語(yǔ)是thesecond?提升的句子：ThefigureforIrelandwasthesecondhighestat2：Spain,ItalyandSwedenhadsimilarpercentagesofspendingonthisitem,at18.8%,16.36%and15.77%respectively.Italyhadthehighestproportionofexpenditureonclothingandfootwear,at9%,comparedwitharound6%inIreland,SpainandTurkey.ThefigureforSwedenwasevenlowerat5.4%.1：注意是“comparedwith”，沒有“comparingwith2：注意對(duì)象詞的準(zhǔn)確，要么就是theproportionofspendingon要么就“國(guó)家hadthehighestproportionofspendingon…”，，要么就是thefigure學(xué)生的句子：Italyaccountedfor9%inclothingand提升的句子：9%oftheexpenditureinItalywasonclothingandfootwear.Thespendingonleisureandeducationwasrelativelylowinthesecountries,allbelow5%,withthehighestfigureseeninTurkeyat4.35%.leisureandeducation的花費(fèi)比較低，然后只是說Turkey的最高。學(xué)生的句子：ThecostofleisureandeducationinTurkeywasabout4%ofspendingonleisure.cost類似于“價(jià)格”的意思，不是spending或者expenditure的替學(xué)生的句子：Spainspent1.98%oftheexpenditureonleisureand錯(cuò)誤的原因：spentexpenditureTosumup,peopleinallthosecountriesspentmoremoneyonfood,drinksandtobaccothanonotheritems.Turkeyhadthelargestproportionofnationalconsumerexpenditureinfood,drinksandtobaccoandleisure,education,whilethehighestpercentageofexpenditureonclothinga