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AMOTHER’SDAYSURPRISE雙胞胎給母親做早餐TeachingFocus1.二次閱讀深度思考R；2.同伴互評E；3.展示點評（comments）；4.作文賞析A5.語言打磨（polish）DAMOTHER’SDAYSURPRISEThetwinswerefilledwithexcitementastheythoughtofthesurprisetheywereplanningforMother’sDay.HowpleasedandproudMotherwouldbewhentheybroughtherbreakfastinbed.TheyplannedtomakeFrenchtoastandchickenporridge.Theyhadwatchedtheirmotherinthekitchen.Therewasnothingtoit.JennaandJeffknewexactlywhattodo.Thebigdaycameatlast.Thealarmrangat6a.m.Thepairwentdownthestairsquietlytothekitchen.Theydecidedtoboiltheporridgefirst.TheyputsomericeintoapotofwaterandleftittoboilwhiletheymadetheFrenchtoast.Jeffbroketwoeggsintoaplateandaddedinsomemilk.Jennafoundthebreadandputtwoslicesintotheeggmixture.Next,Jeffturnedonthesecondstoveburnertoheatupthefryingpan.EverythingwasgoingsmoothlyuntilJeffstartedfryingthebread.Thepanwastoohotandthebreadturnedblackwithinseconds.Jennathrewtheburntpieceintothesinkandputintheothersliceofbread.Thistime,sheturneddownthefiresoitcookednicely.ThenJeffnoticedsteamshootingoutofthepotandthelidstartingtoshake.Thenextminute,theporridgeboiledoverandputoutthefire.Jennapanicked.Thankfully,Jeffstayedcalmandturnedoffthegasquickly.Butthestovewasamessnow.JennatoldJefftocleanitupsotheycouldcontinuetocooktherestoftheporridge.ButJeff’shandtouchedthehotburnerandhegaveacryofpain.Jennamadehimputhishandincoldwater.Thenshecaughtthesmellofburning.Ohdear!Thepieceofbreadinthepanhadturnedblackaswell.Para1Asthetwinslookedaroundthemindisappointment,theirfatherappeared.Para2Thetwinscarriedthebreakfastupstairsandwoketheirmotherup.usethemindmaptoanalyzethegivenmaterialReview1ReadgivensentencesPara1Asthetwinslookedaroundthemindisappointment,theirfatherappeared.

Para2Thetwinscarriedthebreakfastupstairsandwoketheirmotherup.續(xù)寫段落12Evaluatetheplot（合理、呼應原文）&changesoffeelingdisappointedupsetconfidentAsthetwinslookedaroundthemindisappointment,theirfatherappeared.satisfied續(xù)寫段落22Evaluatetheplot(矛盾、呼應原文)&changesoffeeling&themeconfusedsurprisedcontent/happy.........Thetwinscarriedthebreakfastupstairsandwoketheirmotherup.PlotdesignQ3.

Howdidtheymakebreakfast?---withthehelp/guidance/instructionoftheirfather…Q1.

Whatdidtheirfatherdoorsay?---asked,comforted,assistedthemQ4.Howdidtheyfeel?--satisfiedQ5.

Whatdidtheydobeforecarryingthebreakfastupstairs?–breakfastwasready,putitinaplate,…Q2.

Whatdidthetwinsrespond?---explained,askedforhelp2Para.1Asthetwinslookedaroundthemindisappointment,theirfatherappeared.Para.2Thetwinscarriedthebreakfastupstairsandwoketheirmotherup.Q1:Howwouldmotherfeel？---openedhereyes,confused,Q2:Whatdidthetwinssay?---surprise,HappyMother’sDayQ3:Whatwasmother’sreaction?---surprised,happy,thankyou,bestbreakfastQ4:Whatwouldtheysayordo?---hugged,tearsrolleddownQ5:

Whatisthetheme？----lovefromchildrentotheirmotherThemesublimation主題升華Plotdesign2Para.2Thetwinscarriedthebreakfastupstairsandwoketheirmotherup.Para.1Asthetwinslookedaroundthemindisappointment,theirfatherappeared.PlotdesignWritingtips:從第一段首句可知爸爸出現了，可以寫爸爸的反應以及雙胞胎向爸爸說明情況進行銜接。第一句：心理。意識到他們在準備什么，他非常驚訝。_______________________________,hewasgreatlysurprised.第二句：動作。因此，他立即提出要參與孩子們的工作。Soimmediately,he_______________________________第三句：動作。首先，他把一鍋粥放在文火上，讓杰夫看十五分鐘。Firstly,heputthepotofporridge___________________,________Jefftowatchoutforitgoingforfifteenminutes.2Realizingwhattheywerepreparingforofferedtogetinvolvedinthekids'job.onagentleheataskingPara.1Asthetwinslookedaroundthemindisappointment,theirfatherappeared.Plotdesign第四句：動作。然后，他讓Jenna再打碎兩個雞蛋，把它們和牛奶混合在一起。Andthen,heaskedJennatobreakanothertwoeggsandmixthemwithmilk.第五句：動作。準備工作完成后，他們開始一起煎面包。_______________________,theystartedtofrybreadtogether.第六句：環(huán)境。一瞬間，廚房里彌漫著甜甜的氣味。____________,sweetsmell________________inthekitchen.第七句：心理。令他們高興的是，早餐最后很成功。______________,thebreakfastwas_____________________.2WithallpreparationsdoneInaflashfilledtheairTotheirdelightasuccessintheendPlotdesignPara.2Thetwinscarriedthebreakfastupstairsandwoketheirmotherup.2Writingtips:從第二段首句可知雙胞胎叫醒了媽媽，因此本段可以從媽媽的反應來進行銜接第一句：語言+動作。這位女士睜開眼睛，從她的雙胞胎孩子那里聽到了和諧的“母親節(jié)快樂”，面前擺著又熱又甜的早餐。

______________,thewomanheardaharmonious“HappyMother'sDay”fromhertwin________________________.第二句：環(huán)境。孩子們身后站著他們的父親。(倒裝句)Behindthechildrenstoodtheirfather.第三句：心理+語言。為了闡明禮物的做法，他把整個故事告訴了這位母親。Toshedlightonthegameofthegift,hetoldthemotherthewholestory.Eyesopenedkidswithhot,sweetbreakfastbeforeherPlotdesignPara.2Hehuggedme,andsaid,“We’llhavenomorequarrels,willwe?”2第四句：神態(tài)+動作。得知發(fā)生的事情后，她迅速站起來看著男孩的手，感動的淚水順著臉頰滾落。___________________________________,sherosequicklytolookattheboy'shand____________________________________________第五句：動作+語言。“謝謝你們，親愛的！”母親緊緊地抱著他們說?！癟hankyou,myhoney!”saidthemother，_________________________第六句：升華。讓她非常感動的不僅是驚喜，還有孩子們對她的愛。Itwasnotonlythepleasantsurprise,butalsotheloveofthechildrenforherthatmovedherverymuch.Afterlearningaboutwhathadhappenedwithmovedtearsrollingdownhercheeks.huggingthemtightlytogether.3Evaluateother’swork