全國卷-書面表達-加細節(jié)13例子-(大熊)課件1

書面表達增加細節(jié)的技巧13例作文復習（1）by雙老師技巧一：列舉具體的實例進行補充說明例1.我們青少年應盡我們所能保護環(huán)境、拯救地球。（添加forexample）改造前：Weteenagersshoulddowhatwecantoprotecttheenvironmentandsavetheearth.改造后：We

teenagersshoulddowhatwecantoprotecttheenvironmentandsavetheearth.Forexample,wecanuserecyclablebagsinsteadofplasticbags,refusetousesingle-useproductsandsaveenergy.例2：我要花一些時間和父母在一起。（添加-ing表伴隨）改造前：I'llspendsometimestayingwithmyparents.改造后：I'llspendsometimestayingwithmyparents,chattingwiththemanddoingsomehousework.例3：我想找一個像我一樣喜歡旅行的筆友。（Ifpossible,...）改造前：I'dliketoseekapenpalwhoisinterestedintravelingjustlikeme.改造后：I'dliketoseekapenpalwhoisinterestedintravelingjustlikeme.

Ifpossible,wecantraveltogetherorsharetravelingexperiences.例4：互聯(lián)網(wǎng)在我們的日常生活當中變得越來越重要。（notonly...butalso...）改造前：TheInternetisplayingamoreandmoreimportantpartinourdailylife.改造后：TheInternetisplayingamoreandmoreimportantpartinourdailylife.Notonlycanwereadnewsfromhomeandabroad,butalsosendemailsandattendon-linecourses.技巧二：增添背景信息，如：原因、結果、目的等例1：我們打算設計一件屬于我們班的服裝。（considering）改造前：Weintendtodesignauniformsuitedtoourownclass.改造后：Consideringthatthisactivityismeaningful,weintendtodesignauniformsuitedtoourownclass.例2：我計劃在一家外貿(mào)公司做兼職。（inorderto）改造前：Iamplanningtotakeapart-timejobinaforeigntradecompany.改造后：Inordertogetsomepracticalexperience,Iamplanningtotakeapart-timejobinaforeigntradecompany.例3：我不知道我的申請書和簡歷上有沒有語法錯誤或者不當?shù)母袷?。（thisis....that)改造前：Idon'tknowif

theremightbesomegrammarmistakesorinappropriateformatinmyapplicationandthepersonalresume.改造后：ButthisisthefirsttimethatIhavewrittenanapplicationandthepersonalresume,soIdon'tknowif

theremightbesomegrammarmistakesorinappropriateformatinthem.例4：首先，參加中文課程很重要。（because）改造前：First,itisimportanttotakeaChinesecourse.改造后：First,itisimportanttotakeaChinesecourse,becauseyou'llbeabletolearnfromtheteacherandpracticewithyourfellowstudents.例5：我需要一個好好休息，我也會讀點書。（for表目的）改造前：IneedagoodrestandI'lldosomereadingaswell.改造后：IneedagoodrestbecauseIfeeltiredbecauseofthehardwork.Also,I'lldosomereadingforfunandforknowledgeaswell.例6：如果可能的話，我會參加一些社會活動。（sothat引導目的狀語）改造前：Ifpossible,I'lltakepartinsomesocialactivities.改造后：Ifpossible,I'lltakepartinsomesocialactivities

sotahtIcanknowmoreaboutthesociety.例7：我們的地球正在面臨巨大的威脅。（with+賓語+賓補）改造前：Ourearthisfacedwithgreatthreat.改造后：Withtheglobalclimatebecomingwarmerandwarmer,ourearthisfacedwithgreatthreat.例8：我們也會與他們一同唱歌、跳舞、玩游戲。（which）改造前：We’llalsospendsomefuntimetogethersinging,dancingandplayinggames.改造后：We’llalsospendsomefuntimetogethersinging,dancingandplayinggames,

whichwehopewillmakethemhappy.例9：這個活動是一個讓我們學生向父母和老師致謝的好機會。（who）改造前：Thiseventis

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gratitudetoourparentsandteachers.改造后：Thiseventis

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