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描述寓意分析評價

7分首段

Inthepicturethereisasteepandtallmountain.Ahikeriswalkingonthewindingmountainroad,asifhecouldsawanexcellentsightonthetopsoon.Anotherhikerchoseashortcut,atopdownladder,tohikethemountainandalmostreachedthetopfirst.Unfortunay,theladderbroke.Andtheman“flying”tothe.Theauthortryingtolus“Choosemoreimportantthantheeffort.”

7分首段

Wecanseeinthepicturetwopeoplewgtogotothetopofthemountain.Butinsteadof panyingwitheachother,theychosecompleydifferentway,walkingintheirrespectiveapproach.The ,sweatyandweary,iswalkinginasmallwindingmountainroad,butwillachievethegoalsafely.However,another ,usedaladdertohelphimself/herselftosavetimeandvigor,isfallingfromtheladder,becausetheladderbrokeunexpectedly.Theintentionoftheistowarnpeoplethatifyouwanttoachievesuccessyoumustgostepbystep.

17分首段

Asisdepictedinthecartoonabove,choosingtoclimbanunstableladderwhichcandirectlyreachthetopofasteepmountain,aman,unfortunay,fallsdownandloseshislife.Ontheotherhand,hiscounterpart,almostachievingthegoal,makesanattempttoconquerthismountainbyatediousbutsafetwistingmountainroad.

首段（寫作寶典）

Therestoodatallandextremelysteepmountain.Onehiker,lookingdetermined,choseawindingbutsteadypath.Healmostreachedthetop.Theotherhiker,however,decidedtosavethetroublebyclimbingaperilousladderleadingdirectlytothemountaintop.Sadly,butnotunexpectedly,theladderbrokehalfwayandsenthimtotheground.Thispictureclearlyexpressedtheauthor’sopinion:thereisnorealshortcuttosuccess.

中間段：分析寓意

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LianPo/ZhaoKuo/BaiQiThomasEdison

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中間段：分析寓意

Indailylife,itistruethattherearemanypathstosuccess,butwhateverwechoose,keeourfeetonthegroundpavesthewayforlookingatthestars.HistoryeducatesusthatEdisoninventedtheworld’sfirstelectriclamptobringlighttomankindafterexperiencingnumerousfailures,thatMadameCuriewontheNobelPrizeforherpersistenteffortstoisoladium,andthatBeethovenovercametheearbarrierto eagreatmusician;meanwhile,historyalsotakesusintodeepconsiderationsaboutthefailureofSanlumilkpowder,theproblemsoftheZTEandsoon.

中間段：分析寓意

Nowadays,anreasingnumberofpeoplearedreamingofsuccessbytakingacrashcourse.Forexample,somehatknowsnothingtakesathirty-dayEnglishcourseforthepurposeofbeingtheonewhohasagoodcommandofEnglish.Someoneiseagertoeamillionaireovernight.Isittruethatwecanmakegreatsuccesswithoutworking

hard?Absoluynot.Anyonewhowantstomakeachievementsinanyfieldhastoworkhardandtakesitjustalittlebitatatime.Ifsomeonewantstosucceedquicklyallthetime,hewillalwaysthinkthewayhetakestoolongandhewillneverreachthedestination

eventually.

中間段：分析寓意

Thereisnowonderthateveryoneprefersashortcut,yetpleasureatyourowncanvanishifyoufindthatyouareintheriskofdestroyingyourlifeandcareer.Inthepurposeofacceleratingeconomydevelopment,wetooktheshortcuttosacrificethesourceandenvironment,untilwerealizedthatitwillbeacatastrophetobothournetearthandhumanbeings.Studentscheatingintheexaminationmaygetadesirablescoreonce,butneverforever.Consideringinspirationasoneofthemostimportantfactorstowardstriumph,weshouldneverignorethehundreds,ifnotthousands,ofunsuccessfulexperimentsbeforeEdisoncompletehisinventions.

中間段：寫作寶典

Similartragediestothesecondhiker,rootedinalustforimmediatesuccess,areubiquitousinmodernsociety.Studentsusetrickstoimprovetheirexamscores.Adultsygamblinginthehopeofgettingrichovernight.Manufacturersreducecostsbycuttingcornersonquality.Irresponsiblescientistsfabricateandfalsifydatatoreceivefundingandreputation.

尾段：評價

Howcanwereducethesephenomena?Firstofall,theernmentneedtoeducatecitizenstoestablishcorrectoutlookonlife,anddevelopadetailednonencouragingpeopletobeearnestanddown-to-earth.Secondly,eachindividualissupposedtofigureoutthefactthatthehardshipinlifecannotbeavoidandtheymustbebraveenoughtoconfrontit.AsWinstonChurchillsaid,successisnotfinal,failureisnotfatal;itisthecouragetocontinuethatcounts.

調(diào)整（簡化）

Ascollegestudents,weshoulddevelopapositive,realisticoutlookonstudyandlife.Anauthorandpoetoncewrote,“Forsuccess,attitudeisequallyasimportantasability.”I

firmlybelievethatifmoreandmorecitizenslearntobedown-to-earth,thegreatrejuvenationofourcountrywillbeachievedatanearlierdate.

尾段（寫作寶典）

Fortunay,moreandmorepeoplearerealizingtheproblembehindthisfranticchaseformoneyandfame:itrarelyendsupinrealhappiness,butmuoreofteninregretandm