2024屆高三英語二輪復(fù)習(xí)讀后續(xù)寫評分標(biāo)準(zhǔn) 真題分析課件-(共32張PPT)

第第頁2024屆高三英語二輪復(fù)習(xí)讀后續(xù)寫評分標(biāo)準(zhǔn)真題分析課件-(共32張PPT)(共32張PPT)

書面表達：續(xù)寫

2023新高考真題

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續(xù)寫評分參考

【評分原則】

1.本題總分為25分，按5個檔次給分。

2.評分時，先根據(jù)所續(xù)寫短文的內(nèi)容和語言初步確定其所屬檔次，然后以該檔次的要求來衡量、確定或調(diào)整檔次，最后給分。

3.詞數(shù)少于130的，從總分中減去2分。

4.評分時，應(yīng)主要從以下四個方面進行考慮：①與所給短文及段落開頭語的銜接程度；②內(nèi)容的豐富性；③應(yīng)用語法結(jié)構(gòu)和詞匯的豐富性和準(zhǔn)確性；④上下文的連貫性。

5.拼寫與標(biāo)點符號是語言準(zhǔn)確性的一個重要方面，評分時，應(yīng)視其對交際的影響程度予以考慮。

6.如書寫較差以致影響交際，可將分?jǐn)?shù)降低一個檔次。

續(xù)寫評分參考

【各檔次的給分范圍和要求】

第五檔：（21—25分）

1.與所給短文融洽度高，與所提供各段落開頭語銜接合理。

2.所使用語法結(jié)構(gòu)和詞匯豐富、準(zhǔn)確，可能有些許錯誤，但完全不影響意義表達。

3.有效地使用了語句間的連接成分，使所續(xù)寫短文結(jié)構(gòu)緊湊。

第四檔：（16—20分）

1.與所給短文融洽度較高，與所提供各段落開頭語銜接較為合理。

2.所使用語法結(jié)構(gòu)和詞匯較為豐富、準(zhǔn)確，可能有些許錯誤，但不影響意義表達。

3.比較有效地使用了語句間的連接成分，使所續(xù)寫短文結(jié)構(gòu)緊湊。

續(xù)寫評分參考

【各檔次的給分范圍和要求】

第三檔：（11—15分）

1.與所給短文關(guān)系較為密切，與所提供各段落開頭語有一定程度的銜接。

2.應(yīng)用的語法結(jié)構(gòu)和詞匯能滿足任務(wù)的要求，雖有一些錯誤，但不影響意義表達。

3.應(yīng)用簡單的語句間連接成分，使全文內(nèi)容連貫。

第二檔：（6—10分）

1.與所給短文有一定的關(guān)系，與所提供各段落開頭語有一定程度的銜接。

2.語法結(jié)構(gòu)單調(diào)，詞匯項目有限，有些語法結(jié)構(gòu)和詞匯方面的錯誤，影響了意義的表達。

3.較少使用語句間的連接成分，全文內(nèi)容缺少連貫性。

續(xù)寫評分參考

【各檔次的給分范圍和要求】

第一檔：（1—5分）

1.與所提供短文和開頭語的銜接較差。

2.語法結(jié)構(gòu)單調(diào)，詞匯項目很有限，有較多語法結(jié)構(gòu)和詞匯方面的錯誤，嚴(yán)重影響了意義的表達。

3.缺乏語句間的連接成分，全文內(nèi)容不連貫。

不得分：（0分）

白卷、內(nèi)容太少無法評判或所寫內(nèi)容與所提供內(nèi)容無關(guān)。

寫作第二節(jié)（滿分25分）

WhenIwasinmiddleschool,mysocialstudiesteacheraskedmetoenterawritingcontest.Isaidnowithoutthinking.Ididnotlovewriting.MyfamilycamefromBrazil,soEnglishwasonlymysecondlanguage.WritingwassodifficultandpainfulformethatmyteacherhadallowedmetopresentmypaperonthesinkingoftheTitanicbyactingoutaplay,whereIplayedalltheparts.Noonelaughedharderthanhedid.

So,whydidhesuddenlyforcemetodosomethingatwhichIwassuretofailHisreply:“BecauseIloveyourstories.Ifyou’rewillingtoapplyyourself,Ithinkyouhaveagoodshotatthis.”Encouragedbyhiswords,Iagreedtogiveitatry.

IchosePaulRevere’shorseasmysubject.PaulReverewasasilversmith（銀匠）inBostonwhorodeahorseatnightonApril18,1775toLexingtontowarnpeoplethatBritishsoldierswerecoming.Mystorywouldcomestraightfromthehorse’smouth.Notabrilliantidea,butfunny;andunlikelytobeanyoneelse’schoice.

Whatdidthehorsethink,ashespedthroughthenightDidhegettiredHavedoubtsDidhewanttoquitIsympathizedimmediately.Igottired.Ihaddoubts.Iwantedtoquit.But,likeRevere’shorse,Ikeptgoing.Iworkedhard.Icheckedmyspelling.Iaskedmyoldersistertocorrectmygrammar.IcheckedoutahalfdozenbooksonPaulReverefromthelibrary.Ievenreadafewofthem.

WhenIhandedintheessaytomyteacher,hereadit,laughedoutloud,andsaid,“Great.Now,writeitagain.”Iwroteitagain,andagainandagain.WhenIfinallyfinishedit,thethoughtofwinninghadgivenwaytotheenjoymentofwriting.IfIdidn’twin,Iwouldn’tcare.

注意:1.續(xù)寫詞數(shù)應(yīng)為150個左右;

2.請按如下格式在答題卡的相應(yīng)位置作答。

Afewweekslater,whenIalmostforgotthecontest,therecamethenews.

Iwenttomyteacher’sofficeaftertheawardpresentation.

WhenIwasinmiddleschool,mysocialstudiesteacheraskedmetoenterawritingcontest.Isaidnowithoutthinking.Ididnotlovewriting.MyfamilycamefromBrazil,soEnglishwasonlymysecondlanguage.WritingwassodifficultandpainfulformethatmyteacherhadallowedmetopresentmypaperonthesinkingoftheTitanicbyactingoutaplay,whereIplayedalltheparts.Noonelaughedharderthanhedid.

So,whydidhesuddenlyforcemetodosomethingatwhichIwassuretofailHisreply:“BecauseIloveyourstories.Ifyou’rewillingtoapplyyourself,Ithinkyouhaveagoodshotatthis.”Encouragedbyhiswords,Iagreedtogiveitatry.

IchosePaulRevere’shorseasmysubject.PaulReverewasasilversmith（銀匠）inBostonwhorodeahorseatnightonApril18,1775toLexingtontowarnpeoplethatBritishsoldierswerecoming.Mystorywouldcomestraightfromthehorse’smouth.Notabrilliantidea,butfunny;andunlikelytobeanyoneelse’schoice.

Whatdidthehorsethink,ashespedthroughthenightDidhegettiredHavedoubtsDidhewanttoquitIsympathizedimmediately.Igottired.Ihaddoubts.Iwantedtoquit.But,likeRevere’shorse,Ikeptgoing.Iworkedhard.Icheckedmyspelling.Iaskedmyoldersistertocorrectmygrammar.IcheckedoutahalfdozenbooksonPaulReverefromthelibrary.Ievenreadafewofthem.

WhenIhandedintheessaytomyteacher,hereadit,laughedoutloud,andsaid,“Great.Now,writeitagain.”Iwroteitagain,andagainandagain.WhenIfinallyfinishedit,thethoughtofwinninghadgivenwaytotheenjoymentofwriting.IfIdidn’twin,Iwouldn’tcare.

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WhenIwasinmiddleschool,mysocialstudiesteacheraskedmetoenterawritingcontest.Isaidnowithoutthinking.Ididnotlovewriting.MyfamilycamefromBrazil,soEnglishwasonlymysecondlanguage.WritingwassodifficultandpainfulformethatmyteacherhadallowedmetopresentmypaperonthesinkingoftheTitanicbyactingoutaplay,whereIplayedalltheparts.Noonelaughedharderthanhedid.

So,whydidhesuddenlyforcemetodosomethingatwhichIwassuretofailHisreply:“BecauseIloveyourstories.Ifyou’rewillingtoapplyyourself,Ithinkyouhaveagoodshotatthis.”Encouragedbyhiswords,Iagreedtogiveitatry.

IchosePaulRevere’shorseasmysubject.PaulReverewasasilversmith（銀匠）inBostonwhorodeahorseatnightonApril18,1775toLexingtontowarnpeoplethatBritishsoldierswerecoming.Mystorywouldcomestraightfromthehorse’smouth.Notabrilliantidea,butfunny;andunlikelytobeanyoneelse’schoice.

Whatdidthehorsethink,ashespedthroughthenightDidhegettiredHavedoubtsDidhewanttoquitIsympathizedimmediately.Igottired.Ihaddoubts.Iwantedtoquit.But,likeRevere’shorse,Ikeptgoing.Iworkedhard.Icheckedmyspelling.Iaskedmyoldersistertocorrectmygrammar.IcheckedoutahalfdozenbooksonPaulReverefromthelibrary.Ievenreadafewofthem.

WhenIhandedintheessaytomyteacher,hereadit,laughedoutloud,andsaid,“Great.Now,writeitagain.”Iwroteitagain,andagainandagain.WhenIfinallyfinishedit,thethoughtofwinninghadgivenwaytotheenjoymentofwriting.IfIdidn’twin,Iwouldn’tcare.

WhenIwasinmiddleschool,mysocialstudiesteacheraskedmetoenterawritingcontest.Isaidnowithoutthinking.Ididnotlovewriting.MyfamilycamefromBrazil,soEnglishwasonlymysecondlanguage.WritingwassodifficultandpainfulformethatmyteacherhadallowedmetopresentmypaperonthesinkingoftheTitanicbyactingoutaplay,whereIplayedalltheparts.Noonelaughedharderthanhedid.

So,whydidhesuddenlyforcemetodosomethingatwhichIwassuretofailHisreply:“BecauseIloveyourstories.Ifyou’rewillingtoapplyyourself,Ithinkyouhaveagoodshotatthis.”Encouragedbyhiswords,Iagreedtogiveitatry.

IchosePaulRevere’shorseasmysubject.PaulReverewasasilversmith（銀匠）inBostonwhorodeahorseatnightonApril18,1775toLexingtontowarnpeoplethatBritishsoldierswerecoming.Mystorywouldcomestraightfromthehorse’smouth.Notabrilliantidea,butfunny;andunlikelytobeanyoneelse’schoice.

Whatdidthehorsethink,ashespedthroughthenightDidhegettiredHavedoubtsDidhewanttoquitIsympathizedimmediately.Igottired.Ihaddoubts.Iwantedtoquit.But,likeRevere’shorse,Ikeptgoing.Iworkedhard.Icheckedmyspelling.Iaskedmyoldersistertocorrectmygrammar.IcheckedoutahalfdozenbooksonPaulReverefromthelibrary.Ievenreadafewofthem.

WhenIhandedintheessaytomyteacher,hereadit,laughedoutloud,andsaid,“Great.Now,writeitagain.”Iwroteitagain,andagainandagain.WhenIfinallyfinishedit,thethoughtofwinninghadgivenwaytotheenjoymentofwriting.IfIdidn’twin,Iwouldn’tcare.

WhenIwasinmiddleschool,mysocialstudiesteacheraskedmetoenterawritingcontest.Isaidnowithoutthinking.Ididnotlovewriting.MyfamilycamefromBrazil,soEnglishwasonlymysecondlanguage.WritingwassodifficultandpainfulformethatmyteacherhadallowedmetopresentmypaperonthesinkingoftheTitanicbyactingoutaplay,whereIplayedalltheparts.Noonelaughedharderthanhedid.

So,whydidhesuddenlyforcemetodosomethingatwhichIwassuretofailHisreply:“BecauseIloveyourstories.Ifyou’rewillingtoapplyyourself,Ithinkyouhaveagoodshotatthis.”Encouragedbyhiswords,Iagreedtogiveitatry.

IchosePaulRevere’shorseasmysubject.PaulReverewasasilversmith（銀匠）inBostonwhorodeahorseatnightonApril18,1775toLexingtontowarnpeoplethatBritishsoldierswerecoming.Mystorywouldcomestraightfromthehorse’smouth.Notabrilliantidea,butfunny;andunlikelytobeanyoneelse’schoice.

Whatdidthehorsethink,ashespedthroughthenightDidhegettiredHavedoubtsDidhewanttoquitIsympathizedimmediately.Igottired.Ihaddoubts.Iwantedtoquit.But,likeRevere’shorse,Ikeptgoing.Iworkedhard.Icheckedmyspelling.Iaskedmyoldersistertocorrectmygrammar.IcheckedoutahalfdozenbooksonPaulReverefromthelibrary.Ievenreadafewofthem.

WhenIhandedintheessaytomyteacher,hereadit,laughedoutloud,andsaid,“Great.Now,writeitagain.”Iwroteitagain,andagainandagain.WhenIfinallyfinishedit,thethoughtofwinninghadgivenwaytotheenjoymentofwriting.IfIdidn’twin,Iwouldn’tcare.

WhenIwasinmiddleschool,mysocialstudiesteacheraskedmetoenterawritingcontest.Isaidnowithoutthinking.Ididnotlovewriting.MyfamilycamefromBrazil,soEnglishwasonlymysecondlanguage.WritingwassodifficultandpainfulformethatmyteacherhadallowedmetopresentmypaperonthesinkingoftheTitanicbyactingoutaplay,whereIplayedalltheparts.Noonelaughedharderthanhedid.

So,whydidhesuddenlyforcemetodosomethingatwhichIwassuretofailHisreply:“BecauseIloveyourstories.Ifyou’rewillingtoapplyyourself,Ithinkyouhaveagoodshotatthis.”Encouragedbyhiswords,Iagreedtogiveitatry.

IchosePaulRevere’shorseasmysubject.PaulReverewasasilversmith（銀匠）inBostonwhorodeahorseatnightonApril18,1775toLexingtontowarnpeoplethatBritishsoldierswerecoming.Mystorywouldcomestraightfromthehorse’smouth.Notabrilliantidea,butfunny;andunlikelytobeanyoneelse’schoice.

Whatdidthehorsethink,ashespedthroughthenightDidhegettiredHavedoubtsDidhewanttoquitIsympathizedimmediately.Igottired.Ihaddoubts.Iwantedtoquit.But,likeRevere’shorse,Ikeptgoing.Iworkedhard.Icheckedmyspelling.Iaskedmyoldersistertocorrectmygrammar.IcheckedoutahalfdozenbooksonPaulReverefromthelibrary.Ievenreadafewofthem.

WhenIhandedintheessaytomyteacher,hereadit,laughedoutloud,andsaid,“Great.Now,writeitagain.”Iwroteitagain,andagainandagain.WhenIfinallyfinishedit,thethoughtofwinninghadgivenwaytotheenjoymentofwriting.IfIdidn’twin,Iwouldn’tcare.

WhenIwasinmiddleschool,mysocialstudiesteacheraskedmetoenterawritingcontest.Isaidnowithoutthinking.Ididnotlovewriting.MyfamilycamefromBrazil,soEnglishwasonlymysecondlanguage.WritingwassodifficultandpainfulformethatmyteacherhadallowedmetopresentmypaperonthesinkingoftheTitanicbyactingoutaplay,whereIplayedalltheparts.Noonelaughedharderthanhedid.

So,whydidhesuddenlyforcemetodosomethingatwhichIwassuretofailHisreply:“BecauseIloveyourstories.Ifyou’rewillingtoapplyyourself,Ithinkyouhaveagoodshotatthis.”Encouragedbyhiswords,Iagreedtogiveitatry.

IchosePaulRevere’shorseasmysubject.PaulReverewasasilversmith（銀匠）inBostonwhorodeahorseatnightonApril18,1775toLexingtontowarnpeoplethatBritishsoldierswerecoming.Mystorywouldcomestraightfromthehorse’smouth.Notabrilliantidea,butfunny;andunlikelytobeanyoneelse’schoice.

Whatdidthehorsethink,ashespedthroughthenightDidhegettiredHavedoubtsDidhewanttoquitIsympathizedimmediately.Igottired.Ihaddoubts.Iwantedtoquit.But,likeRevere’shorse,Ikeptgoing.Iworkedhard.Icheckedmyspelling.Iaskedmyoldersistertocorrectmygrammar.IcheckedoutahalfdozenbooksonPaulReverefromthelibrary.Ievenreadafewofthem.

WhenIhandedintheessaytomyteacher,hereadit,laughedoutloud,andsaid,“Great.Now,writeitagain.”Iwroteitagain,andagainandagain.WhenIfinallyfinishedit,thethoughtofwinninghadgivenwaytotheenjoymentofwriting.IfIdidn’twin,Iwouldn’tcare.

WhenIwasinmiddleschool,mysocialstudiesteacheraskedmetoenterawritingcontest.Isaidnowithoutthinking.Ididnotlovewriting.MyfamilycamefromBrazil,soEnglishwasonlymysecondlanguage.WritingwassodifficultandpainfulformethatmyteacherhadallowedmetopresentmypaperonthesinkingoftheTitanicbyactingoutaplay,whereIplayedalltheparts.Noonelaughedharderthanhedid.

So,whydidhesuddenlyforcemetodosomethingatwhichIwassuretofailHisreply:“BecauseIloveyourstories.Ifyou’rewillingtoapplyyourself,Ithinkyouhaveagoodshotatthis.”Encouragedbyhiswords,Iagreedtogiveitatry.

IchosePaulRevere’shorseasmysubject.PaulReverewasasilversmith（銀匠）inBostonwhorodeahorseatnightonApril18,1775toLexingtontowarnpeoplethatBritishsoldierswerecoming.Mystorywouldcomestraightfromthehorse’smouth.Notabrilliantidea,butfunny;andunlikelytobeanyoneelse’schoice.

Whatdidthehorsethink,ashespedthroughthenightDidhegettiredHavedoubtsDidhewanttoquitIsympathizedimmediately.Igottired.Ihaddoubts.Iwantedtoquit.But,likeRevere’shorse,Ikeptgoing.Iworkedhard.Icheckedmyspelling.Iaskedmyoldersistertocorrectmygrammar.IcheckedoutahalfdozenbooksonPaulReverefromthelibrary.Ievenreadafewofthem.

WhenIhandedintheessaytomyteacher,hereadit,laughedoutloud,andsaid,“Great.Now,writeitagain.”Iwroteitagain,andagainandagain.WhenIfinallyfinishedit,thethoughtofwinninghadgivenwaytotheenjoymentofwriting.IfIdidn’twin,Iwouldn’tcare.

WhenIwasinmiddleschool,mysocialstudiesteacheraskedmetoenterawritingcontest.Isaidnowithoutthinking.Ididnotlovewriting.MyfamilycamefromBrazil,soEnglishwasonlymysecondlanguage.WritingwassodifficultandpainfulformethatmyteacherhadallowedmetopresentmypaperonthesinkingoftheTitanicbyactingoutaplay,whereIplayedalltheparts.Noonelaughedharderthanhedid.

So,whydidhesuddenlyforcemetodosomethingatwhichIwassuretofailHisreply:“BecauseIloveyourstories.Ifyou’rewillingtoapplyyourself,Ithinkyouhaveagoodshotatthis.”Encouragedbyhiswords,Iagreedtogiveitatry.

IchosePaulRevere’shorseasmysubject.PaulReverewasasilversmith（銀匠）inBostonwhorodeahorseatnightonApril18,1775toLexingtontowarnpeoplethatBritishsoldierswerecoming.Mystorywouldcomestraightfromthehorse’smouth.Notabrilliantidea,butfunny;andunlikelytobeanyoneelse’schoice.

Whatdidthehorsethink,ashespedthroughthenightDidhegettiredHavedoubtsDidhewanttoquitIsympathizedimmediately.Igottired.Ihaddoubts.Iwantedtoquit.But,likeRevere’shorse,Ikeptgoing.Iworkedhard.Icheckedmyspelling.Iaskedmyoldersistertocorrectmygrammar.IcheckedoutahalfdozenbooksonPaulReverefromthelibrary.Ievenreadafewofthem.

WhenIhandedintheessaytomyteacher,hereadit,laughedoutloud,andsaid,“Great.Now,writeitagain.”Iwroteitagain,andagainandagain.WhenIfinallyfinishedit,thethoughtofwinninghadgivenwaytotheenjoymentofwriting.IfIdidn’twin,Iwouldn’tcare.

WhenIwasinmiddleschool,mysocialstudiesteacheraskedmetoenterawritingcontest.Isaidnowithoutthinking.Ididnotlovewriting.MyfamilycamefromBrazil,soEnglishwasonlymysecondlanguage.WritingwassodifficultandpainfulformethatmyteacherhadallowedmetopresentmypaperonthesinkingoftheTitanicbyactingoutaplay,whereIplayedalltheparts.Noonelaughedharderthanhedid.

So,whydidhesuddenlyforcemetodosomethingatwhichIwassuretofailHisreply:“BecauseIloveyourstories.Ifyou’rewillingtoapplyyourself,Ithinkyouhaveagoodshotatthis.”Encouragedbyhiswords,Iagreedtogiveitatry.

IchosePaulRevere’shorseasmysubject.PaulReverewasasilversmith（銀匠）inBostonwhorodeahorseatnightonApril18,1775toLexingtontowarnpeoplethatBritishsoldierswerecoming.Mystorywouldcomestraightfromthehorse’smouth.Notabrilliantidea,butfunny;andunlikelytobeanyoneelse’schoice.

Whatdidthehorsethink,ashespedthroughthenightDidhegettiredHavedoubtsDidhewanttoquitIsympathizedimmediately.Igottired.Ihaddoubts.Iwantedtoquit.But,likeRevere’shorse,Ikeptgoing.Iworkedhard.Icheckedmyspelling.Iaskedmyoldersistertocorrectmygrammar.IcheckedoutahalfdozenbooksonPaulReverefromthelibrary.Ievenreadafewofthem.

WhenIhandedintheessaytomyteacher,hereadit,laughedoutloud,andsaid,“Great.Now,writeitagain.”Iwroteitagain,andagainandagain.WhenIfinallyfinishedit,thethoughtofwinninghadgivenwaytotheenjoymentofwriting.IfIdidn’twin,Iwouldn’tcare.

WhenIwasinmiddleschool,mysocialstudiesteacheraskedmetoenterawritingcontest.Isaidnowithoutthinking.Ididnotlovewriting.MyfamilycamefromBrazil,soEnglishwasonlymysecondlanguage.WritingwassodifficultandpainfulformethatmyteacherhadallowedmetopresentmypaperonthesinkingoftheTitanicbyactingoutaplay,whereIplayedalltheparts.Noonelaughedharderthanhedid.

So,whydidhesuddenlyforcemetodosomethingatwhichIwassuretofailHisreply:“BecauseIloveyourstories.Ifyou’rewillingtoapplyyourself,Ithinkyouhaveagoodshotatthis.”Encouragedbyhiswords,Iagreedtogiveitatry.

IchosePaulRevere’shorseasmysubject.PaulReverewasasilversmith（銀匠）inBostonwhorodeahorseatnightonApril18,1775toLexingtontowarnpeoplethatBritishsoldierswerecoming.Mystorywouldcomestraightfromthehorse’smouth.Notabrilliantidea,butfunny;andunlikelytobeanyoneelse’schoice.

Whatdidthehorsethink,ashespedthroughthenightDidhegettiredHavedoubtsDidhewanttoquitIsympathizedimmediately.Igottired.Ihaddoubts.Iwantedtoquit.But,likeRevere’shorse,Ikeptgoing.Iworkedhard.Icheckedmyspelling.Iaskedmyoldersistertocorrectmygrammar.IcheckedoutahalfdozenbooksonPaulReverefromthelibrary.Ievenreadafewofthem.

WhenIhandedintheessaytomyteacher,hereadit,laughedoutloud,andsaid,“Great.Now,writeitagain.”Iwroteitagain,andagainandagain.WhenIfinallyfinishedit,thethoughtofwinninghadgivenwaytotheenjoymentofwriting.IfIdidn’twin,Iwouldn’tcare.

Afewweekslater,whenIalmostforgotthecontest,therecamethenews.

Iwenttomyteacher’sofficeaftertheawardpresentation.

Afewweekslater,whenIalmostforgotthecontest,therecamethenews.

Iwenttomyteacher’sofficeaftertheawardpresentation.

Afewweekslater,whenIalmostforgotthecontest,therecamethenews.

Iwenttomyteacher’sofficeaftertheawardpresentation.

Afewweekslater,whenIalmostforgotthecontest,therecamethenews.

Iwenttomyteacher’sofficeaftertheawardpresentation.

消息的內(nèi)容

“我”收到消息后的反應(yīng)、情緒等

參加頒獎典禮

“我”跟老師的互動

總結(jié)這次比賽對“我”的影響

升華主題

Afewweekslater,whenIalmostforgotthecontest,therecamethenews.Incredibly,Iwonthefirstprize.Themanonthephonetoldmetoattendtheawardpresentationthenextday.However,Iwastooastonishedtoutteraword.Atnight,Ikepttossingandturninginbed,allmyheartfilledwithsuspicion.WhatifthemancalledthewrongnumberDidIreallyhearhimclearlyAsdawnfinallybroke,Iwassoonup,headingfortheawardpresentationwithtwobigdarkcirclesundermyeyes.WhenIwaspresentedwiththeprizeandcongratulated,agenuinefeelingofhappinesssweptoverme.Itwasatthatmomentthatmydoubtsaboutmywritingskillsvanishedintothinair.

詞數(shù)：113

APossibleVersion:

Iwenttomyteacher’sofficeaftertheawardpresentation.Ihandedhimmyprize,sayingthanksinasoftbutconfidentvoice.Overjoyedandthrilled,hegavemeabighug.“Itoldyou,youcanmakeit.Iamsoproudofyou.”Asalways,hehadgreatfaithinme.Withoutthatfaith,neverwouldIhavewontheprize.Withoutthatfaith,neverwouldIhavefoundmypassionforwriting.Andwithoutthatfaith,neverwouldIhavebeenmotivatedtobeawriter.

詞數(shù)：81

APossibleVersion:

Afewweekslater,whenIalmostforgotthecontest,therecamethenews.Incredibly,Iwonthefirstprize.Themanonthephonetoldmetoattendtheawardpresentationthenextday.However,Iwastooastonishedtoutteraword.Atnight,Ikepttossingandturninginbed,allmyheartfilledwithsuspicion.WhatifthemancalledthewrongnumberDidIreallyhearhimclearlyAsdawnfinallybroke,Iwassoonup,headingfortheawardpresentationwithtwobigdarkcirclesundermyeyes.WhenIwaspresentedwiththeprizeandcongratulated,agenuinefeelingofhappinesssweptoverme.Itwasatthatmomentthatmydoubtsaboutmywritingskillsvanishedintothinair.

例文講解

Afewweekslater,whenIalmostforgotthecontest,therecamethenews.Incredibly,Iwonthefirstprize.Themanonthephonetoldmetoattendtheawardpresentationthenextday.However,Iwastooastonishedtoutteraword.Atnight,Ikepttossingandturninginbed,allmyheartfilledwithsuspicion.WhatifthemancalledthewrongnumberDidIreallyhearhimclearlyAsdawnfinallybroke,Iwassoonup,headingfortheawardpresentationwithtwobigdarkcirclesundermyeyes.WhenIwaspresentedwiththeprizeandcongratulated,agenuinefeelingofhappinesssweptoverme.Itwasatthatmomentthatmydoubtsaboutmywritingskillsvanishedintothinair.

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Afewweekslater,whe