高中英語讀后續(xù)寫

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Introduction:書面表達(dá)---讀后續(xù)寫

提供一篇350詞以內(nèi)的材料，要求考生依據(jù)材料內(nèi)容、所給段落開頭語及所標(biāo)關(guān)鍵詞續(xù)寫一篇150詞左右的短文。將其發(fā)展成一篇與給定材料有邏輯銜接、情節(jié)和結(jié)構(gòu)完整的短文。續(xù)寫部分為2段。原文給出10處左右的標(biāo)有下劃線的關(guān)鍵詞語，所續(xù)寫短文應(yīng)使用5個以上。（滿分25分）短文內(nèi)容和情節(jié)詞匯和語句1詞數(shù):3502體裁：記敘文或夾敘夾議為主3故事邏輯性強(qiáng)，有情節(jié)，有起伏Introduction:測試要求和特點(diǎn)1有自由空間2合乎情理和邏輯--有效續(xù)寫1至少使用5個以上的關(guān)鍵詞2每段段首句已給3字?jǐn)?shù)：150±20words半限定寫作---“戴著鐐銬跳舞”第五檔（21-25分）（1）與所給短文融合度高，與所提供的段落開頭語銜接合理。（2）內(nèi)容豐富，應(yīng)用了5個以上短文中標(biāo)出的關(guān)鍵詞語。（3）所使用語法結(jié)構(gòu)和詞匯豐富、準(zhǔn)確。（4）有效地使用了語句間的連接成分，所續(xù)寫短文結(jié)構(gòu)緊湊。Introduction:閱卷評分標(biāo)準(zhǔn)閱卷時考慮以下幾個方面：1與所給短文及段落開頭語的銜接程度;2內(nèi)容的豐富性和對所標(biāo)出關(guān)鍵詞語的應(yīng)用程度;3應(yīng)用語法結(jié)構(gòu)結(jié)構(gòu)和詞匯的豐富性和準(zhǔn)確性;4上下文的連貫。相關(guān)性：情節(jié)與原文的相關(guān)性--情節(jié)一定要回照原文；開放性：續(xù)寫的特性--構(gòu)思在邏輯上一定要合理，--多種可能性擇其優(yōu)而續(xù)寫所續(xù)部分：高立意、正能量、傳遞積極的情感態(tài)度原文與后續(xù)的融洽度；后續(xù)兩段間的融洽度；段落開頭語與后續(xù)語的融洽度。邏輯權(quán)重高于內(nèi)容、語言和情感；前后邏輯要一致，內(nèi)容不偏離主旨；邏輯靠內(nèi)容支撐，內(nèi)容靠語言表達(dá)；Introduction:融洽度高，銜接合理五個一致：1要與原文的主題或作者的本來意圖保持一致。2要與原文的體裁、結(jié)構(gòu)、寫作手法保持一致。3要與原文在人稱，主體時態(tài)上保持一致。4要與人物的思想行為、性格特點(diǎn)保持一致。5要與原文的語言特點(diǎn)和敘事風(fēng)格保持一致。Introduction:與原文的融合度Introduction:解題思路搞清原文劇情回扣原文，結(jié)合段首句確定劇情走向融入關(guān)鍵詞，想象細(xì)節(jié)擬寫草稿豐富細(xì)節(jié)，潤色閱讀下面短文，根據(jù)所給情節(jié)進(jìn)行續(xù)寫，使之構(gòu)成一個完整的故事。AfunnythinghaeonetryingtostartacarHetriedagainandagainbutcouldn’tgetthecarmovingArthurturnedandlooedinsideatthefaceofayoungmanwholooedworriedArthursto,”Arthursaid“I’mafraidsoI’minabighurryandIcan’tstartmycar”“IstheresomethingIcandotohelanlooedatthetwosuitcasesinthebacseatandthensaid,“ThansIfyou’resureitwouldn’tbetoomuchtrouble,youcouldhelegetthesesuitcasesintoatai”“NotroubleatallI’dbegladtohelangotoutandtoooneofthesuitcasesfromthebacseatAfterItwasfromthebanTherehadbeenarobbery搶劫!omentbeforeNowtheairwasfilledwiththesoundofthealarmandtheshoutsofalldirectionsCarsstoaninfrontofhimShelooedatthesuitcaseandthenathimArthurwassureliethat”hethought“Thesuitcase!ShethinsI’mthebanthief!”Arthurlooedaroundatthecrowdofefrightened,andwithoutanotherthought,hestartedtorun注意：1所續(xù)寫短文的詞數(shù)應(yīng)為150左右；2應(yīng)使用5個以上短文中標(biāo)有下劃線的關(guān)鍵詞語；3續(xù)寫部分分為兩段，每段的開頭語已為你寫好；4續(xù)寫完成后，請用下劃線標(biāo)出你所使用的關(guān)鍵詞語。anshoutingbehind,“Stop,stop!”_________________________________________________________Paragraph2:ThetaistoppedinfrontofthePoliceStationandArthur__________________________________________________________Introduction:搞清原文劇情---六要素whenwhowherewhyhowwhat確定文章的主體時態(tài)確定發(fā)生地點(diǎn)，激活環(huán)境詞匯用第幾人稱敘述，確定“入戲”人物，各自扮演何種角色通過邏輯，確定故事發(fā)展的可能性確定故事發(fā)展的每個階段:開始的寫作部分考查點(diǎn)，通過以上要素，確定續(xù)寫內(nèi)容Steents情節(jié)基調(diào)“AfunnythinghappenedtoArthurwhenhewasonthewaytoworoneday”。funny:“趣”Afunnythingcauseamusement,laughter,etc

有趣的，可笑的ahappyendingSteents閱讀下面短文，根據(jù)所給情節(jié)進(jìn)行續(xù)寫，使之構(gòu)成一個完整的故事。AfunnythinghaeonetryingtostartacarHetriedagainandagainbutcouldn’tgetthecarmovingArthurturnedandlooedinsideatthefaceofayoungmanwholooedworriedArthursto,”Arthursaid“I’mafraidsoI’minabighurryandIcan’tstartmycar”“IstheresomethingIcandotohelanlooedatthetwosuitcasesinthebacseatandthensaid,“ThansIfyou’resureitwouldn’tbetoomuchtrouble,youcouldhelegetthesesuitcasesintoatai”“NotroubleatallI’dbegladtohelangotoutandtoooneofthesuitcasesfromthebacseatAfterItwasfromthebanTherehadbeenarobbery搶劫!omentbeforeNowtheairwasfilledwiththesoundofthealarmandtheshoutsofalldirectionsCarsstoaninfrontofhimShelooedatthesuitcaseandthenathimArthurwassureliethat”hethought“Thesuitcase!ShethinsI’mthebanthief!”Arthurlooedaroundatthecrowdofefrightened,andwithoutanotherthought,hestartedtorunSteainidea--6wquestions_______,when______wasonhiswaytoworwalingalong__________,hehele,abanrobberyhaewerecuriousandconfusedArthurwaledinto_____________andshemistoohimforthe________becausehewasstillcarryingthesuitcaseHewassurprisedand_________sohestartedto___OnedayArthurParAvenueayoungmansuitcasebanthiefrunfrightenedquietayoungwoman

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矛盾中心關(guān)鍵人物

箱子里所屬人Youngman身份可能情節(jié)發(fā)展1Moneytheyoungmanthief碰巧抓住搶劫犯（即結(jié)尾1）2notthief碰巧把剛從銀行取錢趕路的人當(dāng)劫犯，最后到警局傳來抓到劫犯消息3anothermanthief碰巧碰到一個剛偷了其他人錢的小偷，最后到警局傳來抓到劫犯并找回銀行失錢的消息，最后在Arthur幫助下抓到另一個小偷4notthief路遇一個路人幫人搬運(yùn)裝滿錢的行李箱，而Arthur錯把路人當(dāng)劫犯，最后澄清消除誤會5Otherthingstheyoungmanthief錯把普通小偷當(dāng)劫犯，最后幫助抓到該小偷6notthief錯把路人當(dāng)劫犯（即結(jié)尾2）7anothermanthief碰巧碰到一個剛偷了其他人東西的小偷，最后到警局傳來抓到劫犯并找回銀行失錢的消息，最后在Arthur幫助下抓到另一個小偷8notthief路遇一個路人幫人搬運(yùn)普通行李箱，而Arthur錯把路人當(dāng)劫犯，最后澄清消除誤會Step2Gatherideas故事發(fā)展Theyoungman：looworried/inabighurry/shoutingbehindArthur：gladtohelindedrunwithoutanotherthoughtBacground：alongloudnoiseofanalarmfromthebanayoungmanArthurRunafterStop,stop!…TothePSSteaepredictions故事框架The10underlinedeywordsorphrasesWhereplaceWhocharacterWhateventParAvenue,thebantheyoungman,people,thebanthiefsuitcase,inthebacseat,loudnoiseofanalarm,robbery,theshoutsSteaepredictions故事框架anshoutingbehind,“Stop,stop!”_______________________________________________Paragraph2:ThetaistoppedinfrontofthePoliceStationandArthur_______________________________________________順延故事發(fā)展創(chuàng)意故事結(jié)尾順延逆轉(zhuǎn)1WhatwouldArthurdowhenheheardtheshoutingThenwhatwouldtheyoungmando2WhowouldtaeataiWhatwouldtheanbeBeginningcharacterandsettingProcessClimathemainorconflictEndingatimetosolvethe/howthingsendupStoryMountainSteaepredictions故事框架Step4:Draftacontinuation起草續(xù)篇可能意識到那個年輕人就是銀行小偷。Arthurmightrealiethattheyoungmanwasthebanthief2他乘出租車去了警察局。Hetooataiandwenttotheanshoutingbehindmeisthebanthief!’’Avenue發(fā)生了什么。Arthurtoldtheanwasthebanthief,andtherewasalargesumofmoneyinsidethesuitcase6人們很高興搶劫犯被抓住了。PeoplewerehappythattherobberwascaughtStep5:PolishyourwritingAddsomedetailsUsedifferentstructuresUsetransitionalwords1想想他的行為，他意識到那個年輕人就是銀行小偷。（分詞做狀語）Thiningaboutthewaytheyoungmanhadbehaved,herealiedtheyoungmanmightbethebanthief2他一坐上出租車就告訴司機(jī)在他后面叫喊的那個人就是銀行小偷（themoment）Themomenthegotintothetai,hetoldthedriverthemanshoutingbehindhimwasthebanthief3結(jié)果證明那個年輕人就是銀行小偷，而且箱子里裝的就是一大筆錢。（完全倒裝）Itturnedoutthattheyoungmanwasthebanthief,andinsidethesuitcaseswasalargesumofmoneyIntroduction:潤色，標(biāo)出關(guān)鍵詞潤色包括連接詞的使用、句型和詞匯的升級替換標(biāo)出關(guān)鍵詞（下劃線，題型要求。在使用關(guān)鍵詞語時根據(jù)時態(tài)和語態(tài)的需要，可以改變動詞的形式，可以改變名詞的單復(fù)數(shù)，但不要改變關(guān)鍵詞語在原文中的含義和詞性。）【Possibleversion1】Ashewasrunning,Arthurheardtheyoungmanbehindhimshouting,“Stoanhadbehaved,herealiedtheyoungmanmightbethebanrobberSo,Arthurranfastandstoomenthegotintothetai,hetoldthedriverthemanshoutingbehindhimwasthebanthiefandasedhimtodrivetothenearestantotheanHehadfollowedArthurinanothertaiItturnedoutthattheyoungmanwasinnocent,andinsidethesuitcaseswasjustsomeclothingArthurfeltembarrassed,buttheenthanedhimanyway【Possibleversion2】Ashewasrunning,Arthurheardtheyoungmanbehindhimshouting,“Stoemoment,ArthursuddenlyrealiedthattheyoungmanmightbethebanrobberSo,Arthurdidn’tstoanshoutingbehindmeisthebanthief!’’ThetairacedawayasfastasthewindThetaistoofmoneyinside,asArthurhadeanandtheothersuitcaseLater,withthisinformation,thepolicecaughttherobberThepoliceandthebanboththanedArthurPeoplewerehappythattherobberwascaught續(xù)寫中常出現(xiàn)的問題一、書寫潦草，卷面涂改；二、上下文的連貫性差；三、錯詞錯句多，好詞好句少；四、沒有豐富和生動的細(xì)節(jié)推動情節(jié)的發(fā)展；五、與所給短文及段落開頭語的銜接程度差；六、沒有使用5個或5個以上原文中的劃線詞語，沒有劃出所用的劃線詞語。Writing：閱讀下面短文,根據(jù)所給情節(jié)進(jìn)行續(xù)寫,使之構(gòu)成一個完整的故事。JennywastheonlychildinherfamilyShehadaquarrelwithhermotherthatafternoonandshe

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