2023年10月浙江強基高三英語讀后續(xù)寫生日驚喜講義高考英語作文復習專項

讀后續(xù)寫原文Sally’sbirthdaywasapproaching,andtheexcitementthatusuallyfilledherheartwasnowreplacedwith

disappointmentandstress.Turningelevenwasabigdeal,andshehadalwayscelebratedit

withagrandpartysurroundedbyherfriends.

However,

thisyearwasdifferent.Theburdenofexcessivehomework

andher

parents’strugglingbusiness

weighedheavilyonher,forcingSallyto

makethedifficultdecisionofnothavingabirthdayparty,eventhoughitwasaneventsheenjoyeddearlyeveryyear.Oneday,duringbreak,herbestfriend,

Jane,

withacuriouslookinhereyes,approached.“Areyougoingtohaveabirthdaypartythisyear?”Janeasked,sensingSally’ssadness.“No,”Sally

sighedandrepliedsadly,

“There’sjust

toomuchgoingon

andmyparentsaregoingthroughfinancialdifficulties.”Shesmiledweakly,tryingtoconcealher

immensedisappointmentandstress,

butJanesawthrough

herpretence(假裝)easily.Janenoddedthoughtfullyanddidnotsayanything.Afterthebreak,Sallysaw

hertalkingtooneoftheirclassmates,

Sarah,secretively.Curious,Sallywentovertothem,butassoonasJanesawher,shequicklywalkedaway.SallywasstartledbyJane’sstrangeactionsandturnedtowardsSarah.“Whatdidshesay?”Sallyasked.However,SarahsimplyshruggedandwalkedawaywithJane,leavingSallystandingthere,feelingleftoutandanxious.Whatishappening?Sallywonderedanxiously.Aretheykeepingsomethingfromme?AsSally’sbirthdaydrewnearer,Janewasoftenfoundchattingsoftlywithherotherclassmates.WheneverSallywentovertothem,theywouldjustwalkawayortellherthattheyweretalkingaboutasecretwhichSallywasnotallowedtoknow.Janehasneverkeptsecretsfrommebefore,Sallythought.

Herheartfell.Evenherfriendswere

distancingthemselvesfromher!Sheswungbetweenconfusionandsadness

witheachpassingmoment,desperatelytryingtofigureoutwhatwashappening.

Whywereherfriends

distancingthemselvesfromher?Andwhatweretheyhiding?

續(xù)寫段首句：P1:OnthedayofSally’sbirthday,shewenttoschoolandfoundherclassroomintotaldarkness.P2:TearssprangfromSally’seyesandherfacebrokeintoaradiantsmile.

解題思路step1:

根據(jù)讀原文時所劃關(guān)鍵信息確定故事問題/矛盾（通常有兩層：①事情本身；②

通過事情所表達的情感/思想）讀原文時需劃的關(guān)鍵信息主要包括：①負面否定信息

②與前者形成對比的信息

③反復出現(xiàn)信息

④問題信息

⑤轉(zhuǎn)折信息

本文主要問題/矛盾：1淺層：生日派對是否舉辦；朋友為何有那些行為舉動是否疏遠我2深層：關(guān)于友情的感悟

step2:

根據(jù)題目已給的段首句與主要矛盾確定每段發(fā)展到什么程度P1:

Sally驚喜地看到朋友們?yōu)槠渚臏蕚涞纳张蓪2:

事情層面的矛盾在第一段都已解決，為了突出中心主旨，可以在第二段聚焦描寫Sally與文中具體描寫過的Jane或Sarah之間的互動，最后引出對友情的感悟

step3：

每段具體設計：確定描寫對象，從行為動作/語言、心理感受/神態(tài)表情兩大方面交替描寫各個對象，必要處添加環(huán)境等其他描寫

設計示例：

P1：

描寫對象——Sally、

朋友同學們Sally：

好奇

困惑，走進教室

試圖開燈同學們：亮起燈

歡呼

從角落竄出

表達祝福

拍手

唱歌

拿著蛋糕走進Sally環(huán)境：教室精心布置

生日蛋糕放在桌上

Sally：明白了一切

P2:描寫對象——Sally、JaneSally：激動驚訝

語塞Jane：走進

擁抱

說話（具體語言內(nèi)容

結(jié)合文章線索設置，最好能突出文章中心主旨）

Sally：感動；通過語言+動作（鞠躬等）表達感謝感悟:

對友情的感悟

謹記：1.必寫高級句式：

非謂

、獨立主格、定從、

名從、

倒裝、

強調(diào)2.多從原文找線索，利用相關(guān)詞匯，提高與原文的契合度

英文寫作示例

P1:OnthedayofSally’sbirthday,shewenttoschoolandfoundherclassroomintotaldarkness.Captured

by

infinite

curiosityandconfusion（利用非謂結(jié)構(gòu)將情緒描寫與行為動作描寫結(jié)合到一句話）,shegentlyopenedthedoorand

attemptedto

reachthelightswitch.However,beforeshetouchedtheswitch,thedarknessandsilencewerebrokenbyraysofflashlightandcheersfromherclassmateswhowerejusthidinginthecornersofclassroom.“Happybirthdaytoyou!Sally.”“Wishyoua

memorable

birthday!”Theywereclapping,singingand

approaching

toherwithcandlesandpresentsinhands.

Whatfurtheramazedher（疑問詞引導的名從）wasthat

theclassroomwas

elaborately

decoratedandabigcakeof

multiple

layerswasonhertable.Atthismoment,allconfusionandsadnesswere

erased

.

P2:TearssprangfromSally’seyesandherfacebrokeintoaradiantsmile.SoshockedwasSallythat（倒裝）sheevencouldn’tspeakanythingforashortmoment.Then,Janesteppedforwardandhuggedhertightly,whisperinginSally’sear,“Iknowyouaregoingthroughalotrecently,butyouhaveus,yourfriends,onyourbirthdayandeveryday.”（突出友情

凸顯中心主旨的語言內(nèi)容）

“Thankyou,Jane.Thankyou,dearfriends.ThisisundoubtedlythemostpreciousbirthdaypartyI’veeverhad.”Sallybowedandexpressedhersincereappreciationtoeveryone,

extremewarmthoverflowinginherheart（獨立主格結(jié)構(gòu)）.Itwasonthisbirthdaythat

（強調(diào)句）she

becameconvinced

herfriendshadneverdistancedthemselvesfromherandtheywereeven

themostfortingsunshineonthosechillingtoughdays.下水文：P1:OnthedayofSally’sbirthday,shewenttoschoolandfoundherclassroomintotaldarkness.Whenshehesitatedtoentertheroomduetofear,awaveoffearandnervousnesssweptoverher,andherheartpounded.Shegropedtoturnonthelightswitch,butbeforeherhandcouldfindit,achorusofcheersbrokethesilence.It'samazing,it'sunbelievable!"Thestudents,ledbyJane,jumpedoutofvarioushidingplaces.Theroomwaswelllit,andSally'seyeswidenedinsurprise,incredulous.Theclassroomisdecoratedwithballoonsandribbons,thereisaveryexquisitecakeonthetable,andthereisapileofgiftswaitingtobeopenedinthecorner.P2:TearssprangfromSally’seyesandherfacebrokeintoaradiantsmile.SheturnedtoJane,whocouldn'tclosehermouthatthemoment.Weknowyoucan'tholdapa