讀后續(xù)寫動作描寫三大妙招

讀后續(xù)寫技巧：動作描寫有妙招（解析版）目錄TOC\o"13"\h\uPart1第一個(gè)妙招：精準(zhǔn)化 2Part2第二個(gè)妙招：過程化 3Part3第三個(gè)妙招：修辭化 4Part4動作描寫的素材積累 61.手上動作的描寫 62.說話的動作描寫 73.腳上動作的描寫 94.與“看、聽、說”相關(guān)的詞塊 135.與“跑、跳、行走”等相關(guān)的詞塊 136.動詞語料 137.副詞語料 15Part5綜合模擬演練 161．（2023春·廣東江門·高三校聯(lián)考一模） 162．（2023·湖北·校聯(lián)考三模） 193．（2022·遼寧實(shí)驗(yàn)中學(xué)模擬預(yù)測） 23Part6高考真題再現(xiàn) 251．2022年新高考1卷 25讀后續(xù)寫試題都是要求我們續(xù)寫人物經(jīng)歷，補(bǔ)充故事情節(jié)。同學(xué)們在答題中存在的典型問題為：情節(jié)構(gòu)思與前文不連接、續(xù)寫內(nèi)容欠豐滿、語言表達(dá)欠生動等。其中一個(gè)重要原因就是，不會根據(jù)文章主題和故事發(fā)展的需要生動、細(xì)致地描寫主要人物的動作，導(dǎo)致續(xù)寫文章情節(jié)失真、內(nèi)容平淡、人物蒼白、語言空洞。下面我就為同學(xué)們準(zhǔn)備了三個(gè)妙招，幫助大家搞定動作描寫。Part1第一個(gè)妙招：精準(zhǔn)化。怎樣使用精準(zhǔn)化動作類詞匯對動作進(jìn)行細(xì)致描寫呢？其實(shí)很簡單，用一系列小動作而不用大動作，或者用含義比較明確的動詞，而不用抽象或虛化的動詞來描述，可以使描寫更加具體生動。試比較下面兩句:①Thelittleboysaidsorrytohismother.小男孩對他媽媽說對不起。②Thelittleboyhunghisheadandmumbledanapologytohismother.小男孩垂著頭，咕噥著向他母親道歉。我們來具體分析一下：第一句中“saidsorryto”不帶任何感情色彩,而第二句中使用了具體化的表示“說”的動詞mumbled（咕噥），從而使一個(gè)不愿意道歉又不得不道歉的小男孩的形象栩栩如生地復(fù)現(xiàn)在讀者腦海中。除了精準(zhǔn)選用表示動作的詞語，而且要給動詞加上適當(dāng)?shù)男揎棾煞帧＿m當(dāng)?shù)男揎椪Z能細(xì)致地表達(dá)出動作的時(shí)間、幅度、速度、力度等，使人物形象更具活力，能更好地表現(xiàn)人物的鮮明個(gè)性與思想境界。動作描寫中最常見的修飾成分就是狀語，如副詞、介詞短語等。例如，在體現(xiàn)動作的迅速和短暫時(shí)，我們可以添加以下修飾語：suddenly、immediately、withoutpausing、withoutdelay等。比如下面兩句：①Thewolfalsonoticedthemand

turneditsheadback,shouting

atPaulandBecky.狼也注意到他們，回頭朝保羅和貝基大喊大叫。②Atthesametime,thewolfalsonoticedthemand

fiercely

turneditsheadback,shouting

loudly

atPaulandBecky.與此同時(shí)，狼也注意到了他們，惡狠狠地轉(zhuǎn)過頭，對保羅和貝基大聲大叫。我們來具體分析一下：第二句中加上了atthesametime與此同時(shí)/fiercely激烈地/loudly大聲地這三個(gè)副詞，把這兩個(gè)人遇到狼這個(gè)危險(xiǎn)情況生動表達(dá)了出來。至于有哪些重要的副詞，可以豐富我們的句子表達(dá)呢？在后面的課程中，我們會有專題講解，請大家耐心等哦。Part2第二個(gè)妙招：過程化。記敘文中有不少動作描寫是一連串動作過程的展示。尤其在展示人物個(gè)性的動作時(shí),如果我們蜻蜓點(diǎn)水、一筆帶過,就很難突出人物形象,也很難給人以深刻的印象,而通過細(xì)節(jié)描寫展現(xiàn)出動作的過程,表現(xiàn)力便會大增。我們來看下面兩句:①Shewenttocatchthebutterfly.她去捉蝴蝶。②Shecreptalongthepath,bentoverswiftlyandcuppedherhandsaroundthebutterflygently.她躡手躡腳地走著小路，迅速彎下腰，輕輕地繞著蝴蝶。我們來具體分析一下：第①句在描寫主人公捕捉蝴蝶的動作時(shí),沒有細(xì)節(jié)的動作描寫,因此顯得很平淡。而②句運(yùn)用了creep爬,bend彎腰,cup（使成杯型）三個(gè)連貫的動詞生動具體地描述了主人公小心翼翼捕捉蝴蝶的微妙過程,具有極強(qiáng)的畫面感。因此,在續(xù)寫過程中,在必要的地方恰當(dāng)使用一連串的動詞來表示過程,能為文章增添不少色彩。這個(gè)技巧，跟我們之前講解的“動作鏈構(gòu)造”是一致的。此外，我們講解一下這里的cup這個(gè)單詞，關(guān)于“杯子”的意思，我們再熟悉不過了。在這里，我們使用的是它的動詞含義：“使成杯形；把某物放入杯中”

，是不是很形象，因?yàn)槲覀兌加蓄愃频纳铙w驗(yàn)：張開雙臂，環(huán)繞某個(gè)東西。我們借著這個(gè)單詞強(qiáng)調(diào)一點(diǎn)的是：現(xiàn)在讀后續(xù)寫的改卷標(biāo)準(zhǔn)中，不是特別支持過多使用一些超綱的，看似“高大上”上的單詞，盡量把我們的3500個(gè)單詞熟練應(yīng)用就足夠了。我們來看最后一個(gè)妙招：Part3第三個(gè)妙招：修辭化。除了在動詞上做調(diào)整,還可以利用恰當(dāng)?shù)男揶o手法來幫助描寫動作。比喻、擬人、夸張等修辭手法都能讓動作描寫變得更有表現(xiàn)力。(1第一組①Theoldman’sfacewrinkled.老人的臉皺了起來。②Theoldman’sfacewaslikeawitheredapple.老人的臉像一個(gè)枯萎的蘋果。分析：第②句使用了比喻，不說“皺起來”，而說“像一個(gè)枯萎的蘋果”，使得臉上動作描述，更加生動形象，更加吸引眼球。(2)第二組：①M(fèi)ystomachwasachingfornoteatingontime.我的胃因不按時(shí)吃飯而疼痛。②Mystomachwaspunishingmefornoteatingontime.我的胃在懲罰我沒有按時(shí)吃東西。分析：第②句使用了擬人，不說“疼痛”，而說“懲罰了我”，更加生動有趣。(3)第三組①Whensheheardthebadnews,shecried.當(dāng)她聽到這個(gè)壞消息時(shí)，她哭了。②Whensheheardthebadnews,ariveroftearspouredout.當(dāng)她聽到這個(gè)壞消息時(shí)，我淚流如何。分析：第②句使用了夸張，不說“哭”，而說“淚流如河”，讓我們的腦海中，悲傷之情油然而生。Part4動作描寫的素材積累手上動作的描寫1.Stunned,Istoodupandgaveheranawkwardhug/huggedherinanawardway.2.Speechless,shesmiledradiantlyandgatheredhersonintoherarms.3.Theneareritgot,themoreshewavedtheyellowblousewildly.4.Themantookthesacks,reachedintohispocketandplacedfourcoinsinReuben'shand.5.Then,clutchingthetincan,heheadedfortheshop.6.HeparkeddownthestreetfromBobby'shouse,andrushedtohisfrontdoor,tremblingwithexcitement.7.Themangentlywrappedthegiftinbrownpaper

andplacedtheparcelinReuben'shands.8.Doraliftedthelid,tearsbeginningtoblurhervision.9.Seeingnootherpeoplenoticeus,IplacedtheChristmaspresentdownandpoundedhisdoorbell.10.Shedidn'tsayaword,butsmiledawaterysmileandheldmyhandtightly.11.Asweshookhandswiththenewowners,Itoldthemhowfortunatetheywere.12.Hepattedmyhead,andinquired:

“Isthereanythingparticularyouwant?”13.Hewassqueezingmywristsohardthatitached.14.Shestrokedherfingersthroughmyhair,andsaid:

“OfcoursethereisaSantaClause.”15.Shehandedthenapkintome,andthree$20billsfellontomydeskwhenIopenedit.16.Stevielookedatme,andthenathismother,thenpulledoutoneofthenapkins.17.TheclassclappedwarmlyasMr.Leepresentedmewiththereward.18.Hereachedintohispocketandwithdrewanote.19.Mrs.DamonpointedtothequotationfromAlbertEinsteinhangingonthewall.20.Calmlyhepickedupthebrushandstartedagaintowhitewash.21.

Shenervouslyfingeredhercollar.22.Hestrokedthecatandpattedthedog23.Shetappedhimontheshoulder.24.Hegraspedmyhandandweran25.Shegrabbedherbriefcaseandrantothebusstop26.Thethiefsnatchedthehandbaganddisappearedintothecrowd.27.Pressthebutton.28.Pleasehandlethegoodswithgreatcare。29.Georgestoodsilentlywithhisarmsfolded.說話的動作描寫1.Reubenmurmuredathankyouandranhomealltheway.2.“Here,Mum!Here!”Reubenexclaimedasherantoherside.3.Ayoungmancametothepolicestation,surroundedbyagroupofjournalists,declaringthathehadspottedthemurderer.4.Iwasgettingreadytoblowoutallthecandlesandshe’sgettingreadytohelpmeincaseIranoutofair.5.“Timetogo.”

Iwhisperedtothegirl,wishingshecouldfollowmerightaway.6.MyteammateswereallscreamingasIdashedtowardthefinishline.7.Ipickeduptheballonelasttimeandgrumbled,

“Pleasejustetogetthedamnball.”8.FranniequicklytoldBelleRingerandtheothertwodriversaboutStevie'ssurgery,andthensighed.9.Thehousegotreallynoisyatthattime,witheverybodyholleringandshoutingatthetopofhisvoice.10.“HowcanIletyouthrowawaythethingthatmeansthemosttoyou?”Ipleadedwithhim.11.Theyletoutasurprisinglyloudvoice.12.Thesmilefrozeonhisface;hismouthfellwideopen.13.Heinterruptedthesilencewithanannouncement:

“Thedeadlinetoenterforthepetitionistomorrow.”14.

“Ihaven’tfinished;Ineedmoretime,”hebegged.“That’swhatMichelangelosaid.”

Mr.Edgarjoked.15.ShegreetedJamesandinquired.

“Areyoureadyforourfieldtrip?”

Jamesdidn’trespond.16.

“Whatdoyouthinkmattersforabird?”Mrs.Damonquestioned.17.Headdedsoftly,“Imissyou.”18.Rosescoldedthechildgentlyforbeingnaughty.19.Shesuggestedawalkintheopenairandhereadilyagreed.20.Studentsareclearlyinformedthatdrugswillnotbetolerated.21.LetmeexplainwhatImean.22.Howcanyouexplainthatsortofbehavior?23.“Look,Ican’ttellyou.Oh,eon,givemeahint.’24.“Tellme.”“Youmustbejokinghe’dneverbelieveme.”25.“Well,thereisnothingwecandoaboutitnow,”shesighed.26.AsIrecall,itwasyouwhosuggestedthisideainthefirstplace.27.“Iwouldn’tbeafraid,“sheboasted.28.Insteadofbeingdelighted,shethrewtheinvitationonthetablecrossly,muttering29.Byaviolenteffortsheconqueredhergriefandrepliedinacalmvoice,Benstammeredoutanapology.30.Finallysherepliedhesitating31.Sheutteredacryofjoy:32.Thensheasked,hesitating,filledwithanxiousdoubt:33.Attheendofaweektheyhadlostallhope.Loisel,whohadagedfiveyears,declared:Wemustconsiderhowtoreplacethatornament.34.Thenhebegantorecounttheadventuresagain.35.Hetriedtoprotest.Theentiretablebegantolaugh.36.Maucheestammered:“Butsincethepocketbookwasfound.”37.WhenhewasseatedatthetableinJordanian’stavern,hemencedtoexplain“theaffair”.38.Hetalkedofhisadventureallday.39.Thismanclaimedtohavefoundtheobjectintheroad.40.Hewentalong,stoppinghisfriends,beginningendlesslyhisstatement.41.Asheleftthemayor’soffice,theoldmanwassurroundedandquestionedwithaseriouscuriosity.42.Heinquired:“IsM.Hauchee,ofBreaute,here?”腳上動作的描寫1.ThenLisastoodupandmadeherwaythroughthecrowdtowardme.2.Lisaplantedherfeetfirmlyinfrontofme.3.Shemanagedtoclimbontoitandwaitedpatiently.4.Reubenran/rusheddownWaterStreet,tremblingwithgreatpanic.5.TheshadowswerelengtheningwhenReubenarrivedat（動作）

thefactory.6.Then,clutchingthetincan,heheadedfortheshop.7.Racinghome,Reubenburstthroughthefrontdoor.8.Disappointedandfrustrated,thepoormanmadehiswaybacktohisfamily.9.Suddenly,thewomanstoodupandenteredthehouseintears.10.Andyet,theyalljuststoodtherestaringatme,motionless.11.BelleRingernoddedthoughtfully,andFranniehurriedofftowaitontherestofhertables.12.Iledthemtowardalargecornerbooth.Icouldfeeltherestofthestafffollowingbehindaswemarchedthroughthediningroom.13.Idraggedmyselfthroughdailychores,feelingexhausted.14.Theelderlymanfledawaywithgreatpanic.15.Themansteppedback/steppedontotheplatformtotakeagoodlookatthepaintings.

16.Heleapttohisfeetandrushedoutofthelivingroom.17.Hesprungfromhischairandrushedtopickupthetelephone.18.Hejumpedupandrushedoutofthelivingroom.19.Shejustsattherestaringintospace20.Thekidssataroundacampfire21.Pleaseremainseateduntilyournameiscalled.22.Heseatedhimselffortablyatthefootofthebed.23.Hetookhisusualseatatthefrontoftheclassroom.24.Thatmanishurt,he'slimping.25.Hewassodrunkthathestaggeredallthewayhome.26.Shestumbledupstairsandintobed.27.Shetiptoedtothebedsoasnottowakethebaby.28.Theystrolledaroundthepark.29.Theyenjoywanderingthroughthecountryside.30.Hepacedupanddowntheplatform,waitingforthetrain.31.Demonstratorsmarchedthroughthestreetsofthecity.32.Ababycrawlsbeforehecanwalk.33.Pauldecidedtoedgeawayfromthecrowd.34.Thecatcreptsilentlytowardsthebird.35.Theboysneakedinwithoutpaying.36.ImustdashorI'llmissthetrain.37.Shegoesjoggingeveryday.38.Hetrippedoverthestepandfell.39.Thegrouphikeduptothetopofthehill.40.AsIwassittinginthepark,Iwatchedascouplesseemedtomeanderaroundhappily.與“看、聽、說”相關(guān)的詞塊①listenimpatiently不耐煩地聽②glareangrilyatsb.對某人怒目而視③glancearound/roundtheroom掃視房間④stareat凝視⑤takealookat看⑥overhearafunnyconversation無意間聽到一段好笑的談話⑦remark評論說⑧add補(bǔ)充說與“跑、跳、行走”等相關(guān)的詞塊①walkacrossastreet步行穿過馬路②walkarminarm臂挽著臂走③pacebackandforth來回踱步④jumptoone’sfeet一躍而起⑤walkgracefully步態(tài)優(yōu)美地走⑥r(nóng)ushoutoftheroom沖出房間動詞語料1.伸懶腰；逗某人；快回來；急匆匆地走出去；穿過淺水河；Stretchedone’stiredback;

teasedsb;hurryback;hurriedoutside;go/walkacrosstheshallowriver;2.走進(jìn)去；艾倫凍僵了；一動不動地躺著；擠出來；停下來；出發(fā)去做某事；靠邊停車；steppedinside;Alanfroze;laystill;squeezeout;paused;setofftodosth;pulledover;3.抓住某物；跳下車；搖頭；習(xí)慣了做；grabbedsth;hoppedoutofthecar;shookone’shead;gotaccustomedtodoing;4.用紙巾包起來；放在我的電腦旁邊；把它扔到垃圾桶里；wrappedtheminatissue;placedthembesidemyputer;droppeditintotherubbishbin;5.大叫；翻白眼走開；大聲笑出來；擺出燦爛的笑容；yelled;rolledone’seyesandwalkedaway;laughedoutloud;putonabrightsmile;6.艾倫的胃繃緊了；喃喃自語；說話；換班；皺眉頭；Alan’sstomachtightened；Mutteredsth;Spokeup;Takeashift;Frowned7..發(fā)現(xiàn)沿河的動物足跡；低聲說；Spotanimaltracksalongtheriver;Whispered;8.她伸手在口袋里掏出一個(gè)白色的小信封。里面是詹妮弗派對的邀請函。Shereachedforasmallwhiteenvelopeinherpocket.InitwasaninvitationtoJennifer’sparty.9.被綁著；穿過樹林；摔倒了；她的心越來越重。注視某人；BeTied;Walkthroughthewoods;Dropped;Herheartgrewheavier.Keepaneyeonsb;10.檢查；伸手；轉(zhuǎn)過身；勉強(qiáng)地笑了笑；Checked;Reachedover;Turnedaround;Managedagrin;11.

當(dāng)她默默祈禱“謝謝你，上帝”時(shí)，喜悅的淚水涌上眼眶Tearsofjoyfloodedhereyesassheprayedsilently,“Thankyou,God.”12.某物吸引了我的注意；當(dāng)艾麗在天空中搜尋時(shí)，一種興奮的感覺涌上心頭。Sthcaughtmyeye;AnexcitedfeelingbubbledupinsideAllyasshesearchedthesky.副詞語料輕柔地拉Pulledgently;；不斷地constantly；猶豫地hesitantly；直視她的眼睛lookdirectlyintohereyes；緊密地匹配closelymatch；稍有不同地beslightlydifferentfrom；不耐煩地掠過impatientlyskimmed；立即回答answeredinstantly；開玩笑地責(zé)罵jokinglyscolded；絕對安全absolutelysafe；驕傲地咧嘴笑Grinnedproudly；體貼地放置consideratelyplaced；焦急地等待waitedanxiously;；清楚地記得clearlyremembered；呼吸沉重breathedheavily;；緊握squeezetightly；熱情地幫助warmlyhelped；幾乎暈倒nearlyfainted；Part5綜合模擬演練（2023春·廣東江門·高三校聯(lián)考一模）閱讀下面材料，根據(jù)其內(nèi)容和所給段落開頭語續(xù)寫兩段，使之構(gòu)成一篇完整的短文。WhenIwasachild,mymothertoldmysister,whohada10inchveryobviousscar(傷疤)onherarm,“Nancy,ifyouignorethescar,otherpeoplewillignoreit.Itdoesnotmeantheywillnotnoticeit,butitmeansitwillnotmattertothemifitdoesn’tmattertoyou.”Itneveroccurredtomethatsomethinglikethiswouldhappentomysonyearslater.Sendingachildofftocollegecancertainlybestressfulforconcernedparents.Itwas2018thatmysonwentofftocollege.Herarelycontactedus.Icouldn’thelpaskingaboutotheraspects,whichsometimesmadehimplainthatIdidn’ttreathimasanadult.Tobehonest,mysonisexcellent.Someofmyfriendsalwaystellmethattheyadmiremyson’scharactersandtheyhopetheirsonscouldhavesomeofthem.Unexpectedly,itwas4o’clockinthemorningin2020,whenIreceivedthephonecall.“Thisistheemergencyroomcallingandyoursonwasjustbroughtinwithsevereburnsonhisface,neckandarms.WehavecalledforanaircraftandaregoingtoflyhimtotheburnunitinSeattle.”Seattlewas350milesfromhiscollege,soweknewimmediatelythiswasserious.Thedoctordescribedthereason,whichcausedtheburns.At6am,mysonandhisfriendsdecidedtobarbecuehamburgersinthecourtyardoftheirapartment.Whentheylitthecharcoal,itburstintoflamesbecausetheyhadsprayedtoomuchgasoline.Theflamescaughtmyson’sshirttailandshotfromhiswaisttowelloverhishead.Fortunately,oneoftheboyswhowasquickmindedgraspedmysonandrolledhimonthegrass.Whileitsavedhislife,itwasnotinshapetosavehimfromsevereburnsandtheterriblescars.Afterherecoveredfromthetreatments,thedoctorstoldhimtheywouldnotdoplasticsurgeryfor6monthsbecauseittakesthatlongfortheskintostopshrinkingandwrinkling.注意：1.續(xù)寫詞數(shù)應(yīng)為150左右;2.請按如下格式在答題卡的相應(yīng)位置作答。Thedoctorssuggestedhereturntocollegewithscarsofsevereburnstemporarily.________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________SoItoldhimaboutNancy’schildhood.________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________【答案】參考范文：Thedoctorssuggestedhereturntocollegewithscarsofsevereburnstemporarily.AlthoughIknewthatthereweregoingtobestormsinlife,itwashardformetoimaginethatahandsomeandsunnyboywouldreturntohisclassmateswithscars.Ireallydidn’tknowhowtoforthim.Afterall,thescarswereonhim.Notallofuscouldbeabletoturnthatparticularpagesuccessfully.ItwasatthistimethatIrememberedwhatmymothersaidtomysister.Itwasthosewordsthatenabledhertoovereherpsychologicalbarriersandleadasmoothlife.SoItoldhimaboutNancy’schildhood.Ipassedthewisdomontomyson.Realizingmyplexfeelings,hesmiledandfortedmeinstead.Hetookmyadvicetoheartandreturnedtoschoolwithhisheadheldhigh.Bytheendofthesixmonthwaitingperiod,hedecidedthatthescarsdidnotmatter.Sohemadethedecisiontogiveupanyplasticsurgery.Weallhave“scars”thatwebelievewillkeeppeopleawayfromus.Putyourimperfectionsoutofyourmindandconcentrateonwhatyouvaluewithinyourself,andyourbeautywillshinethrough.【導(dǎo)語】本文是以人物為線索展開，講述了作者小時(shí)候聽到母親告訴妹妹南希要以樂觀的態(tài)度去面對自己的傷疤，而作者兒子也經(jīng)歷燒傷事故而留下傷疤，作者把妹妹的經(jīng)歷告訴自己的兒子鼓勵(lì)他勇敢面對。從故事中感悟我們學(xué)會把不完美拋諸腦后，專注于自己看重的東西，自己的美麗就會散發(fā)光芒?！驹斀狻竣儆傻谝欢问拙鋬?nèi)容“醫(yī)生建議他暫時(shí)帶著嚴(yán)重?zé)齻膫袒氐酱髮W(xué)。”可知，第一段可描寫作者想到自己的兒子要承受別人異樣眼光的難過的心理活動以及對兒子的鼓勵(lì)的做法。②由第二段首句內(nèi)容“于是我告訴他南希的童年?！笨芍诙慰擅鑼懽髡邽榱藥椭鷥鹤痈嬖V他妹妹南希的經(jīng)歷之后，他兒子的轉(zhuǎn)變。2.續(xù)寫線索：難過——考驗(yàn)——安慰——鼓勵(lì)——改變——感悟行為類①.想象：imagine/picture/thinkof②.安慰：fort/quiet/soothe③.克服：overe/riseabove/getoversth情緒類①.微笑：smile/beamon②.珍惜：value/cherish【點(diǎn)睛】[高分句型1].AlthoughIknewthatthereweregoingtobestormsinlife,itwashardformetoimaginethatahandsomeandsunnyboywouldreturntohisclassmateswithscars.（由連接詞although引導(dǎo)讓步狀語從句）[高分句型2].Putyourimperfectionsoutofyourmindandconcentrateonwhatyouvaluewithinyourself,andyourbeautywillshinethrough.（由祈使句以及what引導(dǎo)的賓語從句）（2023·湖北·校聯(lián)考三模）閱讀下面材料，根據(jù)其內(nèi)容和所給段落開頭語續(xù)寫兩段，使之構(gòu)成一篇完整的短文?！癢hatwillwebesingingforthecontestthisyear?”astudentfrommyhighschoolchoiraskedeagerly.Iworriedaboutthismoment.“Iwasthinking,”Isaid,“maybewewouldskipthecontestandjustworkhardontheconcertsthisyear.”“NO!”thekidsprotested.“We’vegottogotothecontest!”“It’satradition!”Indeed,awardplaques(牌匾)linedthefrontwallofthemusicroomfromthepastsuccessesoflarge,talentedclasses.Butachangeineducationalpolicies,withanemphasisonacademicshadreducedmychoirtoamerethirtytwoyoung,inexperiencedkidswhocouldsingonlyasimplemelody.“I’llhavetothinkaboutit,”Isaid,hopingtheirenthusiasmwoulddieoffinacoupleofweeks.Quiteonthecontrary,moredetermined,theybeggedandinsistedeveryday.Toprotecttheirpride,Icouldn’ttellthemtheyweren’tgoodenough.ButIwasn’tamiracleworker.AndsoIhesitatedaboutthisdilemma.FinallyonemorningIsteppedintoclass.“Lookattheclock!”Idemanded.“We’vewastedtwofullminutesbecausesomeofyoudon’thaveyourmusicready.Ifweareenteringthecontest”Therestofmysentencewaslostincheersofdelightandapplause.“Fromnowon,”Icontinuedwhenthenoiseweakened,“youwillfindtheday’slessonplanontheboard.Makefullpreparationsforeachclassandfollowmyinstructionsabsolutely.Youwillworkmuchharderthanyou’veeverworkedinanyclassbefore.Andifoneoftheserulesisbroken,wewillnotgotothecontest.”Iwascertaintheywouldfailtokeepthiscontract,andnoonewouldbeembarrassed.Butthekidsremainedfocused,followingtherulesstrictly.Eachmorningwitnessedtheirdiligence:workingonsightreading,learningmusicalterms,rehearsing,etc.TheirprogresswassoremarkablethatevenIbeganbelievingintheirdream.Whenthecontestdayfinallyarrived,thekidsfeltreadyandconfidenttotakeontheworld!Theireyes,however,openedwidewhentheMadisonchoirmarchedinseventyfivemembersstrong.Mykids’jawsdroppedwhen125studentsfromKingSchoolarrived.Twoprivateschoolscamewithfiftymemberseach,andfinallyfortyfivemembersfromMilwaukeeSchoolofArt.注意：1.續(xù)寫詞數(shù)應(yīng)為150左右；2.請按如下格式作答。Paragraph1：Thencametheturnformychoir.________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________Paragraph2：Afterallthechoirshadperformed,wewaitedinourassignedroomfortheresults.________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________【答案】Onesamplewriting:Thencametheturnformychoir.Extremelyconfident,theymountedonthestageaswerehearsed.“Smile!”Imouthed.Itookadeepbreathandwebegan.Havingperformedmasterfully,wefinishedourthreesongs,andIwantedtoscreamatthetopofmylungs,“YOUDIDIT!”Whatdelightedmemorewasthattheyfullyenjoyedtheirperformancewithoutgettingpanicked,winningstormsofcheersandapplause.Myheartswelledwithprideforthislittlegroupastheyrealizedtheirdreamwiththesamebraverytheyhadshownfromdayone.Afterallthechoirshadperformed,wewaitedinourassignedroomfortheresults.Sensingtheirworriesaboutthegroupsize,Ireassuredthem:itwastheperformanceratherthanthesizethatmatteredandmostimportantly,weenjoyedit.Timeticking,kidswaitedanxiously.Eventually,therecamethenewsthatwegotthehighestmarksofall.Allkidswerescreamingandembracing.Warmtearswettingmycheeks,Istoodfrozen,staringatthelistindisbelief.ItwasablessingthatIwassurroundedbykidswhohadadream,whorefusedtogiveup,whotaughtmenevertodoubtthepossibilityofsuccessforanystudenteveragain.【導(dǎo)語】本文以人物為線索展開，講述了作者帶領(lǐng)的一個(gè)小合唱團(tuán)經(jīng)過堅(jiān)持不懈地學(xué)習(xí)和苦練，最終在比賽中脫穎而出，實(shí)現(xiàn)了夢想?！驹斀狻?.段落續(xù)寫：①由第一段首句內(nèi)容“然后輪到我的合唱團(tuán)登場了?！笨芍谝欢慰擅鑼懞铣獔F(tuán)出色完成表演，贏得觀眾喜愛和認(rèn)可，以及作者對學(xué)生表演的感受。②由第二段首句內(nèi)容“所有合唱團(tuán)表演后，我們在指定房間等待結(jié)果”可知，第二段可描寫學(xué)生等待結(jié)果過程中的焦急和擔(dān)憂，合唱團(tuán)獲得第一名后的反應(yīng)以及作者對整個(gè)事件的感悟。2.續(xù)寫線索：學(xué)生登臺——學(xué)生出色完成表演——贏得歡呼和掌聲——等待比賽結(jié)果——等待過程中的焦急和擔(dān)憂——合唱團(tuán)實(shí)現(xiàn)夢想獲得第一名——作者的感悟行為類①開始：began/start②保證：reassure/guarantee/ensure③拒絕：refuse/reject情緒類①感到恐慌：getpanicked/feelscared②焦急地：anxiously/worriedly【點(diǎn)睛】【高分句型1】Whatdelightedmemorewasthattheyfullyenjoyedtheirperformancewithoutgettingpanicked,winningstormsofcheersandapplause.（由連接詞what引導(dǎo)主語從句，由連接詞that引導(dǎo)表語從句）【高分句型2】ItwasablessingthatIwassurroundedbykidswhohadadream,whorefusedtogiveup,whotaughtmenevertodoubtthepossibilityofsuccessforanystudenteveragain.（運(yùn)用了it作形式主語，that引導(dǎo)從句作真正的主語；由關(guān)系代詞who引導(dǎo)定語從句）（2022·遼寧實(shí)驗(yàn)中學(xué)模擬預(yù)測）閱讀下面材料，根據(jù)其內(nèi)容和所給段落開頭語續(xù)寫兩段，使之構(gòu)成一篇完整的短文。Isatatmydeskandstaredatthescreen.IwaitedpatientlyforideastoetomeasItriedtothinkupexamquestionsforatestIwouldgivemyEnglishstudents.Mywifewasofftoapartysomewhere,butIwasnotalone.Meghan,our22montholdangel,keptmypany.Yetherplansseemedtogoagainstmine.Shefollowedadailyroutinethatwasbothtimeconsumingandchallenging.Itincludedcertainbasictasks:watchingthefish,sweepingthefloorinherroom,climbingupanddownonherbed.AtfirstIwasabletoconcentrateondesigningmytestpaper.ButIwassoondistracted.Ihadnotexpectedthearrivalofthe“bibbibs”—“bibbibs”werebirds.“Bibbibs!”Meghanscreamedexcitedly,hereyesalivewithexpectation.SheinsistedthatIewithhertothewindow.“Inaminute.Justletmefinishthisquestion.”Isaid.Shepulledmebythehand(twofingers,actually)towardthewindow.Isawmyselfasafool,beingledtowatchthe“bibbibs”.Theysangandleapedbackandforthonthelawnjustoutsideourapartmentwindow.Meghanwasabsorbed,butasIwatchedthem,Istillthoughtaboutmywork.Withherattentionoffme,Ileftthewindowandwentbacktomydesk.Fiveminuteslater,shereturned.Shereacheduptomykeyboardandpressedabunchofkeys,addingalonglineofscrabbled(亂的)letterstomyquestion.Istruggledtobringmyannoyanceundercontrol.“No,thankyou,Meghan.Daddy’sseenyourwork.I’lldoitmyself.”Shebackedoff.注意：1.詞數(shù)150字左右；2.按照格式在答題卡相應(yīng)位置作答。Paragraph1:Afewminuteslater,shestoodinfrontofmewithhershoesandsocksinherhand.________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________Paragraph2:IfinallydecidedtotakeMeghantothepark._________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________參考答案：

Afewminuteslater,shestoodinfrontofmewithhershoesandsocksinherhand.Igotit—shewantedmetotakeherouttothepark.IpretendedIhadn’tpaidattention.Shesteppedforward,staringatmewithherinnocenteyes.“Leavemealoneforawhile,Meghan.”Isaidwithoutlookingather.Afterafewseconds,outofthecornerofmyeye,Isawtearsrollingdownhercheek.IfeltsoterriblethatIregrettedwhatIhadsaid.Ihadtocorrectmymistake.IfinallydecidedtotakeMeghantothepark.Iturnedtoherandsaid,“Sorry,let’sgotoseemore‘bibbibs’!”Shewassoexcitedthatshesmiledthroughtears.Iheldherhandaswewalkedoutside.Wanderingthroughthepark,Meghanwaslikeafreebirdenjoyingherselfinthewidebluesky.Seeinghersmileyface,IfeltmuchhappierthanIwouldhavebeendoingmywork.Icouldcatchuponitintheevening.Workcanalwayswait,butlovecannot.【解析】本文講述了一個(gè)關(guān)于愛的故事。一天，作者坐在桌前為學(xué)生出試卷，因?yàn)槠拮油獬?，家里只?2個(gè)月大的女兒陪著他，作者需要分心去照顧女兒。正在作者集中精力設(shè)計(jì)試卷時(shí)，女兒興奮地叫著讓作者陪她去窗前看鳥，當(dāng)女兒看鳥時(shí)，作者仍在思考工作，并再次回到桌前。五分鐘后，女兒回到作者身邊，用手在鍵盤上亂按，這讓作者有些生氣。1.段落續(xù)寫：①由第一段首句內(nèi)容“幾分鐘后，她站在我面前，手里拿著鞋子和襪子?！笨芍谝欢慰擅鑼懪畠旱恼埱蠛妥髡叩姆磻?yīng)。②由第二段首句內(nèi)容“我最終決定帶梅根去公園?！笨芍?，第二段可描寫父女二人在公園做了什么及作者的感悟。2.續(xù)寫線索：女兒想去公園——作者拒絕——女兒流淚——作者后悔——來到公園——享受快樂時(shí)光——作者的感悟行為類①.明白：getit/understand②.盯著：stareat/fixone’seyeson③.玩得愉快：enjoyoneself/havefun情緒類①.興奮的：excited/thrilled②.更高興的：happier/morepleased[高分句型1].Shewassoexcitedthatshesmiledthroughtears.（由so…that…引導(dǎo)的結(jié)果狀語從句）[高分句型2].Iheldherhandaswewalkedoutside.（由as引導(dǎo)的時(shí)間狀語從句）Part6高考真題再現(xiàn)2022年新高考1卷閱讀下面材料，根據(jù)其內(nèi)容和所給段落開頭語續(xù)寫兩段，使之構(gòu)成一篇完整的短文。Itwasthedayofthebigcrosscountryrun.Studentsfromsevendifferentprimaryschoolsinandaroundthesmalltownwerewarmingupandwalkingtheroute(路線)throughthickevergreenforest.IlookedaroundandfinallyspottedDavid,whowasstandingbyhimselfofftothesidebyafence.Hewassmallfortenyearsold.Hisusualbigtoothysmilewasabsenttoday.Iwalkedoverandaskedhimwhyhewasn’twiththeotherchildren.Hehesitatedandthensaidhehaddecidednottorun.Whatwaswrong?Hehadworkedsohardforthisevent!Iquicklysearchedthecrowdfortheschool’scoachandaskedhimwhathadhappened.“Iwasafraidthatkidsfromotherschoolswouldlaughathim,”heexplainedunfortably.“Igavehimthechoicetorunornot,andlethimdecide.”Ibitbackmyfrustration(懊惱).Iknewthecoachmeantwell—hethoughthewasdoingtherightthing.AftermakingsurethatDavidcouldrunifhewanted,Iturnedtofindhimingtowardsme,hissmallbodyrockingfromsidetosideasheswunghisfeetforward.Davidhadabraindiseasewhichpreventedhimfromwalkingorrunninglik