2023年山西省臨汾市第一中學(xué)校校聯(lián)考三模讀后續(xù)寫-Mymother'sgift講義-高考作文復(fù)習(xí)專項

閱讀下面材料，根據(jù)其內(nèi)容和所給段落開頭語續(xù)寫兩段，使之構(gòu)成一篇完整的短文。

Mymother’sgift

Adandelion(蒲公英)inmydictionaryalwaysremindsmeofmylunchtimeswithmymother.

WhenIwasinthethirdgrade,Iwaspickedtobetheprincessintheschoolplay,andforweeksmymotherhadpainstakingly(費力地)practisedmylineswithme.ButnomatterhoweasilyIdeliveredthemathome,assoonasIsteppedonstage,everyworddisappearedfrommyhead.Finally,myteachertookmeaside.Sheexplainedthatshehadwrittenanarrator’sparttotheplay,andaskedmetoswitchroles.Ididn’ttellmymotherwhathadhappenedwhenIwenthomeforlunchthatday.Butshesensedmyunease,andinsteadofsuggestingwepracticemylines,sheaskedifIwantedtowalkintheyard.

Itwasalovelyspringdayandtheroseleaveswereturninggreen.Wecouldseeyellowdandelionspoppingthroughthegrassinbunches,asifapainterhadtouchedourlandscapewithalittlebitofgold.Iwatchedmymothercasuallybenddownbyoneofthedandelions.“IthinkI’mgoingtodigupalltheseweeds,”shesaid,suddenlypullingaflowerupbyitsroots.“Fromnowon,we’llhaveonlyrosesinthisgarden.”

“ButIlikedandelions,”Iprotested.“Allflowersarebeautiful—evendandelions.”Mymotherlookedatmeseriously.“Yes,everyflowergivespleasureinitsownway,doesn’tit?”sheaskedthoughtfully.Inodded,pleasedthatIhadwonherover.“Andthatistrueofpeopletoo,”sheadded.“Noteveryonecanbeaprincess,butthereisnoshameinthat.”

Relievedthatshehadguessedmypain,IstartedtocryasItoldherwhathadhappened.

“Butyouwillbeabeautifulnarrator,”shesaid,remindingmeofhowmuchIlovedtoreadstoriesaloudtoher.“Thenarrator’spartisasimportantasthepartofaprincess.”

Overthenextfewweeks,withherconstantencouragement,Ilearnedtotakeprideintherole.LunchtimeswerespentreadingovermylinesandtalkingaboutwhatIwouldwear.注意：

1.續(xù)寫詞數(shù)應(yīng)為150左右；2.請按如下格式在答題卡的相應(yīng)位置作答。Backstageonthenightoftheperformance,Ifeltnervous.

____________________________________________________________________________________________________________________Aftertheplay,ItookhometheflowerIhadplacedinthepocket.

____________________________________________________________________________________________________________________讀后續(xù)寫題“3221”建模

【前文大意】本文以人物為線索展開，講述了作者三年級時被選中在學(xué)校戲劇表演中扮演公主，但因為總是在舞臺上忘詞而被老師調(diào)換成敘述者的角色。在媽媽的啟發(fā)和鼓勵下，作者學(xué)會了為敘述者這個角色感到自豪并努力背誦臺詞，認(rèn)真做準(zhǔn)備。一、閱讀前文找“3”——Who?Whathappened?

How(feeling)人物(Who)：I,mymother沖突事件(What

happened):

(前文第1段末句)

She(myteacher)

explainedthatshehadwrittenanarrator’sparttotheplay,andaskedmetoswitchroles.(前文最后1段)

Overthenextfewweeks,withherconstantencouragement,Ilearnedtotakeprideintherole.人物情感變化（How）:

painstakinglypractisedmylines—myunease—Mymotherlookedatme

seriously—sheaskedthoughtfully—Relieved

that

shehadguessedmypain,Istartedtocry—withherconstantencouragement,Ilearnedtotakeprideintherole.

二、續(xù)寫情節(jié)構(gòu)思“2+2”（一）充分理解兩段續(xù)寫的首句，結(jié)合前文，合理構(gòu)思每段2個情節(jié)。1.由第一段首句Backstageonthenightoftheperformance,Ifeltnervous.（演出當(dāng)晚的后臺，我感到很緊張。）可知，第一段可描寫作者是如何克服緊張以及完美完成表演的，即續(xù)寫線索：感到緊張——發(fā)現(xiàn)蒲公英——恢復(fù)平靜——完成演出。2.由第二段首句Aftertheplay,ItookhometheflowerIhadplacedinthepocket.（演出結(jié)束后，我把放在口袋里的花帶回家。）可知，第二段可描寫作者把花收藏起來，對母親心存感激。即續(xù)寫線索保存蒲公英——感謝母親。（二）充分理解前文，注意“伏筆”情節(jié)，在續(xù)寫中呼應(yīng)；劃出前文的好詞佳句，適切用于續(xù)寫。1.Adandelion(蒲公英)inmydictionaryalwaysremindsmeofmylunchtimeswithmymother.在我的字典里的一朵蒲公英讓我時時想起和媽媽在一起的午餐時間。2.Andforweeksmymotherhadpainstakinglypracticedmylineswithme媽媽煞費苦心地給我練習(xí)臺詞。2.ButnomatterhoweasilyIdeliveredthemathome,assoonasIsteppedonstage,everyworddisappearedfrommyhead.但是，不管在家里怎么背得滾瓜爛熟，只要一上舞臺，我的腦子里就成了一片空白。3.Butshesensedmyunease.但是，她感覺到我的不舒服。4.Wecouldseeyellowdandelionspoppingunexpectedlythroughthegrassinbunches,asifapainterhadtouchedourlandscapewithalittlebitofgold.我們可以看到，一叢叢黃色的蒲公英冒出草坪，仿佛是一位畫家為了給眼前的美景增色而著意加上的點點金色。5.”IthinkI'mgoingtodigupalltheseweeds,”shesaid,suddenlypullingaflowerupbyitsroots.我看得把這些野草都撥了，”她說著，一邊使勁把一叢蒲公英連根撥出。6.“ButIlikedandelions,”Iimmediatelyprotested,

Allflowersarebeautiful—evendandelions.”

“可是我喜歡蒲公英，”我不滿地說，“凡是花都好看蒲公英也不例外。”7.“Everyflowergivespleasureinitsownway,doesn’tit?”sheaskedthoughtfully.“每一種花都以自己的方式給人帶來愉悅，不是嗎？”她體貼地問道。8.“Butyouwillbeabeautifulnarrator,”shesaid,remindingmeofhowmuchIlovedtoreadstoriesaloudtoher.“Thenarrator’spartisasimportantasthepartofaprincess.”

“但你可以做一個美麗的敘述者?！彼f，提起我是多么喜歡大聲讀故事給她聽?！皵⑹稣叩慕巧凸鞯慕巧粯又匾??！?.Overthenextfewweeks,withherconstantencouragement,Ilearnedtotakeprideintherole.LunchtimeswerespentreadingovermylinesandtalkingaboutwhatIwouldwear.在接下來的幾周里，在她不斷的鼓勵下，我學(xué)會為我的角色自豪。在午餐時間，我反復(fù)朗讀我的臺詞，我和媽媽談?wù)撐掖┦裁匆路ㄉ吓_表演）。三、文末“1”點題句文末（通常是結(jié)尾句，但視具體行文，可能在接近結(jié)尾處）為“1”點題句，升華故事蘊含的正能量意義，比如本文主題是“Everyflowergivespleasureinitsownway.(每朵花以自己的方式給人帶來愉悅。)”

或

“Thenarrator’spartisasimportantasthepartofaprincess.(敘述者角色和公主角色一樣重要。)”或“母親的持續(xù)鼓勵幫助孩子樹立信心。”學(xué)生優(yōu)秀作品

Backstageonthenightoftheperformance,

Ifeltnervous.

I

struggledtomemorize

thewordsintheplay

painstakingly.Suddenly,Ifeltthattherewassomethinginmypocket.Takingitoutofmypocket,Ifoundthat

itwasadandelion.Immediately,Mother'sencouragementoccuredtome.I

saidtomyself,

“I'vepractisedforalongtimetobewellprepared.Icandoit!”Takingadeepbreath,Ibegantoplay,confident.Theplaywasperformedsmoothlyandsuccessfullyandtheaudiencebrokeintoastormofapplause.

BackstagestoodI,hearingtheapplauseandheldingbackmy

exciting

tears.

Aftertheplay,Itookhometheflower1hadplacedinthepocket.

ThesecondI

arrivedhome,I

rantomymotherandhuggedhertightlywithtearswellingupinmyeyes.

“I'vemadeit!”

Icriedout.Abigsmileappearing

onherface,shesqueezed

meinherarms,saying.

“It'stheresultofyourtirelesseffort!

Youarethemostdistinguishednarrator!”Itwasmymotherthattaught

metheimportanceofconfidenceinaspecialway.Theroseleavesturngreenandfall.

Adandelion

inmydictionary

alwaysreminds

meofbeingconfident,

whichismymother'sgift

for

methatIwilltreasureforever.

(95+102=197words)該篇作文續(xù)寫內(nèi)容與前文高度融合，情節(jié)推進自然，續(xù)寫的第2段里呼應(yīng)了前文情節(jié)，第1段如何鎮(zhèn)定心情，獲得表演成功的描述非常生動，第2段

“Youarethemostdistinguishednarrator”點題自然貼切，文末最后一句回應(yīng)前文首句，起到前后呼應(yīng)的效果。全文行文流暢，語言表達(dá)準(zhǔn)確，詞匯豐富，句式多彩，卷面整潔，堪稱佳作。充分展示了認(rèn)真學(xué)習(xí)和學(xué)以致用的能力。學(xué)生優(yōu)秀作品

Backstageonthenightoftheperformance,Ifeltnervous.

Myheartbegantoraceandmymindwentblank.Icould

feelmypulsepoundinginmytemplesandmypalmssweating

likecrazy.WhenIfeltalmost

fainted,myteachercameovertome."Yourmotheraskedmeto

givethistoyou."shesaid,passingmeadandelion.WhenIsawit,Iknewmymomwasoutthere.

Mymother'sencouragementand

guide

floodedintomymindimmediately.Itookadeepbreathandcalmeddown.Whenthe

play

started,Iquicklyenteredastateofmind.Iputthe

dandelioninto

mypocketand

performedwonderfullyasa

narrator.

Aftertheplay,Itookhometheflower1hadplacedinthepockel.

Mymother

received

thedandelionand

putitinthe

dicti