真題示范技巧點(diǎn)撥課堂練習(xí)-2023高考英語(yǔ)讀后續(xù)寫(xiě)應(yīng)考微技能

讀后續(xù)寫(xiě)應(yīng)考微技能

讀后續(xù)寫(xiě)是一種將閱讀與寫(xiě)作緊密結(jié)合的考查形式，旨在考查學(xué)生的語(yǔ)言綜合運(yùn)用能力。

主要聚焦在以下四個(gè)方面：

1.把握短文關(guān)鍵信息和語(yǔ)言特點(diǎn)的能力；

2.語(yǔ)言運(yùn)用的準(zhǔn)確性和豐富性；

3.對(duì)語(yǔ)篇結(jié)構(gòu)的把控能力；

4.創(chuàng)造性思維能力。

讀后續(xù)寫(xiě)的特點(diǎn)：

1.讀后續(xù)寫(xiě)不能隨心所欲，是要在開(kāi)頭語(yǔ)和提示詞的幫助下完成續(xù)寫(xiě)部分。

2.續(xù)寫(xiě)的內(nèi)容應(yīng)該思路清晰，內(nèi)容連貫，想象豐富，邏輯性強(qiáng)。

3.讀后續(xù)寫(xiě)要求讀寫(xiě)并重。對(duì)文章精準(zhǔn)理解才不至于偏離主題。

4.所給文章的未完部分的思路和內(nèi)容并不一定是唯一的，考生可以根據(jù)自己對(duì)文章的理解，從

而對(duì)文章的結(jié)尾有不同的詮釋。

讀后續(xù)寫(xiě)的常見(jiàn)錯(cuò)誤：

1.語(yǔ)言邏輯混亂

語(yǔ)言邏輯混亂是指詞法、語(yǔ)法的誤用、亂用，也是讀后續(xù)寫(xiě)中常出現(xiàn)的一個(gè)大問(wèn)題。

2.內(nèi)容邏輯混亂

內(nèi)容邏輯混亂則是讀后續(xù)寫(xiě)的又一大問(wèn)題，其包括線索中斷、邏輯混亂兩方面。任何文本都有

情節(jié)發(fā)展的主線，或明或隱，有時(shí)還有其他支線。有些學(xué)生在續(xù)寫(xiě)時(shí)，忽略了主線，造成線索

中斷。續(xù)寫(xiě)中的邏輯混亂既體現(xiàn)在句子之間、段落之間的邏輯關(guān)系不明確，也體現(xiàn)在續(xù)寫(xiě)短文

與給定文本的情節(jié)邏輯、時(shí)空邏輯相矛盾。

【真題示范】

原文呈現(xiàn)

（2022?新高考I【卷?讀后續(xù)寫(xiě)）

Itwasthedayofthebigcross-countryrun.Studentsfromsevendifferentprimaryschoolsinandaroundthe

smalltownwerewarmingupandwalkingtheroute（路線）throughthickevergreenforest.

IlookedaroundandfinallyspottedDavid,whowasstandingbyhimselfofftothesidebyafence.Hewas

smallfortenyearsold.Hisusualbigtoothysmilewasabsenttoday.Iwalkedoverandaskedhimwhyhewasn't

withtheotherchildren.Hehesitatedandthensaidhehaddecidednottorun.

Whatwaswrong?Hehadworkedsohardforthisevent!

Iquicklysearchedthecrowdfbrtheschoofscoachandaskedhimwhathadhappened/41wasafraidthatkids

fromotherschoolswouldlaughatheexplaineduncomfbrtably/igavehimthechoicetorunornot,andlet

himdecide.^^

Ibitbackmyfrustration（懊'情）.1knewthecoachmeantwell——hethoughthewasdoingtherightthing.After

makingsurethatDavidcouldrunifhewanted,Iturnedtofindhimcomingtowardsme,hissmallbodyrocking

fromsidetosideasheswunghisfeetforward.

Davidhadabraindiseasewhichpreventedhimfromwalkingorrunninglikeotherchildren,butatschoolhis

classmatesthoughtofhimasaregularkid.Healwaysparticipatedtothebestofhisabilityinwhatevertheywere

doing.ThatwaswhynoneofthechildrenthoughtitunusualthatDavidhaddecidedtojointhecross-countryteam.lt

justtookhimlonger-that*sall.Davidhadnotmissedasinglepractice,andalthoughhealwaysfinishedhisrun

longaftertheotherchildren,hedidalwaysfinish.Asaspecialeducationteacherattheschool,Iwasfamiliarwith

thechallengesDavidfacedandwasproudofhisstrongdetermination.

注意：

1.續(xù)寫(xiě)詞數(shù)應(yīng)為150左右；

2.請(qǐng)按?1下格式在答題卡的相應(yīng)位置作答。

Wesatdownnexttoeachother,butDavidwouldn'tlookatme.

IwatchedasDavidmoveduptothestartinglinewiththeotherrunners.

寫(xiě)作流程

第一步：審題

1.審體裁：記敘文

2.審人稱：第一、三人稱

3.審時(shí)態(tài)：一般過(guò)去時(shí)

4.審前文大意：作者是一名特殊教育的教師，在大型越野賽跑那天，發(fā)現(xiàn)患有大腦疾病的大衛(wèi)獨(dú)自站在一

旁。作者問(wèn)其原因，他說(shuō)他準(zhǔn)備放棄比賽。從教練口中得知，因?yàn)閾?dān)心同學(xué)們會(huì)嘲笑大衛(wèi)，教練讓大衛(wèi)自

己決定是否最終參賽……

第二步：抓住段首句設(shè)問(wèn)

續(xù)寫(xiě)段首1：Wesatdownnexttoeachother,butDavidwouldn'tlookatme..設(shè)問(wèn)：

HowwouldDavidreact?

WhatwouldIdotodealwiththematter?

Whatwouldhappenafterthat?

續(xù)寫(xiě)段首2:IwatchedasDavidmoveduptothestartinglinewiththeotherrunners.設(shè)問(wèn):

HowdidDavidfeel?

WhatwouldDaviddo?

WhatwouldDavidhappenintheend?

第三步：謀篇

1.第一段：Wesatdownnexttoeachother,butDavidwouldn'tlookatme.根據(jù)第一段段首句可知，作者和大

衛(wèi)挨著坐下，但大衛(wèi)不敢抬頭看作者。推測(cè)：第一段應(yīng)該描寫(xiě)，大衛(wèi)決定不參賽之后的心里狀態(tài)是悶悶不

樂(lè)，然后作者設(shè)法勸說(shuō)大衛(wèi)參加比賽，無(wú)論從何角度拓展，需注意與續(xù)寫(xiě)第二段首句呼應(yīng)。

2.IwatchedasDavidmoveduptothestartinglinewiththeotherrunners.根據(jù)第二段段首句可知，大衛(wèi)和其他

運(yùn)動(dòng)員一起走到起跑線上，開(kāi)始參賽，第二段應(yīng)該描寫(xiě)，大衛(wèi)參賽的過(guò)程，并且最終完成賽跑。由此可推

測(cè)：第一段的結(jié)局：作者成功勸說(shuō)大衛(wèi)參賽。第二段的結(jié)局：大衛(wèi)戰(zhàn)勝了自我，并且展示了自己堅(jiān)定的決

心。

3.在確定了思路和內(nèi)容之后，續(xù)寫(xiě)時(shí)，要注意句子結(jié)構(gòu)的多樣性，語(yǔ)言的豐富性，并通過(guò)句與句之間連接詞

的正確使用，使上下文連貫。

第四步：擬草稿并檢查譽(yù)寫(xiě)

[參考范文1]

Paragraph1：

Wesatdownnexttoeachother,butDavidwouldn'tlookatme.Hehunghishead,inlowspirit.Iaskedhimif

hereallydecidednottorun.Henodded,bitinghislip.ThenIgentlysaid,“David,ifyou'renotrunningbecause

you'reafraidofbeinglaughedat,youjustfailyourself.^^DavidlookedupandIcontinued,4tBecauseyouallow

thosepeoplestopyoufromdoingsth.youreallywanttodo."WhatIsaidseemedtowork.Davidfinallymadeup

hismindandheadedforthestartingline.

Paragraph2：

Wesatdownnexttoeachother,hutDavidwouldn'tlookatme.Hehunghishead,inlowspirit.Iaskedhimif

hereallydecidednottorun.Henodded,bitinghislip.ThenIgentlysaid,“David,ifyou'renotrunningbecause

you'reafraidofbeinglaughedat,youjustfailyourself."DavidlookedupandIcontinued,t4Becauseyouallow

thosepeoplestopyoufromdoingsth.youreallywanttodo."WhatIsaidseemedtowork.Davidfinallymadeup

hismindandheadedforthestartingline.

IwatchedasDavidmoveduptothestartinglinewiththeotherrunners.Davidstoodfirmlyinhisposition,

ignoringanything.around.Buthehadonlygoneafewmetersbeforehetrippedandfellflatontheground.My

heartssank.Luckily,theaudienceburstintothunderouscheersandapplause.Inspiredbytheenthusiasmand

encouragement.Davidquickenedhispaceinhighspirits.Itturnedoutthathecrossedthefinishlineeventually.

Seeinghisconfidentsmiles,Isighedinrelief.Withthepowertoconquerhimself;hecanconqueranythingonthe

waytoapromisingfuture

[參考范文2]

Paragraph1：

Wesatdownnexttoeachother,butDavidwouldn'tlookatme.Ireachedoutmyhandandpattedhimonthe

shouldergently,sayingthathewasagreatboywithstrongdeterminationandthatfacedwithdifficultieshealways

triedhisbesttoovercomethem.Davidgraduallyraisedhishead.Lookinghimintheeye,Itoldhimnottogiveup

afterhehadtrainedalot.Henoddedwithgratitudeandstoodup.Ihuggedhimtightlyandthenhewalkedaway

slowlybutfirmly.

Paragraph2：

IwatchedasDavidmoveduptothestartinglinewiththeotherrunners.Whentherunbegan,helookedback

overhisshoulderandwavedatmewithconfidence.Atthesametime,hisusualbigtoothysmileappearedonhis

faceagain.Thoughheranslowerthanothers,hekeptonrunningandrunning.Nokidsfromotherschoolsmade

funofhim.Instead,allpresentcheeredhimonandadmiredhiscourageandstrongwill.Tomyrelief,itwas

throughthisrunthatDavidbecamemuchstronger.

【技巧點(diǎn)撥】

技巧一歸納大意，推測(cè)意圖

歸納記敘文文本大意的常用方法是要素歸納法，即找出記敘文的六要素（時(shí)間、地點(diǎn)、人物和

事情的起因、經(jīng)過(guò)、結(jié)果），并將它們概括表達(dá)為“什么人/物（什么時(shí)間/地點(diǎn)）做了什么事，最

終結(jié)果如何”。

推斷記敘文敘述意圖的常用方法是提問(wèn)法，首先問(wèn)自己“本文的中心話題是什么？”；然后問(wèn)

自己通過(guò)上述六要素及其敘述手法的選擇，“作者向讀者傳達(dá)了有關(guān)該話題的什么情或理？”

或“作者想讓讀者有什么樣的感受或體驗(yàn)？

【典題印證】

請(qǐng)閱讀下面的短文，并歸納出文本大意和敘述意圖。

Compassionisadesirewithinustohelpothers.Witheffort,wecantranslatecompassioninto

action.Anexperiencelastweekendshowedmethisistrue.Iworkpart-timeinasupermarketacross

fromabuildingfortheelderly.Theseoldpeopleareourmaincustomers,andit'snothardtolose

patienceovertheirslowness.ButlastSunday,oneagedgentlemanappearedtoteachmeavaluable

lesson.Thisuntidymanwalkeduptomyregister（收款機(jī)）withaboxofbiscuits.Hesaidhewasout

ofcash（現(xiàn)金），hadjustmovedintohisroom,andhadnothinginhiscupboards.Heaskedifwecould

lethimhavethefoodontrust.Hepromisedtorepaymethenextday.

Icouldn'thelpstaringathim.Iwonderedwhatkindofpersonhehadbeentenortwentyyears

before,andwhathewouldbelikeifluckhadgonehisway.Ihadahurtinmyheartforthiskindof

humansoul,allaloneintheworld.!toldhimthatIwassorry,butstorerulesdidn'tallowmetodo

so.Ifeltstupidandunkindsayingthis,butIvaluedmyjob.

Justthen,anotherman,standingbehindthefirst,spokeup.Ifanything,helookedmore

pitiable."Chargeittome,“wasallhesaid.

WhatIhadbeenfeelingwaspity.Pityissoftandsafeandeasy.Compassion,ontheotherhand,

iscaringinaction.Ithankedthesecondmanbuttoldhimthatwasnotallowedeither.ThenIreached

intomypocketandpaidforthebiscuitsmyself.Ireachedintomypocketbecausethesetwomenhad

reachedintomyheartandtaughtmecompassion.

1.文本大意：_____________________________________________________

2.敘述意圖：______________________________________________________

【名師點(diǎn)撥】

1.記敘類文章的文本大意回答寫(xiě)了什4的問(wèn)題，指文本的主要內(nèi)容，即圍繞主要人或物描述的

主要事件及其結(jié)果。

2.記敘類文章的敘述意圖回答為什4號(hào)的問(wèn)題，指作者通過(guò)文本主要內(nèi)容傳遞給讀者的信息，

可以是情，也可以是理。

［參考答案］

1.文本大意：Movedbyagentleman'saction,acashierpaidforaboxofbiscuitsasafavortoan

untidyman,whoserequestwasfirstrefused.

2.敘述意圖：Totellreadersthatwecantranslatecompassionintoaction.

技巧二分析情景模式，合理構(gòu)思情節(jié)

為了使續(xù)寫(xiě)部分和給定材料共同構(gòu)成一個(gè)邏輯銜接、情節(jié)完整的短文，必須在文本大意和敘述

意圖的統(tǒng)領(lǐng)下分析所給文本的情境模式，即who,what,when,where,why（簡(jiǎn)稱5W）。并在

此基礎(chǔ)上，結(jié)合所給段落開(kāi)頭語(yǔ)發(fā)展續(xù)寫(xiě)部分的情境模式，以合理構(gòu)思續(xù)寫(xiě)部分的情節(jié)。

【典題印證】

請(qǐng)閱讀下面的短文，并回答下列導(dǎo)學(xué)問(wèn)題。

1.這篇短文的文本大意和敘述意圖是什么？

2.請(qǐng)根據(jù)文本大意和敘述意圖，分析所給文本的情境模式，找出who,what,when,where,

why,并填寫(xiě)在短文后面的表格中。

3.根據(jù)文本大意、敘述意圖和找到的所給短文的情境模式，你認(rèn)為續(xù)寫(xiě)部分的who,what,when,

where,why分別是什么？你的依據(jù)是什么？請(qǐng)?zhí)顚?xiě)在短文后面的表格中。

4.續(xù)寫(xiě)部分的情境模式是否與所給短文的情境模式完全一樣？如果不是，主要原因是什么？

ItwasChristmasEve,1881.1was15yearsoldandfeelingliketheworldwasoverformebecause

therehadn'tbeenenoughmoneytobuymetherifle（來(lái)復(fù)槍）thatFdwantedthatyear.

Pacamebackinandtherewasiceinhisbeard."Comeon,Matt,“Pasaid."Dresswarmly.It's

coldoutside.We'regoingtoWidowJensen's.Theyareoutofwood."WidowJensenlivedabouttwo

milesdowntheroad.Herhusbandhaddiedayearorsoandleftherwiththreechildren,theoldest

beingeight.

IunwillinglywentoutwithPa...

發(fā)展：續(xù)寫(xiě)部分的情境模

分析:所給短文的情境模式說(shuō)明：如此發(fā)展的理由

式

who：who：

what：what：

when：when：

where：where：

why：why：

【名師點(diǎn)撥】

1.分析情境模式，是在文本大意和敘述意圖的統(tǒng)領(lǐng)下，從5W的角度梳理所給短文的主要內(nèi)容,

即已經(jīng)發(fā)生了什么，為續(xù)寫(xiě)的情節(jié)構(gòu)思提供依據(jù)與方向。

2.發(fā)展情境模式，是結(jié)合所給短文的情境模式和所給段落開(kāi)頭語(yǔ)，從5W的角度構(gòu)思續(xù)寫(xiě)部分

的主要內(nèi)容，即接下來(lái)要發(fā)生什么，使合理的續(xù)寫(xiě)成為可能。

3.作為所給短文的延展部分，續(xù)寫(xiě)部分的情境模式和所給短文的情境模式緊密聯(lián)系，但也有二

定程度上的區(qū)別。

［參考答案］

1.文本大意：圣誕前夕，沒(méi)錢(qián)給兒子買(mǎi)來(lái)復(fù)槍的父親和兒子一起送東西幫助貧困的Jensen一家。

敘述意圖：弘揚(yáng)給予他人、助人為樂(lè)的精神。

分析：所給短文的情境模式發(fā)展：續(xù)寫(xiě)部分的情境模式說(shuō)明：如此發(fā)展的理由

父親說(shuō)We'regoingtoWidow

who：Pa；I；WidowJensenand

who：Pa；IJensen's,再結(jié)合第二段最后一

herchildren

句，Jensen家還有她的孩子

what：gaveWidowJensen's

what：gotreadytogotoWidow父親說(shuō)Ifscoldoutside.We5re

familysomewood(andmaybe

Jensen'stogivethemgoingtoWidowJensen's.They

somethingelse)；theywere

somethingareoutofwood.

grateful

when：ChristmasEve,1881；短文第一句ItwasChristmas

when：ChristmasEve,1881；

beforeweleftforWidowEve,1881和父親說(shuō)We're

ontheway；afterwearrived

Jensen'sgoingtoWidowJensen's

父親說(shuō)We'regoingtoWidow

where：ontheway；atWidowJensen's,可能先是ontheway,

where：inourhouse

Jensen9s后到WidowJensen9So主要地

點(diǎn)應(yīng)該是atWidowJensen's

父親說(shuō)It'scoldoutside.We're

goingtoWidowJensen's.They

why：WidowJensen'sfamilyareoutofwood,說(shuō)明Jensen

why：Herhusbanddiedandleft

wereinneed,Pawaskind,一家需要幫助，而且善良的父

herwiththreechildren，the

helpingthoseinneedisthe親樂(lè)于助人；短文第一句把故

oldestbeingeight.

spiritofChristmas事設(shè)定在圣誕節(jié)這個(gè)“給予”

的日子，暗含了幫助他人的主

題。

4.續(xù)寫(xiě)部分的情境模式和所給短文的情境模式不是完全一樣。主要原因在于：續(xù)寫(xiě)部分的事件

是對(duì)所給短文中主要事件的合理發(fā)展；續(xù)寫(xiě)部分的人或物、時(shí)間和地點(diǎn)也因事件的發(fā)展而有相

應(yīng)的變化。

技巧三補(bǔ)充細(xì)節(jié)

在已知文本大意和敘述意圖的前提下，分析和發(fā)展情境模式，以情境要素的形式呈現(xiàn)續(xù)寫(xiě)的大

致情節(jié)。但情節(jié)的展開(kāi)需要細(xì)節(jié)，如何將續(xù)寫(xiě)部分的大致情節(jié)擴(kuò)充為150詞左右的具體情節(jié)

呢？現(xiàn)在將帶你體驗(yàn)化少為多的關(guān)鍵技能——添加細(xì)節(jié)。

【典題印證】

請(qǐng)閱讀下面的浙江新高考所給的樣題，結(jié)合某同學(xué)的續(xù)寫(xiě)，回答下列導(dǎo)學(xué)問(wèn)題。

1.這篇讀后續(xù)寫(xiě)的情節(jié)是否完整？

2.參照評(píng)分原則，你認(rèn)為這篇讀后續(xù)寫(xiě)的主要問(wèn)題是什么？造成問(wèn)題的原因是什么？如何解

決？

AfunnythinghappenedtoArthurwhenhewasonthewaytoworkoneday.Ashewalkedalong

ParkAvenueneartheFirstNationalBank,heheardthesoundofsomeonetryingtostartacar.He

triedagainandagainbutcouldn'tgetthecarmoving.Arthurturnedandlookedinsideatthefaceofa

youngmanwholookedworried.Arthurstoppedandasked,“Itlookslikeyou'vegotaproblem,“

Arthursaid.

"I'mafraidso.FminabighurryandIcan'tstartmycar.”

“IstheresomethingIcandotohelp?”Arthurasked.Theyoungmanlookedatthetwo

suitcasesinthebackseatandthensaid,“Thanks.Ifyou'resureitwouldn'tbetoomuchtrouble,

youcouldhelpmegetthesesuitcasesintoataxi.v

“Notroubleatall.Tdbegladtohelp.n

Theyoungmangotoutandtookoneofthesuitcasesfromthebackseat.Afterplacingitonthe

ground,heturnedtogettheotherone.JustasArthurpickedupthefirstsuitcaseandstartedwalking,

heheardthelongloudnoiseofanalarm.

Itwasfromthebank.Therehadbeenarobbery（搶劫）！

ParkAvenuehadbeenquietamomentbefore.Nowtheairwasfilledwiththesoundofthe

alarmandtheshoutsofpeoplerunningfromalldirections.Carsstoppedandthepassengersjoined

thecrowdinfrontofthebank.Peopleaskedeachother,“Whathappened?”Buteveryonehada

differentanswer.

Arthur,stillcarryingthesuitcase,turnedtolookatthebankandwalkedrightintotheyoung

womaninfrontofhim.

Shelookedatthesuitcaseandthenathim.Arthurwassurprised.vWhyisshelookingatme

likethat?”Hethought.Thesuitcase!ShethinksI'mthebankthief!”

Arthurlookedaroundatthecrowdofpeople.Hebecamefrightened,andwithoutanother

thought,hestartedtorun.

某同學(xué)的續(xù)寫(xiě)：

Paragraph1：

Ashewasrunning,Arthurheardtheyoungmanshoutingbehind,“Stop,stop!”Arthurturneda

deafeartotheshouts.Hestoppedataxi.Thetaxiracedtothepolicestation,leavingtheyoungman

behind.

Paragraph2：

ThetaxistoppedinfrontofthepolicestationandArthurgotoutofthetaxi.Inthestationhereported

whathadhappenedandhandedthesuitcaseover.Thentheyoungmanarrivedtoexplain.They

openedthecaseandfoundnomoneyinside.Everyonelaughed.

【名師點(diǎn)撥】

L續(xù)寫(xiě)時(shí)如果僅根據(jù)基本思路簡(jiǎn)單地交代事件過(guò)程與結(jié)果，續(xù)寫(xiě)部分必會(huì)內(nèi)容干癟、詞數(shù)不足。

2.要使續(xù)寫(xiě)部分的詞數(shù)符合要求，且內(nèi)容豐富，就需要結(jié)合情節(jié)添加相關(guān)細(xì)節(jié)。

【自我診斷】

1.這篇讀后續(xù)寫(xiě)的情節(jié)完整。

2.這篇讀后續(xù)寫(xiě)的主要問(wèn)題：內(nèi)容干癟、詞數(shù)不足。

造成問(wèn)題的原因：只是流水賬似地呈現(xiàn)了所構(gòu)思的基本情節(jié)，缺乏細(xì)節(jié)描寫(xiě)。

解決問(wèn)題的策略：需要充分描寫(xiě)相關(guān)細(xì)節(jié)，如對(duì)動(dòng)作、語(yǔ)言、表情、心理和環(huán)境等進(jìn)行描寫(xiě)。

請(qǐng)仔細(xì)閱讀某同學(xué)修改后的續(xù)寫(xiě)，并把導(dǎo)學(xué)問(wèn)題填寫(xiě)在后面的表格中。

某同學(xué)修改后的續(xù)寫(xiě)：

Paragraph1：

AshewasrunningsArthurheardtheyoungmanshoutingbehind,“Stop,stop!”Realizingthat

theyoungmanmightbethebankrobber,Arthurturnedadeafeartotheshoutsandraneven

faster.Hestoppedataxi,jumpedinandsaidtothedriver,uPolicestation,please!Speedupand

throwtheyoungmanbehindoff!”Immediatelythetaxiracedawaylikethewind,leavingthe

youngmanfarbehind.

Paragraph2：

ThetaxistoppedinfrontofthepolicestationandArthurdirectlywentin.Hehandedthesuitcase

overtothepolice,butjustashewasreportingwhathadhappenednearthebankonParkAvenue,he

heardtheyoungman'svoiceoutside.Theyoungmanhadarrived,too!Explainingthathewas

innocent,themanopenedthesuitcaseandinitwasnothingbutsomeclothes.Arthurfelt

embarrassed,butthepolicemenlaughedandthankedhimanyway.

所添加的描寫(xiě)細(xì)節(jié)的句子或詞塊它們描寫(xiě)了哪些具體細(xì)節(jié)

①

②

③

④

⑤

⑥

【名師點(diǎn)撥】

1.讀后續(xù)寫(xiě)的評(píng)分原則之一就是“內(nèi)容的豐富性”。

2.所謂“內(nèi)容的豐富性”就是續(xù)寫(xiě)部分詳細(xì)、生動(dòng)地描述情景、態(tài)度和感情等。

3.通?？梢酝ㄟ^(guò)對(duì)人物動(dòng)作、語(yǔ)言、心理活動(dòng)、表情和環(huán)境等細(xì)節(jié)的描寫(xiě)來(lái)豐富內(nèi)容，增強(qiáng)敘

述的呼面唇。

［參考答案］

它們描寫(xiě)了哪

所添加的描寫(xiě)細(xì)節(jié)的句子或詞塊

些具體細(xì)節(jié)

①Realizingthattheyoungmanmightbethebank

心理活動(dòng)

robber

②andranevenfaster動(dòng)作

③jumpedin動(dòng)作

④andsaidtothedriver,“Policestation，please!

語(yǔ)言

Speedupandthrowtheyoungmanbehindoff!”

⑤heheardtheyoungman'svoiceoutside環(huán)境（聲音）

?Arthurfeltembarrassed情感

【課后練習(xí)】

湖南省2023屆高三九校聯(lián)盟第二次聯(lián)考

閱讀下面材料，根據(jù)其內(nèi)容和所給段落開(kāi)頭語(yǔ)續(xù)寫(xiě)兩段，使之構(gòu)成一篇完整的短文。

Miraculous（神奇的）Strength

Onechilly,Decemberevening,Iwaspreparingdinner.Suddenly,whilesettingthetable,Iheardatremendous

crashfromthesecondfloor.Itwasthekindofrare,heart-stoppingnoisethatinstantlystruckfearintoamother's

heart.Eventhedishesin.thekitchencupboardrattled（發(fā)出口卡嗒聲）!Myseven-year-oldsonbeganscreamingfor

help,andIracedupthestairswithoutevenstoppingtoputdownthedinnerforkIheldinmyhand.

Enteringmyson'sroom,Ifoundmyfrightenedtoddler（學(xué)步的兒童）trappedunderafive-drawerwooden

dresser（衣板j）.Ithadbeentomfromitswallanchor.IcouldhearcryingasIrantowardhim.AsIleanedover,I

sawhissmall,bloodyfaceandtheterrorinhiseyes.

Ipulledthelargedresseroffhim.Atthatmoment,IfeltIcouldmovemountains.Iwasfearfultolookbut

quicklytriedtoassesshowbadlyhewashurt.Begginghimtostaystill,Idialed911andbegantopray.Iprayedfor

themercythatsparedhimandthehealinghewouldneed,gi