技巧08 如何設(shè)計對話-高一英語讀后續(xù)寫基礎(chǔ)技巧與整體演練

高一英語讀后續(xù)寫基礎(chǔ)技巧與整體演練技巧08如何設(shè)計對話對話是故事角色在故事中相互之間的談話或自言自語的內(nèi)心獨白。對話描寫是故事敘述中的一種重要手段，在讀后續(xù)寫中運用適當(dāng)?shù)膶υ捗鑼懀芙沂救宋锏男愿窈蛡€性，打破單調(diào)，能夠鋪墊出合理的續(xù)寫情節(jié)，從而推動情節(jié)向前發(fā)展。對話提示詞，如saidWinston、hesaid、headded等(注意，主語是名詞時通常放在動詞后；主語是代詞時，放在動詞前)。提示詞的位置可以放在引用的對話前、中、后三個位置，它與對話內(nèi)容部分構(gòu)成一個整體，不需要大寫。如：“Whenyouwereayoungmanwewerealllivinginthetree-tops,”saidthebarman,withaglanceattheothercustomers.”為了避免單調(diào)，除了常見的say,ask,answer,yell,call,cry外，對話提示詞中還可用其他動詞：think（想）；declare（表明，宣稱）；admit（承認(rèn)）；detail（詳細(xì)解釋道）；emphasize（強(qiáng)調(diào)）；remember（回想起，記得）；recall（回想起，記起）；comfort（安慰）；begin（開始講話）；add（補(bǔ)充說，繼續(xù)說）；hesitate（猶豫）；continue（繼續(xù)）；repeat（重說）；scream（尖叫，大聲叫）；exclaim（驚叫，呼喊）；scold（責(zé)備）；laugh（發(fā)笑）；chuckle（低聲輕笑）；sneer（嘲笑，譏諷）；shout（大聲說，怒罵）；reply（回答）；sob（啜泣）；demand（要求）；command（命令）；suggest（建議）；persist（堅持）；remark（說起，評論）；agree（同意）；beg（懇求，哀求）；announce（宣布）；explain（解釋）；sigh（嘆息）；correct（糾正）；whisper（耳語；小聲說）；grunt（咕噥）；mumble（口齒不清地說）；stammer（結(jié)結(jié)巴巴地說）；stutter（結(jié)結(jié)巴巴地說）；groan（發(fā)牢騷）；grumble（嘟噥；發(fā)牢騷）；mutter（嘀咕；發(fā)牢騷）；complain（抱怨）；murmur（喃喃細(xì)語）；moan（呻吟，抱怨）；gabble（急促而含混不清地說）；gasp（氣喘吁吁地說）；snarl（不耐煩地說）；snap（厲聲說，怒氣沖沖地說）；bellow（怒吼）；growl（怒吼）等。對話中的逗號要放在引號里面。對話提示詞與引用的話語構(gòu)成一個完整的句子，引號的結(jié)尾常用逗號。如：“AndnowImustgo,”shesaidassoonashehadmasteredhisinstructions.如果對話提示詞在一個完整對話中間，其后需用逗號，且后半句話的開頭首字母用小寫。如：“Don’tbelateforsupper,”UnclePaulcried,“andkeeptothetracksothatyoudon’tgetlost!”此外，引號內(nèi)可使用感嘆號或問號。如：“Whateverishesaying？”saidavoice,verynear,distinctandshrillthroughthewarblingoftheSuper-Wurlitzer.“Thesewomen!”hesaid,asthemachineroseintotheair.對話一般由引用部分、標(biāo)點符號、對話提示語和其他成分構(gòu)成。對話提示語后如適當(dāng)增加其他成分，能夠生動傳神地展示對話。在讀后續(xù)寫中我們可以利用如下方法來刻畫人物對話：（一）增加副詞在對話提示詞后增加副詞，加強(qiáng)描繪說話人的語氣情感，使對話更形象化。[例1]“Youmusthaveseengreatchangessinceyouwereayoungman,”saidWinstontentatively.[例2]“Intheplacewherethereisnodarkness？”hesaidhesitantly.（二）并列動詞在對話中增加動作描寫，能渲染故事氣氛，增添畫面感。[例3]“Sevenminutesbehindtime,”headded,andshookhishead.[例4]“Perhapswehadbettergoon,”saidMissKeate,andmovedtowardsthedoor.（三）增加介詞短語在對話提示詞后增加介詞短語，能夠更詳細(xì)地表現(xiàn)出說話者的神態(tài)、語調(diào)、聲音等具體情況。[例5]“Youallremember,”saidtheController,inhisstrongdeepvoice...[例6]“TheMinistryofPlenty’scertainlydoneagoodjobthisyear,”hesaidwithaknowingshakeofhishead.（四）增加分詞短語在對話中增加分詞或分詞短語表示伴隨狀況，不僅能夠增添畫面感，而且能夠使句子結(jié)構(gòu)更加復(fù)雜，表達(dá)更加豐富。[例7]“Whatareyougivingthem？”askedMr.Foster,makinghistoneveryprofessional.(分詞短語)[例8]“Yes,”saidMustaphaMond,noddinghishead,“youmaywellshudder.”(分詞短語)（五）增加狀語從句在對話中增加從句，使得續(xù)寫的語法結(jié)構(gòu)更加復(fù)雜，同時，更細(xì)節(jié)化地表達(dá)說話人說話時的具體情況。[例9]“Atlast,”shethoughtexultantlyasshesteppedoutofthecab.(從句)[例10]“Intheplacewherethereisnodarkness,”hesaid,asthoughhehadrecognizedtheallusion.(從句)學(xué)會在續(xù)寫的對話中正確使用標(biāo)點符號，在對話提示詞中靈活運用不同的動詞，掌握展示對話的5種方法，從而達(dá)到提高自身語言表達(dá)的準(zhǔn)確性和生動性。在讀后續(xù)寫中展示對話，能夠豐富續(xù)寫的內(nèi)容和語言，增強(qiáng)語篇的連貫性，有利于推動合理的續(xù)1．閱讀下面材料，根據(jù)其內(nèi)容和所給段落開頭語續(xù)寫兩段，使之構(gòu)成一篇完整的短文。SpreadingKindnessAroundtheWorld“Mom,wewanttowriteabook,”myfive-year-oldtwins,DelilahandNathenial,toldmeoneday.Ilookedatmykidscuriously.“Whatdoyoumean?”Aretheyjoking?Ithought.Idon’tknowthefirstthingaboutgettingabookpublished.Still,Ididn’twanttosquashtheircreativity.“Okay…whatdoyouwantittobeabout?”“Anenvelopethattravelsallovertheworldspreadingkindness,”Nathenialsaid,hiseyesshining.Overthenextfewmonths,mykidsdreamedupmoreofthestory.Themaincharacterswereapairoftwinsjustlikethem.Iwrotedowneverything,makingsurenottomissadetail.Thekidsevensketchedsceneswithcoloredpencils.ThethemeofDelilahandNathenial’sstorywasbeingkindtoothers,nomatterhowlittleyoumighthave.IwonderedifthatwaspartlybecauseI’dtoldthemwhatmylifehadbeenlikewhenIwastheirage.IremembermyfatherdiedwhenIwasfive.Mymom,youngersisterandIendeduponthestreets,sleepinginparksandhomelesshotelsformorethanayear.IfoundmyselfstandinginanylineIcouldtogetdonatedfood.Despite—ormaybebecauseof—ourhardships,Itriedtohelpothers.Ihandedoutsnackstopeoplewhowerehomeless,tookinstray(走失的)animalsandhelpedgiveoutdonationsatachurchwherethewomaninchargewouldsendmehomewithfood.AfterIgavebirthtoourtwins,Inotonlytaughtthemtobekindbutalsotomakesuretheyknewthatanythingwaspossible.IguessIdidaprettygoodjob,becauseherethetwinswere,atagefive,managedtowriteabook.Afterweself-publishedTheMagicalEnvelopelastChildren’sDay,thekidsdecidedtodonateittothekindergarteninourcommunity.注意：1.續(xù)寫詞數(shù)應(yīng)為150左右；2.請按如下格式在答題卡的相應(yīng)位置作答。Thetwins,noweight,continuetoamazeme.___________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________MykidsunderstandmoreaboutthehardshipIendured.___________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________2．閱讀下面短文，根據(jù)所給情節(jié)進(jìn)行續(xù)寫，使之構(gòu)成一個完整的故事。Igrewupinasmalltownwheretheprimaryschoolwasaten-minutewalkfrommyhouse.Whenthenoonbellrang,Iwouldracebreathlesslyhome.Mymotherwouldbestandingatthetopofthestairs,smilingdownatme.OnelunchtimewhenIwasinthethirdgradewillstaywithmealways.Ihadbeenpickedtobetheprincessintheschoolplay,andforweeksmymotherhadrehearsed(排練)mylinessohardwithme.ButnomatterhoweasilyIactedathome,assoonasIsteppedonstage,everyworddisappearedfrommyhead.Finally,myteachertookmeaside.Sheexplainedthatshehadwrittenanarrator’s(旁白的)parttotheplay,andaskedmetochangeroles.Herwords,kindlyexpressed,stillhurt,especiallywhenIsawmypartgotoanothergirl.Ididn’ttellmymotherwhathadhappenedwhenIwenthomeforlunchthatday.Butshesensedmypain.Insteadofsuggestingwepracticemylines,sheaskedifIwantedtowalkintheyard.Itwasalovelyspringdayandtherosevine(藤蔓)wasturninggreen.Underthehugetrees,wecouldseeyellowdandelions(蒲公英)inthegrassinbunch,asifapainterhadtouchedourlandscapewithgold.Iwatchedmymothercasuallybenddownbyonedandelion.“IthinkI’mgoingtodigupalltheseweeds,”shesaid,pullingitupbyitsroots.“Fromnowon,we’llhaveonlyrosesinthisgarden.”“ButIlikedandelions,”Iprotested.“Allflowersarebeautiful-evendandelions.”Mymotherlookedatmeseriously.“Yes,everyflowergivespleasureinitsownway,doesn’tit?”Sheaskedthoughtfully.Inodded,pleasedthatIhadwonherover.“Andthatistrueofpeopletoo,”sheadded.“Noteveryonecanbeaprincess,butthereisnoshameinthat.”Relievedthatshehadguessedmypain,IstartedtocryasItoldherwhathadhappened.Shelistenedandsmiled.注意：1．所續(xù)寫短文的詞數(shù)應(yīng)為150左右；2．續(xù)寫部分分為兩段，每段的開頭語已為你寫好，不計入總詞數(shù)。Paragraph1“Butyouwillbeabeautifulnarrator,”shesaid,encouragingandcomfortingmeasusual.

___________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________Paragraph2Aftertheplay,Itookhometheflower.___________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________3．閱讀下面材料，根據(jù)其內(nèi)容和所給段落開頭語續(xù)寫兩段，使之構(gòu)成一篇完整的短文。ActofMemoryIwasayounggirlofeleventhen,livinginBrooklyn.Myfatherhaddiedunexpectedlythatsummer.Timeswassuddenlyveryhardformymother,mybrother,andme.PapahadalwaysmadeabigdealoutofChristmas.EveryChristmas,whenwewereabouttodecoratethetree,hewouldmakealittleceremonyoutoftakingaspeciallittleKewpie-dolloutofitsbox,holdingitupinfrontofme,saying,“Maria,thisdollisasoldasyouare.”ThenhewouldhangitontheChristmastree.PapaboughtthatlittledollwhenIwasborn,andithadbecomeasmalltradition.ButthisChristmasweweretohavenotree.Mymotherwasapracticalwoman,sayingitwasaluxury.Ithought,withquietbutstrongbitternessandanger,thatithadnevermeantasmuchtoherasithadtoPapaanyway.Wehadbeentochurchthateveningandwerewalkingbackhomeinsilence.AllIcouldseewerethetree-litwindowswepassed.TheircheerfulglowmademybitternessevenmoreintensebecauseIpicturedhappyfamiliesinthosehouses,sharinglaughter,exchangingpresents,talking,joking.Iknewwhilearrivinghome,wewouldbegreetedbydarkenedwindowsandendlessemptiness.Aswepassedmyfriend’shouse,Iaskedmymothertopleaseletmedropinforawhile.Shenodded.Iwaiteduntilmymotherandbrotherdisappearedaroundthecorner.ThenIturnedandheadedformyfriend’shouse.Suddenly,apileofabandonedChristmastreesfromthestorenexttoherhousecameintomysight.Surprisedandexcited,Idashedtothetrees,pickedoutthebestoneandbeganhalf-draggingmytreasurehome.ItseemedasifPapawasmixedupinthissomehow.Itseemedasifhewasinthestarsaboveme,ineverylighted-house,intheverytreeIwascarrying.注意：1.續(xù)寫詞數(shù)應(yīng)為150左右;2.請按如下格式在答題卡的相應(yīng)位置作答。WhenIgothome,Irangthedoorbellandcouldn’twaittoshowthemthetree.________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________Beforegoingtobed,Islippedtoseemytreeonelasttimebutsawmymotherstandinginfrontofit.________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________4．閱讀下面材料，根據(jù)其內(nèi)容和所給段落開頭語續(xù)寫兩段，使之構(gòu)成一篇完整的短文。Inthefirstandsecondgrades,Iwasextremelyshy.Ihadfriends,butitjustwasn’tinmypersonalitytobeveryoutgoing,evenifIknewsomeonewell.Iwasevenquieterwithstrangers,andsoIwasn’tverygoodatmeetingnewpeople.IwasafraidthatIwoulddoorsaysomethingwrong.Soinourschool’sannualgrandplay,Iusuallysatinasecluded(僻靜的)cornertowatchtheperformancealone.Ihopedtositinthebackgroundandwatchtheactorssweatinfrontofallthosepairsofeyes.Onedayinthethirdgrade,myteacherMrs.Sallycalledmeintoherofficeandsaid,“Oh,Mary,youregreatatmemorizingthings,andyouhavesuchasweetpersonality.PerfectforJenny!‘ButIbowedmyheadanddarednotspeak.Theteachersawthisandthensaid,“Ofcourse,plentyofgirlswouldlovetherole,andIcouldfindsomebodyelse.ButIhopeyoucouldtryitforme.IhadyouinmindforJennywhilewritingtheplay!Ifyoureallydon’twantto,Iwon’tforceyou.It’syourchoice.”Mymindwasspinning(快速旋轉(zhuǎn))fasterthanthewindmill(風(fēng)車)ontheschoolplayground.Mrs.Sally,whomIlovedandadmired,wantedmetoplaythisrole.Shebelievedinme.MyeyesmovedacrosstheroomtoaposterIhadnevernoticedbefore.Itshowedashootingstarandread,“Ifyoureachforthestars,youmightatleastgrabapieceofthemoon.”IlookedintoMrs.Sally’sshiningblueeyesandsaid,“Okay,I’lltry.”IrealizeditwastimetothrowoffmyshymaskandshowtheworldwhoIreallywas.Inthefollowingfivemonths,theteachertaughtmehowtoset,putonmakeup,memorizelines,createcostumesandsoon.Gradually,Imastered(掌握)mylinesandsongs.注意：1、續(xù)寫詞數(shù)應(yīng)為150左右；2、請按如下格式作答。Thebigdaycameatlast.____________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________Atthattime,Mrs.Sallycamebackstageforherfinalcheck-upandnoticedmynervousness._______________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________5．閱讀下面材料，根據(jù)其內(nèi)容和所給段落開頭語續(xù)寫兩段，使之構(gòu)成一篇完整的短文。MaryLeeseemedtohaveeverything.Shewasverybeautifulwithawonderfulfigureandanattractiveface.Shewasveryrich.Herclotheswerebetterthananyoneelse’sandshehadmoreofthem.Herbookswerealwaysnewandexpensiveaswereherpens,schoolbagsandbicycle.Shewasveryclevertooandwithoutappearingtodoverymuchwork.Shewasalwaysthefirstinalltheexaminationsandalwaysansweredallthequestions,whiletherestoftheclasswerestillthinking.Withallthis,orreallybecauseofallthis,noonelikedMaryLee.Shewastoogood,toocleverandshewasalsoveryproud.Noonewasquitegoodenoughtotalktoherortobeseenwithherortobeherfriend.Andso,withallherproudwaysandrichesandbrains,shewaslonelybutshedidnotcarebecauseshewasalwaysthebestineverything.Shewaslikeaprincessintheclass.Shealwaysthoughtthattheotherstudentskepttheirdistancefromherbecauseshewastooexcellent.“Lionsandtigersarealwayslonely,andonlytheweakgettogether,”shetoldherself.Astheendoftermdrewnear,thepupilsincludingMaryLeebegantothinkaboutthemostimportantprizeofall.Thiswastheprize,offeredbytheprincipal,forthebestessaytobewrittenononeoftwosubjects:HappinessandFriendship.Alltheteachersandpupilspaidcloseattentiontotheprize,foritwasreallyagreathonor.“Ineedn’tworryaboutthat,”thoughtMaryLee,astheothersbegantoreadandtothinkabouttheessay.“Ishalleasilywin.Afterall,mycompositionsarealwaysbetterthantheotherstudents’.”注意：1.續(xù)寫詞數(shù)應(yīng)為150左右;2.請按如下格式在答題卡的相應(yīng)位置作答?！癙ridegoesbeforeafall,”theysayanditcertainlydidinthecaseofpoorMaryLee.________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________MaryLeesuddenlyrealizedthathowsillyshehadbeen.________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________參考答案1．【參考范文】

Thetwins,noweight,continuetoamazeme.They’recreatingacoloring-bookversionofTheMagicalEnvelope.They’resettingupaFacebookpagetosharewhatthey’redoingandgetothersinvolved.TheyplantoopenDelilahandNathenial’sMagicalCatCaféinthefuture.Theyremindmewecanalwaysthinkbiggeranddomore.Anythingispossibleifyoubelieve.Iwasproudofmykids—fortheirbigdreamsandbighearts.MykidsunderstandmoreaboutthehardshipIendured.Theyaredeterminedtohelpmorepeopleoutoftrouble.Notlongago,Iwaswatchingthemmakesandwichesforpeopleindesperateneed,andforpeoplewhowerewillingtostandinwhateverlinetheycouldtogetfood.AllIcouldthinkofwasthatIwasoneofthosepeople.Icouldnotholdmytears.“Areyouokay,Mom?”Delilahasked.Iblinkedbacktears.“Yes.”Isaid.“Myheartisfull.”Fulloffaith,hopeandbigdreams.【寫作解析】本文以人物為線索展開，講述了作者的雙胞胎孩子告訴作者自己想寫一本書，作者同意了，孩子們說想寫關(guān)于傳播善意的書，作者幫雙胞胎寫下故事，孩子們甚至還畫了一些場景，作者覺得孩子們之所以知道要善待他人是因為作者告訴了孩子們自己以前的生活是什么樣的，作者回憶了以前的生活以及對雙胞胎的教誨，這本書出版后，孩子們決定把它捐給社區(qū)的幼兒園。1.段落續(xù)寫：①由第一段首句內(nèi)容“這對雙胞胎現(xiàn)在8歲了，他們繼續(xù)給我?guī)眢@喜?！笨芍?，第一段可描寫孩子們所做的讓作者驚喜的一些事情。②由第二段首句內(nèi)容“我的孩子們更理解我所經(jīng)歷的苦難?！笨芍?，第二段可描寫孩子們幫助他人及作者的感悟。2.續(xù)寫線索：孩子們創(chuàng)作彩色畫冊——孩子們建立Facebook頁面——作者感到驕傲——孩子們幫助有困難的人——作者的感悟3.詞匯激活行為類①建立：setup/buildup②幫助：help/assist③哭：cannotholdone’stears/can’thelpcrying情緒類①驕傲：beproudof/takepridein②下定決心：bedeterminedtodo/taketheresolutiontodo【典型句式】[高分句型1]They’resettingupaFacebookpagetosharewhatthey’redoingandgetothersinvolved.(由what引導(dǎo)的賓語從句)[高分句型2]Notlongago,Iwaswatchingthemmakesandwichesforpeopleindesperateneed,andforpeoplewhowerewillingtostandinwhateverlinetheycouldtogetfood.(由關(guān)系代詞who引導(dǎo)限制性定語從句)2．【參考范文】Paragraph1“Butyouwillbeabeautifulnarrator,”shesaid,encouragingandcomfortingmeasusual.“Youjusthaven’tbeenreadyforthestageperformance.”Seeingthesadnessonmyfacesoftenalittle,sheadded,“Whynottakethenarrator’spartasanopportunitytobefamiliarwiththestage?”Herencouragementcalmedmedowngradually,andIbegantoacceptthenarrator’spartwasofvitalsignificance.Soonitwasthebigday.AtfirstIwasstillnervous,butthenIfoundadandelioninmypocket.Iknewmymompassedtheflowertome,hopingitwouldbemyluckycharm.Paragraph2Aftertheplay,Itookhometheflower.Momcarefullygazedatthedandelion,gentlypresseditintothedictionaryandgrinnedhappilyatme.“Wewereperhapstheonlypeoplewhowouldpresssuchasorry-lookingweed.”Thoughdecadeshavepassed,Ioftenrecallourwalkintheyard.HersmileandherwordsofwisdomhavestayedwithmeandshapedmeintowhoIamnow!AndthisisperhapsthebestgiftthatI’veeverreceivedinmylife.【寫作解析】本文以人物為線索展開，講述了作者小時候參加學(xué)校的戲劇表演，因嚴(yán)重怯場不得不放棄主演的角色，換作幕后的旁白；母親看到了作者的失落，于是用院子里蒲公英和薔薇都很美麗這個道理來開導(dǎo)作者。1.段落續(xù)寫：①由第一段首句內(nèi)容“‘但你會是一個美麗的敘述者，’她說，像往常一樣鼓勵和安慰我?！笨芍谝欢慰擅鑼懩赣H成功說服作者接受成為敘述者的過程，讓作者明白小角色也很重要，也可以綻放美麗，且作者演出那天發(fā)現(xiàn)了母親給的蒲公英。②由第二段首句內(nèi)容“表演完，我把花帶回家了。”可知，第二段可描寫作者把蒲公英帶回家及這朵蒲公英對作者產(chǎn)生了什么影響。2.續(xù)寫線索：母親鼓勵和安慰作者——母親說服作者成為敘述者——演出那天作者發(fā)現(xiàn)了蒲公英——作者把蒲公英帶回家——作者和母親關(guān)于蒲公英的對話——蒲公英對作者產(chǎn)生了的影響3.詞匯激活行為類①為……做好準(zhǔn)備：bereadyfor/makepreparationsfor②發(fā)現(xiàn)：find/spot③凝視：gazeat/stareat情緒類①讓某人冷靜下來：calmsb.down/coolsb.down②緊張的：nervous/tense③高興地：happily/withdelight【典型句式】[高分句型1].Iknewmymompassedtheflowertome,hopingitwouldbemyluckycharm.(運用了省略that引導(dǎo)的賓語從句和現(xiàn)在分詞作狀語)[高分句型2].Wewereperhapstheonlypeoplewhowouldpresssuchasorry-lookingweed.(運用了who引導(dǎo)的限制性定語從句)3．【參考范文】WhenIgothome,Irangthedoorbellandcouldn’twaittoshowthemthetree.Mybrotheransweredthedoor,withhisstartledbutcheerfullookaccompaniedbyhisamazed“Wheredidyougetthat?”Wedraggedthetreeinsideandimmediatelystartedtodecorateitwithawildexcitement.Mothercameinsilence.Shetooknopart,butneitherdidshestopus.Seizedbyexultation,Icouldhavestayedupallnightdecoratingit.Butmymotherinsistedthatitwasnearlymidnight,andthatweshouldallgetreadytobed.Wehadnoalternativebuttosaygoodnight.Beforegoingtobed,Islippedtoseemytreeonelasttimebutsawmymotherstandinginfrontofit.Shewasholdingafamiliarbox,withoutnoticingmyappearance.Herhandsseemedtotrembleassheopeneditandtookoutafamiliardoll.“Marie,lookingatthetree”,shesaidalmostinwhisper“Thisdollisasoldasyou.”Then,shegentlyhungtheKewpie-dollonthetree.Atthesightofthis,Ifelttearsstreameddownmycheeks.Irushedtomymotherandhuggedherwithallmystrength,“Mom,youareherejustasPapawas.”【寫作解析】本文以人物為線索展開，講述了在父親去世后，由此日子突然變得非常艱難。作者的爸爸總是把圣誕節(jié)看得很重。每年過圣誕節(jié)的時候都會有圣誕樹的裝飾而且還會在樹上掛娃娃，可是因為爸爸的去世，所有的一切都已然不再。就在這次的圣誕節(jié)夜晚，作者和家人從教堂回來之后，作者借由去鄰居家串門的時候，看到了隔壁商店里一堆廢棄的圣誕樹，作者從中挑選了最好的一棵，然后帶回家進(jìn)行裝扮，所發(fā)生的故事。1.段落續(xù)寫：①由第一段首句內(nèi)容“當(dāng)我回到家，我按響了門鈴，迫不及待地讓他們看看這棵樹?！笨芍?，第一段可描寫家人們對該圣誕樹的不同反應(yīng)。②由第二段首句內(nèi)容“睡覺前，我溜去看了最后一眼我的樹，卻看見媽媽站在樹前?！笨芍?，第二段可描寫，媽媽在圣誕樹上發(fā)現(xiàn)的娃娃，同時表述該娃娃代表的意義。2.續(xù)寫線索：借機(jī)串門——拖回圣誕樹——裝扮圣誕樹——家人的驚喜——媽媽的發(fā)現(xiàn)——娃娃代表的意義3.詞匯激活行為類①.開門：answerthedoor/openthedoor②.注意到：notice/beawareof③.留下：streamdown/falldown情緒類①.狂喜：exultation/greatjoy②.吃驚的：startled/astonished【典型句式】[高分句型1].Seizedbyexultation,Icouldhavestayedupallnightdecoratingit.（過去分詞作狀語）[高分句型2].Butmymotherinsistedthatitwasnearlymidnight,andthatweshouldallgetreadytobed.（由and并列的兩個that引導(dǎo)的賓語從句并列）4.【參考范文】

Thebigdaycameatlast.Ijoggedallthewaytothebackstageoftheschoolhall.Cameraswerelightingupinalldirections.Lookingbackonfivemonthspractise,Iseemedtohaveconfidenceinmyself.Ifoundanewpersoninsideme,amuchmoredaringandoutgoingpersonwhohadbeenhiddenallalong.However,whenIwasabouttogoonstage,myheartwaspoundingsohardthatmythroattightenedandmykneesfeltweak.Atthattime,Mrs.Sallycamebackstageforherfinalcheck-upandnoticedthatmynervousness.“Itdoesn’tmatterhowyoudotonight,”shesaid.“You’vealreadyshownhowwonderfulyouare.”LookingintoMrsSally’sshiningblueeyes,Icalmeddownandthenwalkedontothestagewithhiswarmwordslikearayofsunshine.WhenIfinishedmyperformance,theaudienceburstintoapplause.Thescenemademefeelmyselffloatinginanoceanofhappiness.Iknewthatallthiswasduetotheencouragementfrommyteacher,whohelpedmefindtheconfidencetosucceed.【寫作解析】本文以人物為線索展開，在一年級和二年級的時候，作者非常害羞，所以在學(xué)校一年一度的盛大演出時，作者總是坐在一個僻靜的角落獨自觀看。上三年級的時候，Sally老師認(rèn)為作者很適合演一部劇中的Jenny，便鼓勵作者演這一角色。經(jīng)過五個月的練習(xí)，作者登臺演出前感覺非常緊張，但在Sally老師的鼓勵下作者成功完成了演出。1.段落續(xù)寫：①由第一段首句內(nèi)容“大日子終于來了?！笨芍?，第一段可描寫作者在登臺演出前的緊張情緒和心理活動等。②由第二段首句內(nèi)容“這時，Sally老師來到后臺做最后的檢查，注意到我的緊張。”可知，第二段可描寫Sally老師對作者的鼓勵以及作者在Sally老師的鼓勵下成功完成演出。2.續(xù)寫線索：演出來臨——感到緊張——老師鼓勵——演出成功3.詞匯激活行為類①慢跑：jog/canter/runslow