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(從人物性格的一致性出發(fā)設(shè)計情節(jié))Lead-in
原文:Itleadstohigherbloodpressure.選項:Itleadstohighbloodpressure.原文:Theartificialskincanhelppeoplefeelwarmth.選項:Theartificialskincanhelppeoplefeelwarm.Similarinshapebutnotinspirit.Thecharacters(角色)shouldbeconsistentincharacter(性格).plot=characters+eventsWhatwilltheysay,feelordo?charactereventsplotTomwasverybraveandclever.Hislittlebrotherfellintoariver.Theheadmasterwasverykind.Alittleboyhadallhishaircutbecauseofcancerandwaslaughedatbyothers.Tomwasveryanxiousbuthestillcomfortedhisbrotherandmanagedtosavehim.Theheadmasterhadallhishaircutandeducatedthestudents.Howtounderstandthecharacterofthecharacters?Exploringcase
OneweekendinJuly,
Jane
andherhusband,
Tom,haddriventhreehourstocampovernightbya
lake
intheforest.Unfortunately,onthewayanunpleasantsubjectcameupandtheystartedtoquarrel.Bythetimetheyreachedthelake,JanewassoangrythatshesaidtoTom,“I’mgoingtofindabetterspotforustocamp”and
walked
away. Withnopathtofollow,Janejustwalkedonforquitealongtime.Aftershehad
climbed
toahighplace,sheturnedaround,hopingtoseethelake.Tohersurprise,shesawnothingbutforestand,farbeyond,a
snowcappedmountaintop.Shesuddenlyrealizedthatshewaslost.“Tom!”shecried.“Help!”Noreply.IfonlyshehadnotlefthermobilephoneinthatbagwithTom.Janekeptmoving,butthefarthershewalked,themoreconfusedshebecame.Asnightwasbeginningtofall,Janewassotiredthatshehadtostopforthenight.Lyingawakeinthedark,JanewantedverymuchtobewithTomandherfamily.Shewantedtoholdhimandtellhimhowmuchshelovedhim.Janeroseatthebreakofday,hungryandthirsty.Shecouldhearwatertrickling(滴落)somewhere
atadistance.Quickly,shefollowedthesoundtoa
stream.
Tohergreatjoy,shealsosawsomeberrybushes.Shedrankandateafewberries.Neverinherlifehadshetastedanythingbetter.Feelingstrongernow,Janebegantowalkalongthestreamandhopeitwouldleadhertothelake.Asshepickedherwaycarefullyalongthestream,Janehearda
helicopter.Isthatforme?Unfortunately,thetreesmadeitimpossibleforpeopletoseeherfromabove.Afewminuteslater,anotherhelicopterflewoverhead.Janetookoffher
yellowblouse,thinkingthatsheshouldgotoanopenareaandflagthemiftheycamebackagain.AstorywhenwherewhowhathowReadingforWritingJaneherhusband,Tomwhen&wherewhat(events)howtorespondBythetimetheyreachedthelakeAftershehadclimbedtoahighplaceAsnightwasbeginningtofallAtthebreakofdayAsshepickedherway…Afewminuteslater(Para6)Para1:Butnomore…anditwasdark.Para2:ItwasdaybreakwhenJanewokeup.Ontheway?quarreledwalkedawaygotlostlogicalplot1三處銜接處的情節(jié)設(shè)計做得合理。Para.1Butnomorehelicopterscameanditwasgettingdarkagain.
2情感的細節(jié)設(shè)計有進步,把上節(jié)課學(xué)的(表達緊張、悲傷的句子)運用上了。Jane’sfeelings
Para.2ItwasdaybreakwhenJanewokeup.Janefellasleep.illogicalplotPara1Janeonlystayedstillandwaitedforhelp.Anotherhelicopterarrivedandsavedher.Para2AfterJanewokeup,shewaslyinginhospital.TherescueteamsentJaneback.WhatdidJanesay,feelordo?“Tom!”shecried,“Help!”Noreply.IfonlyshehadnotlefthermobilephoneinthatbagwithTom.Lyingawakeinthedark,JanewantedverymuchtobewithTomandherfamily.Shewantedtoholdhimandtellhimhowmuchshelovedhim.Feelingstrongernow,Janebegantowalkalongthestreamanhopeitwouldleadhertothelake.Janetookoffheryellowblouse,thinkingthatsheshouldgotoanopenareaandflagthemiftheycamebackagain.Whataboutthecharacter
ofJaneandherhusband,Tom?JaneandTomlovedeachother.Janewascalmandwouldn’tgiveupeasily.Janewasquick-mindedandtriedtomakeherselfnoticedbythehelicopter.Howwouldtheyrespondnext?Para1Butnomorehelicopterscameanditwasgettingdarkagain.
Para2ItwasdaybreakwhenJanewokeup.Janefeltdisappointedandregretful.Butshewouldtrytofindanopenarea.Janefeltexcitedtofindahelicopter.Shewavedherblouseandgetrescued.Shereunitedwithherhusband,whorushedoutofthehelicopter.Appreciating葉雨琦的作文Consolidationcase
ItwasabeautifulSundayinearlyDecemberTen-year-oldRileyChristensenandhermotherLynn,werehuddledinfrontofthefamilycomputer,checkingoutmodelsandpricesofbikes."Let'spickoneoutforDad'sbirthday."Mothersuggestedtoherdaughter.Rileynoddedhappily.ShecouldevenimaginehowexcitedDadwouldbewhenreceivingsuchabigsurprise,andmaybetheywouldrideintheparktogether.RileywaslookingthroughthehomepageoftheBikeRack,ashopintheirtownofSt.Charles,Ilinois,whenavideolinkforProjectMobilitycaughttheireye.Outofcuriosity,sheclickedonit.TheshortvideotoldhowHalHoneyman,aBikeRackCo-owner,hadcreatedanorganizationtoprovidespeciallyengineeredbicyclestopeoplewithdisabilities.Itshowedthehappyfacesofthosewhowerenowridingthem-accidentvictims,injuredsoldiers,andchildrenwithdisabilities,includingHalsson,whohadbeenbornwithcerebralpalsy.Therewassilenceformoments.Suddenly,therecameRiley'sdeterminedvoice."Mom,I'mgoingtobuysuchabikeforoneofthosekids."Abitsurprised,MotherpulledRileyintoherarms,andkissedherontheforehead."Sweetheart,itmaybeabigchallengeforus!"Mothersaid."Butforakidwhocan'twalk,suchabikewouldbeamarvelousChristmaspresent!"Rileysmiled.Twodayslater,Rileyranintothekitchenjustlikeagustofwind,andcheerfullyshowedhermotheralettershehadwrittenaskingfordonations.“Ithinkit'samazingthattherearesuchspecialbikesforkidswhocan'twalk,"thelettersaid,“IsawontheNethowhappyaboywaswhenhegotone...I'mwritingtoaskforyourhelp."Motherwasdeeplytouchedbyherdaughter'seffort,butdoubtsquicklyoccurred.Thecostofjustoneofthosespecialbikescouldbeashighas$4,000.WhatdidRileyandhermothersay,feelordo?Suddenly,therecameRiley’sdeterminedvoice,”Mom,I’mgoingtobuysuchbikeforoneofthosekids.”Abitsurprised,MotherpulledRileyintoherarms,andkissedherontheforhead,“Sweetheart,itmaybeabigchallengeforus!”Mothersaid,”Butforakidwhocan’twalk,suchabikewouldbeamarvelousChristmaspresent!”Twodayslater,Rileyranintokitchenjustlikeagustofwind,andcheerfullyshowedhermotheralettershehadwrittenaskingfordonations.Whataboutthecharacter
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