讀后續(xù)寫語篇練習(xí)(等貨車一起助人為樂)2024屆高三英語寫作專項(xiàng)

高考英語讀后續(xù)寫語篇練習(xí)1——等貨車一起助人為樂題目分析讀后續(xù)寫題目再現(xiàn)范文呈現(xiàn)努力方向2Part1題目呈現(xiàn)3續(xù)寫原文Tome,whatThanksgivingreallymeansisgivinggoodthanks,noteatingturkey.BythetimeIwas18IhadcreatedmyThanksgivingritual(慣例).Iwouldgooutshoppingandbuyenoughfoodforoneortwofamilies.ThenIwoulddresslikeadeliveryboy,gotothepoorestneighborhoodandjustknockonadoor,andwouldalwaysincludeanotesaying“AllthatIaskinreturnisthatyoutakegoodenoughcareofyourselfsothatsomedayyoucandothesamethingforsomeoneelse.”IhavereceivedmorefromthisannualritualthanIhavefromanyamountofmoneyI’veeverearned,especiallyonesuchexperienceinNewYorkCity.SeveralyearsagoIwasinNewYorkCitywithmynewlymarriedwifeduringThanksgiving.Shewassadbecausewewerenotwithourfamily.NormallyshewouldbehomedecoratingthehouseforChristmas,butwewerestuckhereinahotelroom.Isaid,“Honey,look,whydon’twedecoratesomelivestodayinsteadofsometrees?”WhenItoldherwhatIalwaysdoonThanksgiving,shegotexcited.Isaid,“Let’sgosomeplacewherewecanreallyappreciatewhoweare,whatweareabletodoandwhatwecanreallygive.Let’sgotothepoorneighborhoodHarlemandfeedsomepeoplethereinneed.We’llgobuyenoughfoodforsixorsevenfamiliesfor30days.We’vegotenough.Let’sgodoit!”4續(xù)寫原文Westartedbygettingavan(貨車),butthereseemednovansinallofNewYorkCity.Therent-a-carplaceswerealloutofvans.Mywifewasdisappointed,andIsaid,“Look,thebottomlineisthatifwewantsomething,wecanmakeithappen!Allwehavetodoistakeaction.ThereareplentyofvanshereinNewYorkCity.Lookdownatthestreet.Doyouseeallthosevans?Let’sgogetone!”Mywifeagreedandwetookaction.5續(xù)寫段首語Paragraph1:Wetriedstoppingvansastheyweredrivingdownthestreet.Paragraph2:Eventuallyavandroveupandthedriversaidyes.6續(xù)寫原文分析感恩節(jié)到了,我繼續(xù)和往年一樣,這一天會(huì)開車送禮物如食物給窮人。但是有一年,我和妻子呆在紐約的旅館里,不能回家團(tuán)圓,我告訴妻子我的往年的做法,妻子非常開心。但我們需要貨車（van）才能購物。于是我們準(zhǔn)備在街頭上攔一輛車,妻子同意了。7續(xù)寫思路分析第一段：1.（寫司機(jī)的反應(yīng)）然而，司機(jī)們要么對我們瘋狂揮舞的手視而不見，要么從我們身邊飛馳而過，將我們的希望淹沒在震耳欲聾的引擎轟鳴聲中。然而，他們來了，鋸子，他們加速了，只留下灰燼和泥土在空中跳舞。2.（我和妻子的情緒）手指被寒風(fēng)麻木，喉嚨被塵土飛揚(yáng)的空氣窒息，我們在紐約擁擠的街道上感到如此孤獨(dú)——“我們能求助于誰？”我的妻子皺著眉頭喃喃自語。3.（突然有了想法）凝視著妻子紅框的眼睛，我們發(fā)現(xiàn)自己瀕臨放棄，直到我突然恍然大悟——希望總是在最后一刻落下，耐心是試金石。4.（開始做）幾乎熄滅的希望火花立即重新點(diǎn)燃，鼓勵(lì)我們繼續(xù)尋找一輛可以傳遞我們內(nèi)心美好意愿的面包車。8續(xù)寫思路分析第2段：1.（我們的心情）聽到簡單的是，我們都高興地跳了起來。2.（更加意外的是）令我們大吃一驚的是，司機(jī)甚至主動(dòng)提出加入我們。3.（開始做）給他一連串的感謝，我們立即出發(fā)購買，然后前往哈萊姆。4.（具象還是抽象寫故事過程？答曰：都可以，根據(jù)你的寫作水平來定，穩(wěn)妥些抽象）原文用抽象：我們一起把它們打包好，抬上面包車，去了甚至有人沒有電的建筑物。我們用具象：那天晚上，我們目睹了這座看似迷人的城市的另一面——家庭在貧困的邊緣拼命掙扎，孤兒頭上沒有屋頂，父母在他們身邊......然而，當(dāng)我們把食物交給我們時(shí)，在那些蒼白和飽經(jīng)風(fēng)霜的臉上可以看到發(fā)自內(nèi)心的感激之情，散發(fā)出足夠的溫暖來融化最寒冷的冬天。5.(我們的心情)眼淚變成了冰霜，覆蓋了我們的臉，但我們感到內(nèi)心世界在燃燒。6.照應(yīng)主旨（尤其是標(biāo)題）9Part2題目分析10點(diǎn)1：位于續(xù)寫第一段段首，流暢銜接前面的記敘文和第一段段首語；點(diǎn)2：位于續(xù)寫第一段段尾，流暢銜接第二段段首句；點(diǎn)3：位于續(xù)寫第二段段首，續(xù)寫銜接第二段段首語；點(diǎn)4：文章結(jié)尾升華，給予讀者正能量，揭示和強(qiáng)調(diào)主題。情節(jié)構(gòu)建的重點(diǎn)11Part3范文呈現(xiàn)12范文呈現(xiàn)Paragraph1:Wetriedstoppingvansastheyweredrivingdownthestreet.

1.（寫drivers的反應(yīng)）Yetthedriverseitherturnedablindeyetoourfranticly-wavinghand,orspedpastus,drowningourhopeinthedeafeningroarofengines.其它寫法：However,theycame,thesawandtheyspedup,onlytoleaveashanddirtdancingintheair.2.(我和妻子的情緒)Fingersnumbedbythechillywind,throatchokedbydustyair,wefelteversoaloneonthecrowdedstreetsofNewYork–“Whocanweturnto?”mywifemurmuredwithafiercefrown.3.(突然有了想法)Staringintomywife’sred-rimmedeyes,wefoundourselvesonthevergeofgivingup,untilitsuddenlydawnedonme–Hopealwaysfellatthelastminuteandpatiencewasthetouchstone.4.（開始做）Thenearly-extinguishedsparksofhopeinstantlyrekindled,encouragingustogoonwiththesearchforavanthatcoulddeliverthegoodwillbrimminginus.13范文呈現(xiàn)Paragraph2:Eventuallyavandroveupandthedriversaidyes.1.（我們的心情）Hearingthesimpleyes,wealljumpedwithjoy.2.（更加意外的是）Toourbigsurprise,thedriverevenofferedtojoinus.3.（開始做）Showeringhiminastringofthanks,weimmediatelysetouttopurchase,andthenheadedforHarlem.4.（具象還是抽象寫故事過程？答曰：都可以，根據(jù)你的寫作水平來定，穩(wěn)妥些抽象）原文用抽象：Togetherwepackedthemup,carriedthemontothevanandwenttobuildingswheretherewereevenpeoplelivingwithoutelectricity.我們用具象：Thatnight,wewitnessedtheothersideoftheseeminglyglamorouscity–familiesstrugglingdesperatelyontheedgeofpoverty,orphanswithneitheraroofovertheirheads,norparentsbytheirside…Yetwhenwegaveourthefood,heart-feltappreciationcouldbeseenonallthosepaleandweather-beatenfaces,radiatingenoughwarmthtomeltthecoldestwinter.