高二下學(xué)期期中讀后續(xù)寫解讀與示范講義

高二下期中讀后續(xù)寫解讀與示范第二節(jié)(滿分15分)閱讀下面材料，根據(jù)其內(nèi)容和所給段落開頭語續(xù)寫兩段，使之構(gòu)成一篇完整的短文。人與自我——家庭親情——對(duì)接B1U3MayaandherolderbrotherMarcuslivedwiththeirgrandma.Theirparents,busywithworkinanothercity,couldonlyreturnhomeduringthewinterholiday.Grandmawasgoodatpaper-cutting,andshedecoratedthewholeroomwithprettyshapesofanimalsandflowers,devotingherselftokeepingMayaandMarcushappy.However,despitehergrandmother'slove,Mayaoftenfeltdeepfrustration,complainingwhyshecouldn'tstaywithherparents.Asthedaysgrewshorterandcolder,Maya'sexcitementcameback.Sheknewthatwiththearrivalofsnow,thewinterholidaywouldcome,aswellasthereturnofherparents.Oneday,theweatherforecastpredictedsnowduringdaytime,soMayaeagerlyrosefrombed,pressinghernoseagainstthewindow,andwaitingforthefirstprettysnowflaketodropfromthesky.However,asitwasgettinglate,Maya'sexcitementturnedintodisappointment.Sensinghersadness,grandmacomfortedher,“Bepatient,dear.Thesnowwillcomesoon.”Marcus,too,triedtobeanolderbrother,remindingMayathatthesnowcouldfallatnight.Yet,despitetheirefforts,Mayaremainedupset.Nightfellandnotasinglesnowflakewasinsight.Sadly,Mayawenttobedwithouteatinganything,goingtoherdreamswithtearsinhereyes.注意：1.詞數(shù)應(yīng)為120個(gè)左右；2.請(qǐng)按如下格式在答題卡的相應(yīng)位置作答。Paragraph1TocheerMayaup,grandmaandMarcusdecidedtomakesnowflakesthemselves.________________________第一段續(xù)寫：為了讓Maya開心，祖母和Marcus決定自己制作雪花?！径卫m(xù)寫的關(guān)鍵在于祖母與Marcus通過彼此的愛為Maya制作手工雪花，同時(shí)考慮語篇材料的結(jié)尾和二段提示句的內(nèi)容得知，本段的結(jié)尾要有時(shí)間的變化——即“出現(xiàn)第二天清晨”——參考詞匯有：Marcus；grandma；snowflakes；Maya；window；glass；devoteoneselftopaper-cutting分析與示范：Paragraph1TocheerMayaup,grandmaandMarcusdecidedtomakesnowflakesthemselves.Grandmaimmediatelydevotedherselftopaper-cutting,makingeachpaperinherhandsthenbecomeelegantanddelicatesnowflakes.Atthesametime,Marcuswenttogreatlengthtolearnhowtomakesnowflakebyfollowinggrandma’stechnique.Onehourlater,allkindsofsnowflakespileduplikeahillonthetable.ThenMarcusstuckthemonthewindowsandpicturedhowexcitedMayawouldbeatthesightofthem.Thenextday,Mayawokeupalone,spottingsomethingunusualontheglass.（5句）Paragraph2Mayarushedtothewindows,andfoundsnowflakesofallshapesandsizesontheglass.___________________第二段續(xù)寫：Maya沖向窗戶，發(fā)現(xiàn)玻璃上各種形狀和尺寸的雪花?！径卫m(xù)寫的核心在于，Maya被祖母和Marcus前夜的行為所感動(dòng)，同時(shí)受到心靈的感動(dòng)——明白了家庭親情的價(jià)值（注：最巧妙地方式莫過于無聲勝有聲——最好讓祖母和Marcus繼續(xù)處于睡覺中，讓Maya實(shí)現(xiàn)心理的升華，是不是比三人直接交集更震撼呢？）——參考詞匯：Maya；winter；snow；Marcus；grandma；parents；droppedfromthesky分析與示范：Paragraph2Mayarushedtothewindows,andfoundsnowflakesofallshapesandsizesontheglass.Atthatmoment,Mayaunderstoodwhathadhappenedlastnight.Despitethefactthatoutsidefellnosnowstill,theseartificialsnowflakesprovedtobethebestsnowinthewinter.Inthedaylight,theyseemedasiftheyhadtrulydroppedfromthesky,whichmadeMayareconsiderhernegativeemotionsshehadexpressed.Turningback,sherestedhereyesonMarcusandgrandmawhowerestillasleep.Atoncesheacknowledgedthatitwasthemwhoalwaysaccompaniedherduringherparents’absence.（5句）點(diǎn)評(píng)：本次高二英語下期中讀后續(xù)寫是一篇典型的人與自我（家庭親情方向的命題），主題及形式和新課標(biāo)命題緊密結(jié)合。但是作為一篇同步命題，由于本學(xué)期考試范圍的調(diào)整，感覺選材有些偏失（下雪的內(nèi)容與X3U6更為貼切），因?yàn)楸敬纹谥蟹秶鸀椋╔2U6-X3U4），所以主題細(xì)節(jié)更像是過去兩年命題的預(yù)備版。如果今年期中能嚴(yán)格按照同步課本的范圍與主題命題，我個(gè)人感覺效果會(huì)更好。續(xù)寫作文：Paragraph1TocheerMayaup,grandmaandMarcusdecidedtomakesnowflakesthemselves.Grandmaimmediatelydevotedherselftopaper-cutting,makingeachpaperinherhandsthenbecomeelegantanddelicatesnowflakes.Atthesametime,Marcuswenttogreatlengthtolearnhowtomakesnowflakebyfollowinggrandma’stechnique.Onehourlater,allkindsofsnowflakespileduplikeahillonthetable.ThenMarcusstuckthemonthewindowsandpicturedhowexcitedMayawouldbeatthesightofthem.Thenextday,Mayawokeupalone,spottingsomethingunusualontheglass.（5句）Paragraph2Mayarushedtothewindows,andfoundsnowflakesofallshapesandsizesontheglass.Atthatmoment,Mayaunderstoodwhathadhappenedlastnight.Despitethefactthatoutsidefellnosnowstill,theseartificialsnowflakesprovedtobethebestsnowinthewinter.Inthedaylight,theyseemedasiftheyhadtrulydroppedfromthesky,whichmadeMayareconsiderhernegativeemotionsshehadexpressed.Turningback,sherestedhereyesonMarcusandgrandmawhowerestillasleep.Atoncesheacknowledgedthatitwasthemwhoalwaysaccompaniedherduringherparents’absence.（5句）續(xù)寫亮點(diǎn)：Grandmaimmediatelydevotedherselftopaper-cutting,makingeachpaperinherhandsthenbecomeelegantanddelicatesnowflakes.運(yùn)用了分詞短語作狀語。Atthesametime,Marcuswenttogreatlengthtolearnhowtomakesnowflakebyfollowinggrandma’stechnique.運(yùn)用了復(fù)合結(jié)構(gòu)作賓語。ThenMarcusstuckthemonthewindowsandpicturedhowexcitedMayawouldbeatthesightofthem.運(yùn)用了賓語從句。Thenextday,Mayawokeupalone,spottingsomethingunusualontheglass.運(yùn)用了分詞短語作狀語。Atthatmoment,Mayaunderstoodwhathadhappenedlastnight.運(yùn)用了賓語從句。Despitethefactthatoutsidefellnosnowstill,theseartificialsnowflakesprovedtobethebestsnowinthewinter.運(yùn)用了同位語從句。Inthedaylight,theyseemedasiftheyhadtrulydroppedfromthesky