2024屆高考專題復(fù)習(xí)2023年高考二卷讀后續(xù)寫writing contes課件

評(píng)分標(biāo)準(zhǔn)壹真題分析貳參考范文叁目錄書面表達(dá)：續(xù)寫2023新高考真題續(xù)寫評(píng)分參考【評(píng)分原則】1.本題總分為25分，按5個(gè)檔次給分。2.評(píng)分時(shí)，先根據(jù)所續(xù)寫短文的內(nèi)容和語言初步確定其所屬檔次，然后以該檔次的要求來衡量、確定或調(diào)整檔次，最后給分。3.詞數(shù)少于130的，從總分中減去2分。4.評(píng)分時(shí)，應(yīng)主要從以下四個(gè)方面進(jìn)行考慮：①與所給短文及段落開頭語的銜接程度；②內(nèi)容的豐富性；③應(yīng)用語法結(jié)構(gòu)和詞匯的豐富性和準(zhǔn)確性；④上下文的連貫性。5.

拼寫與標(biāo)點(diǎn)符號(hào)是語言準(zhǔn)確性的一個(gè)重要方面，評(píng)分時(shí)，應(yīng)視其對(duì)交際的影響程度予以考慮。6.如書寫較差以致影響交際，可將分?jǐn)?shù)降低一個(gè)檔次。續(xù)寫評(píng)分參考【各檔次的給分范圍和要求】第五檔：（21—25分）1.與所給短文融洽度高，與所提供各段落開頭語銜接合理。2.所使用語法結(jié)構(gòu)和詞匯豐富、準(zhǔn)確，可能有些許錯(cuò)誤，但完全不影響意義表達(dá)。3.有效地使用了語句間的連接成分，使所續(xù)寫短文結(jié)構(gòu)緊湊。第四檔：（16—20分）1.與所給短文融洽度較高，與所提供各段落開頭語銜接較為合理。2.所使用語法結(jié)構(gòu)和詞匯較為豐富、準(zhǔn)確，可能有些許錯(cuò)誤，但不影響意義表達(dá)。3.比較有效地使用了語句間的連接成分，使所續(xù)寫短文結(jié)構(gòu)緊湊。續(xù)寫評(píng)分參考【各檔次的給分范圍和要求】第三檔：（11—15分）1.與所給短文關(guān)系較為密切，與所提供各段落開頭語有一定程度的銜接。2.應(yīng)用的語法結(jié)構(gòu)和詞匯能滿足任務(wù)的要求，雖有一些錯(cuò)誤，但不影響意義表達(dá)。3.應(yīng)用簡(jiǎn)單的語句間連接成分，使全文內(nèi)容連貫。第二檔：（6—10分）1.與所給短文有一定的關(guān)系，與所提供各段落開頭語有一定程度的銜接。2.語法結(jié)構(gòu)單調(diào)，詞匯項(xiàng)目有限，有些語法結(jié)構(gòu)和詞匯方面的錯(cuò)誤，影響了意義的表達(dá)。3.較少使用語句間的連接成分，全文內(nèi)容缺少連貫性。續(xù)寫評(píng)分參考【各檔次的給分范圍和要求】第一檔：（1—5分）1.與所提供短文和開頭語的銜接較差。2.語法結(jié)構(gòu)單調(diào)，詞匯項(xiàng)目很有限，有較多語法結(jié)構(gòu)和詞匯方面的錯(cuò)誤，嚴(yán)重影響了意義的表達(dá)。3.缺乏語句間的連接成分，全文內(nèi)容不連貫。不得分：（0分）白卷、內(nèi)容太少無法評(píng)判或所寫內(nèi)容與所提供內(nèi)容無關(guān)。寫作第二節(jié)（滿分25分）

WhenIwasinmiddleschool,mysocialstudiesteacheraskedmetoenterawritingcontest.Isaidnowithoutthinking.Ididnotlovewriting.MyfamilycamefromBrazil,soEnglishwasonlymysecondlanguage.WritingwassodifficultandpainfulformethatmyteacherhadallowedmetopresentmypaperonthesinkingoftheTitanicbyactingoutaplay,whereIplayedalltheparts.Noonelaughedharderthanhedid.

So,whydidhesuddenlyforcemetodosomethingatwhichIwassuretofail?Hisreply:“BecauseIloveyourstories.Ifyou’rewillingtoapplyyourself,Ithinkyouhaveagoodshotatthis.”Encouragedbyhiswords,Iagreedtogiveitatry.

IchosePaulRevere’shorseasmysubject.PaulReverewasasilversmith（銀匠）inBostonwhorodeahorseatnightonApril18,1775toLexingtontowarnpeoplethatBritishsoldierswerecoming.Mystorywouldcomestraightfromthehorse’smouth.Notabrilliantidea,butfunny;andunlikelytobeanyoneelse’schoice.

Whatdidthehorsethink,ashespedthroughthenight?Didhegettired?Havedoubts?Didhewanttoquit?Isympathizedimmediately.Igottired.Ihaddoubts.Iwantedtoquit.But,likeRevere’shorse,Ikeptgoing.Iworkedhard.Icheckedmyspelling.Iaskedmyoldersistertocorrectmygrammar.IcheckedoutahalfdozenbooksonPaulReverefromthelibrary.Ievenreadafewofthem.

WhenIhandedintheessaytomyteacher,hereadit,laughedoutloud,andsaid,“Great.Now,writeitagain.”Iwroteitagain,andagainandagain.WhenIfinallyfinishedit,thethoughtofwinninghadgivenwaytotheenjoymentofwriting.IfIdidn’twin,Iwouldn’tcare.注意:1.續(xù)寫詞數(shù)應(yīng)為150個(gè)左右;

2.請(qǐng)按如下格式在答題卡的相應(yīng)位置作答。

Afewweekslater,whenIalmostforgotthecontest,therecamethenews.

Iwenttomyteacher’sofficeaftertheawardpresentation.故事概要:一名以英語作為第二語言的古巴移民的孩子，在老師的鼓勵(lì)下參加作文競(jìng)賽，寫作過程中他不斷克服困難，最終享受到寫作的快樂并獲獎(jiǎng)。

在老師的幫助下克服困難，實(shí)現(xiàn)個(gè)人成長。

故事的主題:

Afewweekslater,whenIalmostforgotthecontest,therecamethenews.

Iwenttomyteacher’soffice

after

theawardpresentation.消息的內(nèi)容“我”收到消息后的反應(yīng)、情緒等參加頒獎(jiǎng)典禮“我”跟老師的互動(dòng)總結(jié)這次比賽對(duì)“我”的影響升華主題語料積累：1.表達(dá)“吃驚”：

besurprised\amazed\astonished\shockedby對(duì)…感到吃驚

toone’ssurprise\amazement\astonishment\shock令某人吃驚的是

in\withsurprise\amazement\astonishment\shock吃驚地

beyondone’sexpectations\imagination出乎…的意料得知了比賽的結(jié)果:The

moment

I

saw

my

name

in

the

winner’s

list,

my

heart

leaped

with

joy.

當(dāng)我看到自己的名字在獲獎(jiǎng)名單上時(shí)，我的心跳躍起。

A

wave

of

disbelief

washed

over

me,

followed

by

an

overwhelming

sense

of

accomplishment.

我首先感到難以置信，隨后是一種壓倒一切的成就感。

My

eyes

widened

in

surprise,

I

could

hardly

believe

the

words

printed

in

front

of

me.

我的眼睛驚訝地睜大，我?guī)缀醪桓蚁嘈叛矍坝∷⒌淖衷~。獲獎(jiǎng)時(shí)的場(chǎng)景:

As

I

stepped

onto

the

stage,

the

applause

from

the

audience

filled

my

ears.

當(dāng)我走上舞臺(tái)，觀眾的掌聲充滿了我的耳朵。

Holding

the

award,

I

felt

a

rush

of

pride

and

gratitude.

握著獎(jiǎng)杯，我感到一陣驕傲和感激。

The

bright

lights

shone

on

me,

the

cheering

crowd

below

was

a

blur,

but

the

joy

I

felt

was

crystal

clear.

亮光照耀在我身上，下面的歡呼人群模糊不清，但我感到的快樂卻清晰明了。來到老師辦公室時(shí)的場(chǎng)景

I

walked

into

my

teacher’s

office,

the

sense

of

victory

still

lingering

in

my

heart.

我走進(jìn)老師的辦公室，勝利的感覺仍然縈繞在我的心中。

The

look

of

pride

on

my

teacher’s

face

was

the

best

reward.

老師臉上的驕傲表情是最好的獎(jiǎng)賞。

Sharing

this

moment

of

success

with

my

teacher,

I

felt

a

deep

sense

of

gratitude

for

her

unwavering

support.

與老師分享這個(gè)成功的時(shí)刻，我對(duì)她堅(jiān)定不移的支持感到深深的感激。

Afewweekslater,whenIalmostforgotthecontest,therecamethenews.

Incredibly,Iwonthefirstprize.Themanonthephonetoldmetoattendtheawardpresentationthenextday.However,Iwastooastonishedtoutteraword.Atnight,Ikepttossingandturninginbed,allmyheartfilledwithsuspicion.Whatifthemancalledthewrongnumber?DidIreallyhearhimclearly?Asdawnfinallybroke,Iwassoonup,headingfortheawardpresentationwithtwobigdarkcirclesundermyeyes.WhenIwaspresentedwiththeprizeandcongratulated,agenuinefeelingofhappinesssweptoverme.Itwasatthatmomentthatmydoubtsaboutmywritingskillsvanishedintothinair.例文講解

Iwenttomyteacher’sofficeaftertheawardpresentation.Ihandedhimmyprize,sayingthanksinasoftbutconfidentvoice.Overjoyedandthrilled,hegavemeabighug.“Itoldyou,youcanmakeit.Iamsoproudofyou.”Asalways,hehadgreatfaithinme.Withoutthatfaith,neverwouldIhavewontheprize.Withoutthatfaith,neverwouldIhavefoundmypassionforwriting.Andwithoutthatfaith,neverwouldIhavebeenmotivatedtobeawriter.例文講解AsIlefthisoffice,Ilookedupatthesky.Theskywasbluewiththesuncastingagoldenlightovertheteachingbuildings.Whatagreatday!Ifeltmyheartfullofhope.NeverwouldIforgetthisexperienceandmyteacher.Paragraph

1:

A

few

weeks

later,

when

I

almost

forgot

the

contest,

there

came

the

news.

I

was

told

that

I

won

the

first

prize

in

the

writing

contest!

I

couldn’t

believe

my

ears

because

I

knew

for

sure

that

I

didn’t

have

any

advantages

writing

in

English,

my

second

language.

Therefore,

my

heart

was

filled

with

a

mix

of

excitement

and

disbelief.

I

thought

I

didn’t

care

about

winning,

but

realizing

that

all

my

hard

work

and

perseverance

paid

off

gave

me

a

surge

of

confidence.

Then

I

was

invited

to

the

award

presentation

of

the

writing

contest,

which

was

a

great

momen