讀后續(xù)寫+患難喚真情：我與腦癱哥哥的和解之路+講義 高三下學(xué)期二?？荚囉⒄Z試題

閱讀下面材料，根據(jù)其內(nèi)容和所給段落開頭語續(xù)寫兩段，使之構(gòu)成一篇完整的短文。1.haveanolderbrotherwhosuffersfromcerebralpalsy(腦癱).ForaslongasIcanremember,hisstruggleswithbasicmovementsandspeechcausedmeadeepsenseofembarrassment,Iwasafraidofthestaresandthewhisperedquestionsfromothers,soIkeptmydistance,thinkingitwouldprotectmefromtheirjudgment.Thisavoidancebecameahabit,awaytoprotectmyselffromthediscomfortIfeltoversomethingIdidn'tfullyunderstand.Eventually,itbecameabarrierIbuiltnotaroundmyheart,butaroundmylife.EvenwhenIkeptmydistance,mybrotherwouldoftenoffermewarmsmiles,providingcomfortandhelpduringmydifficultmoments.ThereweretimeswhenIdirectedmyfrustrationstowardshim,perhapsbecausehewasaneasytargetorbecauseIhatedhisexistence.Hisreactions,however,oftentooktheformofsilentunderstanding.Hewouldn'tdemandexplanationsformybehavior.Instead,hemightreachoutwithagentlegesture--atouch,asmile,orsimplyhispresence-remindingmethat,despitemyunnecessaryoutbursts,Iwasnotalone.Themorehecaredaboutme,themoreIhatedhim.Ibelievedhebroughtmeshame,disgrace,andembarrassment.HowIwishedtostayawayfromhim!ButIhadtochooseauniversityinourcityinordertoseemyillmotherwhenconvenient.Mybrother,however,wouldpreparemealsandhavethemdeliveredtomyschool,eachtimeattachinganotefilledwithconcern,askingwhyIhadn'tcomehome,ifIwasunwell,orifsomethingwaswrong.Aftermygraduationandthelossofmymother,Idecidedtodistancemyselffrommycityand,moresignificantly,frommybrother,toseekafreshstartinadifferentcity.注意：1.續(xù)寫詞數(shù)應(yīng)為150左右；。2.請按如下格式在相應(yīng)位置作答。Paragraph1:IwasinmyownworldinthecitywhenIwasbadlyillwithCOVID-19andhadnobodytoturnto.Paragraph2:Ireturnedtomycitywithanewfoundpurpose.文章大意：作者的哥哥患有腦癱，作者因害怕他人的目光和議論而疏遠(yuǎn)哥哥，甚至對哥哥態(tài)度惡劣，但哥哥一直默默關(guān)心作者。作者為了離開哥哥去了別的城市，在那里感染新冠無人照顧。5處伏筆及續(xù)寫中的回應(yīng)伏筆：作者哥哥雖患有腦癱，卻總是在作者困難時給予溫暖微笑、關(guān)心和幫助，如送飯菜并附紙條詢問作者情況，這為后文哥哥在作者患新冠時的幫助埋下伏筆。回應(yīng)：作者生病無人照顧時，哥哥得知后不顧自身困難趕來照顧，體現(xiàn)了哥哥對作者無私且深沉的愛，與前文哥哥的關(guān)心行為相呼應(yīng)，讓作者開始重新審視對哥哥的感情和態(tài)度。伏筆：作者對哥哥的疏遠(yuǎn)和惡劣態(tài)度，是因?yàn)橛X得哥哥給自己帶來羞恥和尷尬，為后面作者的內(nèi)心轉(zhuǎn)變做鋪墊?；貞?yīng)：生病期間哥哥的悉心照料使作者內(nèi)心產(chǎn)生愧疚和悔恨，意識到自己以前的錯誤，從而促使其態(tài)度轉(zhuǎn)變，情感從厭惡到愧疚，推動了故事的情感發(fā)展和情節(jié)轉(zhuǎn)折。伏筆：作者為了離開哥哥選擇在本市上大學(xué)，畢業(yè)后又去外市尋求新開始，突出了作者對哥哥的逃避心理。回應(yīng)：生病這一經(jīng)歷讓作者決定回到本市，打破了之前一直逃避的狀態(tài)，使故事的發(fā)展有了轉(zhuǎn)折，回到本市也為后續(xù)與哥哥關(guān)系的修復(fù)和重新相處提供了可能。伏筆：作者提到母親生病，這暗示了家庭的不幸和哥哥承擔(dān)的責(zé)任，也從側(cè)面反映出哥哥的善良和堅(jiān)韌?；貞?yīng)：母親去世后，哥哥依然堅(jiān)守對作者的關(guān)愛，進(jìn)一步凸顯了哥哥的美好品質(zhì)，也讓作者在經(jīng)歷種種后更深刻地認(rèn)識到哥哥的可貴，有助于作者情感的轉(zhuǎn)變和故事主旨的升華。伏筆：作者在回憶中多次提到哥哥的無聲理解和包容，這為后文作者認(rèn)識到自己的錯誤以及兩人關(guān)系的改善奠定了基礎(chǔ)?；貞?yīng)：生病時作者回想起這些，更加感到愧疚，也更容易接受哥哥的照顧和情感上的靠近，使得兩人關(guān)系的轉(zhuǎn)變更加自然流暢，同時也體現(xiàn)了情感的力量和人性的溫暖在故事中的作用。續(xù)寫要點(diǎn)情感線：第一段：作者起初感到孤獨(dú)、無助和絕望，在患病的痛苦中思念家鄉(xiāng)和親人，對自己曾經(jīng)疏遠(yuǎn)哥哥的行為開始有了一絲悔意，在哥哥趕來照顧后，內(nèi)心充滿了愧疚和感動，同時也有對哥哥的感激和重新認(rèn)識。第二段：作者懷著愧疚、感恩和彌補(bǔ)的心情回到城市，決心改變過去的態(tài)度，用愛和關(guān)懷去對待哥哥，彌補(bǔ)曾經(jīng)的過錯，內(nèi)心堅(jiān)定且充滿溫情，對未來與哥哥的相處充滿期待和希望，完成了從逃避到面對、從厭惡到關(guān)愛的情感轉(zhuǎn)變。故事線：第一段：作者在異地獨(dú)自與新冠病毒抗?fàn)?，病情?yán)重時孤立無援，身心俱疲。在絕望中，作者聯(lián)系了家鄉(xiāng)的一位熟人，熟人告知了哥哥。哥哥心急如焚，不顧路途遙遠(yuǎn)和自身不便，歷經(jīng)波折趕到作者身邊，悉心照料作者的飲食起居，陪伴作者度過了艱難的隔離期，在哥哥的照顧下，作者逐漸康復(fù)。第二段：康復(fù)后的作者深刻反思了自己過去的行為，決定回到家鄉(xiāng)?；氐匠鞘泻?，作者第一時間找到哥哥，緊緊地抱住他，淚流滿面地向他道歉，表達(dá)了自己的悔恨和想要彌補(bǔ)的決心。此后，作者每天都陪伴在哥哥身邊，陪他聊天、散步，幫助他進(jìn)行康復(fù)訓(xùn)練，兩人的關(guān)系變得親密無間，共同度過了許多溫暖的時光，作者也真正懂得了親情的珍貴和無價(jià)，完成了自我救贖和成長。主旨升華句Loveisnotalwaysaboutgrandgestures;sometimes,it'sthesilentandpersistentcarethattrulytouchestheheartandhasthepowertohealthedeepestwoundsofoursouls.（愛并不總是宏大的姿態(tài)；有時，默默且持久的關(guān)懷才能真正觸動心靈，擁有治愈我們靈魂深處創(chuàng)傷的力量。）Inthefaceoflife'strials,weoftenrealizethattheoneswepushedawaymightbetheveryoneswhoholdthekeytoourredemptionandthesourceofthepurestlovewe'veeverknown.（在生活的考驗(yàn)面前，我們常常意識到，那些被我們推開的人可能正是我們救贖的關(guān)鍵，以及我們所知道的最純粹的愛的源泉。）Truestrengthliesnotinrunningawayfromourproblemsbutinfacingthemwithcourageandhumility,andlearningtocherishthelovethathasalwaysbeenthere,waitingforustoopenoureyesandourhearts.（真正的力量不在于逃避問題，而在于勇敢而謙遜地面對它們，并學(xué)會珍惜一直存在、等待我們睜開雙眼和敞開心扉的愛。）Thejourneyofself-discoveryoftenbeginswiththerecognitionofourmistakesandthewillingnesstomakeamends.Itisthroughtheseactsofrepentancethatwefindthepathtoforgivenessandtherestorationofthemostpreciousrelationshipsinourlives.（自我發(fā)現(xiàn)的旅程往往始于認(rèn)識到自己的錯誤并愿意彌補(bǔ)。正是通過這些懺悔行為，我們找到了通往寬恕的道路，以及恢復(fù)我們生活中最珍貴的關(guān)系的方法。）Wemaytrytooutrunourpastandthepeoplewethinkholdusback,butintheend,itisthetiesofbloodandthepowerofunconditionallovethatwilldrawusback,teachingusthetruemeaningoffamilyandthevalueofeverylife,nomatterhowdifferentordifficultitmayseem.（我們可能試圖逃離過去和那些我們認(rèn)為阻礙我們的人，但最終，血緣的紐帶和無條件的愛的力量會把我們拉回來，教導(dǎo)我們家庭的真正意義以及每一個生命的價(jià)值，無論它看起來多么不同或艱難。）寫作示范第一篇Paragraph1:IwasinmyownworldinthecitywhenIwasbadlyillwithCOVID-19andhadnobodytoturnto.Lyingaloneinmysmallapartment,thefevermademyheadspinandmybodyache.Ifeltsohelplessandscared.Inmydelirium,Ithoughtofmybrotherandthewarmmealsheusedtosendme.Forthefirsttime,Iregrettedpushinghimaway.Imanagedtocallanoldneighborbackhome,whoinformedmybrother.Withouthesitation,mybrothertraveledallthewaytothecitytotakecareofme.Hecookednutritioussoups,madesureItookmymedicineontime,andsatbymybedside,offeringmecomfortwithhissilentpresence.Seeinghisworriedfaceandfeelinghisgentletouch,myheartwasfilledwithguiltandshame.Paragraph2:Ireturnedtomycitywithanewfoundpurpose.IrealizedhowwrongIhadbeentojudgeandavoidmybrother.Iwasdeterminedtomakeupforallthelosttimeandlove.AssoonasIgotback,Iwentstraighttomybrother'splace.Ihuggedhimtightlyandapologizedwithtearsinmyeyes.Fromthatdayon,Ibecamehisconstantcompanion.Wewentforwalksinthepark,watchedmoviestogether,andIhelpedhimwithhisdailyexercises.Ourrelationshipgrewstrongerthanever,andIlearnedthatloveandacceptancearethemostpreciousgiftswecangivetoourfamily.Inolongercaredaboutwhatothersmightthink;allthatmatteredwasthebondIhadwithmybrotherandthelovethathadbeenthereallalong,waitingformetoembraceit.第二篇Paragraph1:IwasinmyownworldinthecitywhenIwasbadlyillwithCOVID-19andhadnobodytoturnto.Iwasbarelyabletogetoutofbedtofetchwaterorfood.FearandlonelinessengulfedmeasIstruggledtobreathe.Inthatmomentofdespair,Irememberedallthetimesmybrotherhadbeenthereforme,despitemycoldnesstowardshim.Iwonderedifhewouldstillcare.Miraculously,hedid.Hesomehowmanagedtofindoutaboutmysituationandrushedtomyside.Hetookcareofmelikeamotherhen,nevercomplainingabouttheinconvenienceortherisk.HiskindnessandselflessnessbrokethroughthewallsIhadbuiltaroundmyheart,andIstartedtoseehiminanewlight.Paragraph2:Ireturnedtomycitywithanewfoundpurpose.Icamebacktorebuildtherelationshipwithmybrotherandtoshowhimtheloveandrespecthedeserved.Imovedinwithhimanddedicatedmyselftohiswell-being.Iaccompaniedhimtohistherapysessionsandcheeredhimoneverystepoftheway.Iintroducedhimtomyfriendsandwasproudtohavehimbymyside.ThestaresandwhispersfromothersnolongerbotheredmebecauseIknewthetruevalueofmybrother'slove.Ihadlearnedthatfamilyisnotdefinedbyperfectionbutbytheunwaveringsupportandloveweoffereachother,andIwasdeterminedtocherishandprotectthisbondfortherestofmylife.【答案】IwasinmyownworldinthecitywhenIwasbadlyillwithCOVID-19andhadnobodytoturnto.Aloneinmyapartment，myhealthdeterioratedrapidly.Itwasthen，inthemidstofmydesperation，thatmybrother'sfamiliarfaceappearedinmymind.