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易錯點27讀后續(xù)寫
目錄
01易錯陷阱(5大陷阱)
02舉一反三
【易錯點提醒一】審題不清、文本內(nèi)容易混易錯點
【易錯點提醒二】段首句推理銜接易混易錯點
【易錯點提醒三】情節(jié)發(fā)展易混易錯點
[易錯點提醒四】詞句易混易錯點
【易錯點提醒五】卷面易混易錯點
03易錯題通關(guān)
易錯陷阱1:審題不清、文本內(nèi)容易混易錯點。
【分析】
只有把材料讀透,才能明確故事主線,把握續(xù)寫方向,為續(xù)寫奠定基礎(chǔ)。很多考生因為詞
匯匱乏、時間不夠等種種原因沒有讀透文本信息,導(dǎo)致續(xù)寫嚴(yán)重偏離所給素材、跑題等錯誤。
為了表現(xiàn)角色的成長或事件的發(fā)展,文中會出現(xiàn)影響角色成長和事件發(fā)展的關(guān)鍵線索,而這些
線索之間的邏輯關(guān)系,構(gòu)成事件發(fā)生的經(jīng)過,就是文章的主線。
易錯陷阱2:段首句推理銜接易混易錯點。
【分析】
續(xù)寫部分的內(nèi)容,無論是時間的先后還是情節(jié)的發(fā)展,都以第一段和第二段首句這兩句話
為內(nèi)在聯(lián)系的連接點。它們直接決定了情節(jié)的發(fā)展方向??忌菀缀雎赃@兩句的作用,或是第
二段首句與第一段結(jié)尾之間的聯(lián)系。應(yīng)當(dāng)根據(jù)第二段首句逆推第一段尾句,即過渡句。
易錯陷阱3:情節(jié)發(fā)展和結(jié)局易混易錯點。
【分析】
續(xù)寫必須與原文內(nèi)容故事銜接自然、連貫。語言風(fēng)格與所給材料應(yīng)當(dāng)保持一致。要緊扣原
文主題、預(yù)設(shè)核心沖突、推動故事發(fā)展。所給材料中可能會有很多伏筆,并且可能較為零星的
分布在所給材料中,考生不必分別進(jìn)行回應(yīng),只選取有助于推動情節(jié)發(fā)展或凸顯故事主線的伏
筆來設(shè)置情節(jié)。
一般來說,文章的第一段會介紹故事發(fā)生的背景、人物的性格特點等,為可能出現(xiàn)的矛盾沖
突做好鋪墊,考生應(yīng)當(dāng)善于發(fā)現(xiàn)和利用這些伏筆。
結(jié)局設(shè)置巧妙,可以對續(xù)寫起到畫龍點睛的作用。一般選擇“首尾呼應(yīng)”或“情感升華”來
傳遞作者的思想感情和感悟,凸顯作者的變化。
具體讀后續(xù)寫升華句和寫作要領(lǐng)詳見本作者編撰的專輯《2023年新高考英語滿分作文讀
后續(xù)寫高分突破+萬能金句》。
易錯陷阱4:詞句易混易錯點。
【分析】
為豐富故事的情節(jié),充實續(xù)寫的內(nèi)容和升級語言,考生會用到多樣化的詞匯或句型。而匱
乏的詞匯量和薄弱的基礎(chǔ)知識則會造成高級句型和詞匯的錯用。
易錯陷阱5:卷面易混易錯點。
【分析】
整潔優(yōu)美的卷面會成為加分的一個因素。有點考生不注意規(guī)范書寫,字母大小隨意,字跡
潦草不清,亂涂亂畫,書寫馬虎等都會給閱卷者留下“臟、舌L、差”等印象。讀后續(xù)寫不同于
第一部分寫作,其分值更高,故優(yōu)美的卷面留下的印象分占比更大。
【易錯點提醒一】詞句(籠統(tǒng)詞與高級詞)易混易錯點
【例1】一天晚上,一個小偷走進(jìn)了她家。
【變式1】當(dāng)我們要離開時,他哭起來。
【變式2]他笑得合不攏嘴。
【變式3]她不敢一個人外出。
【易錯點提醒二】句式結(jié)構(gòu)之非謂語動詞易混易錯點
【例2】Seeingfromthetopofthemountain,thevillagelooksmorebeautiful.
【正確】
【變式11Havingexperiencedsomanyfailuresoneafteranother,shefinallypickedherselfup.
【易錯】
【變式2】Devotedtohisresearchwork,theprofessorcaredlittleaboutanyotherthings.
【易錯】
【變式3】Shewasterrifiedatthethoughtofbeingalone.
【易錯】
【易錯點提醒三】句式結(jié)構(gòu)之獨立主格易混易錯點
【例3】Shelaughed,hereyesshining.
【易錯】
【變式1】Shefroze,hermouthhangingopen.
【易錯】
【變式2】Jessicasighingwithrelief,thepairhuggedeachotherandshedtearsofexcitement.
【易錯】
[變式3]shesattherestill,tearsrollingdownhercheeks.
【易錯】
【易錯點提醒四】句式結(jié)構(gòu)之形容詞與副詞易混易錯點
【例4】Mickfrozewithterror,tooscaredtomoveaninch.
【易錯】
【變式1]Herheartleapedwithjoy.
【易錯】
【變式2]Thedaywascoldbutclear.
【易錯】
【變式3】Jack'sfaceflushed/bumedwithembarrassment.
【易錯】
【易錯點提醒五】句式結(jié)構(gòu)之從句和特殊句式易混易錯點
【例5】Whenfacedwiththegreatchallenge,hehadafrownonhisface.
【易錯】
【變式1]Notonlydidweseeitbutalsowetouchedit.
【易錯】
[變式2]HonestyisthemostimportantqualitythatIwanthimtopossess.
【易錯】
【變式3]Notaworddidhesaythatday.
【易錯】
三9
1.(2023?浙江臺州?統(tǒng)考一模)
閱讀下面材料,根據(jù)其內(nèi)容和所給段落開頭語續(xù)寫兩段,使之構(gòu)成一篇完整的短文。
GreenThumb
AllIdidwasshowmylittlesisterhowtogrowplants.Digahole.Putinaseed.Coveritwithdirt.
Waterit.Wait."See,Laynie,^^Iexplained,<6awholeplantwillgrowfromthistinyseed.Allwehaveto
doiswaterit.”
Layniehadherownwateringcansoshecould"help"meinthegarden.Oneday,aftereverything
waswatered,sherantothefenceandstartedsprinklingwateronanotherspot.Iwalkedoverandsawa
freshpatchofdirtnearthefence.
“Didyouplantsomethingthere?”Iasked.
“Yes,"shesaid.'Tmgrowingapencil.Mypurplepencilgottoosmall,soIplantedit.”
"What?But,Laynie一”
Ishouldhaveexplainedthingsrightthen,butIjustmuttered,4tUh...1nevergrewonebefore.^^
LaterIgotwhatseemedlikeagreatidea.IdugupLaynie'spenciland"planted“abrand-new
purplepencil.Layniewasreallyexcitedwhenshesawit."Mypencilgrew!”sheshouted.
Afewdayslater,Layniewaswateringonthesamespot.Twodayslater,newcrayonssticking
theirpointylittleheadsout,thankstome.Layniejumpedupanddownandyelled,"Theylooklike
flowers!”Shettpicked^^themandranintothehouse.
Next,Layniegrewanadultbeardollfromatinyone,asoupspoonfromateaspoon,andahand
mirrorfromapieceofglass.Whensheclaimedthatshehadgrownthesethings,Ijustkeptmymouth
shut!Actually,itwasfuntryingtothinkofwhatshouldgrowfromLaynie9sseeds.Anditwascoolto
seehergetexcited.
OnedayIsawherpattingdownsomedirtnearthefenceagain,soIknewshe'djustplanted
something.Myheartdroppedtomyfeetwhensheasked,uHowlongdoesittaketogrowagoldfish,
Brad?”Icouldn'tspeak.
“Notlong,Ibet!”saidLaynie.Shekneltdowntowhisper"Grow,Molly.Grow!”beforeshe
skippedbacktothehouse.
注意:1.續(xù)寫詞數(shù)應(yīng)為150左右;
2.請按如下格式在答題卡的相應(yīng)位置作答。
Isatdownwithmybacktothefenceandthoughtforalongtime.
LaterIfoundLayniesittingbythespotwhereMollywasburied.
2.(2024?浙江杭州?統(tǒng)考一模)
閱讀下面材料,根據(jù)其內(nèi)容和所給段落開頭語續(xù)寫兩段,使之構(gòu)成一篇完整的短文。
MydadandIhadbeenlookingforwardtotheStalecross-countryraceofmysenioryearofhigh
school,whichwouldbetheclimax(頂點)ofmyexistence.
Iwasthefastestrunneronmyteam,andIwassupposedtomakeitintothetopfifteen.Wehad
beenworkingtowardsthisraceforthreeyears.Itwaseverythingtome,anditwaseverythingtomy
dad.Hewasarunnerandwaswildwithjoybymysuccessinrunning.Hemadeittoeveryrace,even
flyinghomeearlyfrombusinesstripstoseemerun.Ialwayslistenedforhisvoice,whichrangabove
thecrowd-tellingmetorelaxmyarms,callingoutmytime.Hepushedme.Hecheeredforme.He
believedinme.WespentcountlesshoursonthesandycanalsofArizona.Breathinginthedustofthe
desert,theblossomsoftheorangetrees,andtheterriblesmellofthedairyfarm,wemadeourway
acrossthecity.Wepoundedmilesandmilesintoourrunningshoes,markingwitheverystepthepath
togreatness.Itwasajourneythatwasjustours.Adreampassedonfromonegenerationtothenext.
Thenthebigdaycame.Itwashotterthannormal-toohot.Mythroatfeltlikeafieldofcotton,
crackedwiththesummerheat,asIwaitedfortheguntofire.Igazedoutatthecrowd;dozensof
familiarfacesfromchurchandschoolflickeredacrossmyview.Theyhadcomeforme.Theywere
countingonme.Isawmydadsethiswatch,worryandexcitementetchedacrosshisface.Withthe
soundofagunshot,theracebegan.
Forthefirsttwoandhalfmiles,Ifeltgreat.Ihadneverbeforebeensoreadyforsomething.The
weeksleadinguptotheracewerefilledwithhardpracticesandastrictdiet.Thescorchingsunbeat
uponmyback,blindingmewithitsbrilliance.Nothingwasgoingtostopme,though.
注意:
1.所續(xù)寫短文的詞數(shù)應(yīng)為150左右;
2.請按如下格式在答題卡的相應(yīng)位置作答。
However,withoutwarning,mystrengthwasrunningout.
Iwhispered,'TmsosorryIdisappointedyou,Dad.”
3.(2023?廣西玉林?階段練習(xí))
閱讀下面材料,根據(jù)其內(nèi)容和所給段落開頭語續(xù)寫兩段,使之構(gòu)成一篇完整的短文。
Wesatonthebuswaitingwhileotherpassengerspiledon.Ablond-hairedgirl,aboutnineteen
yearsold,tooktheseatinfrontofus.Thebusdriverfollowedbehindher.Hedemandedherfare.
“Youpay$40orgetoffthebus!”thedriversaid.
“Ipaidalready.Yesterday,online,9,thegirlinsisted.
“No,norecordofit!”thebusdriverpointedtothepaperinhishandandwaveditinherface.
“See.Nopay!Youpay,oryoumustgetHeangrilypointedtotheexitdoor.
“ButIdon'thavemoney.AndIpaidalready.Please.^^
Thebusdriverpickeduphismobilephoneandmadeacalltofindoutiftherehadbeenanerror
withthepaperwork.Afterfailingtogetthrough,hewasgettingangrierwiththegirl.Sohecutthecall
anddidn'ttry.
“No,youhavenotpaid.Youmustpay.”
“Butplease,Idon'thaveanymoneyonme.ImustgettoLAtoday.Please.^^
Tearsstreameddownherface.
IhadboardedabusheadedtoLosAngeles.IwasveryexcitedaboutexperiencingLA.Mydream
ofvisitingDisneyLandwasabouttocometrue.ButwhileIsattherecomfortablyinmyseat,thinking
aboutmynextadventure,thisyounggirlwasintears,withamanstandingoverher,demanding
money.
Iwasn'tsurewhatIshoulddo.Wasshetellingthetruth?Itwouldn,tbethefirsttimesomeone
hadextractedmoneybytellingasadstorythatturnedoutuntrue.Didshereallynothaveanymoney?
Maybethebusdriverwouldshowsomesympathyandallowhertosortthepaymentoutlater?
Butno,thebusdrivercontinuedtodemandshepay$40orgetoffthebus.Theyounggirlinsisted
thatshedidn'thaveenoughmoneyforthefareandhadnooneshecouldcontactforhelp.Itseemed
thedriverwouldthrowheroffthebus.
注意:
1.續(xù)寫詞數(shù)應(yīng)為150個左右;
2.請按如下格式在答題卡的相應(yīng)位置作答。
Suddenly,amessygrey-hairedwomanwithaweatheredfacestoodup.
Atthenextreststop,Inoticedthatwomanhadnomoneyforfood.
4.(2023?湖南?湖南師大附中校聯(lián)考一模)
閱讀下面材料,根據(jù)其內(nèi)容和所給段落開頭語續(xù)寫兩段,使之構(gòu)成一篇完整的短文。
ToactwithintegritywasahabitwithSusanwhoalwaysfollowstheGoldenRule:"Donotdoto
otherswhatyoudonotwantotherstodotoyou.^^Butwhenshethoughtoverherpastconduct,ablush
ofshamecrepttohercheeks,asmanylittleactsofselfishnessandunkindnesscamebacktoher
memory.Sheresolvedthatforthefuture,bothingreatthingsandsmall,shewouldrememberand
followtheGoldenRule.
Itwasnotlongafterthisthatanopportunityoccurred,whichtriedSusan'sprinciples.One
Saturdayeveningwhenshewent,asusual,toMr.Thompson'sinn,toreceivethemoneyofher
mother'swashingforhim,whichamountedtofivedollars,shefoundMr.Thompsonapparentlyina
terribleragewithsomehorsedealerswithwhomhehadbeenbargaining.Heheldinhishandanopen
pocketbook(錢袋子),fullofbillsandscarcelynoticingSusanasshemadeherrequest,exceptto
swearatherfortroublinghimwhenhewasbusy,hehandedherabanknote.
Gladtoescapesoeasily,Susanhurriedoutofthegate.Pausingtoputthemoneysafelyinher
purse,shediscoveredthathehadgivenhertwobillsinsteadofone.Shelookedaround;nobodywas
nearandherfirstimpulsewasjoyattheunexpectedprize.
“Itisallmine,^^saidshetoherself.willbuymymotheranewcoatwithit,andshecangiveher
oldonetomysisterMary,andthenMarycangototheSundayschoolwithmenextwinter.Iwonderif
IcanbuyapairofshoesformybrotherTom,too.”
Atthatmomentsherememberedthathemusthavegivenittoherbymistake.Butagainthevoice
ofthetempterwhispered,“Hegaveit,andhowdoyouknowthathedidnotintendtomakeyoua
presentofit?Keepit!Hewillneverknowit,forhehadtoomanysuchbillsinthatgreatpocketbook.^^
注意:
1.續(xù)寫詞數(shù)應(yīng)為150左右;
2.請按如下格式在答題卡的相應(yīng)位置作答。
Thisconflictwasgoingoninhermindbetweengoodandevil.
“Sir,youpaidmetwobillsinsteadofone,^^shehandedhimtheextranote.
5.(2023?安徽?高三??茧A段練習(xí))
閱讀下面材料,根據(jù)其內(nèi)容和所給段落開頭語續(xù)寫兩段,使之構(gòu)成一篇完整的短文。
Duringthesummervacation,amotherplannedanexcitingtripwithhertwochildren.Theywere
settoexploreafamoustouristspot,famousforitsbreath-takinglandscapesandattractions.Littledid
theyknowthattheiradventurewouldtakeanunexpectedturn.
Astheyarrivedatthedestination,theyweregreetedbyaseaofpeople.Theplacewas
overflowingwithtouristsfromallovertheglobe.Excitementfilledtheairasfamiliesbegantheir
sightseeingadventures,creatingalivelyandvibrantatmosphere.
Eagertobegintheirownadventure,themother,holdingthehandsofhertwochildren,doveinto
thecrowd.However,amongthecrowdedarmyoftourists,fatehaditsownplansinstore.Inthechaos
ofthemassivecrowd,theyoungerson,unawareofthechaosunfoldingaroundhim,somehow
managedtowanderoff,unknowinglyleavinghisfamilybehind.
Suddenly,themotherrealizedthatheryoungerchildwasnolongerbesideher.Panicseizedher
heart,andasenseofhelplessnessoccupiedher.Shedesperatelycalledoutherson'sname,hervoice
tremblingwithfear.Tearsstreameddownherfaceasshescannedthevastseaofpeopleforherson,
buttherewasnosignofhim.
Inastateofdespair,themothersoughtassistancefromfellowtourists.Compassionateminds
instantlyjoinedinthesearch,spreadingwordaboutthelostchildthroughoutthearea.Strangersjoined
inthesearch,theirheartsfilledwithempathyfortheanxiousmother.
注意:L續(xù)寫詞數(shù)應(yīng)為150個左右;
2.請按如下格式在答題卡的相應(yīng)位置作答。
Threeagonizing(令人焦慮不安的)hourspassed,eachfeelinglikeyears.
Asthemothertightlyfoldedhersoninherarms,awaveofdelightwashedoverher.
6.(2023?吉林長春?高三東北師大附中練習(xí))
閱讀下面材料,根據(jù)其內(nèi)容和所給段落開頭語續(xù)寫兩段,使之構(gòu)成一篇完整的短文。
TheneighborhoodkidsnicknamedthestrangeoldcoupleCrazyJackandRubyRednose.Rumor
wasthattheysatinsideanddrankteaallday.Theonlywordsweeverheardfromthemwere”Keep
outofourrosebushes!,?
Therosebushesservedasafencebetweenourhouseandtheirs.Iwaselevenatthetimeandthe
oldestofsixactivegirls.Weshouldhaveplayedoursoftballgameselsewheretoavoidhurtingthe
roses,butwesecretlyenjoyedannoyingCrazyJackandRubyRednose.Oneday,wehada
neighborhoodsoftballgameinouryard.Marywastryingtocatchaflyball.Shestumbled(絆倒)over
oneofRubyRednose^rosebushesandfellontopofseveralmore.Justatthatmoment,RubyRednose
sprangoutandrantowardMary.Shescreamedangrily,"Lookatwhatyou'vedonetoourfamily's
roses!You'vealwaysbeenatrouble.Youhavenoideawhatthisrosebushmeanstome!^^
Hearingthis,mysistersandIranintoourhouse.Breathlessly,wetoldMomwhathadhappened.
“Girls,Ihavetoldyounottoplaysoftballnearthosebushes.Comeoutsiderightnowandhelpmefix
them.^^“Mom,wethoughtyoudidn'tlikethecouple,“weprotested."They'remeantous."Momjust
glaredatus.Wefollowedheroutsidetohelprepairtherosefence.WhileMomwasexaminingthe
damagedroses,Rubyslowlywalkedout.Shelookedsad.Anditwasn'thernosethatwasred——itwas
hereyes.
注意:
1.續(xù)寫詞數(shù)應(yīng)為150左右;
2.請按如下格式在相應(yīng)位置作答。
Rubywalkedovertomymother,wegirlsholdingourbreath.
Afewweekslater,theplantsallcamebacktolife.
7.(2023?江蘇連云港?高三統(tǒng)考期中)
閱讀下面材料,根據(jù)其內(nèi)容和所給段落開頭語續(xù)寫兩段,使之構(gòu)成一篇完整的短文。
Imaginesittingatyourbreakfasttablehavingacupofcoffeewhenallofasuddenyousee
someoneabouttodie.Whatwouldyoudo?LastChristmas,JohnGelinnefoundout.
OnDec.26,Gelinne,60,waswatchingoutthebackwindowsofhishomeinEdgewater,
Maryland,atfrozenBeardsCreek(河流).Childrenandgrandchildrenwererunningaroundthehouse.
ThafswhenGelinnelookedupjustintimetoseeasmallplaneafewhundredyardsaway,losing
altitude(海拔高度).
Astheplanedisappearedbehindthetrees,Gelinne,aformerNavycommander,realizeditwas
goingtolandinthecreek.Heflashedonamomentfrommorethan20yearsearlier:Sept.11,2001.
GelinnewasatworkinthePentagoninWashington,D.C.,whenterrorists(恐,怖分子)crasheda
planeintothebuilding.Heescapedbuthasalwayswonderedifhecouldhavestayedinsideand
“Totherightwasthecrisis,andtotheleftwasescape.Idon'tevenknowifIcouldhavegone
right,butIwentleft,“herecalled.6tIalwayssecond-guessedmyselfaboutthatdecision.^^
Onthisday,Gelinnedidn'thesitate.Herandowntothewaterfront.Theplanehadslippedtoa
stoponthebroad,frozencreek,farfromtheshore.Itwasnowsinking.Thepilotwasstandingonthe
wing.GelinneknewfromhisNavytrainingthatevenafewminutesintheicywatercouldkillthe
pilot.
Gelinnetestedtheicewithhisfootanddecidednottotakeanychanceswalkingonit.Soheand
hisson,JohnIr.,37,pulledtwokayaks(皮艇)out.
“Ifigured,ifitcanfloatonthewater,itcanslideontheice,^^Gelinnesays.Thekayaks9paddles
(槳)provedeasilybroken,sothepairtriedusingshovels(鐵鏟)topushtheboatsalong.Theirfirst
attemptsleftthemmovingincircles.Butwithsomemuscle,theymadeprogress.
注意:
1.詞數(shù)150左右;
2.請按如下格式在答題卡的相應(yīng)位置作答。
Thetwomensetoff,pushingtheirboatsacrosstheice.
Theyfinallyarrivedattheshorewithgreatejforts.
8.(2023?吉林白城?高三??计谥校?/p>
閱讀下面材料,根據(jù)其內(nèi)容和所給段落開頭語續(xù)寫兩段,使之構(gòu)成一篇完整的短文。
PositiveActionFuelsHope
'Tmnotgoingbacktogrouptherapy(治療).Irefusetobetreatedlikethat.^^Thevoicewasso
loudthatIhadtoholdthephoneawayfrommyear.
AliciaGonzalezsufferedfromdepression.Thiswashersecondmonthatthehomelessshelter,
whereIworkasacasemanager.
Aliciahadbeenanursefor10years.Herworkwasintenseanddemanding,andshelovedit.To
her,thetrauma(精神倉U傷)she'dsufferedwasthathersonlosthislifeinacarcrash.Withherbrain
overloadedbythetrauma,shecouldn'tfocusonherwork.Finally,shehadtoquitherjob.Withno
income,shecouldn'tpayherrent.Foralmostthreeyears,Alicialivedinhertruck.Aliciatoldmeall
thisatourfirstmeeting.
“Iwanttohelpyou,^^Isaid.t4Therearelotsofresourceshere.AllIaskisthatyoutellmewhafs
goingonwithyou.ThatwayIcanmakesureyou'regettingtheservicesyouneed.^^
"I'lltry,^^shesaid."It'sjusthard.IusedtofeelasthoughwhatIdidmattered.Now...”Hervoice
becamequiet.BeforeIcouldsaysomething,shestoodandwalkedoutoftheroom.
Twomonthslater,IstillfeltasifIhadn'tgottenthroughtoAlicia.Sometimesthethingssending
herintoaviolentangerweresominor-apieceofrubbishsomeonehaddroppedonthefloor-itwas
hardformetothinkofcopingskillsthatdidn'tsoundlikeIwascriticizingher.
Maybethislatesttalkingrouptherapywasthelaststraw(稻草).“Findingsomethingsmallyou
canfeelgoodaboutcanhelpyoucopewithanger/9Isuggested.<4Itdoesn'tneedtobesomehuge
thing.^^EvenasIsaidit,Iwondered,46WasthatreallythebestadviceIcouldcomeupwith?”Alicia
tookalongdeepbreath.4tIknow,“shesaid.
注意:1.續(xù)寫詞數(shù)應(yīng)為150個左右;
2.請按如下格式在答題卡的相應(yīng)位置作答。
Afewweekslater,Isawherinthehallwaywitharubbishbag.
InMarch,Aliciawasofferedajobdoinghousekeepingattheshelter.
9.(2023?廣東?高三廣州市第一中學(xué)校聯(lián)考)
閱讀下面材料,根據(jù)其內(nèi)容和所給段落開頭語續(xù)寫兩段,使之構(gòu)成一篇完整的短文。
EveryJune,werenewanannualtraditionatourhouseinalovelyneighbourhood.Ourchildren
aregivenbowlsandaskedtocollectpiecesofnaturethatremindthemofthesummer.Theyleave
thosebowlsonthefrontdoorstepandwegoforawalk.Whenwereturn,wefindfairies(仙子)have
transformedthebowls'contentsintoicecreamsundaes(圣代冰淇淋).
I'mnotcertainhowthistraditionevolved.IthinkIwasmakingupsomethingaboutfairiesyears
ago,anditalljustsortofhappened.Buteversince,ithasbeenoneofourfavouriteroutineactivities,
fascinatedwithitsmagic.
“Whenarethefairiescoming?^^six-year-oldAnnahadbeenaskingalllastJune,eagerwith
expectation.Meanwhile,John,nine,wasgettingwisetofairiesandFatherChristmasandsuchsilly
things.Sohewasprettysureabouthowallthe"magic“cameaboutastheeveningapproached.t6You
know,Ihadeverythingworkedout!”Hesaidhewouldunderstandif,duringourwalk,MumorDad
shouldforgetsomethingandreturnhomeorduringthewalkaparentmighthavetofetchsomethingin
thecar.Manytimes,wewereeventhinkingoftellinghimthetruthbutwedidn't.Annashouldenjoy
themagic.
Theeveningarrivedasexpected.Thechildrencollectedleavesandbladesofgrass,pebbles,twigs
(樹枝)anddeadinsects.Weputtheirbowlsonthefrontdoorstepandwentoffonourwalkasusual.
Butafterawhile,IpretendedtocomplainthatIhadforgottenmykeysandneededtogoback.
Johnsmiledwithaknowingexpression.t4Ohwait,“Iadded."I'vefoundthem!Idon'thavetogo
back."Aswecontinuedonourway,Johnwasbeginningtogetabitconfused.
Nearourhouse,afterexchangingaglancewithmyhusband,Ianxiouslywarnedthatthefairies
mightnothavearrivedyet——wemightneedtowalkforabitlonger.HearingwhatIsaid,John
seemedrelieved.ttYes,,,hesaid,“theyprobablyhadn'tcome!”Yetwhenwereachedthefrontdoor,the
bowlswereinthesameplacewehadleftthem-filledexactlywithicecreamsundaes.
注意:
1.續(xù)寫詞數(shù)應(yīng)為150左右;
2.請按如下格式在答題卡的相應(yīng)位置作答。
Seeingthis,thetwokidsgavequitedifferentresponses.
ItwaslatebuttheconfusionkeptJohnwideawake,andfinallyhecametome.
10.(2023?山東青島?高三統(tǒng)考期中)
閱讀下面材料,根據(jù)其內(nèi)容和所給段落開頭語續(xù)寫兩段,使之構(gòu)成一篇完整的短文。
Timmywasaboyagedtwelve.Oneday,whilehewaswalkinghomefromschool,hefounda
stray(流浪的)dogwanderingaimlesslyonthestreet.Thepoorcreaturelookeddirtyandhungry.It
lookedupatTimmywithbig,pleadingeyes,asiftosay,“Pleasetakemehome.^^Timmycouldn't
resistthesadfaceofthesmalldog.Withouthesitation,Timmydecidedtotakethedoghomewithhim.
Heknewthathisparentswouldbesurprisedbecausetheyhadneverkeptapet,buthecouldn'tbear
thethoughtofleavingtheanimalalone.Whenhearrivedhome,heintroducedthedogtohisfamily.To
hissurprise,hisparentsagreedtoletitstay.
TimmynamedthedogMax,andthetwoquicklybecameinseparable.Theyspenttheirdays
playingtogetherintheparkandexploringthecountryside.MaxwasalwaysbyTimmy'sside,whether
hewasridinghisbikeorplayingsoccerwithhisfriends.WhenTimmyreturnedhomefromschool,
Maxwouldruntohimandjumpupintohisarms,lickinghisfacewithjoy.
Onesunnyday,TimmyandMaxwereplayingintheparkwhentheycameacrossabeautiful
pond.Maxcouldn'tresistthetemptation(誘惑)totakeaswiminthecoolwater,soitrantowardsthe
pond.Timmyfollowedit,butassoonastheyreachedtheedgeofthepond,Maxjumpedrightin
withoutanyhesitation.
TimmywatchedasMaxswamaroundinthewater,havingthetimeofitslife.Hewantedtojoin
inthefun,buthedidn'tknowhowtoswim.Ashepeeredintothewater,henoticedthatitwasmuch
deeperthanhehadthought.Suddenly,helosthisbalanceandfellintothepond.Hetriedtostandup,
butthewaterwastoodeep,andhestartedtopanic.
注意:
1.續(xù)寫詞數(shù)應(yīng)為150左右;
2.請按如下格式在答題卡的相應(yīng)位置作答。
Maxquicklyrealizedthatsomethingwaswrong.
Wordspreadthatastraydoghadsavedaboy'slife.
易錯點27讀后續(xù)寫
目錄
01易錯陷阱(5大陷阱)
02舉一反三
【易錯點提醒一】審題不清、文本內(nèi)容易混易錯點
【易錯點提醒二】段首句推理銜接易混易錯點
【易錯點提醒三】情節(jié)發(fā)展易混易錯點
[易錯點提醒四】詞句易混易錯點
【易錯點提醒五】卷面易混易錯點
03易錯題通關(guān)
易錯陷阱1:審題不清、文本內(nèi)容易混易錯點。
【分析】
只有把材料讀透,才能明確故事主線,把握續(xù)寫方向,為續(xù)寫奠定基礎(chǔ)。很多考生因為詞
匯匱乏、時間不夠等種種原因沒有讀透文本信息,導(dǎo)致續(xù)寫嚴(yán)重偏離所給素材、跑題等錯誤。
為了表現(xiàn)角色的成長或事件的發(fā)展,文中會出現(xiàn)影響角色成長和事件發(fā)展的關(guān)鍵線索,而這些
線索之間的邏輯關(guān)系,構(gòu)成事件發(fā)生的經(jīng)過,就是文章的主線。
易錯陷阱2:段首句推理銜接易混易錯點。
【分析】
續(xù)寫部分的內(nèi)容,無論是時間的先后還是情節(jié)的發(fā)展,都以第一段和第二段首句這兩句話
為內(nèi)在聯(lián)系的連接點。它們直接決定了情節(jié)的發(fā)展方向??忌菀缀雎赃@兩句的作用,或是第
二段首句與第一段結(jié)尾之間的聯(lián)系。應(yīng)當(dāng)根據(jù)第二段首句逆推第一段尾句,即過渡句。
易錯陷阱3:情節(jié)發(fā)展和結(jié)局易混易錯點。
【分析】
續(xù)寫必須與原文內(nèi)容故事銜接自然、連貫。語言風(fēng)格與所給材料應(yīng)當(dāng)保持一致。要緊扣原
文主題、預(yù)設(shè)核心沖突、推動故事發(fā)展。所給材料中可能會有很多伏筆,并且可能較為零星的
分布在所給材料中,考生不必分別進(jìn)行回應(yīng),只選取有助于推動情節(jié)發(fā)展或凸顯故事主線的伏
筆來設(shè)置情節(jié)。
一般來說,文章的第一段會介紹故事發(fā)生的背景、人物的性格特點等,為可能出現(xiàn)的矛盾沖
突做好鋪墊,考生應(yīng)當(dāng)善于發(fā)現(xiàn)和利用這些伏筆。
結(jié)局設(shè)置巧妙,可以對續(xù)寫起到畫龍點睛的作用。一般選擇“首尾呼應(yīng)”或“情感升華”來
傳遞作者的思想感情和感悟,凸顯作者的變化。
具體讀后續(xù)寫升華句和寫作要領(lǐng)詳見本作者編撰的專輯《2023年新高考英語滿分作文讀
后續(xù)寫高分突破+萬能金句》。
易錯陷阱4:詞句易混易錯點。
【分析】
為豐富故事的情節(jié),充實續(xù)寫的內(nèi)容和升級語言,考生會用到多樣化的詞匯或句型。而匱
乏的詞匯量和薄弱的基礎(chǔ)知識則會造成高級句型和詞匯的錯用。
易錯陷阱5:卷面易混易錯點。
【分析】
整潔優(yōu)美的卷面會成為加分的一個因素。有點考生不注意規(guī)范書寫,字母大小隨意,字跡
潦草不清,亂涂亂畫,書寫馬虎等都會給閱卷者留下“臟、舌L、差”等印象。讀后續(xù)寫不同于
第一部分寫作,其分值更高,故優(yōu)美的卷面留下的印象分占比更大。
三
【易錯點提醒一】詞句(籠統(tǒng)詞與高級詞)易混易錯點
【例1】一天晚上,一個小偷走進(jìn)了她家。
【低檔】Onenight,athiefwalkedintoherhouse.
低分分析:選詞過于籠統(tǒng),缺乏畫面感和生動性。
【升級】Onenight,athieftiptoedintoherhouse.一天晚上,一個小偷躡手躡腳地走進(jìn)了她家。
升級后的句式tiptoed"躡手躡腳地”更準(zhǔn)確地表現(xiàn)出小偷的“鬼鬼祟祟”的動作特點。
【變式1】當(dāng)我們要離開時,他哭起來。
【彳氐檔】Hecriedwhenitwastimeforustoleave.
低分分析:選詞過于概括性和模糊,缺乏生動性;
【升級】Heweptbitterlywhenitwastimeforustoleave.當(dāng)我們要離開時,他痛哭起來。
【變式2]他笑得合不攏嘴。
【低檔】Hewaslaughing.
[升級]HewasgrinniiiBfromeartoear.
【變式3]她不敢一個人外出。
【低檔】Shewasafraidofgoingoutalone.
【升級】Shewasscaredofqoingoutalone.
【易錯點提醒二】句式結(jié)構(gòu)之非謂語動詞易混易錯點
【例2】Seeingfromthetopofthemountain,thevillagelooksmorebeautiful.
易錯分析:分詞做狀語時,觀察分詞和主語之間的主、被動關(guān)嘉
【正確1Seenfromthetopofthemountain,thevillagelooksmorebeautiful.
【解析】句意:從山頂上看,這個村莊看起來更美麗了。see與主語thevillage之間是邏輯上的
被動關(guān)系,用過去分詞作狀語。
【變式11Havingexperiencedsomanyfailuresoneafteranother,shefinallypickedherselfup.
易錯分析:分詞做狀語時,觀察分詞和主語之間的主、被東關(guān)系和句中的動作先后關(guān)系
【易錯】Experiencedsomanyfailuresoneafteranother,shefinallypickedherselfup.
【解析】句意:在經(jīng)歷了一個又一個這么多的失敗之后,她最終振作起來了。分詞短語做時間
狀語,分詞experience與主語之間是主動關(guān)系,且由句意可知強調(diào)謂語動作發(fā)生在經(jīng)歷很多失
敗之后,故用現(xiàn)在分詞的完成形式。
【變式2】Devotedtohisresearchwork,theprofessorcaredlittleaboutanyotherthings.
易錯分析:對動詞devote的用法掌握不牢。
【易錯】Devotingtohisresearchwork,theprofessorcaredlittleaboutanyotherthings.
【解析】句意:這位教授專心于他的研究工作,幾乎不在意任何別的事情。分詞與主語的關(guān)系
是邏輯上的被動關(guān)系,bedevotedto,應(yīng)當(dāng)用過去分詞作狀語。
【變式3】Shewasterrifiedatthethoughtofbeingalone.
易錯分析:只關(guān)注句子的意思,忽略詞性和用法「
【易錯】Shewasterrifiedatthethoughtofalone.
【解析】句意:她一想到孤零零的獨自一個人就驚恐不安。介詞。f后面應(yīng)當(dāng)使用動詞的ing形
式,不能直接跟形容詞。
【易錯點提醒三】句式結(jié)構(gòu)之獨立主格易混易錯點
【例3】Shelaughed,hereyesshining.
易錯分析:只關(guān)注句意,未關(guān)注句子結(jié)構(gòu),兩個簡單句之間用逗號直接連接屬于漢語式英語。
【易錯】Shelaughed,hereyeswereshining.
【解析】句意:她笑了,興奮得兩眼放光。謂語動詞是laughed,hereyes與shine之間是邏輯上
主謂關(guān)系,句中無連詞,故使用名詞+現(xiàn)在分詞的獨立主格形式。
【變式1】Shefroze,hermouthhangingopen.她呆住了,張著嘴。
【易錯】Shefroze,hermouthwashangingopen.
[變式2]Jessicasighingwithrelief,thepairhuggedeachotherandshedtearsofexcitement.
【易錯】Jessicasighedwithrelief,thepairhuggedeachotherandshedtearsofexcitement.
【解析】句意:杰西卡如釋重負(fù)地嘆了口氣,兩人互相擁抱,流下了興奮的眼淚。句中謂語動
詞hugged與thepair構(gòu)成主謂關(guān)系,故sigh應(yīng)當(dāng)使用獨立主格結(jié)構(gòu)。
【變式3]shesattherestill,tearsrollingdownhercheeks.
【易錯】shesattherestill,tearsrolleddownhercheeks.
【解析】句意:她靜靜地坐在那兒,眼淚順著臉頰留下來。本句容易誤寫作rolled,句中無連詞,
故不能使用兩處謂語動詞形式,應(yīng)當(dāng)使用獨立
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