【課件】2025屆高考英語應(yīng)用文：審-評-改三個維度+課件

英語應(yīng)用文

審—評--改TeachingobjectivesTolearnhowtoanalyzetherequirementsinpracticalwritingTolearnthescoringcriteriaToscoretheworkswrittenbystudentsaccordingtothestandard原題再現(xiàn)（濟(jì)寧期末）66.假定你是李華，上周末你校舉辦了冬季運(yùn)動會，你目睹了很多感人瞬間，請你給英國朋友Ryan寫封郵件分享其中一個。內(nèi)容包括：1.感人瞬間；2.你的感想。注意：1.寫作詞數(shù)應(yīng)為80個左右；2.請按如下格式在答題卡的相應(yīng)位置作答。審題文體：背景分析：

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寫信對象：三.寫作要點(diǎn)：書信，朋友之間（非正式）上周末（過去式）你們學(xué)校運(yùn)動員Ryan(李華的外國朋友：對等關(guān)系)介紹感人瞬間+個人感想篇章構(gòu)思第一段：第二段：第三段：引入話題描述感人瞬間表達(dá)感想Whatsportseventscanyouthinkof?Trackandfieldmeets:100-meterdash/race

200-meterdash

therelayrace

highjump

longjumpskipropeshotput（鉛球）

tug-of–war(拔河)Ballgames:basketballgame

footballmatch

badmintoncompetition

tabletennis第一段：引入話題簡要提及上周末學(xué)校舉辦了冬季運(yùn)動會，引出要分享一個感人瞬間的主題，讓朋友了解郵件背景。

DearRyan,Howareyou?Lastweekend,ourschoolheldanexcitingWinterSportsMeeting.Itwasfilledwithintensecompetitionsand,moreimportantly,manyheartwarmingmoments.Ican'twaittoshareoneofthemwithyou第二段：描述感人瞬間(Body)Whattouchingmomentscanyoudescribe?OlympicMotto

Faster,Higher,Stronger更團(tuán)結(jié)Together(2021)必修一Unit3Developingideas真題再現(xiàn)

2022年全國新課標(biāo)卷I第二節(jié)(滿分25分)

閱讀下面材料，根據(jù)其內(nèi)容和所給段落開頭語續(xù)寫兩段，使之構(gòu)成一篇完整的短文。

Itwasthedayofthebigcross-countryrun.Studentsfromsevendifferentprimaryschoolsinandaroundthesmalltownwerewarmingupandwalkingtheroute(路線)throughthickevergreenforest.IlookedaroundandfinallyspottedDavid,whowasstandingbyhimselfofftothesidebyafence.Hewassmallfortenyearsold.Hisusualbigtoothysmilewasabsenttoday.Iwalkedoverandaskedhimwhyhewasn’twiththeotherchildren.Hehesitatedandthensaidhehaddecidednottorun.

Whatwaswrong?Hehadworkedsohardforthisevent!

Iquicklysearchedthecrowdfortheschool’scoachandaskedhimwhathadhappened.“Iwasafraidthatkidsfromotherschoolswouldlaughathim,”heexplaineduncomfortably.“Igavehimthechoicetorunornot,andlethimdecide.”Ibitbackmyfrustration(懊惱).Iknewthecoachmeantwell—hethoughthewasdoingtherightthing.AftermakingsurethatDavidcouldrunifhewanted,Iturnedtofindhimcomingtowardsme,hissmallbodyrockingfromsidetosideasheswunghisfeetforward.

Davidhadabraindiseasewhichpreventedhimfromwalkingorrunninglikeotherchildren,butatschoolhisclassmatesthoughtofhimasaregularkid.Healwaysparticipatedtothebestofhisabilityinwhatevertheyweredoing.ThatwaswhynoneofthechildrenthoughtitunusualthatDavidhaddecidedtojointhecross-countryteam.Itjusttookhimlonger—that’sall.Davidhadnotmissedasinglepractice,andalthoughhealwaysfinishedhisrunlongaftertheotherchildren,hedidalwaysfinish.Asaspecialeducationteacherattheschool,IwasfamiliarwiththechallengesDavidfacedandwasproudofhisstrongdetermination.

Para.1Wesatdownnexttoeachother,butDavidwouldn’tlookatme.

Para.2IwatchedasDavidmoveduptothestartinglinewiththeotherrunners.Para.2IwatchedasDavidmoveduptothestartinglinewiththeotherrunners.Withablastofthegun,Davidtriedhisbesttoshootfromthestartline,buthefailed.Painfulandabitembarrassedashewas,hestilldraggedhisfeettokeepmovingforward.Thesunwasbeatingdown,thehotweathersuffocating.Afterwhatseemedyears,David,rockinghissmallbodylikeacatonahotbrick,eventuallyfinishedhisrunasthelastone.Whenapproachingthefinishline,heburstintoabigtoothysmileandwavedtomewithexcitement,crying“Imadeit!Imadeit!”Allthekidsincludingthosefromotherschoolseruptedintoabigapplause,cheeringforhisdeterminationandpersistence.Atthatmoment,aflushofadmirationandjoysweptoverme.Generalintroduction:BackgroundWhathesaw/heardHowhefelt選擇性必修一Unit3第二段：描述感人瞬間詳細(xì)講述在長跑比賽中，一位同學(xué)摔倒后，其他同學(xué)放棄競爭名次，紛紛折返去攙扶他，一起沖過終點(diǎn)的場景，重點(diǎn)刻畫同學(xué)們的動作、表情等細(xì)節(jié)。Duringthe1500-meterrace,thetrackwasicyinsomeparts.Onerunnerslippedandfellheavily.Insteadofseizingthechancetospeedahead,severalnearbyrunnersimmediatelystoppedintheirtracks.Theyturnedbackwithouthesitation,theirfacesfullofconcern.Withgreatcare,theyhelpedthefallenclassmateupandsupportedhim,stepbystep,towardsthefinishline.Thecrowd,whichhadbeensilentforamoment,eruptedintothunderousapplause.第三段：表達(dá)感想闡述這個瞬間讓自己看到了同學(xué)間真摯的友誼、團(tuán)結(jié)精神，以及超越比賽勝負(fù)的高尚品質(zhì)，表明此事對自己的觸動。/體育精神合理的廢話Feelings–體育精神類Everysinglememberoftheteamtookpainstofightinthegame.Strongteamspiritcontributesgreatlytotheirsuccess.Winninggoldinthecompetitioncapturetheteam’scompetitivespirit.Their

perseverancepaidoffwithanepiccomebackagainstthedefendingchampion.Showingastrongwill/thesteeliestnerves,theyplayedaclosematchagainst…他們表現(xiàn)出堅(jiān)強(qiáng)的意志/鋼鐵般的意志，與對手進(jìn)行了一場勢均力敵的比賽…Thismomentreallytouchedmedeeply.Itmademerealizethatinourschoollife,friendshipandunityarefarmorepreciousthanwinningarace.It'sthesequalitiesthatmakeourschoolcommunitysowarmandstrong.Ibelievesuchbeautifulmomentscanalsobefoundeverywhereinyourschoollife.Hopeyou'rehavingagreattime!DearRyan,Howisitgoing?Youwon’tbelieveit—the4×400mrelayatourWinterSportsMeettotallystolethespotlight!Thestorygoeslikethis.Ourleadrunnerwasracingtowardsvictory,whenoutofnowhere,hetrippedandfelljustafewmetersfromthefinishline,spraininghisankle.Despitetheintensepain,hestruggledtohisfeetandinchedtowardsthefinishlinedeterminedly,whichearnedgreatcheersofencouragementfromthecrowd,fuelinghisresolve.Finally,hemadeit.Hisperseveranceisadmirableandinspiring,servingasapowerfulreminderthatweshouldnevergiveupeasilywhenstrivingforourgoals,howeverdifficultthecircumstances.Stayintouchandexchangemoreofourlife’sbeautifulstoriesinthefuture.Bestregards,LiHua譯文：親愛的瑞安：

最近怎么樣？你絕對想不到，我們冬季運(yùn)動會的4×400米接力賽成了全場焦點(diǎn)！

事情是這樣的。我們的第一棒選手一路領(lǐng)先，眼看就要沖線，卻突然在離終點(diǎn)線幾米遠(yuǎn)的地方絆倒了，扭傷了腳踝。盡管疼痛難忍，他還是掙扎著站起來，一瘸一拐地向終點(diǎn)線挪去，這種堅(jiān)定的毅力贏得了觀眾陣陣加油聲，也激勵著他繼續(xù)前進(jìn)。最終，他成功沖線。他的堅(jiān)韌不拔令人欽佩，也鼓舞著我們，無論情況多么艱難，都不要輕易放棄。

期待未來能與你分享更多生活中的美好故事，保持聯(lián)系。評分標(biāo)準(zhǔn)評分標(biāo)準(zhǔn)評分標(biāo)準(zhǔn)評分標(biāo)準(zhǔn)評分標(biāo)準(zhǔn)passionforamountsof大量的，修飾不可數(shù)名詞SharethemostimpressiveonewasmovedcompetitionUnexpectedly，hetrippedandfelljustafewmetersfromthefinishline,spraininghisankle.10分錯誤分析與修改

表達(dá)較生硬，“substantial”在這里使用不太合適，可改為“Isawmanytouchingmomentsinthisevent.”

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