高中英語作文讀后續(xù)寫初體驗課件

讀后續(xù)寫初體驗continuationwriting

134562Ifyouareaskedtodividethesepicturesintotwoparts,whatwillyoudowiththem?Notethatonepartisforreadingandtheotherpartisforwritinginthecontinuationwriting.Observethemcarefully134562(Partoneisfrom__to___)(Parttwoisfrom__to__)Howtodividethesepicturesintotwoparts?P1P3P4P6aimsto_f_____theproblemaimsto__s_____theproblemindolveReadingWritingTurningpointHowtodrinksummaryNarrativereadingisto_______theproblem.Narrativewritingisto_______theproblemfindsolve需要讀的故事需要寫的故事讀什么怎么寫①

IwassittingnexttoMissyinmy9th-gradeworldhistoryclasswhenMrs.Bartlettannouncedanewproject:Ingroups,weweretocreateanewspaperabouttheculturewewerestudying.③Afterthebellrangthenextday,MissyandIwaitedanxiouslyasMrs.Bartlettstartedtocalloutnames.Whenshereachedgroupthree,Missy’snamewascalled.④ThenIheardit.Thelastgroup:Mauro,Juliette,Rachel,Karina!Icouldfeeltearswellinmyeyes.HowcouldIfacebeinginthatgroup-theboy,Mauro,whobarelyspokeEnglishandhislackoffriends;Juliette,who,fromWestAsia,wasalwayscoveredbylongskirtstoherankles;andtheothergirlwhoworeoddclothes.Oh,howIwantedtobewithmyfriends!先細讀：記敘文的六要素六何分析法WhenWhatWhereHowWhoWhyI(Karina),Mrs.Bartlett,Mauro,Juliette,Rachelthenextday

inmy9th-gradeworldhistoryclassStorymountain

narrativeperspective(敘述視角)andwritingstyle(寫作風格)thewritingpurpose--theme事件分析——Storymountain【W(wǎng)hat】BuildUpConflictSolutionBeginningEndingPara1:Mrs.Bartlettannouncedanewproject:Ingroups,weweretocreateanewspaperabouttheculturewewerestudying.I(Karina):__________________Para4:Thelastgroup:Mauro,Juliette,Rachel,Karina!Icouldfeeltearswellinmyeyes.HowcouldIfacebeinginthatgroup.

I(Karina):______________________

Para5-7:

KnowingwhatIwastherefor,she(Mrs.Bartlett)lookedatmeandgentlyplacedahandonmyshoulder.續(xù)寫WhathappenedtoIandmygroups?I(Karina):________________________?Para2-3:Onapieceofpaper,wewrotethenamesofthreefriendswewantedinourgroup.Thentheotherthreenameswerecalled.Minewasnotincluded.Theremustbesomemistake!

I(Karina):________________hopefulunbelieveddisappointedcapable&helpful?Mrs.BartlettI（Karina）人物分析【W(wǎng)ho】Icouldfeeltearswellinmyeyes.IfoughtbacktearsasIwalkeduptoMrs.Bartlett.Icouldn’tbelieveitcameoutofmymouth,butitdid.ThenIbravelywalkedtowheretheothersinmygroupwas,satdownandstartedtowork.Aftercollectingalltherequests,Mrs.Bartletttoldusthatshewouldtakeintoconsiderationourchoicesandletusknowtheresultsthenextday.KnowingwhatIwastherefor,shelookedatmeandgentlyplacedahandonmyshoulder.“Ineedyoutohelpthemgetapassinggradeonthisassignment.”I(Karina):_____________________Mrs.Bartlett:________________________kind&brave&determinedgentle&kind&reliableWritingstyleNarrativeperspective敘述視角與寫作風格【How】①IwassittingnexttoMissyinmy9th-gradeworldhistoryclass…②Afterthebellrangthenextday,MissyandIwaitedanxiouslyasMrs.Bartlettstartedtocalloutnames.③ShehadseensomethinginmeevenIhadn’tseen.第一人稱為主：I(Karina)第三人稱為輔：Mrs.Bartlett寫作風格:以細節(jié)描寫為主，有心理、動作、語言、人物描寫①Aftercollectingalltherequests,Mrs.Bartletttoldusthatshewouldtakeintoconsiderationourchoicesandletusknowtheresultsthenextday.②Afterthebellrangthenextday,MissyandIwaitedanxiouslyasMrs.Bartlettstartedtocalloutnames.③HowcouldIfacebeinginthatgroup-theboy,Mauro,whobarelyspokeEnglishandhislackoffriends;Juliette,who,fromWestAsia,wasalwayscoveredbylongskirtstoherankles;andtheothergirlwhoworeoddclothes.Oh,howIwantedtobewithmyfriends!④“Iknowwhatyouwant,Karina,”shesaid,“butyourgroupneedsyou.Ineedyoutohelpthemgetapassinggradeonthisassignment.Willyouhelpthem?”動作描寫心理描寫人物描寫語言描寫情感態(tài)度價值觀分析【W(wǎng)hy】1.主題語境A.人與自然B.人物自我C.人與社會2.主題：Teenagersshould_________eachotherandmakeprogresstogetherinthelearningprocess.help后續(xù)寫：五五拍戲法友情提示一：

續(xù)寫字數(shù)_150_詞左右。少于130字，扣兩分；可以大于150字，沒有上限友情提示二：

續(xù)寫情節(jié)要合乎情理,要有美好的結(jié)局，要積極向上，要與真善美的時代主流相一致1235Mrs.Bartlett說：你們當之無愧！我們竟然能夠得到A的成績,這出乎我們的意料。我明白了：同學們之間要互相幫助，才能共贏。我們流下了激動的淚水。咱班同學鼓掌歡呼，我們小組成員緊緊擁抱在一起。經(jīng)過艱苦的努力，我們終于完成了老師布置的任務(wù)。小組成員積極行動，查找資料。我確定主題，給大家分配任務(wù)。我在思考:怎樣能夠把小組成員組織起來。Para.2:Intheend,Mrs.BartlettgaveusanAonthatassignment.續(xù)寫框架：五五拍戲法Para.1:

Ibravelywalkedtowheretheothersinmygroupwas,satdownandstartedtowork.承上啟下Tip1：確定演員Tip2：確定出場順序承上演員：I&theothersinmygroupTip3：戲份不夠，細節(jié)來湊。情感態(tài)度價值觀升華12345故事結(jié)局演員：Mrs.Bartlett&mygroupmembers&otherstudents4①②⑥⑦③⑤⑧⑨④人稱保持一致人稱保持一致DetailsAppearance/Nature/Feature外貌、性格、特征描寫

Behavior/Actions/Verbs動作、行為描寫

Emotions/Feelings情感、情緒、心理活動描寫Conversations/Languages

語言、對話描寫細節(jié)要為情節(jié)服務(wù)細節(jié)構(gòu)成線索通過細節(jié)描寫呈現(xiàn)出情節(jié)的________UP---DOWN--UP跌宕起伏語言表達：列草稿Para.1:ThenIbravelywalkedtowheretheothersinmygroupwas,satdownandstartedtowork.Iwasthinkingabouthowtoorganizegroupmembers.Groupmembersactivelytookactionandsearchedforinformation.Ideterminedthethemeandassignedtaskstoeveryone.Afterhardwork,wefinallycompletedthetaskassignedbytheteacher.Tip4：正確使用時態(tài)(延續(xù)原文的時態(tài))，語態(tài)1我在思考:怎樣能夠把小組成員組織起來。①5經(jīng)過艱苦的努力，我們終于完成了老師布置的任務(wù)。②2我確定主題，給大家分配任務(wù)。⑥3小組成員積極行動，查找資料。⑦語言表達：列草稿Mrs.Bartlettsaid,"Youdeserveit!"Iunderstand

thatclassmatesneedtohelpeachotherinordertoachievemutualbenefit.Para.2:Intheend,Mrs.BartlettgaveusanAonthatassignment.Thewholeclassapplaudedandcheered,whileourgroupmembershuggedtightlytogether.Tearsofexcitementrolleddownourcheeks.WeweresurprisedtoreceiveanAscore.Tip4：正確使用時態(tài)(延續(xù)原文的時態(tài))，語態(tài)我們竟然能夠得到A的成績,這出乎我們的意料。1③我明白了：同學們之間要互相幫助，才能共贏。5⑤Mrs.Bartlett說：你們當之無愧！2⑧咱班同學鼓掌歡呼，我們小組成員緊緊擁抱在一起。3⑨我們流下了激動的淚水。4④連句成篇:T（transitionalwords）E(emotion)A(action)M(monologue)

Paragraph1:

Ibravelywalkedtowheretheothersinmygroupwas,satdownandstartedtowork.

FirstIwasthinkingverycarefullyabouthowtoorganizegroupmembers.Fourofusbegantotalkabouttheculturewewouldchoosetomakethenewspaper

andthenIassignedtaskstoeveryone.Weactivelytookaction——MaurowhowasinchargeofsearchingforinformationontheInternet;

Juliette,

whowasresponsiblefordrawingillustrationsfornewspapers;RachelandIwhowerebusyinorganizinginformationcollectedfromothers.

And,afterhardwork,wefinallycompletedthetaskassignedbytheteacher.Paragraph2:Intheend,Mrs.BartlettgaveusanAonthatassignment.

Tooursurprise,wehaveachievedsuchexcellentresults.Thewholeclassapplaudedandcheered,whileourgroupmembershuggedtightlytogether.“Congratulations!”

Mrs.Bartlettsaid,"Youdeserveit!"Thewholeclassapplaudedandcheered,whileourgroupmembershuggedtightlytogether.Tearsofexcitementrolleddownourcheeks.Iknowclassmatesneedtohelpeachotherinordertoachievesuccess.

AndI’mhappytohavesuchagoodteacherandexcellentclassma