優(yōu)秀作文評(píng)析（三）——看圖作文123

1、優(yōu)秀作文評(píng)析（三）看圖作文1【習(xí)作要求】看圖寫話 根據(jù)所給圖示，以“Wang Lei's Busy Day”為題，寫一篇不少于50字的短文，內(nèi)容必須符合圖意，語意連貫，句式規(guī)范，字跡工整。（正文第一句已給出） Wang Lei's Busy Day      It was March 8th yesterday._ _ _ 【參考范文】 It was March 8th yesterday. It was Women's Day. Wang Lei wanted to do something for his mother. He

2、 went shopping and bought much food. Then he cleaned the room. He did his best to do some cooking. When his mother came back after work, she was very happy. Wang Lei was very tired, but he felt pleased. （58個(gè)詞） 【名師點(diǎn)評(píng)】 先“看準(zhǔn)題意”：題目是Wang Lei's Busy Day。寫作要圍繞王雷一天中所忙碌的事情的順序展開。描述昨天的事應(yīng)該用過去時(shí)。從題意理解中即可“規(guī)范格式

3、”：本文用記敘文格式去寫。再“按點(diǎn)組句”： （1）3月8日為婦女節(jié)。It was Womens Day. （2）王雷去商店購物。Wang Lei went shopping and bought much food. （3）王雷打掃衛(wèi)生。He cleaned the room. （4）他燒飯。母親回家很高興。He did the cooking. When his mother came back, she was very happy. 完成組句后，“連句成段”，可加上句子間的銜接句子。如在（1）與（2）之間可加上Wang Lei wanted to do something for his

4、 mother.在最后可再談王雷一天的感受：He was very tired, but he felt happy.把這些句子連成段后，最后“通篇潤色”。 優(yōu)秀作文評(píng)析（三）看圖作文2【習(xí)作要求】看圖組句 根據(jù)所給圖畫和提示詞語，寫出意思連貫、符合邏輯的四句話。每幅圖只寫一句話，所給提示詞語必須都用上。（注意：只抄提示語不得分） 提示： （1）It was Tree Planting Day yesterday. （2）early, morning, I, go, in my old clothes. （3）we, help, each other, dig, hole, large eno

5、ugh, for, trees. （4）plant, some, along, school, playground. （5）from now on, water, tree, often, possible. 優(yōu)秀作文評(píng)析（三）看圖作文3【習(xí)作要求】看圖作文 根據(jù)圖示，寫一篇80詞左右的短文。要求故事完整，句子通順，內(nèi)容與圖片相符。 參考詞匯：newspaper (報(bào)紙)，bird (鳥)，nature (自然) 【參考范文】 One day my uncle was reading a newspaper and learned that birds were our friends. W

6、e should get alone well with them. He looked at his nice bird in the cage, and decided to let it fly back homenature. He took the cage with the bird in it and went to a little hill near his house by bike. He went home with the empty cage. When he got back, he sat in a chair and had a rest. A moment

7、later, to his surprise, he found the bird back in the cage. 【名師點(diǎn)評(píng)】 分析：該例四幅圖畫描述的是一位先生保護(hù)動(dòng)物的故事，內(nèi)容貼近考生的生活實(shí)際，有利于對考生進(jìn)行保護(hù)生態(tài)平衡、保護(hù)地球環(huán)境的教育。內(nèi)容要點(diǎn)是： （1）看報(bào)（Let Birds Fly）；（2）上山去放飛籠中鳥； （3）提著空籠返家； （4）驚奇地發(fā)現(xiàn)鳥兒重飛回籠。 通過觀圖、分析、判斷，列出了要點(diǎn)，可寫草稿，再進(jìn)行潤色，注意運(yùn)用簡單的、熟悉的句型結(jié)構(gòu)，檢查要點(diǎn)有無遺漏，注意拼寫、詞匯、語法及搭配上是否有誤。 說明：看圖作文是從直觀入手，通過觀察、分析、理解，運(yùn)用聯(lián)想，將圖畫語言轉(zhuǎn)換成書面文字的寫作過程。答題的思路和方法如下：首先，觀察圖畫，弄清故事梗概。仔細(xì)觀察每幅圖畫的內(nèi)容，抓住圖中的主要情節(jié)，把握關(guān)鍵的信息與聯(lián)系，諸如人物、時(shí)間、地點(diǎn)、動(dòng)作等。其次，明確信息，編擬提綱。經(jīng)過認(rèn)真的觀察和分析，我們掌握了每幅圖的主要信息。為了在表達(dá)中不漏要點(diǎn)，可為每幅圖配上一個(gè)提綱性的句子，即用一句話表達(dá)這幅畫的大意，這幾句話實(shí)際上就是短文的寫作提綱。有了提綱，我們在寫作過程中就能做到重點(diǎn)突出，有條理，不會(huì)離題。再次，依據(jù)圖示、提綱，連句擴(kuò)寫成篇。連句成文時(shí)，要按照一定的順序和圖畫間的關(guān)系，中間加上一些符合邏輯關(guān)系的過渡詞、句，從