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1、o everyone, in our presenion today, we are going to look at apractical mobile device, which aims to solve food safety problems forwhite collars. We divide this presenion(it is divided)o 3 parts.ly,I will show the sol problems (problem identified)we want to solve andourmarket. Then, my partnerwillrod

2、uce thefunction,usage and technology support of our product. Finally,willl aboutour marketing strategies and operation plan. 要加在后面看你 無所謂的Before I start my part(get started), lets focus on this picture.It clearlyshowshowst from 2004 to 2012, food safety problem is increasingraly in China and it also

3、has been one of the most serious sol iesall over the world. So, whats make your food unsafe? We must havebeen (so) 可以加個(gè) so 聽起來更激動(dòng)。familiar with these names（words） from news: coloring agent, Tony red, heavy metal, chemicalreagent. In fact, these harmful substanare threatening our healllthe time but w

4、e cant see （ l）them from a dish with our naked eyes.Who is most closest to these harmful substan?(可以換成 who facemore risks of takinghese harmful substann ordinary prople? )(感覺有點(diǎn)看不懂，要不這樣寫？who face more these （手指著 PPT）n others?) The answer must be white-collar. According to a survey inChina, 20% white

5、collars often eat fried food, 60% eat take-out food and30% usually eat the midnight snack. Becides, they often eat overnightch box and also frequent roadside snack. They dont care aboutwhether it is good for their health 這句話有點(diǎn)和的想法相悖了白領(lǐng)應(yīng)該是很關(guān)心她們的健康才買的產(chǎn)品的。(那這么寫？theydont want to spend a lot of time to c

6、heck what isheir food) and justwant to save time to finish their work on time. So they often eat the foodt contains harmful substanI mentioned before which would resultin sickness or even worse. To save (save。有點(diǎn)。怎么說?？梢哉f tomake things better for 白領(lǐng))white collars, we designed our product tolet them kn

7、ow what they eat on earnd manage their eating habits.Obviously, we are not alonehis field（之前沒有提過這個(gè) field。把移動(dòng)行業(yè)提出來吧。好像也不能算醫(yī)療。這算什么行業(yè)呢？。）. There are some similar/relavent 之類的形容詞 products,such as “Elephant Nose” and “ ”. In addition, iiMedia Research showst nowadays moren two thousands similar APPs have been mobile medical？proed in China, and the scale of Chimarket was 12.53 bil in 2012.But, we are spe（l unique and initiative 獨(dú)特和首創(chuàng)） one. On the onehand,mphasize the sol responsibility