測評卷作文一+廣東一模+-約稿信課件

缺點：1.審題不清楚（直接寫成了建議信模板）2.過渡不自然（中間段落）3.自我介紹那句話仍然不熟，導致出錯Iamastudent，whostudyinginguangmingnationalschool.4.有一個同學分段，一點一段5.背的句子還是出現單詞錯誤如Herearemysuggestionsasfollow.I’mwrittingthisletter....writting寫錯suggestions沒加s6.缺開頭稱呼結尾7.內容不夠建議：背好模板靈活運用仔細審題寫對單詞句子寫滿寫漂亮缺點：(周測一）范文：Deareditor，（自我介紹）IamLiHua,astudentstudyinginGuangmingInternationalSchool.（寫信背景/原因）Inordertorespondtoprotectingteenagers‘eyesight，ourschoolEnglishnewspaperplanstocallforpapersonthistopic，whichIamextremelyinterestedin.（寫信目的）soI’mwrtingtoparticipateinthiswritingcontest.

（與第三點保護視力的建議的過渡）Withthedevelopmentofscienceandtechnology，nearsightednessisbecomingmoreandmorecommonandhavingabadeffectonpeople‘slife，especiallystudentsatyoungage.

Therefore，thewholesocietyaresupposedtotakeactiontoprotectteenagers’eyesight.（引出建議123）

Tobeginwith，bothlocalgovernmentandschoolsshouldpaymoreattentiontoourstudyburden.(周測一）范文：Besides，asstudents，it‘sagoodideathatweshouldtakepartinmoreoutdooractivities，suchasplayingbasketball，runningandsoon.Lastbutnotleast，themostimportantthingisthatwemustcutdownonscreentimeandgetridofaddictiontocomputersorsmartphones.Inaword，onlyinthiswaycanweprotectoureyesightandhaveabrighterfuture.（總結）IsincerelyhopemyessaycanmeetyourqualificationsexactlyandIwouldappreciateitverymuchifyoucanadoptmyarticle.（結合實際的結尾）Besides，asstudents，it‘sagoo廣東一模擬作文Deareditor，（自我介紹）IamLiHua,ahighschoolstudentwhoisenthusiasticaboutreadingthenewspaper/journalcalledEnglishMonthlysetupbyourSchool.（寫信背景/原因）KnowingourschoolEnglishnewspaperplanstocallforopinions,Iamextremelyinterestedinit.（寫信目的）SoI’mwritingtogivemypersonalopinionsonmyfavoritenewspaper.廣東一模擬作文Deareditor，

該報的優(yōu)點：

Inmyopinion,EnglishMonthlyhasmanyadvantages.Foronething,

it’srichincontent,rangingfromeconomytocivilization.Foranother,it’saguidetoEnglishlearning.Throughit,Icanhaveagoodknowledgeofwhat’sgoingonathomeandabroadandI’veimprovedmyEnglishreadingskills.建議：IfonlyyoucouldintroducesomemoreaboutChinesetraditionalcultureandinspirationalstoriesintheculturecolumn/section.Forexample,youcouldintroducemoreChinesefestivals’originsandstoriesaboutthefestivals.Ihopemyopinionscanbeofhelptoyou.HereIreallyhopeEnglishMonthlywillattractmorereaders.該報的優(yōu)點：Inmyopinion,Engli約稿信是指報紙，雜志，文化欄目等媒體邀請別人寫稿的信件。在信中需要介紹該媒體的欄目特點和媒體的受眾范圍。在約稿時要指定稿件的內容（約稿發(fā)起人既可以規(guī)定要寫作的內容，也可以讓被約稿人根據媒體和欄目的性質自己擬定寫作題目和內容），并且要約定稿件大致的篇幅和交稿日期。8.約稿信8.約稿信step1寫作思路第一段：邀請對方寫稿件(或目的)；第二段：介紹欄目或媒體的特點和受眾范圍。稿件內容，標題。長度和交稿日期。第三段：表達希望得到對方的回復。約稿函約稿函1.我想請你為…寫一篇文章______________________2.你可以寫一些關于…______________________3.…是很受歡迎的______________________4.它刊登由…寫的文章______________________5.你能寫點關于…嗎？______________________Iwouldliketoaskyoutowriteanarticlefor.Youcanwritesomethingabout…isverypopularamongusstudentsItcarriesarticleswrittenby…常用語塊6.我們會特別歡迎有關…的文章。_______________________7.你可以寫與…相關的任何東西。_______________________8.約120個詞就好。_______________________9.我們在…之前能收到你的文章嗎？_______________________10.體育專欄/娛樂專欄_______________________Wouldyoupleasewritesomethingabout…Wewouldespeciallywelcomearticlesabout…Youcanwritesomethingrelevantto…About120wordswouldbefine.11.使某人了解_______________________13.請將文章發(fā)送至..._______________________Anarticlewithin400wordswouldbefine.Couldwehaveyourarticlebefore…?sportscolumn/entertainmentcolumnmake/helpsb.knowsth.aboutpleasesendyourcompositionto1.我想請你為…寫一篇文章______________Practice注意寫作的思路框架Practice假定你是李華，你校英文報“外國文化”欄目擬刊登美國節(jié)日風俗和中學生生活的短文。請給美國朋友Peter寫信約稿，要點如下：1.欄目介紹。2.稿件內容；3.稿件長度：約400詞匯4.交稿日期：4月2日前天注意：1.詞數100左右；2.可以適當增加細節(jié)，以使行文連貫的；3.開頭語已為你寫好。約稿信：寫作練習1假定你是李華，你校英文報“外國文化”欄目擬寫作練習1要點整合：第一步：邀請對方寫稿件(目的)；*我想請你為我校英文報寫一篇文章。第二步：介紹欄目或媒體的特點和受眾范圍。*“外國文化”欄目很受師生歡迎。*它刊登很多外國友人寫的關于國外文化的文章。第三步：稿件內容,長度和交稿日期。你能寫點美國節(jié)日風俗方面的東西嗎？我們特別歡迎有關中學生生活的文章。順便，約400個詞就好。我們能在4月2日前收到你的文章嗎？第四步：期待回復。spendtheirholidaysandfestivals，thelifeofAmericanhighschoolstudents寫作練習1要點整合：第一步：邀請對方寫稿件(目的)；DearPeter,

Iwouldliketoaskyoutowriteanarticleforourschool’sEnglishnewspaper.The“ForeignCultures”sectioninournewspaperisverypopularamongusstudents.Itcarriesarticleswrittenbyforeignfriendsabouttheculturesoftheirhomecountries.WouldyoupleasewritesomethingaboutthecultureinyourpartofUnitedStates?AndwewouldespeciallywelcomearticlesabouthowAmericansspendtheirholidaysandfestivalsandtheeverydaylifeofAmericanseniorhighstudents?Youcanwriteanythingrelevantsolongasitisinterestingandinformative.400wordswouldbefine.CouldIhaveyourarticlebeforeApril2nd?

Iamlookingforwardtohearingfromyou.Yours,LiHua參考范文1DearPeter,參考范文1廣東一模的詞匯1.staff2.crew3.emergencypowersupply4.instead5.makeabigdifference6.immigrant7.landmark8.mainstream9.search10.research11.explore/exploration12.explode/explosion13.beequippedwith14.remotelyoperatedvehicle15.weighsbdown16.liftup17.lightup廣東一模的詞匯1.staff2.crew3.作者的態(tài)度贊成：supportive,approveof/support/infavorof/favorable/agreewith反對：disapprove,disagree,objectto中立：neutral,indifferent懷疑:doubtful,

criticize樂觀：positive,optimistic,active消極：negative,pessimistic,passive幽默：humorous羨慕：environs關切：caring不關心的、冷漠的：uncaring,indefferent厭惡：disgusting/hate擔憂：concerned/worried失望：disappointed沮喪：upset容忍：tolerant作者的態(tài)度贊成：supportive,approveof作文1.一位在、、學習的學生2.為了響應、、

3.征集、、的文章/意見4.減少屏幕時間5.內容豐富，覆蓋經濟到文化6.掌握國內外發(fā)生的事情7.要是你可以在文化專欄中多介紹有關中國傳統(tǒng)文化和勵志的故事該多好?。?.我真心地希望我的文章可以很好地達到你的要求！9.它刊登很多外國友人寫的關于國外文化的文章10.我們特別歡迎….的文章作文1.一位在、、學習的學生作文1.一位在、、學習的學生astudentstudyingin

2.為了響應、、Inordertorespondtodoing/n

3.征集、、的文章/意見callforpaperson/callforopinions4.減少屏幕時間cutdownonscreentime

5.內容豐富，覆蓋經濟到文化it’srichincontent,rangingfromeconomytocivilization6.掌握國內外發(fā)生的事情haveagoodknowledgeofwhat’sgoingonathomeandabroad

7.要是你可以在文化專欄中多介紹有關中國傳統(tǒng)文化和勵志的故事該多好??！IfonlyyoucouldintroducesomemoreaboutChinesetraditionalcultureandinspirational

storiesintheculturecolumn/section

8.我真心地希望我的文章可以很好地達到你的要求！Isincerelyhopemyessaycanmeetyourqualificationsexactly.9.它刊登很多外國友人寫的關于國外文化的文章Itcarries/publishedarticleswrittenbyforeignfriendsabouttheculturesoftheirhomecountries.

10.我們特別歡迎….的文章wewouldespeciallywelcomearticlesabout….作文1.一位在、、學習的學生astudentstudyi缺點：1.審題不清楚（直接寫成了建議信模板）2.過渡不自然（中間段落）3.自我介紹那句話仍然不熟，導致出錯Iamastudent，whostudyinginguangmingnationalschool.4.有一個同學分段，一點一段5.背的句子還是出現單詞錯誤如Herearemysuggestionsasfollow.I’mwrittingthisletter....writting寫錯suggestions沒加s6.缺開頭稱呼結尾7.內容不夠建議：背好模板靈活運用仔細審題寫對單詞句子寫滿寫漂亮缺點：(周測一）范文：Deareditor，（自我介紹）IamLiHua,astudentstudyinginGuangmingInternationalSchool.（寫信背景/原因）Inordertorespondtoprotectingteenagers‘eyesight，ourschoolEnglishnewspaperplanstocallforpapersonthistopic，whichIamextremelyinterestedin.（寫信目的）soI’mwrtingtoparticipateinthiswritingcontest.

（與第三點保護視力的建議的過渡）Withthedevelopmentofscienceandtechnology，nearsightednessisbecomingmoreandmorecommonandhavingabadeffectonpeople‘slife，especiallystudentsatyoungage.

Therefore，thewholesocietyaresupposedtotakeactiontoprotectteenagers’eyesight.（引出建議123）

Tobeginwith，bothlocalgovernmentandschoolsshouldpaymoreattentiontoourstudyburden.(周測一）范文：Besides，asstudents，it‘sagoodideathatweshouldtakepartinmoreoutdooractivities，suchasplayingbasketball，runningandsoon.Lastbutnotleast，themostimportantthingisthatwemustcutdownonscreentimeandgetridofaddictiontocomputersorsmartphones.Inaword，onlyinthiswaycanweprotectoureyesightandhaveabrighterfuture.（總結）IsincerelyhopemyessaycanmeetyourqualificationsexactlyandIwouldappreciateitverymuchifyoucanadoptmyarticle.（結合實際的結尾）Besides，asstudents，it‘sagoo廣東一模擬作文Deareditor，（自我介紹）IamLiHua,ahighschoolstudentwhoisenthusiasticaboutreadingthenewspaper/journalcalledEnglishMonthlysetupbyourSchool.（寫信背景/原因）KnowingourschoolEnglishnewspaperplanstocallforopinions,Iamextremelyinterestedinit.（寫信目的）SoI’mwritingtogivemypersonalopinionsonmyfavoritenewspaper.廣東一模擬作文Deareditor，

該報的優(yōu)點：

Inmyopinion,EnglishMonthlyhasmanyadvantages.Foronething,

it’srichincontent,rangingfromeconomytocivilization.Foranother,it’saguidetoEnglishlearning.Throughit,Icanhaveagoodknowledgeofwhat’sgoingonathomeandabroadandI’veimprovedmyEnglishreadingskills.建議：IfonlyyoucouldintroducesomemoreaboutChinesetraditionalcultureandinspirationalstoriesintheculturecolumn/section.Forexample,youcouldintroducemoreChinesefestivals’originsandstoriesaboutthefestivals.Ihopemyopinionscanbeofhelptoyou.HereIreallyhopeEnglishMonthlywillattractmorereaders.該報的優(yōu)點：Inmyopinion,Engli約稿信是指報紙，雜志，文化欄目等媒體邀請別人寫稿的信件。在信中需要介紹該媒體的欄目特點和媒體的受眾范圍。在約稿時要指定稿件的內容（約稿發(fā)起人既可以規(guī)定要寫作的內容，也可以讓被約稿人根據媒體和欄目的性質自己擬定寫作題目和內容），并且要約定稿件大致的篇幅和交稿日期。8.約稿信8.約稿信step1寫作思路第一段：邀請對方寫稿件(或目的)；第二段：介紹欄目或媒體的特點和受眾范圍。稿件內容，標題。長度和交稿日期。第三段：表達希望得到對方的回復。約稿函約稿函1.我想請你為…寫一篇文章______________________2.你可以寫一些關于…______________________3.…是很受歡迎的______________________4.它刊登由…寫的文章______________________5.你能寫點關于…嗎？______________________Iwouldliketoaskyoutowriteanarticlefor.Youcanwritesomethingabout…isverypopularamongusstudentsItcarriesarticleswrittenby…常用語塊6.我們會特別歡迎有關…的文章。_______________________7.你可以寫與…相關的任何東西。_______________________8.約120個詞就好。_______________________9.我們在…之前能收到你的文章嗎？_______________________10.體育專欄/娛樂專欄_______________________Wouldyoupleasewritesomethingabout…Wewouldespeciallywelcomearticlesabout…Youcanwritesomethingrelevantto…About120wordswouldbefine.11.使某人了解_______________________13.請將文章發(fā)送至..._______________________Anarticlewithin400wordswouldbefine.Couldwehaveyourarticlebefore…?sportscolumn/entertainmentcolumnmake/helpsb.knowsth.aboutpleasesendyourcompositionto1.我想請你為…寫一篇文章______________Practice注意寫作的思路框架Practice假定你是李華，你校英文報“外國文化”欄目擬刊登美國節(jié)日風俗和中學生生活的短文。請給美國朋友Peter寫信約稿，要點如下：1.欄目介紹。2.稿件內容；3.稿件長度：約400詞匯4.交稿日期：4月2日前天注意：1.詞數100左右；2.可以適當增加細節(jié)，以使行文連貫的；3.開頭語已為你寫好。約稿信：寫作練習1假定你是李華，你校英文報“外國文化”欄目擬寫作練習1要點整合：第一步：邀請對方寫稿件(目的)；*我想請你為我校英文報寫一篇文章。第二步：介紹欄目或媒體的特點和受眾范圍。*“外國文化”欄目很受師生歡迎。*它刊登很多外國友人寫的關于國外文化的文章。第三步：稿件內容,長度和交稿日期。你能寫點美國節(jié)日風俗方面的東西嗎？我們特別歡迎有關中學生生活的文章。順便，約400個詞就好。我們能在4月2日前收到你的文章嗎？第四步：期待回復。spendtheirholidaysandfestivals，thelifeofAmericanhighschoolstudents寫作練習1要點整合：第一步：邀請對方寫稿件(目的)；DearPeter,

Iwouldliketoaskyoutowriteanarticleforourschool’sEnglishnewspaper.The“ForeignCultures”sectioninournewspaperisverypopularamongusstudents.Itcarriesarticleswrittenbyforeignfriendsabouttheculturesoftheirhomecountries.WouldyoupleasewritesomethingaboutthecultureinyourpartofUnitedStates?AndwewouldespeciallywelcomearticlesabouthowAmericansspendtheirholidaysandfestivalsandtheeverydaylifeofAmericanseniorhighstudents?Youcanwriteanythingrelevantsolongasitisinterestingandinformative.400wordswouldbefine.CouldIhaveyourarticlebeforeApril2nd?

Iamlookingforwardtohearingfromyou.Yours,LiHua參考范文1DearPeter,參考范文1廣東一模的詞匯1.staff2.crew3.emergencypowersupply4.instead5.makeabigdifference6.immigrant7.landmark8.mainstream9.search10.research11.explore/exploration12.explode/explosion13.beequippedwith14.remotelyoperatedvehicle15.weighsbdown16.liftup17.lightup廣東一模的詞匯1.staff2.crew3.作者的態(tài)度贊成：supportive,app