讀后續(xù)寫：一顆永不消逝的善良的心 講義-高三英語寫作專項

讀后續(xù)寫：OldManDonovan

wasameanmanwhohatedchildren.Hethrewrocksatthemandevenshotatthemwithashotgun.Atleastthat’swhatwehadheard.Hissmall

farm

borderedourneighborhoodwheremyyoungersister,LeighAnn,andIlivedwhenweweregrowingup.Hisfarmwaslong,narrow,andquaint.Itheldtwotreasures.Onewashisbeautifulfruit.Thereweremanyvarietiesoffruit:pears,apples,andlotsmoreIjustcan'tthinkof.Thefruitnaturallydrewthechildrentohisland.Itmadethemintothieves.But

mysisterandI

didn'tdaretotakehisfruitbecauseofthehorriblerumorswehadheardaboutOldManDonovan.One

summer

day,wewereplayinginanearbyfield.Itwastimetoheadbackhome.MysisterandIwerefeelingverydaringthatday.TherewasashortcuttoourhousethatwentthroughtheDonovanfarm.Wethoughthewouldn'tbeabletoseeusrunacrosshispropertyaroundtheluscious

fruit

trees.Wewerealmostthroughthefarmwhenweheard,"Hey,girl!"inagruff,lowvoice.Westoppeddeadinourtracks!Therewewere,facetofacewithOldManDonovan.Ourkneeswereshaking.Wehadvisionsofrockspoundingourbodiesandbulletspiercingourhearts."Comehere,"hesaid,reachinguptooneofhisappletrees.Stillshaking,wewentovertohim.Heheldoutseveralripe,juicy,redapples."Takethesehome,”hecommanded.Wetooktheappleswithsurprisedheartsandranallthewayhome.Ofcourse,LeighAnnandIatetheapples.Astimewenton,weoftenwentthroughOldManDonovan'sfarm,andhekeptongivingusmorelusciousfruit.Oneday,westoppedbytoseehimwhenhewasonhisfrontporch.Wetalkedtohimforhours.Whilehewastalking,werealizedthatwehadfoundtheother

hiddentreasure:thesweet,

kindhearthiddenbehindhisgruffvoice.Soon,hewasoneofourfavoritepeopletotalkto.Unfortunately,

hisfamily

neverseemedtoenjoyour

company.Theyneversmiledor

welcomed

usin.Paragraph1:Everysummer,wewouldvisitMr.Donovanandtalktohim.____________________________Paragraph2:Thenextwinter,wordgotaroundthatOldManDonovanhaddied.

________________一、寫作思路解讀Moreattentionshouldbepaidtothefollowingpoints.1.

Para1抓住段首句的關(guān)鍵詞visit...andtalk.

因此本段要描寫我們見面后的交談，(交談的對話和內(nèi)容不重要，所以應用概括性詞語描述Wetoldhimwhathappenedinourschoollife/Wesharedourhappinessandsorrowwithhiminourlife,especiallysomeinterestingstorieshappenedinourschool。重要的是我們的交談是開心快樂的Weburstintolaughfromtimetotime/Thosehappymomentswespenttogetherlingeraround，快樂的時光轉(zhuǎn)瞬即逝)最后我們成為朋友。2.

根據(jù)Para2段首句die可知，應該在Para1安排死亡預兆，但是是預兆，預兆?？傊琍ara1至少要出現(xiàn)weak,ill,hospital，medicine同一語義場的詞語，否則按故事情節(jié)不合理扣分。3.

Everysummer,wewouldvisitMr.Donovanandtalktohim.When：summer;daytimeWhere：Mr.Donovan’ssmallfarm可根據(jù)when&where對故事鋪開環(huán)境描寫，為下文做鋪墊。(夏日，白天，陽光，藍天，白云，鳥語，花香，清風)(夏日，小農(nóng)場，碩果累累，金燦燦，沉甸甸，香甜可口，小而溫馨)

根據(jù)Para2段首句die可知，

Para2中需簡述die的原因。(可以是年邁身體虛弱，也可以是意外事故)。原因靈活多樣自圓其說即可，但原因也可把故事推向高潮升華主題。(inordertosaveaboywhostolehisfruits,hecametorescuebutdied)5.

Die后的遺愿也可把故事推向高潮升華主題,

故事峰回路轉(zhuǎn),

展現(xiàn)高尚人格關(guān)愛人間讓世界更美好(Hehaddonatedhissmallfarmtothecharitytomakeabetterlifeforthehomelesschildren.Hisactionsmovedthewholecommunitydeeplysothatallofthemhaveanewimpressiononhim…)6.

很多事情可“不言而喻”，一句話可改變形象Hedonatedthefarmtothecharitytohelppeopleinneed.(PeoplestilltalkingaboutMr.Donovanwhowasameanman.Butthistime,peopleknewthathewasagreatmanwithawarmheart./Hetoldusthathewasnotameanman.)/Afteroursharingthestory,ourneighborrealizedMr.Donovan’skindcharacter…7.

抓重點，寫亮點，淡化細枝末節(jié)Havingtalkedtohim,wefoundthathewasreallyfriendlyandhumorousinsteadofwhatwehadheard.8.

Para2專注段首句的關(guān)鍵詞die。描寫聽到這一消息時，我們的反應。以及回扣主題“老人的善良”。When：winter對比summer可根據(jù)when&where對故事鋪開環(huán)境描寫，為下文做鋪墊。(冬天，夜晚，月光，寒風)7.結(jié)尾對比：雖然老人已隨風而逝，但他的善良永不消失參考范文：Paragraph1

Everysummer,wewouldvisitMr.Donovanandtalktohim.Wesharedwithhimourcolorfulexperienceatschoolwhilehekeptgivingouthislusciousfruitstousasusual.Astimewentby,weseemedtobemoreafamilythangoodfriendsandhisfamilygraduallycametogreetuswithawarmsmile.Butonesummer,wewereinformedthathewasseriouslyillandwewereanxiousandrestless,feelinglikesittingonpinsandneedles.Thenextday,werushedstraighttothehospitaltoseehishealthcondition.Weakashewas,hecomfortedusthatitwasn’tabigdeal.Itwasfromhisfamilythatweknewthetruth.OldManDonovanhadfellfromatreewhilelookingafterthefruitsandhisheadwasseriouslyhurtandneedanoperation.Theoperationmightnotsucceedanditwasagamblewhetherhewouldliveordie.Paragraph2Thenextwinter,wordgotaroundthatOldManDonovanhaddied.Hearingthebadnews,mysisterandIjustcouldn’tbelieveituntilwewentbackhomeandsawhissmilingfaceonthewall.Ifeltalumpinmythroat,tearswellingupinmyeyes.Thefamilyapproachedandwelcomedus.“I’msorryforyourloss.”Igavethemabighug.Onmywaybackhome,thewindwhistledthroughthetrees,asifmourningforthedeathofDonovan.Irealizedgonewerethedayswhenwesattogetherchattingwitheachother.Irealizedgonewerethedayswhenwewereluckyenoughtohaveatasteofthelusciousfruitgrownbyhim.However,heleftusahiddentreasure--hiskindheart,whichshallneverdieawaywiththepassageoftime.下水文1：Paragraph1

Everysummer,wewould

visit

Mr.Donovanand

talk

tohim.

Healwaysgrinnedwithenthusiasm,openedthedoorwithanexcitinggreetingandtreateduswithlusciousfruit.Wesharedthehappinessandsorrowwithhim,andhetookitseriouslyandtaughtusprinciples.Hisvoicesoundedgruffandlow,butsweetandkindinside.Heislikeananglewhocomestolightupourlife.Buttooursadness,hehadaseriousillnessandhischildrenhadabandonedhim.Weplayedsomejokesonhimtodelighthim.Wedidn’tleaveuntilthesunwassetting,reddeningthewholesky.Paragraph2Thenextwinter,wordgotaroundthatOldManDonovanhad

died.

Sogrievedwerewethatwetriedtofindhimagainandagain.However,wecouldn’tdenythefactthathehaddiedandhehaddonatedhisfarmtothecharity.Hissweetandkindactionmovedpeopledeeplyinthecommunity.Thisspecialexperiencetaughtusapreciouslessonthatnevershouldwejudgeamanwithoutknowingthewholetruth,andweareexpectedtotreateverythingwiththebestintentions.下水文2：Paragraph1

Everysummer,wewould

visit

Mr.Donovanand

talk

tohim.

Withthewarmsunshinecastonus,wewouldsharethelusciousfruittogetherandhadagreattime.Everytimewewenttovisithim,hegreeteduswithabigsmilewearingonhisface,whichshonelikeadiamond,madeuswarmandpowerful.Wegraduallyrealizedthatmaybewhatwehadheardwaswrong.Withtimegoingby,hishe