讀后續(xù)寫備考指導(dǎo)

建后續(xù)寫備考讀議卷東山交流問題一、山東卷讀后續(xù)寫題型解讀及能力要求二、讀后續(xù)寫閱卷心得（評(píng)分標(biāo)準(zhǔn)及備考建議）三、案例式教學(xué)示范及優(yōu)質(zhì)資源推薦一、山東卷讀后續(xù)寫題型解讀及能力要求提供一段350詞以內(nèi)的語(yǔ)言材料，要求考生依據(jù)該材料內(nèi)容、所給兩段段落開頭語(yǔ)進(jìn)行續(xù)寫（150詞左右），將其發(fā)展成一篇與給定材料有邏輯銜接、情節(jié)合理、完整的短文。Tounderstandisonething,toepressisanotherToappreciateisonething,tocreateisanother王初明教授---“促學(xué)效應(yīng)”1釋放創(chuàng)造力和想象力2融入讀物提供的語(yǔ)境學(xué)習(xí)語(yǔ)言3語(yǔ)言可模仿，內(nèi)容則要?jiǎng)?chuàng)新4順著語(yǔ)篇續(xù)寫，學(xué)習(xí)連貫表達(dá)5補(bǔ)全的是語(yǔ)篇，而非單詞或短語(yǔ)6語(yǔ)言理解與產(chǎn)出結(jié)合緊密，顯著提高外語(yǔ)學(xué)習(xí)效率7對(duì)外語(yǔ)教學(xué)和學(xué)習(xí)幾乎無(wú)負(fù)面影響。一、讀后續(xù)寫題型解讀及能力要求*要求考生在理解一篇不完整文章的基礎(chǔ)上，充分調(diào)動(dòng)想象創(chuàng)新思維，大膽預(yù)測(cè)文章缺失部分的內(nèi)容走勢(shì)，進(jìn)行充滿個(gè)性色彩的設(shè)計(jì)，并用英語(yǔ)進(jìn)行續(xù)寫表達(dá)。所提供短文多以記敘文故事類文章或夾敘夾議類文章為主，故事情節(jié)有曲折有起伏，但故事線索的邏輯性比較強(qiáng)。*創(chuàng)造性邏輯性豐富性1沒有劃線詞，難度增加。2時(shí)間劇情均跨度較大3主題意義鮮明（人與自然，人與社會(huì)，人與自我）4新的評(píng)分標(biāo)準(zhǔn)山東卷讀后續(xù)寫的特點(diǎn)：山東續(xù)寫浙江續(xù)寫總則總分為25分，按7個(gè)檔次評(píng)分總分為25分，按5個(gè)檔次評(píng)分1.內(nèi)容質(zhì)量、完整性、與原文情境融洽；2.詞匯&語(yǔ)法結(jié)構(gòu)準(zhǔn)確恰當(dāng)多樣；3.上下文銜接&全文連貫1.與所給短文&開頭語(yǔ)銜接；2.內(nèi)容豐富&劃線詞使用；3.語(yǔ)法結(jié)構(gòu)&詞匯豐富準(zhǔn)確；4.上下文連貫詞數(shù)少于120的，酌情扣分詞數(shù)少于130，從總分中減去2分22—25分（優(yōu)秀）

1.創(chuàng)造了新穎、豐富、合理的內(nèi)容，富有邏輯性，續(xù)寫完整，與原文情境融洽度高；

2.使用了多樣且恰當(dāng)?shù)脑~匯和語(yǔ)法結(jié)構(gòu)，表達(dá)流暢，語(yǔ)言錯(cuò)誤很少，且完全不影響理解；

3.自然有效地使用了段落間、語(yǔ)句間銜接手段，全文結(jié)構(gòu)清晰，前后呼應(yīng)，意義連貫。21-25分（優(yōu)秀）

1.與所給短文融合度高，與所提供的各段落開頭語(yǔ)銜接合理；

2.內(nèi)容豐富，應(yīng)用了五個(gè)以上短文中標(biāo)出的關(guān)鍵詞語(yǔ)；

3.所使用語(yǔ)法結(jié)構(gòu)和詞匯豐富、準(zhǔn)確，可能有些許錯(cuò)誤，但完全不影響意思表達(dá)；

4.有效地使用了語(yǔ)句間的連接成分，所續(xù)寫短文結(jié)構(gòu)緊湊。山東續(xù)寫浙江續(xù)寫1讀（5-8mins）：原文閱讀信息梳理讀情節(jié)讀語(yǔ)言讀線索2后續(xù)（5-8mins）：潛心構(gòu)思情節(jié)預(yù)設(shè)明確方向關(guān)注“兩線”---情節(jié)線&情感線關(guān)注“四點(diǎn)”---四處銜接3寫（20-25mins）：初稿勾勒潤(rùn)色提升正規(guī)謄寫讀后續(xù)寫基本流程：二、閱卷心得（評(píng)分標(biāo)準(zhǔn)及備考建議）1明確續(xù)寫的評(píng)分標(biāo)準(zhǔn)2反思學(xué)生續(xù)寫中存在的主要問題及應(yīng)對(duì)措施3備考續(xù)寫的幾點(diǎn)思考1明確讀后續(xù)寫的評(píng)分標(biāo)準(zhǔn)評(píng)分:先根據(jù)整體情況對(duì)文章進(jìn)行定檔，然后依據(jù)該檔的相應(yīng)要求來(lái)確定或調(diào)節(jié)檔次，最后打分。打分主要從續(xù)寫內(nèi)容、詞匯語(yǔ)法、篇章結(jié)構(gòu)三方面考慮。1創(chuàng)造情節(jié)的質(zhì)量、續(xù)寫的完整性及與原文情境的融洽度。2詞匯、語(yǔ)法的準(zhǔn)確性、恰當(dāng)性及多樣性。3上下文的銜接和全文的連貫性。讀后續(xù)寫的高考評(píng)分標(biāo)準(zhǔn)各檔次給分范圍和要求:總分為25分，按7個(gè)檔次給分。評(píng)分檔次描

述第七檔（22-25分）

優(yōu)秀檔①創(chuàng)造了新穎、豐富、合理的內(nèi)容，富有邏輯性，續(xù)寫完整，與原文情境融洽度高。②使用了多樣且恰當(dāng)?shù)脑~匯和語(yǔ)法結(jié)構(gòu)，表達(dá)流暢，語(yǔ)言錯(cuò)誤很少，且完全不影響理解。③自然有效地使用了段落間、語(yǔ)句間銜接手段，全文結(jié)構(gòu)清晰，前后呼應(yīng)，意義連貫。讀后續(xù)寫的高考評(píng)分標(biāo)準(zhǔn)各檔次給分范圍和要求:總分為25分，按7個(gè)檔次給分。評(píng)分檔次描

述第六檔（18---21分）

良好檔①創(chuàng)造了比較豐富、合理的內(nèi)容，比較有邏輯性，續(xù)寫比較完整，與原文情境融洽度比較高。②使用了比較多樣且恰當(dāng)?shù)脑~匯和語(yǔ)法結(jié)構(gòu)，有些許語(yǔ)法錯(cuò)誤，不影響理解。③比較有效地使用了段落間銜接手段，全文結(jié)構(gòu)比較清晰，意義比較連貫。讀后續(xù)寫的高考評(píng)分標(biāo)準(zhǔn)各檔次給分范圍和要求:總分為25分，按7個(gè)檔次給分。評(píng)分檔次描

述第五檔（15---17分）

一般檔①創(chuàng)造了基本合理的內(nèi)容，有一定的邏輯性，續(xù)寫基本完整，與原文情境相關(guān)。②使用了比較恰當(dāng)?shù)脑~匯和語(yǔ)法結(jié)構(gòu)，表達(dá)方式不夠多樣，表達(dá)有些錯(cuò)誤，但基本不影響理解。③使用了語(yǔ)句間銜接手段，全文結(jié)構(gòu)比較清晰，意義比較連貫。讀后續(xù)寫的高考評(píng)分標(biāo)準(zhǔn)各檔次給分范圍和要求:總分為25分，按7個(gè)檔次給分。評(píng)分檔次描

述第四檔（11---14分）

較差檔（低級(jí)語(yǔ)法錯(cuò)誤，如主賓格使用混亂，時(shí)態(tài)錯(cuò)誤，拼寫錯(cuò)誤等）①創(chuàng)造了基本完整的故事內(nèi)容，但有的情節(jié)不夠合理或邏輯性不強(qiáng)，與原文情境基本相關(guān)。②使用了簡(jiǎn)單的詞匯和語(yǔ)法結(jié)構(gòu)，有部分語(yǔ)言錯(cuò)誤和不恰當(dāng)之處，個(gè)別部分影響理解。③尚有語(yǔ)句銜接的意識(shí)，全文結(jié)構(gòu)基本清晰，意義基本連貫。續(xù)寫得分技巧：*1）內(nèi)容上鼓勵(lì)大膽想象，有創(chuàng)新意識(shí)（不離奇，重邏輯），情節(jié)豐富，盡可能合理展開，并注意前后文呼應(yīng)，與原文融洽度高。*2）寫作盡可能傳遞正能量要提煉有思想性、體現(xiàn)價(jià)值觀和傳遞正能量的元素（例如珍愛生命，學(xué)會(huì)合作，學(xué)會(huì)感恩等）*3）記敘文語(yǔ)言表達(dá)流暢，避免低級(jí)語(yǔ)法錯(cuò)誤，注意連接詞的正確使用，使上下文連貫；注意句子結(jié)構(gòu)的多樣性和語(yǔ)言的豐富性。*4）檢查，謄寫---檢查文章的連貫性、邏輯性，規(guī)范性。最后謄寫要做到字跡工整，清晰美觀。2反思學(xué)生續(xù)寫中存在的主要問題及應(yīng)對(duì)措施：*閱讀方面，學(xué)生的問題主要是詞匯貧乏和閱讀能力不夠或時(shí)間緊張沒有意識(shí)到解讀文本的重要性；*續(xù)寫寫作部分，主要在內(nèi)容（邏輯性、合理性），詞匯和語(yǔ)法（豐富、準(zhǔn)確），以及語(yǔ)篇（連貫性，前后呼應(yīng)）這三大方面存在問題*文章理解不到位，續(xù)寫情節(jié)與原文脫離。*情節(jié)沒有得以展開，體現(xiàn)不出豐富新穎。*所創(chuàng)設(shè)的情境違背真實(shí)生活，缺乏合理性。*融洽度不高，銜接不合理。*大量對(duì)話無(wú)意義，段落間分布不均衡。*主題升華牽強(qiáng)或跑偏。內(nèi)容（邏輯性、合理性）---情節(jié)構(gòu)建中的問題：詞匯和語(yǔ)法方面存在的問題：*詞匯---使用過多的上義詞，不會(huì)替換相應(yīng)下義詞；重復(fù)使用同一詞語(yǔ)；基礎(chǔ)詞匯拼寫及詞性錯(cuò)誤較多*語(yǔ)法---通篇都是簡(jiǎn)單句的堆積；非謂語(yǔ)的使用出現(xiàn)語(yǔ)法錯(cuò)誤；時(shí)態(tài)、語(yǔ)態(tài)的錯(cuò)誤；低級(jí)語(yǔ)言錯(cuò)誤如主賓格不分，謂語(yǔ)動(dòng)詞單復(fù)數(shù)使用混亂等*銜接不符合邏輯，如要求續(xù)寫的第一段最后一句與所給第二段首句連接不當(dāng)，或兩段間毫不關(guān)聯(lián)；*句句間邏輯不嚴(yán)密，不能有效借助連詞、代詞、副詞等語(yǔ)言手段建立清晰合理的邏輯關(guān)系。語(yǔ)篇的銜接連貫方面：針對(duì)上述問題的應(yīng)對(duì)措施：分期有計(jì)劃地進(jìn)行讀后續(xù)寫專題指導(dǎo)課：*如何有效構(gòu)建續(xù)寫情節(jié)*如何打磨續(xù)寫語(yǔ)言（詞匯和句式兩個(gè)層面）Show,don'ttell!3備考讀后續(xù)寫的幾點(diǎn)思考：1讀后續(xù)寫，讀是基礎(chǔ)。讀的深度決定寫的高度。2要想學(xué)生寫得漂漂亮亮，清清楚楚，大量地道的語(yǔ)言輸入無(wú)疑是必不可少的做好高中三年閱讀規(guī)劃，精讀與泛讀有效結(jié)合。（21世紀(jì)報(bào)，新概念2&3，黑布林英語(yǔ)閱讀，書蟲，典范英語(yǔ)閱讀）3課堂教學(xué)的指導(dǎo)上：可以組織學(xué)生進(jìn)行小組討論，讀寫展示活動(dòng)、小組互評(píng)活動(dòng)等多。同時(shí)，老師們要有步驟地進(jìn)行寫作方法微技能的指導(dǎo)。4寫作輸出方面，幫助學(xué)生規(guī)范寫作，形成素養(yǎng)?？偨Y(jié)歸納如下：學(xué)&教如何寫：1情節(jié)---二條四點(diǎn)定框架細(xì)節(jié)補(bǔ)充指向主題2語(yǔ)言---邏輯連貫（連詞、代詞等）生動(dòng)形象3規(guī)范---字?jǐn)?shù)卷面美顏如何教：1明確評(píng)分標(biāo)準(zhǔn)（16，16---21，22---25）2指導(dǎo)方法（文本解讀情節(jié)構(gòu)建結(jié)尾升華）3修改評(píng)價(jià)高一年級(jí)：重基礎(chǔ)讀經(jīng)典多仿寫高二年級(jí)：重積累理邏輯提表達(dá)高三年級(jí)：重打磨抓規(guī)范勤思背高一續(xù)寫示范課（兩節(jié)）高二續(xù)寫寫前指導(dǎo)課（淄博實(shí)驗(yàn)中學(xué)吳美麗）高三續(xù)寫寫作專題指導(dǎo)課高三續(xù)寫寫作講評(píng)課三、案例式教學(xué)示范及優(yōu)質(zhì)資源推薦人教版選修小說欣賞入門典范英語(yǔ)黑布林英語(yǔ)閱讀高考真題完型填空加工再利用新高考寫作高效提分教程---讀后續(xù)寫優(yōu)質(zhì)資源推薦構(gòu)建語(yǔ)料庫(kù)讀后續(xù)寫的好詞好句反復(fù)應(yīng)用一、情感好詞：喜樂①Thesmileonherfaceshonelieadiamond②Asimileofunderstandingflashedacrosshisface③Arientranthroughthem④Laughterlingeredaroundtheroom⑤Hiseyestwinledwithondsandliile⑧Iwaswildwithjoy⑨Iwasileonherface?Hersmilelitu?Sheshedtearsofjoy?Hereyesweresonds?Shewasoverflowingwithhaent?Joywelleduusementgleamedinhiseyes憤怒：①Iwasseiedbyanger②Hewasfumingwithrage③Hisangerboiledover④Hecouldhardly/scarcelycontainhisrage⑤Hewasbreathingfireandfury⑥Hisvoicetrembledwithanger⑦Hegavemealooofburninganger⑧Heglaredatmewithburningeyes⑨Heflaredupattheword⑩Hisfacecloudedwithanger悲傷煩惱①Hestoodsilently,tearsrollingdownhischees②IfeellieIamfloatinginanoceanofsadness③HerhandswereshaingShewasonthevergeoftears④Hearingthenews,sodes⑥Shesobbed,hidingherfaceinherhands⑦Itriedtofightbactears/Myeyeswerefilledwithtears⑧Afrown（皺眉）nowstoodonhisface⑨Theysattherewithglumloosontheirfaces⑩Thenewscastacloudofgloomoverhisface?Hebrimmedoverwithsorrowwhen?Theywereimmersedinsorrow?Thesedayshewasinlowse,withhiseyesfullofhorror②Fearslowlycree/Fearfloodedoverhim⑦Herheartbeatsoviolentlythatshefeltnearlysuffocated（窒息）⑧Sheshooallover,feelingliesittingonmensely,we…②Tearsfillinghereyes,sheofferedherheartfeltgratitude③Withtearsstreamingdownherface,she構(gòu)建語(yǔ)料庫(kù)---來(lái)自平時(shí)積累（各種心情）讀后續(xù)寫的好詞好句反復(fù)應(yīng)用一、情感好詞：喜樂①Thesmileonherfaceshonelieadiamond②Asimileofunderstandingflashedacrosshisface③Arientranthroughthem④Laughterlingeredaroundtheroom⑤Hiseyestwinledwithondsandliile⑧Iwaswildwithjoy⑨Iwasileonherface?Hersmilelitu?Sheshedtearsofjoy?Hereyesweresonds?Shewasoverflowingwithhaent?Joywelleduusementgleamedinhiseyes憤怒：①Iwasseiedbyanger②Hewasfumingwithrage③Hisangerboiledover④Hecouldhardly/scarcelycontainhisrage⑤Hewasbreathingfireandfury⑥Hisvoicetrembledwithanger⑦Hegavemealooofburninganger⑧Heglaredatmewithburningeyes⑨Heflaredupattheword⑩Hisfacecloudedwithanger構(gòu)建語(yǔ)料庫(kù)---來(lái)自高考真題完型IjumetovisitmeFortunately,afterabriefstayinhosilymetuylove forASLAfterthat,feelingtheneedtoeeetingsYetinsteadofbeingdiscouragedbymyslowadeitaeetingsandlearnallIcouldInstead,iftherehadbeenanytaling,itwouldhavecausedustolearnless——2018年全國(guó)三卷構(gòu)建語(yǔ)料庫(kù)---來(lái)自讀后續(xù)寫語(yǔ)篇Sheturnedaround,hoountaintouchtobewithTomandherfamilyJaneroseatthebreaofday,hungryandthirstyShecouldhearwatertricling滴落）somewhereatadistanceAsshe,Janeheardahelicoswerelonggonebacintotheearthwasn’twalingwithhisusualsteomentslater,however,hewasonceagainwalinginthatslowycuriositygotthebestofmeIcreonhisjourneyHewascuashewaled:beingverycarefulnottosBranchesandthornssla——讀后續(xù)寫訓(xùn)練語(yǔ)篇構(gòu)建語(yǔ)料庫(kù)——來(lái)自名著Carter'sfathermandingofficerweretoseehim,hewouldorderCartershotimmediatelyIfhedrotheedgeofthiscliff,itwouldfallforsihundredmetersbeforedisaents--thousandsofCarter'sfellowsoldiersBraveandstrongashewas,Carteralmostfaintedfromtheshocofwhathehadseen選自自編課程《名著短篇小說閱讀與欣賞》ThanyouforyourattentionNothingistoodifficultifyouputallyourheartintoit課后續(xù)寫錄播讀讀后續(xù)寫的評(píng)分標(biāo)準(zhǔn)綜述評(píng)分:主要從續(xù)寫內(nèi)容、詞匯語(yǔ)法、篇章結(jié)構(gòu)三方面考慮。1創(chuàng)造情節(jié)的質(zhì)量、續(xù)寫的完整性及與原文情境的融洽度。2詞匯、語(yǔ)法的準(zhǔn)確性、恰當(dāng)性及多樣性。3上下文的銜接和全文的連貫性。Whatisplotustfollowalogical,attractiveformatthatdrawsthereaderin“story”inthatithighlightsasajoreventsinthenarrativedefinedastheeventsthatmaeupastory,particularlyastheyrelatetooneanotherinapattern,inasequence,throughcauseandeffectAlogicalplotTwilightmergedintodarnessWiththeclassaingbactolifeAfterbreafast,Itoomycellyheartanagedtocalmdownandbeganmyclassasusual后續(xù)---Logicalplotting1續(xù)寫第一段的內(nèi)容設(shè)計(jì)既要考慮與上文的融洽銜接，同時(shí)也要考慮本段和最后一段開頭語(yǔ)的呼應(yīng)和銜接，而后者是容易忽視的部分。2續(xù)寫第二段是文章的結(jié)尾，要關(guān)注與文章開頭的遙相呼應(yīng)，凸顯主題，升華精神。***如何構(gòu)建續(xù)寫情節(jié)logicalplotting本節(jié)重點(diǎn)TheeesmorecomeofthestoryItishowthingsenduporturnoutforthecharacters續(xù)寫情節(jié)構(gòu)建中存在的問題1文章理解不到位，續(xù)寫情節(jié)與原文脫離2違背真實(shí)生活，缺乏合理性3融洽度不高，銜接不合理4大量對(duì)話無(wú)意義，段落間分布不均衡5主題升華牽強(qiáng)或跑偏續(xù)寫情節(jié)構(gòu)建中存在的問題1文章理解不到位，續(xù)寫情節(jié)與原文脫離ConnerrantoCaleb'sside,andtheboystriedtocomforttheirfatherTimdidn'tsayanythingbutcriedThetwobrothersgraduallynewthatitwastheirfatherthatcausedthisaccidentTimwasveryscaredHecouldn'thelpfeelingshoced,tearingrollingdownhisface續(xù)寫情節(jié)構(gòu)建中存在的問題2違背真實(shí)生活，缺乏合理性ConnerrantoCaleb'sside,andtheboystriedtocomforttheirfather“Taeiteasydad,andI'msureyouwillbefine”ConnersmiledtohisfatherandencouragedhimAfterawhile,theymanagedtopulltheirfatheroutofthecar續(xù)寫情節(jié)構(gòu)建中存在的問題3融洽度不高，銜接不合理Moreemergencyonthsofent續(xù)寫情節(jié)構(gòu)建中存在的問題4大量對(duì)話無(wú)意義，段落間分布不均衡“Dad,weareyoursons!”“Dad,doyougetinjured”“I'mfineDon'tworry”“Dad,don'tworry,andI'msuretohelpyouout”續(xù)寫情節(jié)構(gòu)建中存在的問題5主題升華牽強(qiáng)或跑偏Afterthiseilydrivecarelessly,becausetheyhadnownthebitterresultbroughtbycaraccidentIndeed,lifeisbynomeansathingthatwecouldmaejoeonatanytimeHemetheratafortableSuddenly,heasedthewaiter,“CouldyouesomesaltI'dlietoycoffee"Theystaredathimwtihastrangeloo!Hisfaceturnedred,butwhenthesaltcame,heeIhavethesaltycoffee,IalwaysthinofmychildhoodandmyhometownImissitandmyparents,whoarestillthere"典例分析ShewasdeeovedAmanwhocanadmitthathe'shomesicmustlovehishomeandcareabouthisfamilyHemustberesetown,herchildhoodandherfamilyThatwasareallynicetal,alsoabeautifulbeginningoftheirlovestoryTheycontinuedtodateShefoundthathemetallherrequirementsHewastolerant,ind,warmandcarefulHewassuchagoodmanandhaditnotbeenforthesaltinthecoffee,she’dneverhavereallynownhim!Therestofthestorywasjustlieanyotherbeautifullovestory---theymarriedandlivedhaeshemadecoffeeforhim,sheesalt,thewayhelieditAfter40years,heydearest,eformycheatingyouallthetimeDoyoustillrememberourfirstdateinthecafe________________________Para2:Shewasshocedbytheletter,withthefeelingofbeingcheated______________________________________________________________典例分析1解讀文本，奠定續(xù)寫基礎(chǔ)***讀---（etherataarriedBeforedeath,heleftheraletterasingforforgivingwhyhow續(xù)寫內(nèi)容線索/意圖---（多為結(jié)尾或主旨服務(wù)）Hewastolerant,ind,warmandcarefulHewassuchagoodmanAndeverytimeshemadecoffeeforhim,sheesalt,thewayhelieditAfter40years,hepassedawayandleftheraletter2依據(jù)兩段首句推理情節(jié)發(fā)展兩個(gè)段首句是重要的續(xù)寫提示，在很大程度上指明了情節(jié)的發(fā)展方向。對(duì)段首句分析，進(jìn)行設(shè)問，可有效地推理續(xù)寫的主要情節(jié)。第一段---三個(gè)邏輯上的銜接（原文段首句第二段段首句）第二段---關(guān)注與文章開頭的遙相呼應(yīng)（線索/意圖），根據(jù)具體語(yǔ)境弘揚(yáng)真善美2依據(jù)兩段首句推理情節(jié)發(fā)展---（第一段）ydearest,eformycheatingyouallthetimeDoyoustillrememberourfirstdateinthecafe__________Para2:Shewasshocedbytheletter,withthefeelingofbeingcheated______________________________________________對(duì)第一段段首句進(jìn)行設(shè)問：WhathappenedattheirfirstdateinthecafeWhatdidhedotocheatherandwhydidhecheatherWhydidhecheatherallthe40years2依據(jù)兩段首句推理情節(jié)發(fā)展---（第二段）forhislife-longlieWhyorwhynot*Shebroedown,regrettinghernaivedecisiontomarryhimNeverwouldsheforgivehimandneverwouldshemarryhimifgivenasecondchance*ReflectingonwhathehaddoneforherintheShewoulddefinitelymarryhimagainifgivenasecondchance3可根據(jù)需要合理增加情節(jié)*在不影響主要情節(jié)的前提下，可適當(dāng)合理地增加部分次要情節(jié)*可依據(jù)需要增加適當(dāng)細(xì)節(jié)描寫（環(huán)境，心理，外貌等）3可根據(jù)需要合理增加情節(jié)第一段可增加的情節(jié)：男孩對(duì)當(dāng)時(shí)女孩接受他的邀請(qǐng)感到意外，其實(shí)他很討厭和咸咖啡，但為了愛，他忍受了40年；男孩無(wú)數(shù)次想告知女孩真相，但由于害怕失去最終沒能說出口ActuallyitwasentirelyoutofmyeyinvitationtodateCanyouimaginehowecitedbutnervousIwasinfaceofsuchacharmingyounggirlTobefran,IhatedsaltycoffeeHowever,eachtimeyoumadeororderedsaltycoffeeformeoutoflove,Ifeltstrangeandbadinmymouth,butsweetandwarminmyheartIhadtriedcountlesstimestotellyouthetruth,butIwasafraidoflosingyou3可根據(jù)需要合理增加情節(jié)第二段可增加的情節(jié)：桌子上他們的一張照片勾起了女主對(duì)美好過往的回憶，想起了丈夫?yàn)檫@個(gè)家做的點(diǎn)點(diǎn)滴滴，她理解并原諒了丈夫Suddenly,afamilyemoriescamefloodingbac,thoseecitingmomentswhentheysetogether,thoselovingmomentswhenheomentswhentheyhadtofacehardshipsbravely3可根據(jù)需要合理增加情節(jié)第二段可增加的情節(jié)：女主親自沖了杯咸咖啡品嘗一下，發(fā)現(xiàn)其實(shí)咸咖啡超級(jí)難喝，她想到丈夫竟然默默忍受了40年，最終理解了丈夫默默無(wú)私地付出Suddenly,sheroseandwaledintotheitchenHavingmadeacueltitoutofcuriosityAstrangeandbadsmellmadeitswaystraightintohernoseShehesitated,andthensimediately,sherealiedthatthemanwhotolerantlydransaltycoffeefor40yearswasworthcherishinganentlyAfter40years,heydearest,emberthefirsttimewedatedIwassonervousthatIsaidsaltActuallyIwantedsomesugar”Hesaidmanytimeshewantedtotellherthetruth,buthewasafraidoflosingherHealsotoldherhavingherwithhimwashisbiggesthae,hestillwantedtomarryherShewasshocedbytheletter,withthefeelingofbeingcheatedSheweaingtheehedranthestrangetasteofcoffee,herheartachedalotHerhusbandwassuchaind-heartedandconsideratemanthathehidthetruthforhiswholelifeHowdeeeday,someoneasedher,“What'sthetasteofsaltycoffee”“It'ssweet,”shereplied二后續(xù)寫指導(dǎo)讀1、解讀文本。過濾有效信息，把握文章要素。2、縝密構(gòu)思。文章中心內(nèi)容、段首句相結(jié)合。情節(jié)發(fā)展是主體，細(xì)節(jié)描寫是關(guān)鍵。3、打磨寫作?？焖俪醪匠筛澹缓笊?jí)詞匯與豐富句式，最后規(guī)范謄寫。讀后續(xù)寫寫作步驟***如何打磨續(xù)寫的語(yǔ)言vividwriting本節(jié)重點(diǎn)Waystopolishyourstory

strategiesconjunctions***sentencepatternswordsandphrases***1Advancedwordsandphrases1豐滿人物內(nèi)心（心情的表達(dá)）Richadjectivesandotherusefuleaeepressionspowerful3豐富故事情節(jié)（細(xì)節(jié)和連貫）ProperadverbstoenrichyourstoryShow,don'ttell小提示：1高級(jí)詞匯的選擇遵循具體性原則，晚詞優(yōu)先原則1agood/nicewomanawarm-hearted/generous/honestwoman2FindingthelostdiamondringwouldbedifficultFindingthelostdiamondringwouldbechallenging3Ashleigh'scarelessnesscausedthelossofthediamondringAshleigh'scarelessnesswereresponsiblefor小提示：2避免重復(fù)使用同一詞語(yǔ)1TheHannahsthanedorey,saying“Thanyouforyourindness,orwewillneverhaveit”againandagain2TheHannahsepressedtheirgratitudetoorey,saying“Thanyouforyourindness,orneverwillwehaveit”againandagain***2Abundantsentencepatterns思考翻譯：穿著白色裙子，這個(gè)女孩兒看起來(lái)非常漂亮。1Thegirlwearsawhitesirt,andsheloosbeautiful2Wearingawhitesirt,thegirlloosaingmefallinlovewithherChristmasDaywascomingIwasjustaidthen,andmybigsistertoldmetherewasnoSantaClausIfledtomygrandmabecauseshewouldbestraightwithmeInewGrandmaalwaystoldmethetruthGrandmawashome,andItoldhereverythingShewasreadyforme"NoSantaClaus"sheshouted"Ridiculous!Don'tbelieveitThatrumorhasbeengoingaroundforyears,anditmaesmemad,asshoomentsIjuststoodthere,confused,holdingthatten-dollarbill,wonderingwhattobuyandwhotobuysomethingfor典例分析IsuddenlythoughtofBobbyDecer,whowasaidwithbadbreathandmessyhairHesatrightbehindmeinMrsotheralwayswroteanote,tellingtheteacherthathehadacough,butweidsnewthatBobbyDecerdidn'thaveacough,andthathedidn'thaveacoatIwouldbuyBobbyDeceracoat!settledonaredone,whichlooedreallywarm,andhewouldliethat"IsthisaChristmaseone"theladybehindthecounterasedindly,asIlaidmytendollarsdown"Yes"Theniceladysmiledatme,eaMerryChristmasahelewraasaand1waitedbreathlesslyforBobbyDecer’sfrontdoortoopenandfinallyit典例分析寫作出彩高級(jí)且豐富的句式同樣重要1NeverhadIshoasshoomentsIjuststoodthere,confused,holdingthatten-dollarbill,wonderingwhattobuyandwhotobuysomethingfor4IsuddenlythoughtofBobbyDecer,whowasaidwithbadbreathandmessyhair5Hismotheralwayswroteanote,tellingtheteacherthathehadacough,butweidsnewthatBobbyDecerdidn'thaveacough,andthathedidn'thaveacoat6IwouldbuyBobbyDeceracoat,whichlooedreallywarm,andhewouldliethat7Theniceladysmiledatme,eaMerryChristmas***在續(xù)寫文本中，熟練應(yīng)用并列句5,7，三大從句4,6，非謂語(yǔ)動(dòng)詞2,3,5和特殊句式1。***2Abundantsentencepatterns并列動(dòng)作：Theniceladysmiledatme,eaMerryChristmas伴隨狀語(yǔ)：使用分詞形式、使用“with”結(jié)構(gòu)、使用獨(dú)立主格結(jié)構(gòu)、使用形容詞、名詞、介詞短語(yǔ)Hismotheralwayswroteanote,tellingtheteacherthathehadacoughBornintoaily,BobbyDecerdidn'tevenhaveawarmcoatQuicly,weranintothecar,withourheartsbeatingwildlyTheyhuggedeachothertightly,tearsrollingdowntheircheesBobbyDecersawthecoat,confusedbutecitedThatevening,Grandmahelewraasetowrite"ToBobby,fromSantaClaus”onitThenwewenttoBobbyDecer'shouseWehishouse,andwewaledtohisfrontdoorSilently,IasanocedathisdoorQuiclyweranintothecarThenwewaitedforhimGradethestoryGrandmaandIwaitedbreathlesslyforBobbyDecer'sfrontdoortooothertogooutTheyhuggedeachotherintearsandeIdecidedtobeSanta'sheloment,IcametorealiethatSantaClausisineveryone'sheartifheiswillingtobeoneofhishelpersLet’shaveatry!1Sheasedmetowrite"ToBobby,fromSantaClaus”onitThenwewenttoBobbyDecer'shouseShewrote"ToBobby,fromSantaClaus"onit,afterwhichshedrovemeovertoBobbyDecer'shouse,ehishouse,andwewaledtohisfrontdoorGrandmaBobby'shouseTaingadeeaBobby'shouseThen,shegavemeanudge,whispering,“AllrightSantaClaus,getgoing”Taingadeepbreath,IdashedforhisfrontdoorLet’shaveatry!3Silently,IasanocedathisdoorQuiclyweranintothecarThenwewaitedforhimSeeingnootherasaandIcreptandhidinthecarLet’shaveatry!1BobbyDecerwentoutOutwentBobbyDecer/TherestoodBobbyDecer2Whenhesawthecoatinthebag,helooedverysurothertogooutSeeingthecoatinthebag,heouth,dumbstrucAfterawhile,heyelledathismothertogooutLet’shaveatry!3Theyhuggedeachotherintearsandsay“thans”toSantaClaus,Ifeltveryoment,IcametorealiethatSantaClausisineveryone'sheartifheiswillingtobeoneofhishelasinhisheartwillneverfindChristmasunderatreeItwasthatnightthatIrealiedthoseawfulrumorsaboutSantaClauswerejustwhatGrandmasaidtheywere:ridiculousSantaClauswasdefinitelyaliveandwewereactuallyonhisteamAahelewraasSantaClaus"onit,afterwhichshedrovemeovertoBobbyDecer'shouse,eaBobby'shouseThen,shegavemeanudge,whisasaandIcreptandhidinthecarAaandIwaitedbreathlesslyforBobbyDecer’sfrontdoortooouth,dumbstrucAfterawhile,heyelledathismothertogooutAfterhearingthemsay"thans"toSantaClaus,IfeltveryeId