高二上學(xué)期期末考試讀后續(xù)寫分析及下水文講義

閱讀下面材料,根據(jù)其內(nèi)容和所給段落開頭語(yǔ)續(xù)寫兩段,使之構(gòu)成一篇完整的短文。Inhersmalltown,Emmawasknownforherloveandrespectforalllivingcreatures,andshebelievedthathumansandanimalsshouldcoexistpeacefullyandharmoniously.Oneday,whilehikinginthenearbywoods,Emmaspottedawounded(受傷的)deercaughtinahunter'strap.Withouthesitation,shecarefullyfreedthedeerandnurseditbacktohealth.Overthenextfewweeks,Emmadevotedhertimeandenergytocaringforthedeer.Shevisitediteverydayafterschool,bringingfreshfruitsandvegetables.Shecarefullyexamineditswounds,applyingsomemedicinetohelpitgetbetterandpreventinfection.

Asthedayswentby,thedeerbegantoregainitsstrength,andEmmawasoverjoyedtoseeitstandonitslegsonceagain.Emmaalsotookthetimetolearnaboutdeerbehaviorandtheirnaturalhabitat.Sheresearchedthebestfoodstofeedthedeerandcreatedacomfortableplaceforittorestinduringtheday.Sheevenmadeasmallwaterfountaintoensurethatthedeerhadaccesstocleandrinkingwater.Astheweeksturnedintomonths,Emmawatchedasthedeergrewstrongerandmoreconfident.Itwouldoftenfollowheraroundthebackyard,nudging(輕推)herplayfullywithitsnose.Emmafeltadeepsenseofsatisfactionknowingthatshehadplayedapartinsavingthisbeautifulcreature'slife.Onesunnyafternoon,asEmmasatinherbackyardreadingabook,sheheardafamiliarsound.Shelookedupandsawthedeerstandingnearher,lookingatherwithgentleeyes.Itwasclearthatthedeerhadfullyrecoveredandwasreadytoreturntothewild.Emmafeltasenseofsadnessbutalsoknewthatitwastimeforthedeertogobacktoitsnaturalhabitat.Sheopenedthegateandwatchedasthedeerboundedaway,disappearingintotheforest.Fromthatdayon,

Emmacontinuedtocareforanimalsinneed,knowingthatshehadmadeadifferenceinthelifeofatleastonecreature.注意:1.續(xù)寫詞數(shù)應(yīng)為150個(gè)左右;2.請(qǐng)按如下格式在答題卡的相應(yīng)位置作答。Monthslater,Emmahadalmostforgottenaboutthedeerwhenoneday,shereceivedanunexpectedvisitor.Fromthatdayon,thedeerbecamearegularvisitortoEmma'sbackyard.文本分析：本次高二期末考試讀后續(xù)寫文本的主題語(yǔ)境為“人與自然”話題下的人與動(dòng)物和諧相處。文本前四段描述了充滿愛心的Emma如何精心地救治并護(hù)理受傷的小鹿直至康復(fù)，最后兩段描述了Emma依依不舍地讓痊愈的小鹿回歸自然。文本易讀，但續(xù)寫部分有一定難度。雖然大部分學(xué)生能讀懂故事，但考生要在短時(shí)間內(nèi)發(fā)揮想象，構(gòu)思出情節(jié)合理、銜接有序、語(yǔ)言優(yōu)美、字體漂亮的續(xù)寫段落仍然不易。這需要考生在平時(shí)的課外閱讀中有相關(guān)素材的涉獵，才能在考試時(shí)適時(shí)地提取并運(yùn)用。本次考試讀后續(xù)寫題型的選材，也給我們一個(gè)提醒：平時(shí)，注重文本選材的多樣性，一定讓學(xué)生各類題材的文本都有所涉獵，彌補(bǔ)課本內(nèi)容的不足。另外，從高考命題的角度來(lái)看，目前全國(guó)卷還沒(méi)有涉及人與自然的話題，從題型創(chuàng)新和備考的角度講，我們不妨做一些練習(xí)，有備無(wú)患。文章主旨：

文本主要描寫了充滿愛心的小鎮(zhèn)居民艾瑪發(fā)現(xiàn)一只被獵人陷阱困住的受傷小鹿，毫不猶豫地將其救出并精心照顧，使其康復(fù)。在幾個(gè)月的相處中，她們逐漸有了感情，彼此依戀，但最終艾瑪克服了內(nèi)心的不舍，讓小鹿回歸自然。段落大意：第一段：艾瑪熱愛和尊重生命，偶然發(fā)現(xiàn)受傷的小鹿，她全力救治。第二段：通過(guò)艾瑪幾周悉心的照料，小鹿重新站立起來(lái)。第三段：艾瑪研究小鹿的飲食和生存環(huán)境，為了讓它過(guò)得舒服，甚至專門建立了一個(gè)飲水處。第四段：隨著時(shí)間推移，強(qiáng)壯自信的小鹿和艾瑪變得親密起來(lái)，這給她帶來(lái)深深的滿足感。第五段：小鹿用眼神告訴艾瑪，它已經(jīng)完全康復(fù)，做好了回歸自然的準(zhǔn)備。第六段：小鹿離開時(shí)，艾瑪感到很難過(guò)，但之后她繼續(xù)關(guān)愛動(dòng)物。續(xù)寫情節(jié)發(fā)展：續(xù)寫第一段：Bytheopeningsentenceofthefirstparagraph,itcanbeinferredthatthemaincontentofthiscontinuationistheprotagonist'ssurprisewhentheyseethedeeragainandaseriesofinteractionswithit.Candidatescanusetheoriginalcontenttoparaphrasesomesentencesintheirownwords,avoidingcopyingtheoriginaltextwhilealsohavingsomethingtosay.Forexample,feedingfood,drinkingwater,Emma'semotionalexcitementanddeerhugging,theappearanceofthedeer,etc.areallavailablepoints.Aslongasthewordsarereasonableandtheplotiscoherent,theycanbecomethematerialforwriting.續(xù)寫第二段：Bycontinuingtowritetheopeningsentenceofthesecondparagraph,itcanbeinferredthatthedeerhasbecomeafrequentvisitortoEmma'sfamilyandreturnsirregularly.ThisindicatesthattherelationshipbetweenEmmaandthedeerhasbecomeevenstronger.ThisparagraphcanstilldescribeEmma'sreactionwhenthedeerreturned,showinghercontinuedloveforthedeer.Inaddition,thisparagraphbelongstotheendoftheentiretext,andcandidatescanalsoleverageEmma'scaringpersonalitytraitstoshowcasetheirabilities.Thesublimationpartcanbetheharmoniouscoexistenceofhumansandanimals,Emma'sselflessdedication,orthespiritofgratitudereflectedbythedeer'sunderstandingofhumannature.Itcanallbeusedasanarticle,aslongasitcleverlyconnectswiththethemeofthetext,itisagoodchoice.參考范文：Monthslater,Emmahadalmostforgottenaboutthedeerwhenoneday,shereceivedanunexpectedvisitor.

Itwasanimpressive

deer,standingattheedgeofherbackyard.Emma'seyeswidenedwithsurpriseandjoyassherealizeditwasthesamedeershehadrescuedandreleasedintothewild.

She

rushedoverandimmediatelyhugged

it,

whoseemedlikealong-lostfriendandmadesome

trustworthysounds.

Momentslater,Emmacalmeddownandbroughtsome

fruitsandvegetables

toentertainherdistinguishedguest.Thedeerenjoyedthemandappearedtobeveryfamiliarwitheverything

aroundthebackyard.Finally,whenthedeerwasabouttoleave,Emmahadmoreexpectationandblessingsratherthansadnessthistime.(103words)Fromthatdayon,thedeerbecamearegularvisitortoEmma'sbackyard.

Everynowandthen,itwouldreturntoEmma’sbackyardtohuntforfoodordrinkthefountainwater,oreventorestinitsoriginalplace.Atthispoint,Emmawouldeitherpetorplaywithit.Sometimes,thedeerbroughtbackseveralcompanions,andEmmawouldtreatthemgenerously.

Together,theysymbolizedthebeautyofcoexistence

andharmony.

Emmacontinuedhermissionofcaringforanimals,creatinga

shelter

wherealllivingcreaturescouldfind

safetyandcomfort.

Sometimes,akindgesturecanmakeabeautifulfriendship.Evensmallanimalsinnaturecanhaveaspiritual,lovable,andgratefulside.(102words)默寫版：Monthslater,Emmahadalmostforgottenaboutthedeerwhenoneday,shereceivedanunexpectedvisitor.

Itwasanimpressive

deer,standingattheedgeofherbackyard.________________________________________________當(dāng)Emma意識(shí)到這就是她救出來(lái)放歸野外的那只鹿時(shí)，她驚訝又高興地瞪大了眼睛.

She

rushedoverandimmediatelyhugged

it,

whoseemedlikealong-lostfriendandmadesome

trustworthysounds._____________________________過(guò)了一會(huì)兒，Emma平靜下來(lái)，帶了一些水果和蔬菜來(lái)招待她的貴賓.Thedeerenjoyedthemandappearedtobeveryfamiliarwitheverything

aroundthebackyard.___________________________________________終于，