RevisionmoduleA.ppt

1、Better Your Writing,By Kathryn,book,a book,an interesting book,an interesting English book.,I read an interesting English book called Harry Potter yesterday.,an interesting English book called Harry Potter.,I read an interesting English book called Harry Potter at home yesterday.,Brainstorming,How t

2、o write good sentences?,How to write good sentences?,Who does what,when,whom,where,how,why.,In the flower way!,Try to make your sentences long/ beautiful/detailed/ interesting / moving .,environment,protect the environment,We need to protect the environment.,We need to protect the environment from n

3、ow on because it is becoming worse .,We need to protect the environment from now on because it is becoming worse and worse. Therefore, its our duty to do something for it.,We need to protect the environment from now on.,Brainstorming,Try to make your sentences long/ beautiful/detailed/ interesting /

4、 moving .,隨著環(huán)境問題的日趨嚴重，我們每個人都有責任保護環(huán)境。你校編輯在校報上發(fā)出通知，請你仔細閱讀并完成一篇習作，字數(shù)90-110詞。,Writing task,NOTICE As we all know, we have only one earth. However, the environment is becoming worse. As students, what can we do to protect the environment? Tell your good ways to stop polluting the environment. Please writ

5、e a passage to call on more students to protect the environment.,The environment is becoming worse. We need to protect the environment. As students, we should do things to protect the environment. We should go to school by bike or on foot. We should also save water and electricity. We should remembe

6、r not to pour waste water into the river. We should not throw rubbish around.We should use fewer plastic bags. We need to protect the environment. We should take actions now!,Writing show,The environment is becoming worse. We need to protect the environment. As students,we should do things to protec

7、t the environment. We should go to school by bike or on foot. We should also save water and electricity. We should remember not to pour waste water into the river. We should not throw rubbish around.We should use fewer plastic bags. We need to protect the environment. We should take actions now!,Bet

8、ter the layout,Construction,Beginning,Body,Ending,The environment is becoming worse. We need to protect the environment. As students,we can do things to protect the environment. We should go to school by bike or on foot. We should also save water and electricity. We should remember not to pour waste

9、 water into the river. We should not throw rubbish around.We should use fewer plastic bags. We need to protect the environment. We should take actions now!,Construction, The environment is becoming worse. We need to protect the environment. As students,we can do things to protect the environment. We

10、 should go to school by bike or on foot. We should also save water and electricity. We should remember not to pour waste water into the river. We should not throw rubbish around.We should use fewer plastic bags. We need to protect the environment. We should take actions now!,Construction,Better the

11、writing!,1.詞匯過于普通,As students,we can try_ _ to do _ many things_ possible in environmental _.,Using impressive words & phrases, As students,we can do things to protect the environment.,句,We _ _ ride bikes, and even_ _ school_ _ taking cars.,句, We should go to school by bike or on foot.,句, we should

12、not throw rubbish around.,we should _ throw rubbish around.,our best,had better,walk to,instead of,never,Charm(美),protection,as as,Charm(美),語言上主要存在句式過于單一、詞匯過于普通、語言缺乏亮點等問題。需要進一步美化。,2.句式過于單一,句 作為總起句，缺乏一定的氣勢。 The environment is becoming worse.,句 作為文章的觀點，句子過于簡單顯然無法表明作者的態(tài)度。,還有很多含有“ we should ”的句子，句式明顯過于單

13、一，因此也要想辦法美化。,With the_ _ our society, the environment is becoming _ _ _nowadays.,It is _ and _ for us_ _ the environment., We need to protect the environment.,句 we should use fewer plastic bags.,The_ _ _ we use, the _ _ we will cause.,development of,worse and worse,necessary important,to protect,few

14、er plastic bags,less pollution,句 we should also save water and electricity.,_ water and electricity _ also important.,Saving,is,Expanding simple sentences!,3.語言缺乏亮點,As the old saying goes,“_ _ _ _ _” So take actions_ _!,在文章中恰當運用復合句，名言、諺語，可以起到畫龍點睛的作用。, We should take actions now！,句,Actions speak loud

15、er than words.,right now,Charm(美),Using English sayings,A. No pains, no gains. B. Where there is a will, there is a way. C. Actions speak louder than words. D. Two heads are better than one.,With the development of our society, the environment is becoming worse and worse nowadays. It is necessary an

16、d important for us to protect it.,As students, we can try our best to do as many things as possible in environmental protection. We had better ride bikes, and even walk to school instead of taking cars. Saving water and electricity is also important. We should remember not to pour waste water into t

17、he river and never throw rubbish around. The fewer plastic bags we use, the less pollution we will cause.,We need to protect the environment. As the old saying goes, “ Actions speak louder than words.” So take actions right now!,Writing show,Connect (連),需要分析句子之間、段落之間的關系，在分析的基礎上運用銜接手段，添加相應的關聯(lián)詞，使之成為關系

18、緊密的整體。,Make sentences with suitable conjunctions(連詞) and expressions,表并列或遞進：,and, as well as，besides, not only.but also, whats more, in addition.,表轉(zhuǎn)折或讓步：,but, however, although, even if/through.,表因果：,because, so, therefore, as a result.,表目的：,so that, in order that, in order to.,表強調(diào)或列舉：,in fact, actu

19、ally, for example, such as, .,表時間關系：,first of all, second, third, finally, at last, before, after that, as soon as, .,表總結：,in a word, in short, generally speaking, .,Writing show,With the development of our society, the environment is becoming worse and worse nowadays. It is necessary and important

20、for us to protect it.,As students, we can try our best to do as many things as possible in environmental protection. We had better ride bikes, and even walk to school instead of taking cars. Saving water and electricity is also important. We should remember not to pour waste water into the river and

21、 never throw rubbish around. The fewer plastic bags we use, the less pollution we will cause.,We need to protect the environment. As the old saying goes, “ Actions speak louder than words.” So take actions right now!,Therefore,In my opinion,i,we,Besides,Whats more,we,At last,t,In short,we,s,Writing

22、show,The environment is becoming worse. We need to protect the environment. As students, we should do things to protect the environment. We should go to school by bike or on foot. We should save water and electricity. We should remember not to pour waste water into the river. We should not throw rub

23、bish around.We should use fewer plastic bags. We need to protect the environment. We should take actions now!,With the development of our society, the environment is becoming worse and worse nowadays. It is necessary and important for us to protect it. As students, we can try our best to do as many

24、things as possible in environmental protection. We had better ride bikes, and even walk to school instead of taking cars. Saving water and electricity is also important. We should remember not to pour waste water into the river and never throw rubbish around. The fewer plastic bags we use, the less

25、pollution we will cause. We need to protect the environment. As the old saying goes, “ Actions speak louder than words.” So take actions right now!,With the development of our society, the environment is becoming worse and worse nowadays.Therefore,it is necessary and important for us to protect it.

26、As students, we can try our best to do as many things as possible in environmental protection.In my opinion, we had better ride bikes, and even walk to school instead of taking cars. Besides, saving water and electricity is also important. Whats more, we should remember not to pour waste water into the river and never throw rubbish around. At last, the fewer plastic bags we use, the less pollution we will cause. In short, we need to protect the environment. As the old saying goes, “ Actions speak louder than words.” So take ac