讀后續(xù)寫 兄弟之間應寬容以待 課件-2023屆高三英語寫作專項

2021年浙江三地市統(tǒng)測讀后續(xù)寫兄弟之間應寬容以待原文重現(xiàn)

Carterenjoyedridingtheschoolbushome.Theridehomegavehimsometimetorelaxafterabusydayoffifthgrade.Heusuallysataloneandenjoyedthattoo.Withfoursiblings(兄弟姐妹)hedidn’tgetmuchtimealone.Sometimeshesatwithhisyoungerbrother,Jackson,butJacksonwassickathometoday.Thebusstoppedandthetallestboyinhisclass,Dexter,steppedofffollowedbyhisyoungerbrother,Billy.Asthebuspulledaway,Carterlookedbackoverhisshouldertowatchtheboys.Dexterwasyellingandwavinghishandsathislittlebrother.BillysaidsomethingCartercouldnothear.Dexteryelled,gavehisyoungerbrotherahardpushandknockedhimtotheground.Billywasonthegroundwipinghiseyes,butDexterwalkedaway.Carterturnedinhisseat,feelingdisgusted(反感的).Hehatedseeinglittlekidsgetpickedon(欺負).ThesightofBillyonthegroundcryingwasburnedintohismemory.Hetriedtothinkofsomethingelse.Hethoughtofthemodelcarhewasworkingonathome,a1967Corvette.Hestartedbuildingitoveraweekagoandjustfinishedputtingittogetherlastnight.Tonight,assoonashefinishedhishomework,hecouldstartpaintingthecar.Thatwashisfavoritepart.Healreadyhadtheperfectcolorofbluepickedout.Hehurriedoffthebus,ranthroughhisyard,andrushedthroughthekitchenwithaquickhellotohismom.Shewasmakingdinner,whichsmelleddelicious.Heranupthestairstwoatatimeandrushedintohisroom.“Surprise!”hisbrotherJacksonsaid,throwinghisarmsintotheair.“Whatareyoudoinginmyroom?Ithoughtyouweresick!”“Ifeelbetter!”“What’sonyourface?Areyoubleeding?”“No!I’mnotbleeding.”Jacksonwipedhisface.“It’sprobablyjustpaint.Look!LookwhatIdid!”HepointedatthedeskinthecornerofCarter’sroom.注意：1.所續(xù)寫短文的詞數(shù)應為150左右；2.至少使用5個短文中標有下劃線的關鍵詞語；3.續(xù)寫部分分為兩段，每段的開頭語已為你寫好；4.續(xù)寫完成后，請用下劃線標出你所使用的關鍵詞語。Paragraph1:Carterlookeddownathisdeskinhorror.Paragraph2:Cartertookadeepbreathandthenunfoldedhisfists.

1.WhatdidCarterseeonhiswayhome?2.HowdidCarterfeelwhenhesawthesight?3.WhatdidCarterthinkoftogetridofthebadfeeling?HesawDexterpickingonhisyoungbrother.Hefeltdisgustedandhatedit.Hethoughtofhismodelcarandhewantedtopaintitblue.理解材料4.WhatdidCarterseewhenherushedintohisroom?HisyoungerbrotherJacksonpaintedhismodelcarred.理解材料Carterlookeddownathisdeskinhorror…1.

OpeningOnhiswayhome,CartersawDexterpickonhisyoungerbrotherBilly,whichmadeCarterfeeldisgusted.ThesightofBillycryingonthegroundwasburnedintoCarter’smemory.Hetriedtothinkofhismodelcartogetridofthebadfeelingandwantedtopainthiscarblue.CarterrushedintohisroomandsawhisyoungerbrotherJackson,whosefacelookedlikebleeding.Cartertookadeepbreathandthenunfoldedhisfists…2.

Build-up3.

Climax4.

Resolution5.

EndingParagraph1:Carterlookeddownathisdeskinhorror.Accordingto“Areyoubleeding?”inthetextand“horror”here,wecanlearnthatJacksonpaintedthemodelcarred,sothisparagraphshouldbemainlyabouttheconflictbetweenCarterandJackson.Paragraph2:Cartertookadeepbreathandthenunfoldedhisfists.Accordingto“unfoldedhisfists”here,wecaninferthatCarterforgaveJacksonintheend.研讀兩段給出句，想想它們給我們提供了哪些續(xù)寫線索？

Carterlookeddownathisdeskinhorror.HisCorvette!Jacksonhadpainteditred.Anawfuldullshadeofred!“Whywouldyoudothat?”Cartershouted.Cartercouldfeeltheangergrowing,bubblingupinsidehim,_____________________(他的雙手攥成了拳頭獨立主格).Frightenedbytheloudvoiceofhisbrother,Jacksonloweredhisheadandmurmured,“I...Ijustwantedtogiveyouasurprise!”______________________________________________________________________________(卡特突然意識到，他剛剛的所作所為與德克斯特在街上的行為一樣。it作形式主語)

Cartertookadeepbreathandthenunfoldedhisfists.__________________(想到比利坐在地上抹眼淚，而德克斯特卻揚長而去的情景

動詞-ing形式作狀語),Cartersteppedtowardthedeskwherethecarwasstilldrying.Heapologizedtohisbrother,“I’msorryforyellingatyou,butIhadplannedtopaintitblue.”Hearingthis,JacksonsmiledandembracedCartertightly,“Let’spaintittogether!Together!”___________________________________________________(他們剛涂完這輛獨一無二的汽車，媽媽就喊他們吃晚飯了。Nosoonerthan)Therewasnodenyingnowthatsiblingscouldgetonwellbybeingtolerantofeachother.根據(jù)括號中的提示，補出范文缺失的部分。獨立主格結(jié)構(gòu)動詞-ed形式作狀語。動詞-ing形式作狀語。asDexterwalkedaway是時間狀語從句。固定句式Itsuddenlydawnedonsb.that…，意為“某人突然意識到……”。固定句式Nosooner…than…，意為“一……就……”。where引導定語從句修飾desk。固定句式Therewasnodenyingthat…，意為“不可否認。此句為文章的點睛之筆……”

，點明了文章的主題——兄弟姐妹間要寬容相待。

Carterlookeddownathisdeskinhorror.HisCorvette!Jacksonhadpainteditred.Anawfuldullshadeofred!“Whywouldyoudothat?”Cartershouted.Cartercouldfeeltheangergrowing,bubblingupinsidehim,hishandscurlingintofists.Frightenedbytheloudvoiceofhisbrother,Jacksonloweredhisheadandmurmured,“I...Ijustwantedtogiveyouasurprise!”

ItsuddenlydawnedonCarterthat

whathedidjustnowwaslikeDexter’sactiononthestreet.

Cartertookadeepbreathandthenunfoldedhisfists.

PicturingthesceneofBillysittingonthegroundandwipinghiseyesasDexterwalkedaway,Cartersteppedtowardthedeskwherethecarwasstilldrying.Heapologizedtohisbrother,“I’msorryforyellingatyou,butIhadplannedtopaintitblue.”Hearingthis,JacksonsmiledandembracedCartertightly,“Let’spaintittogether!Together!”

Nosoonerhadtheypaintedtheuniquecarthantheirmomcalledthemtohavedinner.Therewasnodenyingnowthatsiblingscouldgetonwellbybeingtolerantofeachother.范文賞析——精彩語言亮點語塊（車）開走抹眼淚一步兩個臺階跑上樓他低下了頭漸漸明白想象那個場景朝著桌子走去向他的弟弟道歉相處融洽對……寬容pullawaywipe

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