讀后續(xù)寫練習(xí)寫作指導(dǎo)講義-2023屆高三英語復(fù)習(xí)寫作專項(xiàng)

讀后續(xù)寫練習(xí)寫作指導(dǎo)講義讀后續(xù)寫（滿分25分）閱讀下列材料，根據(jù)其內(nèi)容和所給段落開頭語續(xù)寫兩段，使之構(gòu)成一篇完整的短文。Onthefirstdayofschool,Istaredinaweatthehugebuildings.ThishighschoolwasdefinitelybiggerthantheoneIhadpreviouslyattended.Thiswasmysecondyearofhighschool,butmyfirstyearofschoolinSt.Louis.IhaddecidedthenightbeforethatIwouldbemuchhappierinanewschoolifImadefriendsthatwereso-called"popular”.Gettinginwiththerightgroupofpeoplewouldmakemylifeawholelotbetter.Ievenboughtanewoutfitandhadmyhairstyledjustsothefirstdaywouldbeperfect.Scared,yetanxioustobeginmynewlife,Iwalkedupthestairstothefrontdoor.Thehallswerepackedwithkidsyellingandlaughingandtellingstoriesoftheirsummeradventures.Myfirstclasswasgeometry,butwherewasthat?Iwasstandinginthehalllookingconfused,whenashort,blondgirlwearingglassescameupandasked,“Areyounew?Youlooklost.Doyouneedhelp?MynameisDiane.What'syours?"Eventhoughsheseemedabitstrange,definitelynotthekindofpersonIwantedtobeassociatedwith,Idecidedtoanswerheranyway.Iwas,afterall,lost.Afterexchangingnames.Ifollowedherupthestairsanddownahallwayontheright,makingpoliteconversationthewholeway.Whenwereachedmyroomshesaid,“Well,hereyouare.WelcometoJFK,andIhopeyourdaygoesallright.”Isaidthanksandwavedgood-bye.Onceinsidetheclassroom,Isawonebiggroupofpeoplehuddledaroundsomeonewhoseemedtobetellingsomesortofstory.Iwalkedoverandgotcloseenoughtooverhear.Alleyesweregluedtotheguyinthemiddleofthecirclewhowaswearingaletterjacketcoveredwithpatches.Idecidedthatthisguywaspopular,soImanagedtogetaseatrightnexttohim.Isaid,“Hi,mynameisLisaandI'mnewhere."Hesaid,“Johnny."注意：.續(xù)寫詞數(shù)應(yīng)為150左右；.請按如下格式在答題卡上的相應(yīng)位置作做答。Attheendoftheclass,Iturnedtohimandasked,〃l'mnotsurewheremynextclassis,couldyouhelpme?”...Justatthattime,someonecameupandtappedmeontheshoulder....文題解讀該文講述發(fā)生在中外校園都發(fā)生過或正在發(fā)生的一種現(xiàn)象：人們渴望被社會、被他人接納卻可能被殘酷拒絕或被生活所戲弄。故事原作者可能是想通過此文來告誡我們：學(xué)會欣賞，學(xué)會辨認(rèn)，學(xué)會感激、學(xué)會溝通，不取悅他人，不急于求成，爭做最美的自己，等等。寫作指導(dǎo)：故事內(nèi)容概述這篇文章前文講述的是一個可能在我們身邊發(fā)生的校園故事：開學(xué)第一天，一個名叫Lisa的初二女生轉(zhuǎn)到了一所新校(JFK),為了能快速融入新的環(huán)境，她想走捷徑，有意接近并搭訕該校可能最受歡迎的孩子王Johnnyo可是后來發(fā)生了什么呢？找出人物特點(diǎn)在進(jìn)行寫作前，我們要首先認(rèn)真分析前文文本中的描寫句段，找出人物特點(diǎn)。而這種前文埋下的伏筆對我們寫作非常非常有幫助。同學(xué)們一定要善于發(fā)現(xiàn)、好好領(lǐng)悟其中的妙處。如：從前文第二段提到的IwouldbemuchhappiefnanewschoolifImadefriendsthatwereso-called“popular”.Gettinginwiththerightgroupofpeoplewouldmakemylifeawholelotbetter.Ievenboughtanewoutfitandhadmyhairstyledjustsothefirstdaywouldbeperfect.(如果“我”能交到所謂的“受歡迎”的朋友,“我”會在新學(xué)校更快樂。和正確的一群人交往會讓“我”的生活變得更好。“我”甚至買了一套新衣服，還做了個發(fā)型，這樣第一天就會很完美）可知“我”有著高期待，同時我們讀者可以利用這細(xì)節(jié)在后面續(xù)寫中寫自己的請求遭到拒絕，直到再次遇到Diane并在她再次幫助下，順利度過新學(xué)校開學(xué)第一天。另外，我們從前文倒數(shù)第二段提到的Johnny的有關(guān)大家眼神的關(guān)注和有關(guān)衣服的細(xì)節(jié)描寫：Alleyesweregluedtotheguyinthemiddleofthecirclewhowaswearingaletterjacketcoveredwithpatches（所有的目光都集中在圍在中間的那個穿著一件綴滿補(bǔ)丁的字母夾克人身上）可分析得出結(jié)論：因?yàn)橐话銇碚f，除了乞丐，比較叛逆的人才穿打補(bǔ)丁的衣服，所以Johnny可能只是在某一方面的受大眾喜歡（popular）的人，例如喜歡捉弄人、講故事等，而“我”后來再見到的那個熱情友好的但看起奇怪（stage）的Dianec才是另一個真正受大眾喜歡的人。因?yàn)樵诠适麻_頭有這樣一個細(xì)節(jié)：...ashort,blondgirlwearingglassescameupandasked,“Areyounew?Youlooklost.Doyouneedhelp?MynameisDiane.What'syours?”Eventhoughsheseemedabitstrange,definitelynotthekindofpersonIwantedtobeassociatedwith...（——個戴著眼鏡的矮個金發(fā)女孩走過來問道：“你是新來的嗎？"你看起來迷路了。你需要幫助嗎？我叫黛安。你叫什么名？”雖然她看起來有點(diǎn)奇怪，但絕對不是“我”想交往的那種人）可知，其實(shí)黛安才是真正的popularfriend。把握感情基調(diào)同樣，在寫作中很重要的一點(diǎn)是要把握感情基調(diào)。我認(rèn)為在續(xù)寫段落的比較好的情感發(fā)展線可以有二條：Lisa興奮地期待Johnny告知她怎么去她要去的教室一在對方明確或間接拒絕她并說出一些刺激羞辱她的話后，Lisa先前對他的好印象轟然倒塌，高期待導(dǎo)致她失落低迷，不知所措-Diane及時出現(xiàn)，再次幫助Lisa,Lisa心存感激并悟出一個道理。Johnny爽快地答應(yīng)后Lisa非常高興，自認(rèn)為自己找到了靠山一Johnny故意把她帶到別處并讓她難堪或難過一Diane及時出現(xiàn)，她告知Lisa關(guān)于Johnny的為人并表示自己隨時樂于幫她，Lisa非常感動并悟出一個道理。明確寫作思路（情節(jié)發(fā)展線）根據(jù)后文所給的第一段首句提示“第一節(jié)幾何課結(jié)束后，我轉(zhuǎn)向他問：‘我不曉得下節(jié)課我去哪里上。你能告訴我嗎？”可知，“我”想博得Johnny的好感。那么接下來，他的反應(yīng)是不是很積極呢？畢竟“我”今天可是特意梳妝打扮了一番而來的。再說，“我”問話的語氣也很恰當(dāng)而禮貌的啊。但后文究竟是怎樣發(fā)展得才好呢？……根據(jù)后文所給的第二段首句提示“正在此時，有人過來并拍了拍我的肩膀”可知，后面緊接著要寫的一定要指出此人是誰？他(她)想干嘛？來幫她的還是僅僅是過來安慰的？后來又發(fā)生了什么？按照此類作文續(xù)寫的最后最好是能夠讓我們從故事中受到什么啟示或教益的話，那它又是什么呢？……因?yàn)樽詈玫睦m(xù)寫作文就是要解決矛盾。本文的矛盾沖突點(diǎn)應(yīng)該主要體現(xiàn)在“我”所想達(dá)到的目的與目前阻礙“我”達(dá)到目的的因素上。故續(xù)寫的大方向可以基本明確：此人肯定不是Johnny,也非其它陌生人，而是一會兒前帶她到教室的Diane。在確定了原文的感情基調(diào)，厘清了人物關(guān)系，掌握了人物特點(diǎn)、明確了矛盾沖突點(diǎn)之后，續(xù)寫時應(yīng)本著解決矛盾的目的，向著積極的結(jié)局去寫。可能情節(jié)預(yù)測lJohnny馬上答應(yīng)帶Lisa去她下一個要去的教室上課，但他卻中途玩消失術(shù)，故意讓Lisa難堪。進(jìn)退兩難之際，Diane及時出現(xiàn)，伸出援手。最終她倆開始發(fā)展友誼，預(yù)示著新的學(xué)年精彩無限；2」ohnny明確拒絕告訴Lisa怎么去下一個走班教室，并故意當(dāng)眾羞辱她，說她自視過高，太煩人，想巴結(jié)他卻不知道怎么為人。后來，Diane過來解圍，因?yàn)樗涝贚isa上幾何課的班上有個喜歡捉弄新人的混混。不妥故事發(fā)展Johnny熱情助人，親自帶Lisa去了下一個教室，一路上熱情地介紹肯尼迪學(xué)校(JFK),后來一起學(xué)習(xí)電腦課程，并答應(yīng)Lisa的請求做他的朋友。Diane這時恰好也出現(xiàn)在他們面前。了解了來龍去脈后，Diane也成了他們無法不說的好朋友。下水作文1：Attheendoftheclass,Iturnedtohimandasked,'Tmnotsurewheremynextclassis.Couldyouhelpme?"Whenraisingthequestionwithasmile,Ifeltproud:IwaslikelytostartahappierlifebecauseIwouldimmediatelymakeapopularfriendhere!ButJohnnyturnedawayandwalkedoffwithoutareply.Tomygreatersadness,Daniel,followedbythebiggroupofpeople,shouted,“Thesillynewcomerwantedtojoinus.Wouldyouwelcomeher?"Inthehallwayechoedwavesofsneer.Iheardasharpvoice,"Don'tyouthinkshe'slikeahotgirlwithherhairstyledlikethat?”Tearsfinallyburstoutofmyeyes.(94words)Justatthattime,someonecameupandtappedmeontheshoulder.Turningaround,IfounditwasDiane.Ihadn'tanticipatedshewouldturnupatthemoment.IthrewmyselfintoherarmsandtoldhereverythingthatIhadjustgonethrough.Shewipedoffmyteardropsonthecheekswithhersoftfingersandaskedmetoforgetit,sayingIneedn'tpleasetheso-calledpopularpeople.ThensheledmedirectlytotheclassroomwhereIwassupposedtogo.NotuntilthendidIknowDianewasexactlymytrulypopularstar.(86words)下水作文2：Attheendoftheclass,Iturnedtohimandasked,zTmnotsurewheremynextclassis,couldyouhelpme?"Surprisingly,helookedintomyeyesandnoddedhisheadfirmly.Thenhecastanunnoticeablebutmeaningfullookathisfriends.''Followme,please!”hesaidtome.Strangely,hisfriendscoveredtheirmouthsandchuckled.ItturnedoutlaterthatallexceptmeknewwhereIwouldbeled.IwasaskedtowaitoutsidetheGents.Anditwas5longminutes!"Shameonyou!Disgracefullady!,zshoutsroaredoutsidethetoilet.Iwasfooledbythemostpopularman.Ihuddledupandstartedweepingviolently.(90words)Justatthattime,someonecameupandtappedmeontheshoulder.Lookingup,mymistyeyescaughtafaintfigure.ItwasDiane,theoneIhadsupposedIwouldn'tgetassociatedwith!"What'sup,Lisa?Needhelp?"sheaskedinasoothingvoice.Ishowedhermyschedule,onwhichmycoursesandroomnumberswerelabeled.Withherhelp,Ididn'tmissmyclass.Beforeparting,Ileftmynameandtelephonenumberwithher.Andshepromisedtobemyfirstfriendinthenewschool.Popularfriendsshouldbesincereandwarm-hearted,justlikeDiane!(88words)參考范文：Attheendoftheclass,Iturnedtohimandasked,'I'mnotsurewheremynextclassis,couldyouhelpme?"Withafrown,helookedatmeandthensaidaquickno,turnedbacktohisfriends,andwalkedoutoftheclassroom.Astheywerewalkingou