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第二組：記敘文(一)DearLucy,IwouldliketoinviteyoutojoinusforavisittothenearbynursinghomenextSaturdayforDoubleNinthFestival.Itwasthedayfortheelderpeopleinourculture.Wewillgoandmakedumplingsandcakewiththeelderlypeoplehere.Wewillalsospendsomefuntimetogetherplaygames,whichwehopewillmaketheyhappy.Weshouldbebackaround4:00ontheafternoon.Ifyouareabletocometowithus,pleaseletusknowsowewillwaitforyouattheschoolgateat9:00inthemorning.Lookingforwardtoyourearlyreply.Yours,LiHua(一)DearLucy,IwouldliketoinviteyoutojoinusforavisittothenearbynursinghomenextSaturdayforDoubleNinthFestival.Itwasthedayfortheelderpeopleinourculture.

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(一)本文是李華寫給露西的邀請信，邀請她一同前往敬老院陪老人們過重陽節(jié)。1.在DoubleNinthFestival前加the

專有名詞前須加定冠詞the，特指重陽節(jié)(theDoubleNinthFestival)。2.was→is

客觀陳述規(guī)律性或習(xí)慣性的事情用一般現(xiàn)在時。3.elder→elderly

修飾名詞people要用形容詞，elderly意為“上了年紀的”，符合文意；而elder意為“年紀較大的”，不符合文意；下文也有相同的表達。4.cake→cakes

因cake是可數(shù)名詞，要與dumplings并列，故要用復(fù)數(shù)。5.here→there

根據(jù)上下文語境，此處應(yīng)該是指“敬老院那兒”，而不是“這兒”。6.play→playing

由固定結(jié)構(gòu)spendtime(in)doingsth.意為“花費時間做某事”可知。7.they→them

作賓語要用賓格。8.on→in

表“在下午/上午”用intheafternoon/morning；而表“在具體的某天上/下午”用介詞on。9.去掉come后的to

此處come后并無賓語，故不需要介詞to。10.so→and

表順承關(guān)系用并列連詞and。aroundadj.大約replyn.答復(fù)nursinghome敬老院invitesb.todosth.邀請某人做某事(二)I’llspendthissummerholidayinthecountryside.Althoughthecityismodernandconvenience,there’restillsomeproblems,suchasairspollution,crowdednessandnoise.InthecountrysideIcanenjoycomfortableandquietlife.There,theairisfreshbutthewaterisclean.Treesaregreenandbirdsissinging.Icangotoboating,fishingandswimminginthelake.What’sworse,Icanclimbthehills.Allthiswillbeinterestingandgoodforyourhealth.Aboveall,Icanlearnmoreaboutnature.SoIwantedtogotothecountrysideforachange.I’mlookingforwardtothecomeofmysummerholiday.(二)I’llspendthissummerholidayinthecountryside.Althoughthecityismodernandconvenience,there’restillsomeproblems,suchasairspollution,crowdednessandnoise.InthecountrysideIcanenjoycomfortableandquietlife.aair

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(二)本文講述作者想去鄉(xiāng)村度假的原因。1.convenience→convenient

作表語要用形容詞形式。2.airs→air

因air是不可數(shù)名詞。3.在enjoy后加a

由固定結(jié)構(gòu)enjoy/live/leada…life意為“享受/過著……的生活”可知。4.but→and

表順承關(guān)系用并列連詞and。5.is→are

因主語birds是復(fù)數(shù)，故謂語也要用復(fù)數(shù)形式。6.去掉go后的to

由固定搭配goboating意為“(去)劃船”可知。7.worse→more

根據(jù)上下文語境可知，此處理應(yīng)表“此外”，故要用what’more。(注意：what’sworse意為“更糟糕的是”)8.your→my

根據(jù)上下文語境可知，應(yīng)當(dāng)是對作者的健康有利，應(yīng)用第一人稱物主代詞my。9.wanted→want

因全文主體時態(tài)是一般現(xiàn)在時。10.come→coming

固定短語lookforwardto的to為介詞，其后要接名詞或動名詞。crowdednessn.擁擠aboveall尤其重要的是learnmoreabout更多地了解forachange換換環(huán)境(三)Whatshouldyoudowhenyourparentsbecomeangrily?Ifyourparentsgotmad,trytohaveaconversationwiththemaboutit.Rememberingnottoshoutatthem.Theyusuallywilltrytochange.Buttheywilltakesometimestochangebecausetheyalwaysgetangry,andthatisalltheyknow.Youmighthavetochangeforyourmethodacoupleoftimes.Doanynicethingsforyourparentsthattheydon’texpect—likecooking,doingthedishes,washingclothes,orcleanthefloors.Ifthisdoesn’twork,bringinfriendthatyoufeelcomfortablewith,orhavehimorherhelpyou.(三)Whatshouldyoudowhenyourparentsbecomeangrily?Ifyourparentsgotmad,trytohaveaconversationwiththemaboutit.Rememberingnottoshoutatthem.

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(三)本文講述父母生氣的時候，你應(yīng)該怎么做。1.angrily→angry

作表語要用形容詞形式。2.got→get

因本文的主體時態(tài)是一般現(xiàn)在時。3.Remembering→Remember

祈使句要用動詞原形開頭。4.they→it

因it在此作形式主語，后面的不定式才是真正的主語。5.times→time

因time作“時間”理解時，是不可數(shù)名詞。6.去掉change后的for因change是及物動詞，其后可直接接賓語。7.any→some

肯定句中用some，意為“一些”。8.clean→cleaning

和前面的doing,washing并列。9.在bringin后加a

因friend是可數(shù)名詞，此處意為“一個朋友”，表泛指。10.or→and

表順承關(guān)系用并列連詞and。expectvt.預(yù)料shoutat…對……大喊acoupleoftimes好幾次dothedishes洗碗bringin帶來haveaconversationwith…和……談一談(四)Oneofmyfavoritehobbiesarebackcountryhiking.However,afterIgohiking,Imakesuretohaveallofthepropernecessities.First,Iworeproperclothingandhikingshoes.ThismayincludetakingwatershoesifIhaveplansforhikingthroughstreamsandriversorareliablejackettokeepwarmly.Next,IgetmyfamilyandfriendstoknowIwillbegoingandwhenIwouldreturn.Inadditiontotheseitem,Itakeplentyofthefoodandwater.Finally,Ialwayspackemergencysuppliesincludealighter.Youneverknowwhenyouwillbeinneedforthesethings.(四)Oneofmyfavoritehobbiesarebackcountryhiking.However,afterIgohiking,Imakesuretohaveallofthepropernecessities.First,Iworeproperclothingandhikingshoes.

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(四)本文講述作者徒步旅行前要做的準備。1.are→is

因主語是one，故謂語動詞用單數(shù)。2.after→before

根據(jù)上下文意思可知是“在我去徒步旅行前”。3.wore→wear

全文的主體時態(tài)是一般現(xiàn)在時。4.warmly→warm

作系動詞keep的表語，用形容詞。5.在toknow后加where

引導(dǎo)賓語從句。句意：讓家人和朋友知道我去哪里。6.would→will

根據(jù)上下文語境和前面的Iwillbegoing可知此處是指“我將什么時候回來”，故用一般將來時。7.item→items

由前面的these可知要用復(fù)數(shù)。8.去掉plentyof后的the

此處并沒有表特指，無需定冠詞。9.include→including

因including是介詞，介詞并無形式變化。10.for→of

由固定短語inneedof意為“需要……”可知。backcountryn.邊遠地區(qū)streamn.小溪itemn.項目；條款lightern.打火機packvt.裝；打包propernecessities適當(dāng)?shù)谋匦杵穒nadditionto除了……之外emergencysupplies應(yīng)急物資plentyof許多gohiking去遠足；去徒步旅行(五)MyhometownisBrightonwhereisn’taverybigtown.It’sinthecoastabout50milesfromLondonandhasapopulationof300,000.Certainlyitisn’tasinterestedasLondon.Sotheairisalotofcleanerbecausethere’slittlepollutionhere.There’refewfactoriesinBrighton,butnotmany.So,itisn’teasytofindajobthere.Myfatherusedtoworkinginafactorywhichshutsdownayearagoandmyfatherlosthisjob.There’remanyhotelsandlanguagesschoolsinthetown.Insummerthetownisfulloftravelers.Myfatherhasdecidedtoopenasmallgiftshop.(五)MyhometownisBrightonwhereisn’taverybigtown.It’sinthecoastabout50milesfromLondonandhasapopulationof300,000.Certainlyitisn’tasinterestedasLondon.Sotheairisalotofcleanerbecausethere’slittlepollutionhere.

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(五)本文作者介紹了自己的家鄉(xiāng)——Brighton。1.where→which/that

引導(dǎo)定語從句，并在從句中充當(dāng)主語。2.in→on

由固定短語onthecoast意為“在海岸線上”可知。3.interested→interesting

主語是it，故用interesting。4.So→But

根據(jù)上下文邏輯關(guān)系可知此處顯然存在轉(zhuǎn)折關(guān)系，故用But。5.去掉alot后的of

此處并不是表“很多”，而alot放在比較級前表“……得多”的意思，故去掉of。6.在few前加a

根據(jù)后面的butnotmany可知此處應(yīng)該是指“有一些”，而不是“few(幾乎沒有)”，故在few前加a。7.there→here

作者是介紹自己的家鄉(xiāng)，要用here才符合邏輯。8.working→work

由固定詞組usedtodo…意為“過去曾經(jīng)……”可知。9.shuts→shut

由后面的ayearago可知要用過去時。10.languages→language

通常名詞作定語不用復(fù)數(shù)形式。coastn.海岸usedto過去曾經(jīng)shutdown倒閉giftshop禮品店loseone’sjob失業(yè)hasapopulationof…有……人口(六)Deardadandmum,Ihavebeenveryhappyintheschool.Iworkhardlyintheschooleveryday.Afterclass,Iplaywithmyclassmates.Ispendalottimedoingmyhomework.Afterlunch,Iplaytheping-pongwithmyfriends.Then,IspendsometimereadmyEnglishnote.Atsixo’clock,Ihavemyeveningclass.Afterthat,Ihadsomesparetime.Ateighto’clock,Igotobed.Thisisadayintheschool.Mum,youalwaystellus“Happinessisvitalofourlife.”AndIwanttobehappyeveryday.Ifyouarenothappy,callmepleaseorifIamnothappy,Iwillcallyoueither.Yours,Laura(六)Deardadandmum,Ihavebeenveryhappyintheschool.Iworkhardlyintheschooleveryday.Afterclass,Iplaywithmyclassmates.Ispendalottimedoingmyhomework.of

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(六)Laura給自己的父母寫信，談到在學(xué)校的學(xué)習(xí)和生活情況。1.hardly→hard

根據(jù)語境可知，此處理應(yīng)是指“努力學(xué)習(xí)”，hard本身就是副詞，意為“努力地”，而hardly意為“幾乎不”，顯然不符合上下文邏輯。2.在alot后加of

由固定短語alotof意為“很多”可知。3.去掉ping-pong前的the

在表示“打球”時，在球類名詞前不加任何冠詞。4.read→reading

由固定結(jié)構(gòu)spendtime(in)doingsth.意為“花費時間做某事”可知。5.note→notes

因note是可數(shù)名詞，此處應(yīng)用復(fù)數(shù)，意為“筆記”。6.had→have

因此處講的是“規(guī)律性的動作”，故用一般現(xiàn)在時。7.us→me

根據(jù)上下文邏輯可知，此處應(yīng)該是指“你經(jīng)常告訴我”，故用me。8.of→in

因表“在生活當(dāng)中”常用介詞in。9.And→So

根據(jù)兩句間的邏輯關(guān)系可知，此處顯然存在因果關(guān)系，故用So。10.either→too

在肯定句中用too，表“我也……”。vitaladj.至關(guān)重要的

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spendtime(in)doingsth.花費時間做某事(七)Tommyhasalittledog.HernameisGoldier.Sheisprettyandinterested.Tommylovedherverymuch.Theotherday,GoldierwasoutwalkingwithTommy.Shecutherpawonapieceofglasses.Whentheyarrivedathome,Tommy’smotherthoughtthatthecutwasdeeply.HeaskedTommytotakeGoldierthevet.Thevetwasverykind,buthegaveherainjection.Thenhestitchedup(縫合)thecutandputonabandage.Goldierlookssofunnyasshewalksonthreelegs,holdsherpawasifshehasbeentowar!(七)Tommyhasalittledog.HernameisGoldier.Sheisprettyandinterested.Tommylovedherverymuch.Theotherday,GoldierwasoutwalkingwithTommy.

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(七)本文介紹了Tommy的一只可愛的小狗(Goldier)。1.interested→interesting

形容小狗(是物)有趣，用interesting。2.loved→loves

主語是Tommy，謂語要用第三人稱單數(shù)。3.glasses→glass

因glass作“玻璃”理解時是不可數(shù)名詞。4.去掉arrived后的at

此處home是副詞，arrived后面不加at。5.deeply→deep

作表語要用形容詞。6.He→She

此處指Tommy’smother，故要用she。7.在thevet前加to

由固定搭配take…to…意為“把……帶去……”可知。8.but→and

表順承關(guān)系用并列連詞and。9.a→an

句中injection以元音音素開頭，前面的不定冠詞要用an。10.holds→holding

分析句子成分可知，此處hold是非謂語，與邏輯主語Goldier存在主動關(guān)系，故要用現(xiàn)在分詞，作伴隨狀語。pawn.爪子cutn.傷口vetn.獸醫(yī)injectionn.注射；打針putonabandage綁上繃帶hasbeentowar參加過戰(zhàn)爭(八)Longagopeopleusedbellsmorethantheydidtoday.Thepostmenwasusedtoringahandbellwhentheydeliveredletters.Fireengineshadbellsinsteadsirens(警笛).Peoplewhichsoldthingscamepasthouses,rangabellandshoutingwhatwasforsale.Inmanycountry,bellswerehungaroundthenecksofanimals.Thebellshelpedownersfindlostcowsorsheep.Today,atIndia,animalsstillwearbells.Nowbellsareusedlessbecausevariousmodernsound-makershavetakenitsp