2022屆高考英語書面表達專題指導(dǎo)與練習(xí)講評（圖表式作文）練習(xí)講評二

2012屆高考英語書面表達（圖表式作文）練習(xí)講評二試題來源：2012屆江蘇省石莊高級中學(xué)高三學(xué)情調(diào)研測試隨著工業(yè)的發(fā)展，空氣污染愈來愈嚴重。在一些城市越來越多的人因為空氣的污染而備受疾病的煎熬?，F(xiàn)請你根據(jù)圖表所示，就你所在城市空氣污染的狀況寫一篇短文，并對市政府提出至少兩條改進建議。

注意：1.詞數(shù)150左右；2.參考詞匯：車輛vehicle。講評本篇書面表達題目中只有柱形圖，在描述圖表所反映的內(nèi)容時，要注意柱形圖的柱形的高度，并由此判斷空氣污染所產(chǎn)生的原因。整個表達需要包括下列內(nèi)容：話題討論的背景，圖表中四個數(shù)據(jù)所反映的情況及其產(chǎn)生的原因，并向市政府提出改進的建議。第一步審題通過審題抓住主要數(shù)據(jù)反映的主要問題即所要表達的要點：通過審題抓住主要數(shù)據(jù)反映的主要問題即所要表達的要點：話題討論的背景：1.隨著工業(yè)的發(fā)展，空氣污染愈來愈嚴重；2.在一些城市越來越多的人因為空氣的污染而備受疾病的煎熬；3.以我們城市為例。圖表1.空氣污染50%的原因由車輛引起（路上行駛車輛越來越多，排放有害氣體）；2.空氣污染35%的原因由工廠引起（排放廢水）；3.空氣污染35%的原因由抽煙引起（對他人身體和環(huán)境有害）；4.空氣污染10%的原因由其它因素引起。向市政府提出改進的建議。第二步謀篇Para1話題討論的背景；Para2概述圖表所反映的信息，即把現(xiàn)象產(chǎn)生的原因清楚地敘述出來。Para3向市政府提出改進的建議。第三步表達變點為句注意多重表達1.隨著工業(yè)的發(fā)展，空氣污染愈來愈嚴重；①Withthedevelopmentofindustry,airpollutionisgettingmoreandmoreserious.②Asindustryisdeveloping,airpollutionisgettingmoreandmoreserious.2.在一些城市越來越多的人因為空氣的污染而備受疾病的煎熬。①Insomecities,moreandmorepeoplearesufferingfromdifferentkindsofillnessbecauseofairpollution.②Insomecities,moreandmorepeoplehavegotmiserablediseasesbecauseofairpollution.3.以我們城市為例。

Takeourcityforexample.圖表1.空氣污染50%的原因由車輛引起（路上行駛車輛越來越多，排放有害氣體）。；①Abouthalfoftheproblemiscausedbyvehicles.Therearemoreandmorecarsandbusesontheroad,whichgiveoffpoisonousgases.②Abouthalfoftheproblemiscausedbyvehicles.Moreandmorecarsandbusesaredrivingontheroad,whichgiveoffpoisonousgases.2.空氣污染35%的原因由工廠引起（排放廢水）。①35%ofairpollutioniscausedbyfactories,whichoftenpourwastewaterintotheriver.②35%ofairpollutioniscausedbyfactories,whichoftendischargewastewaterintotheriver.3.空氣污染35%的原因由抽煙引起（對他人身體和環(huán)境有害）。①Anotherfactorissmoking.Smokingdoesharmtoothers’healthaswellastoenvironment.②Anotherfactorissmoking.Smokingdoesharmnotonlytoothers’healthbutalsotoenvironment.4.空氣污染10%的原因由其它因素引起。①About10%ofairpollutioniscausedbyotherreasons.②Otherfactors,takingupabout10%,causeairpollution.向市政府提出改進的建議：圍繞造成空氣污染的其中兩條原因進行聯(lián)想。如：應(yīng)該采取措施與空氣污染作斗爭。努力改善公共交通以滿足公眾的需求。禁止人們在公共場所抽煙；

Wesuggestthatthecitygovernmentshouldtakesomemeasurestofightagainstpollution.Forexample,firstofall,thegovernmentshouldmakeagreatefforttoimprovethepublictransportsystemtomeetcitizen’sdemands.Inaddition,smokingmustbeforbiddeninpublic.Onlyinthiswaycanwesolvetheproblemassoonaspossible.連句成篇連句成篇的關(guān)鍵是將圖表要點的敘述進行合并以及加上過渡句。

Asisshowninthechart,airpollutioninourcityiscausedbythefollowingreasons.Abouthalfoftheproblemiscausedbyvehicleswithmoreandmorecarsandbusesontheroad,whichgiveoffpoisonousgases.35%ofairpollutioniscausedbyfactories,whichoftenpourwastewaterintotheriver.Anotherfactorissmokinganditdoesharmtoothers’healthaswellastoenvironment.About10%ofairpollutioniscausedbyotherreasons.參考范文(1)Withthedevelopmentofindustry,airpollutionisgettingmoreandmoreserious.Insomecities,moreandmorepeoplearesufferingfromdifferentkindsofillnessbecauseofairpollution.Takeourcityforexample.Asisshowninthechart,airpollutioninourcityiscausedbythefollowingreasons.Abouthalfoftheproblemiscausedbyvehicleswithmoreandmorecarsandbusesontheroad,whichgiveoffpoisonousgases.35%ofairpollutioniscausedbyfactories.Anotherfactorissmokinganditdoesharmtoothers’healthaswellastoenvironment.Besides,about10%ofairpollutioniscausedbyotherreasons.Wesuggestthatthecitygovernmentshouldtakesomemeasurestofightagainstpollution.Forexample,firstofall,thegovernmentshouldmakeagreatefforttoimprovethepublictransportsystemtomeetcitizen’sdemands.Inaddition,smokingmustbeforbiddeninpublic.Onlyinthiswaycanwesolvetheproblemassoonaspossible.參考范文(2)Asindustryisdeveloping,airpollutionisgettingmoreandmoreserious.Insomecities,moreandmorepeoplehavegotmiserablediseasesbecauseofairpollution.Takeourcityforexample.Asisshowninthechart,airpollutioninourcityiscausedbythefollowingreasons.Abouthalfoftheproblemiscausedbyvehicles.Moreandmorecarsandbusesaredrivingontheroad,whichgiveoffpoisonousgases.35%ofairpollutioniscausedbyfactories,whichoftendischargewastewaterintotheriver.Anotherfactorissmokinganditdoesharmnotonlytoothers’healthbutalsotoenvironment.Therestofairpollutioniscausedbyotherreasons.Wesuggestthatthecitygovernmentshouldtakesomemeasurestofightagainstpollution.Newfuelcanbeusedtotaketheplaceofgas.Wecanplantmoretrees,grassandflowers.Allinall,ifeverybodyrealizestheimportanceofenvironmentanddoessomethingtostoppollution,theproblemwillbesolved.同步練習(xí)（重慶市重慶一中2010屆高三上學(xué)期期中考試）（經(jīng)過筆者改編）假如你是李華，在最近的研究性學(xué)習(xí)當中，受《21世紀中學(xué)生英語報》（The21stCentury）之邀，你對你所在的班60名同學(xué)（男女各半）進行了上網(wǎng)目的的調(diào)查?，F(xiàn)將調(diào)查結(jié)果（如下表所示）用英語給報社的編輯寫一封信，報道此事，以引起輿論的關(guān)注，并提出你的觀點和建議。注意：1.報道應(yīng)包括圖表所示全部內(nèi)容，可適適當增加細節(jié)；2.文章的開頭與結(jié)尾已給出，不計入總詞數(shù)；3.詞數(shù)：150左右。

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