讀后續(xù)寫周周練救助一只小鳥講義高三英語一輪復(fù)習(xí)寫作專項(xiàng)

讀后續(xù)寫周周練主題：人與自然類型：人與動物類題目：救助一只小鳥第二節(jié)(滿分25分)閱讀下面短文,根據(jù)所給情節(jié)進(jìn)行續(xù)寫,使之構(gòu)成一個完整的故事。WhenIarrivedhomefromschoolnightwasfalling.Acallcamefromthepublic:abirdofunknownspecies（物種）wasbeingattackedbyagroupofnoisychildreninhisfrontgarden.Hescaredthemoffandgrabbedtheirvictim.IimmediatelycalledformyclassmateJacktothespot.Wewerestandinginfrontofastranger’shouseinanunfamiliarstreet,rescueboxinhand.Myheadfullofinstructionstofollow.“Thebirdwouldbeourfirsttestasavolunteerwildliferescuer!”Jacksaidexcitedly.Wehadpletedthetwodayintensive（強(qiáng)化的）trainingcoursethepreviousmonthandlearnedthebasicskillsofrescuinganimalsinvarioussituations.Butwewereanxious,too.Afterall,itwasthefirsttimeforustorescueabird.WouldIbeabletotransferthebirdneatlyintomyrescuebox?Manyworriesflashedinmymind.Sensingmyuneaseabouttheactahead,Jacksaid,“Thesethingsareprettyeasytodealwith!”Iwaswonderingwhatkindofbirditwaswhenakindlookingmanappearedandledusinsidetoseeourveryfirstpatient.Iliftedtheedgeoftheshoeboxveryslightlytoseeanangrylookingbirdstandingloattentiononverythinandlonglegs,togetherwithasliceofbananaandasmalldishofwater.Hedidn’tknowitstruenamebutthefolks（民間的）calledthecreatureRedFan.“It’seatensomebanana,”saidthemanproudly.Thepoorsoulseemedrathernervous,soIdecidednottograbitbyhandbutjusttransferthewholeshoeboxintomyrescuebox.Backhome,wecouldonlyseesomeminorinjuriesintheleftwing,buttherewasnobloodonitsfeathers.Jackmanagedtotreattheinjurieswithsomeiodophor（碘伏藥水）.Weassesseditsconditiontofindoutifitwasappropriatetoreleasethebirdthenextday.Howcouldwehelpitspendthenightpeacefully?Wehadn’tseenthisspeciesofbirdbefore,letaloneitshabits.注意：1．續(xù)寫詞數(shù)應(yīng)為150左右；2．請按如下格式在答題卡的相應(yīng)位置作答。Paragraph1:“WhynotdoasearchontheInternet?”suggestedJack._______________________________________________________________________________Paragraph2:Thenextday,weweregladtoseethebirdwaswellenough._______________________________________________________________________________文本分析1．頭腦風(fēng)暴1.DidIsearchontheInternetandwhatdidIfind?2.Whatdidwedoforthebirdnext?Whatdidthebirdandwedofinally?3.Didwewanttofreethebird?4.WhatdidIsaytothebird?5.Howdidwefeltabouttheexperience?2.重點(diǎn)詞匯和表達(dá)單詞音標(biāo)詞義背誦species[?spi??i?z]n.物種；種類intensive[?n?tens?v]adj.加強(qiáng)的，強(qiáng)烈的;folk[f??k]adj.民俗的;大眾的;iodophor[a?'?d?f?:(r)]n.碘伏藥水Iwaswonderingwhatkindofbirditwaswhenakindlookingmanappearedandledusinsidetoseeourveryfirstpatient.（賓語從句+時間狀語從句）當(dāng)一個善良的人出現(xiàn)并帶我們進(jìn)去看我們的第一個病人時，我想知道那是什么樣的鳥。3.文本要素分析elementscontentWhoWhatWhenWhere【參考答案】：Who：主要人物:l;Jack;thebird;次要人物:thepublic;children;astranger;aman；What：IandJacktookaninjuredbirdbacktohometocare；When：onenight;thenextday；Where：inastreet;attheauthor'shome；Theme(主題):Thepurposeofthepassageistotellustoloveanimalsandthenature.4.故事結(jié)構(gòu)圖plotlineplotline故事情節(jié)線climaxclimax（高潮）Whathappened?WhatdidIandJackdo?Whathappened?WhatdidIandJackdo?________________________________________________________________________________________________development，developmentdevelopment，____________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________beginningstorymountainbeginningstorymountainIandJackrescueabridIandJackrescueabrid.endingpositivepositiveresolution解決action行動conflict沖突resolution解決action行動conflict沖突【參考答案】：development：Jackmanagedtotreattheinjurieswithsomeiodophor（碘伏藥水）.Weassesseditsconditiontofindoutifitwasappropriatetoreleasethebirdthenextday.climax：Howcouldwehelpitspendthenightpeacefully?Wehadn’tseenthisspeciesofbirdbefore,letaloneitshabits.ending:Wegavethebidfreedomandfeltrelieved.5.文本概要文章敘述了作者和同班同學(xué)Jack利用他們所學(xué)的救援野生動物知識和技能成功救助了一只受傷的小鳥的故事。6.續(xù)寫結(jié)構(gòu)分析Paragraph1:“WhynotdoasearchontheInternet?”suggestedJack.surfedtheInternetaboutthebird首句呼應(yīng)上文surfedtheInternetaboutthebird首句呼應(yīng)上文_________________________________________________________________中間刻畫細(xì)節(jié)ThethingsIandJackdidXXXensuredthebirdwasingoodcondition中間刻畫細(xì)節(jié)ThethingsIandJackdidXXXensuredthebirdwasingoodcondition尾句銜接過渡___________________________________________________________________尾句銜接過渡Paragraph2:Thenextday,weweregladtoseethebirdwaswellenough.中間刻畫細(xì)節(jié)thebirdisreadyforfreedom首句呼應(yīng)上文中間刻畫細(xì)節(jié)thebirdisreadyforfreedom首句呼應(yīng)上文尾句萃章顯志向cui尾句萃章顯志向cui’zhang’xian’zhisay\do\feelfeelhappyforhelpingthebird___________________________________________________________________【詳解】1.續(xù)寫構(gòu)思 ①:動作分析根據(jù)第五段的描述，可知作者和Jack把小鳥帶回家中并對其進(jìn)行了仔細(xì)檢查和簡單的傷口處理，但他們并不知該如何護(hù)理它。再結(jié)合給文第二段中作者想成為野生動物救援志愿者和他們所學(xué)到了救援知識，以及續(xù)寫第一段的首“WhynotdoasearchontheInternet?’SuggestedJack可我初續(xù)寫第一段應(yīng)該設(shè)計(jì)作者和Jack的一些動作。結(jié)合第二段段首句Thenextday,weweregladtoseethebirdwaswellenough可知，續(xù)寫第二段可設(shè)計(jì)的救助小鳥的一些動作。:心理活動分析續(xù)寫給文中對作者和Jack的心理描寫較少，僅有第三段中anxious，worries和unease等詞，從這些詞中可以看出作者的心情。因此可以判斷出續(xù)寫部分可以適當(dāng)?shù)乜坍嬑恼碌匿亯|和伏筆根據(jù)abirdofunknownspecies，Hedidn'tknowit‘struenamebutthefolkscalledthecreatureRedFan等信息為續(xù)寫部分設(shè)計(jì)做了鋪墊。文本的第二段中Jack的話和對他們學(xué)習(xí)野生動物救援知識的0敘述為續(xù)寫部分感悟埋下了伏筆。此外，文本最后一段對作者和Jack二人為的描寫以交代了他們要但對如何把小鳥護(hù)理得更好產(chǎn)生了疑問。這些信息也為續(xù)寫部分設(shè)計(jì)埋下了伏筆。作者的對傷鳥的擔(dān)心和關(guān)愛。2.續(xù)寫線索①:[開端]杰克提議網(wǎng)上搜索[情節(jié)發(fā)展]“我”們上網(wǎng)搜索鳥人信息和生活習(xí)性→“我”們按照建議護(hù)理小鳥→看到小鳥很舒適，我們彼此會心一笑。②:[高潮]看到小鳥狀態(tài)很好“我”們開心→小鳥在盒子里又叫又跳→小鳥恢復(fù)能量→我們開心并欣慰決定放飛小鳥。→“我”們與小鳥對話。③：[結(jié)局]小鳥聽懂了我的話，開心飛走。[感悟]感到自豪并認(rèn)為成為野生動物救援志愿者是合格的。3.詞匯激活情感：panic，__________動作：run，__________環(huán)境：scenery，__________4.續(xù)寫訓(xùn)練馬變得害怕，失控地跑了起來。（scared；wildly）2.我是如此的害怕以至于緊緊地握住韁繩以免摔下去。（so…that…；frightened）3.“我們肯定迷路了?！蔽业吐曊f，害怕的感覺包圍了我。（whisper；afeelingoffear）4.終于，我們安然無恙的回到了農(nóng)舍（safe；sound）5.“情緒描寫驚慌恐懼”高分句型1.Afloodoffearwelledupinhim.他從心底害怕。Sheshookallover,feelinglikesittingonpinsandneedles.她渾身發(fā)抖，感覺像坐在針腳上。3.Lastnight,Idreamedaboutbeingchasedbyanangrydog.Ireallyhadmyheartinmymouth.昨晚，我夢見被一只惡狗追趕。我真的被嚇壞了。4.Asnakecameoutofthebrushwoodandscaredmetodeath.一條蛇從灌木叢爬出來，把我嚇壞了。【參考答案】:3.詞匯激活relief，nervous，worried；cry，thinktooneself；mountain，range，valley，river，lake，forest，wind，blow4.續(xù)寫訓(xùn)練1.Thehorsebecamesacredandranawaywildly.2.IwassofrightenedthatIheldonthereinstightlyandtriednottofall.3.“Wemusthavegotlost!”Iwhispered,afeelingoffearsurroundingme.4.Finally,wereachedthefarmhouse,safeandsound.7.范文展示“WhynotdoasearchontheInternet?”suggestedJack.WeactedquicklyandsurfedtheInternettofigureouttherelevantinformationaboutthebird,suchasitsspeciesandhabits.Followingthegivenadvice,weputsomecottonatthebottomoftheboxtokeepitwarmandplaceditnearthefireplace.Inordertorecoveritsenergy,wegaveitsomefoodandwater.Thebirdlookedabitmorefortable,andsoonitfellasleep.Havingensuredthebirdwasingoodcondition,wefeltrelieved.Thenextday,weweregladtoseethebirdwaswellenough.Itwassingingandbouncingaroundintherescuebox.Obviously,ithadregainedits