作文講評建議信

作文講評建議信10月月考作文講評

Tips高考英語書面表達(dá)高分標(biāo)準(zhǔn)①覆蓋所有內(nèi)容要點(diǎn)②應(yīng)用較多的語法結(jié)構(gòu)和詞匯③有效地使用語句間的連接成分，使全文結(jié)構(gòu)緊湊假如你是高三(1)班的班長李華，得知美國學(xué)生Chris作為交換生，下學(xué)期將到你班學(xué)習(xí)。請你根據(jù)以下提示，給他寫封郵件。(1)表示歡迎；(2)介紹本班情況及與本地生活相關(guān)的信息（如氣候，飲食等）；(3)希望Chris做哪些事情，以增進(jìn)中美學(xué)生間的了解和友誼。DearChris, I’mLiHua,monitorofClassOne,GradeTwelve.____________________________________________________________________________________________________________________ Yours, LiHuaI.審題：體裁和格式：人稱:寫作內(nèi)容及時態(tài)：郵件（屬書信體，格式已給出）書面表達(dá)

you,I,we一般現(xiàn)在時，一般將來時注意：(1)請勿提及相關(guān)的真實(shí)信息；(2)可適當(dāng)加入細(xì)節(jié)，使內(nèi)容充實(shí)，行文連貫；(3)詞數(shù)100左右，開頭和結(jié)尾已給出，不計(jì)入總詞數(shù)。在作文里不能涉及任何所在地區(qū)、學(xué)校的信息，否則高考時會被視為作弊行為。字?jǐn)?shù)不能超12行，否則扣2分！轉(zhuǎn)換應(yīng)試意識表達(dá)言簡意賅

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佳句背誦1.Knowing/When/Onknowingthenewsthatyou’recomingtobewithusasanexchangestudentthiscomingterm,we

cannotconcealourexcitementandlookforwardtoyourarrival.得知…我們….2.Themomentweknowthenewsthat…wordsfailtodescribeourexcitement）得知…我們…..二.介紹-----同位語，非謂語，定從，with結(jié)構(gòu)1.Ourclassconsistsof50optimisticandeasy-goingstudents,allofwhomarewillingtoacceptyouasoneofusandmakeyoufeelathome.Notonlywilltheymakeacquaintancewithyou,butalsotheywouldliketogiveyouahandwhenyouareinrouble.2.MyClass,abigfamilyconsistingof50optimisticandeasy-goingstudents,arewillingtoacceptyouasoneofusandmakeyoufeelathome.4.Consistingof50students,ourclassseemslikeabigfamilywitharelaxingandharmoniousatmosphere,whichwillmakeyoufeelathome.3.Consistingof50optimisticandeasy-goingstudents,myclassisabigfamily,inwhichwelivetogetherinharmony.4.Class1,whereyouaregoingtostudy,isabigfamilyconsistingof50students,allofwhomarewillingtoacceptyouasoneofusandmakeyoufeelathome.

5.Mycity,afascinatingharbor/afascinatingcoastalcity,enjoyspleasantweather,withbrightsunshinealltheyearround.6.LocatedinthesouthofChina,ourcityisrich/abundantin/isdistinguishedforseafood,whichIhopeyou’lllike/you’llgetaccustomedto7.ComparedwithAmerica,theweatherheremaybedifferentfromthatinyourhometown.（非謂語)AndhereI’lltellyousomethingaboutthelocallife,whichmaybedifferentfromthatinyourhometown.

8.Weallviewthisasapreciouschanceforustolearnaboutwhatlifeislikeinyourcountry,especiallyschoollife.Meanwhile,wecanhaveourspokenEnglishimprovedwhenwehavefuntogether.（what引導(dǎo)賓語從句，when引導(dǎo)狀語從句。9Indeed,wefeelexcitedabouthavingyouasournewclassmateandwearecuriousaboutwhatlifeislikeinyourcountry,especiallyschoollife.Meanwhile,youareexpectedtoinvolvedyourselfin….,where….inthisway..ourfriendshipwillsurelybepromoted.

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DearChris,

I’mLiHua,monitorofClassOne,GradeTwelve.I’mmorethangladtoknowthatyou’recomingtobewithusasanexchangestudentthiscomingterm.Infact,allmyclassmatesarekindandlookforwardtoyourcoming,andarewillingtoacceptyouasoneofus.

Besides,Ihopethatyou’llhavenodifficultyadaptingtothefoodandweatherhere.Itisgenerallynottoohotinsummerhereandwehaverelativelywarmerwinter,comparedtothatinAmerica.Wehavericeas

ourmainfood,whichIhopeyou’lllike.

Indeed,wefeelexcitedabouthavingyouasournewclassmate.Foronething,wecanhaveabetterknowledgeofAmericancultureandsocialcustomswithyourhelp.Foranother,weviewthisasagoodchanceforustoimproveourEnglish.

Hopetoseeyousoon. Yours, LiHua2.DearChris,I’mLiHua,monitorofClassOne,GradeTwelve.

Hearingthatyou’llcometoourclass,allmyclassmatesfeelexcited.Wearekindandeasytogetalongwith,so

there’snodoubtthatwewillmakeyoufeelathome

onceyou’reherewithus.LifeinChinacanbedifferentfromthatinAmerica.Tobeginwith,wefeedmainlyonrice,whichIhopeyou’llgetaccustomedto.Inaddition,wehavehotsummer,butinwinterit’sgenerallywarmer.Weallseethisasapreciouschanceforustolearnaboutwhatlifeislikeinyourcountry,especiallyschoollife.Meanwhile,wecanhaveourspokenEnglishimprovedwhenwehavefuntogether.亮點(diǎn)：1.句型結(jié)構(gòu)有：分詞作狀語和賓補(bǔ)，so連接并列分句，同位語從句，非限制性定語從句，what引導(dǎo)賓語從句，once引導(dǎo)狀語從句。2.短語：feelathome,bedifferentfrom,feedon,getaccustomedto,see…as…,havefun。3.使用tobeginwith,inaddition,meanwhile等詞語使行文流暢。III.改錯：下列句子是寫作中易出現(xiàn)的普遍錯誤，請找出錯誤并改正。1.Knowthatyou’lljoininusnextterm,Iamglad.2.Therearemanyseafoodinourcity.3.YoucanhelpusinourEnglish.4.Ourclassisconsistedof56students,allofthemarefriendly.5.LifeinChinacanbedifferentfromAmerica.正：Knowingthatyou’lljoinusnextterm,Iamglad.正：Thereismuchseafoodinourcity.正：YoucanhelpuswithourEnglish.正：Ourclassconsistsof…,allofwhomare…正：Life…differentfromthatinAmerica.

6.Iconvincethat….7.Notonlyaretheywillingtomakeacquaintancewithyou,butalsogiveyouahandwhenyouareintrouble.8.Iandmyclassmateswelcomeyoutoourschool.2016廣州一模假定你是李華，你要完成一項(xiàng)關(guān)于中英學(xué)生寒假生活的調(diào)查。請給你的英國筆友Bill寫一封信，交流相關(guān)信息。要點(diǎn)如下：

1．寫信的原因；

2．介紹中國學(xué)生的寒假生活；

(1)時長：約20天

(2)活動

3．詢問英國學(xué)生的寒假生活。Howiseverything?

I’mdoingaprojectonhowBritishandChinesestudentsspendtheirwinterholidays.InChina,thewintervacationisusuallyabouttwentydayslong.ItfallsduringtheChineseNewYear,somoststudentstakepartindifferentSpringFestivalactivities,suchasvisitingfamily,eatinglotsoffoods,andmostimportantly,gettingluckymoney!Duringtheholidaymanystudentswillalsogotravellingwiththeirparents.Unfortunatelytheycan’ttravelforlongthoughbecauseChinesestudentsalwayshavealotofhomeworktododuringthisbreak.

Manymustevenattendspecialholidayclasses.WhataboutintheUK?Howdothestudentsspendthewinterholidaysthere?

I’mlookingforwardtoyourreply.

Yours,

LiHuaII.

佳作賞析

1.DearChris,I’mLiHua,monitorofClassOne,GradeTwelve.Knowingthatyou’llstayinoursch