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1、書面表達評講,假設你叫李華，你班同學參加了“二十一世紀中學生英文報”組織的一場討論。討論的主題是：城市內是否可以豢養(yǎng)寵物（狗和貓）。請你根據(jù)下表所提供的信息，給報社投稿，介紹討論情況，并說明自己的觀點或建議。,寫作步驟： 一、審題。 二、語言組織。 三、檢查修改。,一、審題 1. 審主題 2. 審人稱 3. 審時態(tài) 4. 審要點 5. 審框架,審主題： 城市內是否可以豢養(yǎng)寵物（狗和貓） 2. 審人稱： 給報社投稿，介紹討論情況，并說明自己的觀點或建議。 故人稱為第一人稱和第三人稱。 3.審時態(tài)： 一般過去現(xiàn)在時為主，其它時態(tài)為輔。,4. 列要點： 、你班同學參加了“二十一世紀中學生英文報”組織

2、的一場討論。 、反對飼養(yǎng)寵物的同學認為： 、支持飼養(yǎng)寵物的同學認為： 、自己的觀點或建議 5. 謀篇：三段法模式 、第一段：反對飼養(yǎng)寵物的同學認為： 、第二段：支持飼養(yǎng)寵物的同學認為： 、第三段：自己的觀點或建議,二、語言組織： 1. 選詞組織要點。 2. 擴詞成句。 3. 整理成篇。, on the way / around the corner .,The exam is coming .,Nowadays, people think gratefulness is very important ., be of great importance / attach great import

3、ance to,一、使用較高級的詞匯,短語優(yōu)先,It occurred to that I should be grateful to life instead of complaining about it .,I think that I shouldnt complain about my life but be grateful to life,棄舊取新,I began to realized the importance of gratefulness.,I came to be aware of how important gratefulness is.,倒裝是一種簡單易行提亮句

4、子的方法。,I didnt realized its importance until I was inspired ., Not until I was inspired .did I realized its importance.,We can build up a harmonious society only in this way ., Only in this way can we build up a harmonious society.,An old woman came onto the bus., Onto the bus came an old woman.,陳述不如

5、倒裝妙,適當使用被動語態(tài)，會呈現(xiàn)句型的變化，使句子表達地道豐富。,We believe that it is parents duty to bring us up, give us love and educate us.,It is believed that it is parents duty to .,主動不如被動巧,從句在很多情況下可變成分詞結構或省略句， 這會是文章中更大的亮點。,When I see his bitter smile , I suddenly realized how lucky I was .,Seeing,When it is compared with o

6、ther cartoons, The Wolf and the Sheep is more interesting.,C,從句不如分詞傲,Expressions,on one hand, on the other hand as a result of last but not least As far as Im concerned It is necessary for sb. to do sth. be supposed to do sth. on the contrary,Expressions,live in harmony with people are convinced tha

7、t keep sb. company take action to make things even worse,Opinions vary from person to person.（紀湖蓉） Opinions are divided on this matter. Different people have different opinions. Whats more, it is likely that pets will attack people.（陳蔚） Only in this way can we achieve the balance between pets and pe

8、ople in cities.（袁旻旻）,6.The reasons are as follows, for one thingfor another（侯倩倩） 7.We are supposed to take control of our pets, in case they attack others.(吳曉晗） 8. What I will choose is definitely the former.(蔣演） 9. People live in harmony with pets, which makes life more colorful.(宗媛媛）,三、檢查修改： 、檢查單詞

9、拼寫、標點符號等。 、檢查要點是否遺漏。 、檢查句子結構是否正確。 、估計字數(shù)是否符合要求。,One possible version,Recently we have had a discussion on whether people should keep pets at home in cities. Some students think it a good idea to keep pets because many old people who live alone at home can get some comfort from pets. Besides, getting

10、along well with animals will make our life interesting.,On the contrary, the other students are against the idea. In their opinion, if too many people keep pets at home, it is bad for the environment. Whats worse, pets may make too much noise and even attack people. I like animals, so I dont think i

11、ts bad to keep pets at home. But we must take some measures to prevent them from polluting our environment. Yours sincerely, Li Hua,What should you do if you want to write a good composition? 第一步 認真審題(analyze the requirements） 第二步 謀篇布局(draw up an outline) 第三步 聯(lián)句成篇(organize the sentences) 第四步 錦上添花(get the article polished up