高考寫作

高考寫作 1 評分標(biāo)準(zhǔn) 2 內(nèi)容框架 第四部分：書面表達(dá)（滿分 25分） 假設(shè)你是卜曼宜，你購買了一部某外國公司生產(chǎn)的手機(jī)，因有質(zhì)量問題，要求該公司更換。請根據(jù)下列要點，用英文寫一封電子郵件。 要點： 1. 問題： 2. 手機(jī)不響鈴，不能發(fā)短信；該產(chǎn)品已售完，無法更換；型號新，無配件，無法維修。 3. 要求：公司應(yīng)盡快予以更換。 注意： 1. 詞數(shù)為 100左右； 2. 參考詞匯：配件 spare part 3. 電子郵件的開頭和結(jié)尾已為你寫好（不計入你所寫詞數(shù)）； 4. 已給出的電子郵件的開頭和結(jié)尾不得抄入答題卡。 When I bought it home, I found there were several problems about the quality of the mobile phone. There is no ring in the new mobile phone, besides, it can not be used to send short messages. When I want back to the local company, the manager told me this product has sold out and that I wasn t able to change it. What s worse, this style mobile phone is a new product, there is no spare part and can t to be repaired. These problems worries me most. I hope your company would change it for me as soon as possible. 【 分析 】 基本表達(dá)清楚；時態(tài)運用恰當(dāng)；采用了些簡單連接手法；內(nèi)容較連貫；準(zhǔn)確性不夠。 中國式英語 語態(tài)錯誤 動詞用法錯誤 單詞誤用 15 第四部分：書面表達(dá)（滿分25分） 假設(shè)你是卜曼宜，你購買了一部某外國公司生產(chǎn)的手機(jī)，因有質(zhì)量問題，要求該公司更換。請根據(jù)下列要點，用英文寫一封電子郵件。 要點： 1. 問題： 2. 手機(jī)不響鈴，不能發(fā)短信；該產(chǎn)品已售完，無法更換；型號新，無配件，無法維修。 2. 要求：公司應(yīng)盡快予以更換。 注意： 1. 詞數(shù)為 100左右； 2. 參考詞匯：配件 spare part 3. 電子郵件的開頭和結(jié)尾已為你寫好（不計入你所寫詞數(shù)）； 4. 已給出的電子郵件的開頭和結(jié)尾不得抄入答題卡。 However, some problems are presented with this mobile phone. In the first place, when there are phone calls, the mobile phone just can t ring. In addition, short messages can never be sent. when I came back to the mall for exchange, I was disappointed to be told that this model had been sold out. Worse still, it is a new model, thus no spare part is available at the moment. Nowhere can I have this phone repaired. Maybe there are some alternatives to handle this case, but I hope it can be dealt with and solved as soon as possible. In brief, my personal viewpoint is that you replace this mobile phone. I m looking forward to your reply. 【 分析 】 全文共九個句子 ,其中有 兩個時間狀語從句 ,一個并列句 ； 一個倒裝句 ； 一個表語從句。 運用了 however, in the first place, in addition, worse still, in brief 五個過渡性詞匯。 運用了 available, alternative 兩個較高級詞語。 en en but can I is that However In the first ace, In ition, orse still rief, available alternatives 25 1 評分標(biāo)準(zhǔn) keep to the point accuracy (spelling and grammar) bright points(words , phrases and sentence) natural 2 內(nèi)容框架 1 真題一（環(huán)境保護(hù) 一次性筷子的使用） (how to make your content logical) 2 真題二（周末集體活動 介紹一個地方） (how to make bright points for your article) 3 真題三（討論動物園是否應(yīng)搬出市區(qū)） (how to make accuracy) 4 歷年真題翻譯練習(xí) 真題一 假如你叫李華，是一名高中學(xué)生。根據(jù)下面內(nèi)容，寫一封倡議書，呼吁人們停止使用一次性筷子。 注意： 1開頭和結(jié)尾已給出。 2字?jǐn)?shù) 100左右。 3參考詞匯： reject throwaway chopsticks 寫作步驟 1 擴(kuò)展 -邏輯性 -分段 2 翻譯 -亮點 -詞與句 3 檢查 -錯誤 假如你叫李華，是一名高中學(xué)生。根據(jù)下面內(nèi)容，寫一封倡議書，呼吁人們停止使用一次性筷子。 注意： 1開頭和結(jié)尾已給出。 2字?jǐn)?shù) 100左右。 3參考詞匯： reject throwaway chopsticks 目前狀態(tài) 導(dǎo)致結(jié)果 采取措施 1擴(kuò)展 砍伐森林會導(dǎo)致很多嚴(yán)重的環(huán)境問題。 面對這樣的情況，我們應(yīng)該采取一些措施來保護(hù)森林了。 目前，中國的森林正遭受著嚴(yán)重的破壞。 2 翻譯 第一部分 Do you know why sandstorms and landslides are happening more frequently than ever in recent years? According to the recent statistics, 中國正面臨著嚴(yán)重的森林破壞問題。 中國的森林覆蓋率僅為 13%，但是中國每年要生產(chǎn)大約 450億雙筷子，而這些筷子就需要我們砍伐 2500萬棵樹。有環(huán)保主義者警告，照這樣的速度，中國可能在 20年內(nèi)就要砍伐所有的森林。 面臨著 森林破壞問題 覆蓋率 大約 450億 2500萬 警告 滅絕 be confronted with the problem of deforestation be covered with approximately 45 billion 25 million warn die out 中國正面臨著嚴(yán)重的森林破壞問題。 中國的森林覆蓋率僅為13%，但是中國每年要生產(chǎn)大約 450億雙筷子 而這些筷子就需要我們砍伐 2500萬棵樹。 有環(huán)保主義者警告，照這樣的速度，中國可能在 20年內(nèi)就要砍伐所有的森林。 China is confronted with the serious problem of deforestation. 13% of china is covered with forest, but china produces approximately 45 billion pairs of throwaway chopsticks. These chopsticks need us to cut down 25 million trees. Some environmentalists warn the public that the forest of China will die out after 20 years by this speed. China is confronted with the serious problem of forest destruction. 13% of china is covered with forest, but china produces approximately 45 billion pairs of throwaway chopsticks. These chopsticks need us to cut down 25 million trees. Some environmentalists warn the public thatthe forest of China will die out after 20 years by this speed. Confronted with the serious problem of deforestation. 13% of china is covered with forest, however approximately 45 billion pairs of throwaway chopsticks are produced by China annually, which means that we need to cut down 25 million trees. Therefore, some environmentalists warn the public that the forest of China will die out after 20 years by this speed. 被動語態(tài) 定語從句 連詞 分詞作狀語 第二部分 砍伐森林會導(dǎo)致很多環(huán)境問題 ，例如，水土流失，廢氣排放增多，溫室效應(yīng)。人類將會遭受一個由自己帶來的災(zāi)難。 砍伐森林 水土流失 廢氣排放增多 遭受 Excessive deforestation soil erosion the increase emission of carbon dioxide suffer from 砍伐森林會導(dǎo)致很多環(huán)境問題， 例如，水土流失，廢氣排放增多，溫室效應(yīng) . 人類將會遭受一個由自己帶來的災(zāi)難。 Excessive deforestation will lead to a series of environmental changes, for instance, soil erosion,the increase emission of carbon dioxide ,especially the green house effect. Its sure that the humen will suffer from a disater which is caused by ourselves. 第三部分 所以，我們是該采取一些措施來保護(hù)我們的森林資源了。 its time that sb did sth. 萬能措施一 The long term goal of environmental protection is to prevent the creation of pollutants and wastes and to produce durable, recyclable goods. 萬能措施二 In view of sustainable development, the exploitation of mineral resources should be under strict government. 萬能理由三 Mankind should join hand in hand to create an inhabitable world for themselves and their offspring. 3 檢查 糾錯 Do you know why sandstorms and landslides are happening more frequently than ever in recent years? According to the recent statistics, theyre due to the disappearing of forests. Dear friends, do you know they were eatlen by you when use the chopsticks? Every year it products 45 billion chopsticks from China. The forests only cover 13 percents in China. These need 25 million of trees. Someone who cares the environment has alarmed that China may use out all of its forests according to this speed! It means that the environment of China will break down entirely. So please throw away chopsticks now! using the throwaway chopsticks may kill our forests. China whose forests only covers 13% of its land, produces 45000000000 throwaway chopsticks every year. This needs 2500 million trees to be cut down. Whats worse, some environmentalists even warned that if we continue using these chopsticks at this speed, it will be possible for China to use up all its forest resources in only 20 years.( At that time, we human beings could not live on the plannet any longer and there way be no living thing on the earth, either. What a frightening thing it is! )So we should not use the chopsticks any more in order to make a better environment for our younger generation and for ourselves. Dear friends, lets take action from now on! 必備詞匯 disaster, flood, hurricane, lighting, thunderstorm, tornado, volcano, wave, ash, furniture,feather,fur, latitude,equator,longitude bury, occur, strike, ruin,erupt, eruption. current, tropical, violent, previous, 常用表達(dá) 污染大氣 無節(jié)制地開發(fā)資源 亂扔垃圾 砍伐森林 冰川融化 土地沙漠化 渡過災(zāi)難 回收再利用垃圾 減少廢氣排放 最大化地利用資源 pollute the atmosphere exploit natural resources excessively litter around deforest the poles melt desertification survive the disaster recycle the garbage reduce the exhaust emission maximize the use of resources 真題二（仿寫） 假定你是一名導(dǎo)游，你將接待一個外國旅游團(tuán)。請你擬定一份 100詞左右的導(dǎo)游詞向客介紹青島。要點如下： 1.青島位于山東半島的南端，面積 10654平方公里，總?cè)丝?699萬； 2.青島三面環(huán)海，大海是青島的魅力所在； 3. 古代名人如李白，蒲松齡，康有為等的足跡遍布青島各地，留下了華美的詩文。 4. 青島是一座現(xiàn)代化城市，現(xiàn)代化的工廠和樓房林立。 參考詞匯；半島 peninsula Paris is the capital and largest city of France, situated on the River Seine. It is one of the most beautiful cities in the world and is visitied by more than eight million tourists every year. cover an area of with a population of Qingdao is a beautiful city of China, situated in the south of Shandong peninsula , covering an area of 10,654 square kilometers and with a population of 6.99 million. France is Europes third largest country and faces the United Kingdom acoss the English Channel. Florence is an Italian city which became famous because of the Renaissance. Qingdao faces the sea which becomes famous because of the blue seawater. Many of Florence s most beautiful paintings and sculptures were produced by great artists such as Leonardo da Vinci and Michelangelo. Greeces best writers lived in ancient Athens. Their work has influenced writers ever since. poet essay celebrity Chinas best writers travelled around ancient Qingdao.Many of China s most beautiful essays and poems were produced by great artists such as Li Bai, Pu Songlin and Kang Youwei. international possess modern Qingdao is a beautiful city of China, situated in the south of Shandong peninsula , covering an area of 10,654 spuare kilometers and with a population of 6.99 million. Qingdao faces the sea which becomes famous because of the blue seawater. Chinas best writers travelled around ancient Qingdao.Many of China s most beautiful essays and poems were produced by great artists such as Li Bai, Pu Songlin and Kang Youwei. Qingdao is a international city, which possesses a great many modern buildings and factories. 1 連接詞 2 框架詞 3 內(nèi)容詞 1 連接詞匯 表列舉： for example、 for instance、 that is to say 表補(bǔ)充： besides、 in addition、 moreover 表對比： on （ the） one handon the other hand, in spite of 表原因： because of、 thanks to、 due to、 owing to 、 as a result of 表結(jié)果： therefore、 thus、 as a result、 so 表結(jié)論： to conclude、 in a word、 in brief、 to sum up in a nutshell in conclusion 表轉(zhuǎn)折： however、 nevertheless、 yet 漢語意思 普通用詞 亮點詞匯 不同的 越來越 面臨 重視 很多 討論 關(guān)注 發(fā)生 意識到 different more and more face emphasize many discussion attention happen realize various , vary from growing, increasing confront attach importance to vast, a overwhelming majority of, quite a few, an army of, an ocean of, a sea of, a multitude of debate, controversy focus occur be aware of 漢語意思 普通詞匯 亮點詞匯 認(rèn)為 重要的 支持 不同意 喜歡 好的 壞的 think believe, hold, argue, maitain, harbor the idea that, take the attitude that, hold the view that, it is widely shared that, it is universally ackowledged that, to my mind, as far as I am concerned important essential, vital, significant, notable support be in favor of, approve of disagree disapprove of , frown on sth like prefer, feel inclined to , be keen on, be fond of , appeal to good benefical, positive, favorable, perfect, pleasurable bad dreadful,unfavorable, poor, adverse 普通詞匯 亮點詞匯 名詞 reason factor 動詞 cause contribute to, attribute to , lead to , result from, account for 連詞 because since , in that , seeing that, now that 普通詞匯 亮點詞匯 第一項 first in the first place, to begin with, first and foremost 第二項 second in the second place, furthermore, besides 第三項 third in the third place, finally, last but not least Page 43 內(nèi)容詞匯 1解決 2損害 3給與 4培養(yǎng) 5優(yōu)勢 Solve, deal with, cope with, handle, resolve, address, tackle Damage, hurt, injure, harm, impair, undermine, jeopardize Give, offer, render, impart, provide,supply, afford Develop, cultivate, foster Advantage, merit, virtue, benefit, upside, strength Page 44 6缺陷 7使迷惑 8重要的 9保護(hù) 10確保 Disadvantage, demerit, drawback, downside, weakness Puzzle, bewilder, perplex, baffle Protect, conserve, preserve Key, crucial, critical, important, significant, vital, substantial, indispensable, imperative Assure, ensure, guarantee, pledge Page 45 11消除 12導(dǎo)致 13宣稱 14有益的 15影響 Eliminate, clear, remove, clear up, take away, smooth away Lead to, bring about, result in, cause, spark off, conduce to, procure, induce, generate Allege, assert, declare, claim Useful, helpful, be