寫作新題型續(xù)寫與概要寫作市公開課一等獎?wù)n件省賽課獲獎?wù)n件

2023新高考英語寫作幾點注意事項1/29讀后續(xù)寫評分標準：1.本題總分25分，按5個檔次給分。2.評分時，先根據(jù)所續(xù)寫短文內(nèi)容和語言初步確定其檔次，然后以該檔次要求來衡量，確定或調(diào)整檔次，最后給分。3.詞數(shù)少于130，從總分中減去2分4.評分時應(yīng)從下列四個方面考慮：1）與所給短文和段落開頭語銜接程度2）內(nèi)容豐富性和對所標出關(guān)鍵詞語應(yīng)用情況3）應(yīng)用語法構(gòu)造和詞匯豐富性和精確性4）上下文連貫性5.拼寫與標點符號是語言精確性一種主要方面，評分時應(yīng)視其對交際影響程度給予考慮。6.如書寫較差以至影響交際，可將分數(shù)減少一種檔次2/29注重故事情節(jié)的結(jié)尾出人意外情理之中描寫景物發(fā)人深省的結(jié)尾景情相關(guān)景中帶情留白提供想象空間意猶未盡的結(jié)尾若隱若現(xiàn)藕斷絲連讀后續(xù)寫幾個基本形式理性分析思想拔高的結(jié)尾緊扣主題立意高遠情緒宣泄讓人共鳴的結(jié)尾合理鋪墊水到渠成浙江省衢州一中3/29讀后續(xù)寫重點續(xù)寫呼應(yīng)細節(jié)意境修辭浙江省衢州一中4/29Example5/29Paragraph1:What’sworse,myteachercalledmyfatheraftertheexamandtoldhimaboutmycheating._______________________________________________________________________________________________________________Paragraph2:Hearingmywords,myfatherdecidedtogivemeanotherchance._______________________________________________________________________________________________6/29意境設(shè)計缺陷：平淡沒懸念和高潮情感渲染不夠，不能引發(fā)讀者共鳴結(jié)尾拔不高，限制了文章高度人物角色不明，語調(diào)不符合角色以自我為中心，缺乏某些人文素養(yǎng)在內(nèi)，如：愛傳遞，奉獻，善良，正義，寬容等。7/292023新高考概要寫作幾點注意事項8/29概要寫作指導1概要寫作評分標準解讀2

概要寫作案例分析9/29本題總分為25分，按5個檔次給分。評分時，先根據(jù)所寫概要內(nèi)容和語言初步確定其所屬檔次，然后以該檔次要去來衡量、確定或調(diào)整檔次，最后給分。詞數(shù)少于40和多于80，從總分中減去2分。評分時，應(yīng)主要從下列四個方面考慮...拼寫與標點符號是語言精確性一種主要方面，評分時，應(yīng)視其對交際影響程度給予考慮。如書寫較差以致影響交際，可將分數(shù)減少一種檔次。1概要寫作評分解讀10/291）對原文重點理解和展現(xiàn)情況2）應(yīng)用語法構(gòu)造和詞匯精確性3）上下文連貫性4）對各重點體現(xiàn)獨立性情況11/29④評分時，應(yīng)主要從下列四個方面考慮：對原文重點理解和展現(xiàn)情況；應(yīng)用語法構(gòu)造和詞匯精確性；上下文連貫性；對各重點體現(xiàn)獨立性情況。檔次描述第五檔(21-25)—理解精確，涵蓋所有重點?！芫_使用對應(yīng)語法構(gòu)造和詞匯?！行У厥褂昧苏Z句間連接成份，使所完成概要構(gòu)造緊湊?！耆褂米约赫Z言。

第五檔評分標準啟示

12/29寫作重難點：重點完全精確提取用自己語言有效概括13/29概要寫作疑難點：如何進行概要寫作改寫句子如何用自己語言來概寫句子14/29疑難一：如何概寫Example:1)Hiscourageinbattlemightwithoutexaggerationbecallediron-like.→Hewasverybraveinbattle.2)Hewashardupformoneyandwasbeingpressedbyhiscreditor.→Hewasinfinancialdifficulties.3)SheboughthomeseveralChineseandEnglishnovels,afewcopesofTimeandNewsweekandsometextbooks.Sheintendedtoreadallofthemduringthewintervacation.→Shebroughthomealotofbookstoreadduringthevacation.15/29疑難二：如何在不變化題材原句意義上改寫重點（example摘自全國統(tǒng)一考試英語科考試說明P24

）16/29[例7]（選自全國統(tǒng)一考試英語科考試說明P24）

Gettingridofdirt,intheopinionofmostpeople,isagoodthing.However,thereisnothingfixedaboutattitudestodirt.Intheearly16thcentury,peoplethoughtthatdirtontheskinwasameanstoblockoutdisease,asmedicalopinionhaditthatwashingoffdirtwithhotwatercouldopenuptheskinandletillsin.Aparticulardangerwasthoughttolieinpublicbaths.By1538,theFrenchkinghadclosedthebathhousesinhiskingdom.SodidthekingofEnglandin1546.ThusbeganalongtimewhentherichandthepoorinEuropelivedwithdirtinafriendlyway.HenryIV,KingofFrance,wasfamouslydirty.Uponlearningthatanoblemanhadtakenabath,thekingorderedthat,toavoidtheattackofdisease,thenoblemanshouldnotgoout.Thoughthebeliefinthemeritofdirtwaslong-lived,dirthasnolongerbeenregardedasaniceneighboreversincethe18thcentury.Scientificallyspeaking,cleaningawaydirtisgoodtohealth.Cleanwatersupplyandhandwashingarepracticalmeansofpreventingdisease.Yet,itseemsthatstandardsofcleanlinesshavemovedbeyondsciencesinceWorldWarⅡ.Advertisementsrepeatedlyselltheidea;clothesneedtobewhiterthanwhite,clothseversofter,surfacestoshine.Hasthehatefordirt,however,gonetoofar?Attitudestodirtstilldifferhugelynowadays.Manyfirst-timeparentsnervouslytrytowarntheirchildrenofftouchingdirt,whichmightberesponsibleforthespreadofdisease.Onthecontrary,MaryRuebush,anAmericanimmunologist（免疫學家）,encourageschildrentoplayinthedirttobuildupastrongimmunesystem.Andthelatterpositionisgainingsomeground.17/29Transitionalwords:

Gettingridofdirt,intheopinionofmostpeople,isagoodthing.However,thereisnothingfixedaboutattitudestodirt.Intheearly16thcentury,peoplethoughtthatdirtontheskinwasameanstoblockoutdisease,asmedicalopinionhaditthatwashingoffdirtwithhotwatercouldopenuptheskinandletillsin.Aparticulardangerwasthoughttolieinpublicbaths.By1538,theFrenchkinghadclosedthebathhousesinhiskingdom.SodidthekingofEnglandin1546.ThusbeganalongtimewhentherichandthepoorinEuropelivedwithdirtinafriendlyway.HenryIV,KingofFrance,wasfamouslydirty.Uponlearningthatanoblemanhadtakenabath,thekingorderedthat,toavoidtheattackofdisease,thenoblemanshouldnotgoout.Thoughthebeliefinthemeritofdirtwaslong-lived,dirthasnolongerbeenregardedasaniceneighboreversincethe18thcentury.Scientificallyspeaking,cleaningawaydirtisgoodtohealth.Cleanwatersupplyandhandwashingarepracticalmeansofpreventingdisease.Yet,itseemsthatstandardsofcleanlinesshavemovedbeyondsciencesinceWorldWarⅡ.Advertisementsrepeatedlyselltheidea;clothesneedtobewhiterthanwhite,clothseversofter,surfacestoshine.Hasthehatefordirt,however,gonetoofar?Attitudestodirtstilldifferhugelynowadays.Manyfirst-timeparentsnervouslytrytowarntheirchildrenofftouchingdirt,whichmightberesponsibleforthespreadofdisease.Onthecontrary,MaryRuebush,anAmericanimmunologist（免疫學家）,encourageschildrentoplayinthedirttobuildupastrongimmunesystem.Andthelatterpositionisgainingsomeground.18/29

重點1

nothingfixed;attitudestodirt

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Intheearly16thcentury,peoplethoughtthatdirtontheskinwasameanstoblockoutdisease,asmedicalopinionhaditthatwashingoffdirtwithhotwatercouldopenuptheskinandletillsin.Aparticulardangerwasthoughttolieinpublicbaths.By1538,theFrenchkinghadclosedthebathhousesinhiskingdom.SodidthekingofEnglandin1546.ThusbeganalongtimewhentherichandthepoorinEuropelivedwithdirtinafriendlyway.HenryIV,KingofFrance,wasfamouslydirty.Uponlearningthatanoblemanhadtakenabath,thekingorderedthat,toavoidtheattackofdisease,thenoblemanshouldnotgoout.P-W之

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重點2

dirtontheskin;blockoutdisease;alongtime;Europe;livedwithdirtPeople,suchasEuropeans,thoughtdirtdefendedtheirbodiesagainsttheattackofdisease.People,suchasEuropeans,hadlongconsidereddirtontheskinhelpedresistillness.Foralongtimeinhistory,peopleofsomeEuropeancountries,suchasFrance,believedthatdirtprotectedpeoplefromgettingill.（選自考試說明范文）People,suchasEuropeans,usedtoregarddirtontheskinasabarrieragainstdisease.21/29P-W之

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Thoughthebeliefinthemeritofdirtwaslong-lived,dirthasnolongerbeenregardedasaniceneighboreversincethe18thcentury.Scientificallyspeaking,cleaningawaydirtisgoodtohealth.Cleanwatersupplyandhandwashingarepracticalmeansofpreventingdisease.Yet,itseemsthatstandardsofcleanlinesshavemovedbeyondsciencesinceWorldWarⅡ.Advertisementsrepeatedlyselltheidea;clothesneedtobewhiterthanwhite,clothseversofter,surfacestoshine.Hasthehatefordirt,however,gonetoofar?

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重點3

cleaningawaydirt;good;standardsofcleanliness;movedbeyondscience

Itwasnotuntilthe18thcenturythatpeolecametobelievewashingoffdirtbenefitedhealth,butovertimetheyhavebecometooparticularaboutcleanliness.Peoplebegantochangetheirattitudestodirtabout200yearsago.Peoplehavebeentoldthatwashingdirtoffourbodycankeepushealthy.（選自考試說明范文）Centurieslater,peoplecametoadoptascientificviewondirt,andconsidereditahealthypracticetoremovedirtofftheskin,whichlater,however,leadstoanobsessionwithcleanliness.23/29P-W之

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Attitudestodirtstilldifferhugelynowadays.Manyfirst-timeparentsnervouslytrytowarntheirchildrenofftouchingdirt,whichmightberesponsibleforthespreadofdisease.Onthecontrary,MaryRuebush,anAmericanimmunologist(免疫學家),encourageschildrentoplayinthedirttobuildupastrongimmunesystem.Andthelatterpositionisgainingsomeground.

24/29W-S之

重點4

playinthedirt;buildupastrongimmunesystem;gainingsomegroundSomebelievekidsshouldbeencouagedtoplaywithdirt,whichmayhelpstrenghthentheirimmunesystem.Somesocietiesbelievethatexposuretosomedirtmayhelpourimmunesystem.（選自考試說明范文）Somepeoplesharethebeliefthatexposingkidstodirt

mayboosttheirimmunesystem.25/29

transitionalwords

Gettingridofdirt,intheopinionofmostpeople,isagoodthing.However,thereisnothingfixedaboutattitudestodirt.Intheearly16thcentury,peoplethoughtthatdirtontheskinwasameanstoblockoutdisease,asmedicalopinionhaditthatwashingoffdirtwithhotwatercouldopenuptheskinandletillsin.Aparticulardangerwasthoughttolieinpublicbaths.By1538,theFrenchkinghadclosedthebathhousesinhiskingdom.SodidthekingofEnglandin1546.ThusbeganalongtimewhentherichandthepoorinEuropelivedwithdirtinafriendlyway.HenryIV,KingofFrance,wasfamouslydirty.Uponlearningthatanoblemanhadtakenabath,thekingorderedthat,toavoidtheattackofdisease,thenoblemanshouldnotgoout.Thoughthebeliefinthemeritofdirtwaslong-lived,dirthasnolongerbeenregardedasaniceneighboreversincethe18thcentury.Scientificallyspeaking,cleaningawaydirtisgoodtohealth.Cleanwatersupplyandhandwashingarepracticalmeansofpreventingdisease.Yet,itseemsthatstandardsofcleanlinesshavemovedbeyondsciencesinceWorldWarⅡ.Advertisementsrepeatedlyselltheidea;clothesneedtobewhiterthanwhite,clothseversofter,surfacestoshine.Hasthehatefordirt,however,gonetoofar?Attitudestodirtstilldifferhugelynowadays.Manyfirst-timeparentsnervouslytrytowarntheirchildrenofftouchingdirt,whichmightberesponsibleforthespreadofdisease.Onthecontrary,MaryRuebush,anAmericanimmunologist(免疫學家),encourageschildrentoplayinthedirttobuildupastrongimmunesystem.Andthelatterpositionisgainingsomeground.26/29S-PPeoplehavemixedopinionstowardsdirtonourskin.Foralongtimeinhistory,peopleofsomeEuropeancountries,suchasFrance,believedthatdirtprotectedpeoplefromgettingill.However,peoplebegantochangetheirattitudestodirtabout200yearsago.Peoplehavebeentoldthatwashin